Thanks Big Sal. It is and it's a great life if you don't weaken
Comment is about 2018 Once more Trev's on his annual Texas Tour Pt2 The journey out (blog)
Original item by Trev the Road Poet
This would be a great start to a short story. Do you write prose?
Love the last line.
Comment is about A Summerhouse (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Is the last line really the last line? This poem has a flow that seems to end too abruptly. Or perhaps it doesn't need the last 5 words?
Comment is about In Times of Doubt (edited) (blog)
Original item by AbSo2021
Kevin,
thanks for your comment. Keith
Comment is about A Summerhouse (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thanks for all the likes and comments. I enjoyed writing this one.
Comment is about Not Drowning (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
The music for this inspired - an undercut of wistful humour.
I'm really enjoying your submissions, so keep them coming. You add something unique to WoL, so welcome on board. You have a fan here..
Suki
Comment is about To be...To become... (blog)
Original item by Xoanxo
Hi Ray,
This is a wonderful composition. Love the reading too.
Have a lovely weekend.
Suki
Comment is about CLINGING TO CONVENTION (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Cleverly crafted and beautifully written. Enjoyed reading this .
Cate
Comment is about Paradise (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
Big Sal
Fri 4th May 2018 22:58
You get around don't you Trev? Always on the go to promote them words, that's the life.
Comment is about 2018 Once more Trev's on his annual Texas Tour Pt2 The journey out (blog)
Original item by Trev the Road Poet
Big Sal
Fri 4th May 2018 22:52
Big Sal
Fri 4th May 2018 22:44
I love the second to last stanza. Really captures the moment! Very well done indeed. ?
Comment is about The Grass (blog)
Original item by Ankita Srivastava
<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 4th May 2018 22:36
so much sadness hidden within these lines - I find it difficult to leave a comment. It made me think of this though so hope you don't mind me sharing the link Ray:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WknaD6HnYHs
Comment is about CLINGING TO CONVENTION (blog)
Original item by ray pool
<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 4th May 2018 22:27
extra verse noted and appreciated Ray. 'Fin' sounds very final so I shan't expect any more!
btw this was a very smelly poem what with all that Gauloises and Pernod and now you've gone and added cheap Eau de Parfum. I can feel my chest tightening up!
FIN.
Comment is about FILM NOIR (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Ray,
Thank you indeed for this kind comment. I have a great sense of nostalgia and an abiding love for the earlier part of my life. I am also blessed with an excellent memory which is a tremendous resource for recalling the past.
Keith
Comment is about A Cameo of Years Past (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
What I like about your work Keith is your fondness for the subject matter in pretty much every case. This brings authenticity and a sense of normality refreshing in many ways. This typifies that and a sense of nostalgia seeps out of every pore.
Ray
Comment is about A Cameo of Years Past (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
The point about attraction and repulsion side by side is a strong realistic one, Tommy. The poem feels like a redemption, and there in the realism is a real person, well described. Nice one indeed.
Ray.
Comment is about Backward glancing (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
I think you're my favorite poet on here now.
Comment is about Cesca (poet profile)
Original item by Cesca
<Deleted User> (13740)
Fri 4th May 2018 20:10
For your words and empty truths x I can relate to this great poem
Comment is about The Idea (blog)
Original item by Jara Giner
<Deleted User> (18980)
Fri 4th May 2018 17:33
<Deleted User> (16099)
Fri 4th May 2018 17:09
Your poems such nice and easy steps to view always A Pleasure to read it's good to have you back
Comment is about A Poem Like A Person (blog)
Original item by Sarah Mae
Thank you David and Rachel! Much appreciated!
Comment is about To be...To become... (blog)
Original item by Xoanxo
Yes, I guess it does Graham. Perhaps we just don't want to listen!
And yes Colin, I have a list like that - also an 'Oh well' list that I know I won't really get round to - or be able to do. But I did Oz & NZ a year or so ago, so that'll do!
Thanks for the comments guys. ?
Comment is about Death (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Thanks for your kind comments. It's good that we can find inspiration out of frustration!
