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ken eaton-dykes

Sat 19th Aug 2017 15:18

Hi Keith.

Many thanks for your comment. It's much appreciated

Ken xx

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keith jeffries

Sat 19th Aug 2017 12:03

Ray, Thank you for this. It goes to show that the most insignificant of possessions can possess a profound significance to a person´s identity. Keith

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keith jeffries

Sat 19th Aug 2017 11:56

Shaakiera, Thank you for this cameo of wisdom and advice. Keith

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raypool

Sat 19th Aug 2017 11:46

Thank you Cynthia. I know you have a fondness for texture and detail and I see it in your comment! I must admit I invented the story , I just appealed to me. I do enjoy a twisted ending!

Ray

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Paul Waring

Sat 19th Aug 2017 09:56

I really like this Tom, lovely idea and imagery.

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Paul Waring

Sat 19th Aug 2017 09:04

Thank you Col, Tom, Cynthia, Ray and Keith for your comments, I really enjoyed reading them and so pleased you like this one.

Paul

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Raj Ferds

Sat 19th Aug 2017 08:29

Brilliant. I love the intellectual, moral and emotional honesty here Laura. Undiluted truth.

Raj

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Neill Barnard

Sat 19th Aug 2017 08:00

Good day Keigth

Thank you for all the kind comments you always leave on my poems.

Such positive feedback always makes one want to write more.

Kind regards

Neill Barnard

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Nicola Beckett

Sat 19th Aug 2017 04:56

Sometimes Patrick?

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Shaakiera Schroeder

Sat 19th Aug 2017 00:33

In which way

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patricia Hughes

Fri 18th Aug 2017 23:21

Stunning,love the line "with roses burning out your ears"

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patricia Hughes

Fri 18th Aug 2017 23:03

Your writing just gets better all the time.
A disturbing poem but such is life.

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Fri 18th Aug 2017 22:04

I truly love this and " Love will suffer" I feel as if i can actually feel the hurt. Amazing.

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lynn hahn

Fri 18th Aug 2017 22:03

Yes we are Tom...with our emotions on our sleeve.

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keith jeffries

Fri 18th Aug 2017 21:29

Paul, I like this series of slightly disjointed cameos of one´s formative years. I was immediately taken back to my childhood and the school summer holidays I spent with my Nan. An evocative poem cleverly using three lines a stanza. Keith

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keith jeffries

Fri 18th Aug 2017 21:18

Hello Neill, Thank you for this latest poem. I am drawn to it as it so open with no inhibitions. Keith

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Sinead Wright

Fri 18th Aug 2017 21:10

I love this poem so much. I do not know why but it is my favorite poem i have ever read. it makes me smile every time.

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keith jeffries

Fri 18th Aug 2017 21:02

Thank you for this beautiful composition and in particular the line, ¨ Love is quiet and considerate, subtle and reliable, present without grandeur in a most ordinary moment ¨. It shows maturity of thought and emotion. Thank you indeed. Keith

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Anthony Coviello

Fri 18th Aug 2017 20:26

thinking out loud!!!

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keith jeffries

Fri 18th Aug 2017 19:38

Eseosa, Thank you for your kind comment. Keith

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keith jeffries

Fri 18th Aug 2017 18:52

David & Kevin, Thank you for your comments which are always appreciated. Keith

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Fri 18th Aug 2017 18:51

enjoy so much the poems you write me you truly are a inspiration to me...

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Richard Hartley

Fri 18th Aug 2017 18:05

Hello Cynthia
Thankyou for you kind words - about my poem and my poetry group!
It is great fun having a monthly poetic get-together but I think I'm probably more highly valued as an organiser than as a poet - but hey, I'll take whatever appreciation I'm given in life!
Best wishes.
Richard

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keith jeffries

Fri 18th Aug 2017 18:03

MC. I like this as I am very suspicious of those who deny history or attempt to distort it. A nation should learn to live with its history whether it be good or bad and learn from it. Pulling down statues is infantile. Thank you. Keith

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keith jeffries

Fri 18th Aug 2017 17:59

Powerful and to the point. Keith

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keith jeffries

Fri 18th Aug 2017 17:56

Beautiful and thoughtfully composed. Thank you. Keith

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kJ Walker

Fri 18th Aug 2017 17:25

What a shame. He'll be sadly missed.
Thanks Kevin

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 18th Aug 2017 17:16

Beautifully, honestly conceived and very provocatively rendered. A superb subject to take up in any art form, and especially poetry.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 18th Aug 2017 17:10

I like the way your mind works, like a stone dropped into a pool, and the ripples circling outward. You ride the water. Or something like that. IMO, the final two lines are outstanding.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 18th Aug 2017 17:05

Wow. Now you must surely feel better! An excellent 'take' and very funny as well.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 18th Aug 2017 17:00

Terrific. Sharp thinking, knife-edge vocabulary and always on the edge of a spinning circle. Very interesting, and clever. Great ending.

if you don't follow me, don't fuss it; I'm not sure what I mean, exactly.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 18th Aug 2017 16:50

A delightful story, well told. It was probably real wool. And as much a part of her daily comfort as her own skin, full of her own body scent. A piece of clothing like that is a true treasure. I'm glad you cremated her in it.

Excellent ending! HA HA! With a fine shaft of double/triple meanings to consider, if inclined.

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terry l shuff

Fri 18th Aug 2017 16:41

You take me back to the same thoughts and feelings

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raypool

Fri 18th Aug 2017 16:39

Thanks old chum.. The trick with thoughts is to get them wallpapered on the page with the right patterns, as you know. I chose a cardigan as a kind of comforter - it's not rocket science. I agree about fire, cathartic and final. A sort of hot mercy. Funnily enough I went to a spiritualist circle years ago and a lady said she could see me as a Viking in a previous life - how are the mighty fallen! I didn't know a license was necessary for pyres, for one who expires. That does bring it down to earth I suppose. Cardigan Bay is a great place too !

Cheers Col. Read as above!!

Thanks Paul. I practised this reading to slacken it off a bit.
Glad you enjoyed it mate.

Tom you do me justice thank you.
Thanks Michaela and Patricia too for the likes!

Love to all. Ray

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terry l shuff

Fri 18th Aug 2017 16:38

Excellent

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Michaela Sheldon

Fri 18th Aug 2017 16:34

Thank you so much for your comment! Yes, it should be barren thank you for picking that up! With all of these horrible events taking place lately, I feel like I want to understand why people make these horrific choices... We are all the same flesh and blood yet people are killing people who have nothing to do with their affairs. I don't think I can ever understand it

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raypool

Fri 18th Aug 2017 16:30

A really great spread of choices to observe and good amount of humour here Paul. I love the grandiosity of the first line as it evaporates into the real world - bathos. As an aside Ilford was graced with unique trolleybuses which went to South Africa in the sixties. So what, you say and rightly so. It's just that the poem engaged me, so there! I do like the three line technique. I am drawn to that myself. It's nice to see it working so well.

Raymondo. Ayth.......

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 18th Aug 2017 16:30

I had to read this three times, but it was worth it, as I think I have followed your thought. A very sad, poignant, little work expressing huge emotion.

Perhaps you might leave out punctuation altogether, letting the reader sort out the likely breaks.

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raypool

Fri 18th Aug 2017 16:24

I just feel there is a kind of overspill of thoughts into the wonderful sense of being adrift in familiarity , and the first line may hold a key as a father sets the life in motion - and the poem is about that too. We carry so much and you have lightly presented it but with so much infusion of feeling.
Nice, Tom.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 18th Aug 2017 16:20

Welcome to WOL. Great to see that you are 'running' a poetry night in your area. Good luck on the enterprise; I'm sure you're highly valued.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 18th Aug 2017 16:17

Superb; a great story told with empathy, wit and humour. Much enjoyed.

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raypool

Fri 18th Aug 2017 16:12

It turns a traditional them on its head and gets its own back on the story and its implications. Puts you in charge within the dream, self induced. A very clever and interesting poem which is like a revisit without the return ticket.

Ray

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 18th Aug 2017 16:02

A simple tale simply told and simply full of LIFE! Superbly captured. The ending is excellent, bringing to the fore expertly, 'childhood'.

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raypool

Fri 18th Aug 2017 15:59

A great sensitivity at play here Michaela, an attempt to identify with the unthinkable. What is tempting is to try to understand the transformation into such a person and how that is suddenly the right thing for them. From studies of serial killers it seems often that there is no remorse for ever after. Apparently a mix of influences can bring out the poisoned chalice. The last line is the key if there is one.
May I pick up the first line - should it not be barren?

All the best to you. Ray

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 18th Aug 2017 15:55

Your usual mastery of the simple image made golden by your imagination, and then sympathetically encapsulated by your creative imagery. Tom, you are a fine writer.

Yes, I know that sentence is weird. But, never mind. It might have been worse. Excellent photo to accompany the work.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 18th Aug 2017 15:37

Welcome back! Lovely photo.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 18th Aug 2017 15:35

A very interesting take on a famous story. Imaginative, with a fine feel for best words to create effective imagery. Well done. 'Coyly slinks the crescent moon along the branches' is just fab! Among many lines.

Since it's page poetry, it's always a good idea to check for spelling. If you're not sure, perhaps someone else might proof it for you? If not, send it along anyway, and your work will still shine with the power of your chosen vocabulary.

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Nigel Astell

Fri 18th Aug 2017 15:23

Poetry Party

Oldknow drinkers
all agreed
once the
poetry party
had started
no-one wanted
to leave!

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Tom Harding

Fri 18th Aug 2017 11:38

Lovely direct poem Ray.

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Tom Harding

Fri 18th Aug 2017 11:18

This is lovely, some really strong imagery here. I can feel the summer heat.

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