Comment is about Another Day in the Life (a bit further SW of Blackburn, Lancashire) (blog)
Original item by J R Harris
Enjoyed your poem true to life very good Wendy x
Comment is about A Poem Like A Person (blog)
Original item by Sarah Mae
<Deleted User> (18980)
Fri 4th May 2018 07:21
Hugh As brilliant as your poem is, it will be greatly improved by the correct spelling of the Isle of Wight.
Comment is about YOU ARE THE LUCKY ONE (blog)
Original item by hugh
they were lonely birds
but exchanged no words
it was their desire
but weren't admired
the world was strange
but they couldn't manage
they sang in loneliness
but brought joy to the face
how could they unite?
and force the passion to ignite
but they remain delighted
as and when the scene of love was sighted
there is joy in silence
and cash it on when getting the chance
love is a divine gift
so make no shift
enjoy and try to meet
love each other and affectionately greet
it may pay one day
when you will have your sway
Comment is about Sarah Mae (poet profile)
Original item by Sarah Mae
Love is like the flower
it needs kind showers
either from the rainy season
or from the kind person
love may blossom
and create room
for new things to emerge
and silently manage
love has no reason
to deny an access to the person
who is selflessly seeking a union
and offers to stay as the companion
give the way
and stay
as comfortable as you were before
you will never feel sore
it is a right moment
to present
your perspective
with an indicative gesture
Comment is about deasemooie (poet profile)
Original item by deasemooie
A fabulous rhythmic flow ,
Into this verse did go.
Transmitting the feelings that you got,
Through missing this person such a lot.
Comment is about No longer (blog)
Original item by Laney
elPintor
Fri 4th May 2018 01:37
Neruda calls to me as I read this--simplicity and purity without crippling naivety.
Rachel
Comment is about To be...To become... (blog)
Original item by Xoanxo
A heart once happy,
now a heart of regret.
The loss of a friend,
makes me oh so upset.
?????
Comment is about No longer (blog)
Original item by Laney
They bane my existence
Until nothing is left
I’m gone
good?????
Comment is about My Body (blog)
Original item by Jara Giner
elPintor
Fri 4th May 2018 00:37
This is a subject that has pervaded my thoughts persistently in bouts over the past two decades. As of the moment, all that I can conclude is that among many other actions we take on behalf of or against one another, "spying" is, at times, only another necessary evil. Though, as any other evil, never to be taken lightly.
As to it being how the world works? I suppose, on a certain level, restricted info is at least one reason why there's such a thing as the deep state--some have virtually unlimited access to what they want and others don't.
All that said, there is no one that is bulletproof. People fret because they don't want to become a casualty. But, the right gun, the right ammo, and steady aim overcomes even the best armor...
Thanks for your response and take good care, all of you. It's been an especially grueling week at work here at home and I'm looking forward to taking a little respite cruising the site.
Rachel
Comment is about telecommuter (blog)
Original item by nunya
Kevin & Colin,
thank you for your comments. As always they are much appreciated.
Keith
Comment is about A Cameo of Years Past (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
I swear Alexander Rhodes said he was giving up slamming earlier this year... He can't stop, the man is a poetry junkie ;o) Nice one Alex!
Comment is about Cheltenham Spa: Anyone for Slamaggedon? (article)
Original item by Mike Took
Dear Laura, Jade and Mike,
Welcome, and enjoy!
Cheers,
Suki
Comment is about New faces and YOU at Write Out Loud (article)
Original item by Mike Took
Hello
thank you for your visit.
joy.
Comment is about terry l shuff (poet profile)
Original item by terry l shuff
<Deleted User> (13762)
Thu 3rd May 2018 22:02
well I've done the Grand Canyon - north and south rims - so I can go to my grave a happy cadaver Trev ?
As I get older I prefer to have a fuckit list of things I won't do - the cruise thing is in the top ten ?
Comment is about Death (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
<Deleted User> (13762)
Thu 3rd May 2018 21:49
Love it - a cross between Falling Down and A Day in the Life that almost spirals out of control. Gosh our roads are in a sorry state these days and those two at a time traffic lights do my head in too. Perhaps best to refrain from listening to Lennon & McCartney's song whilst stuck in traffic. Thanks for posting JR. Col.
Comment is about Another Day in the Life (a bit further SW of Blackburn, Lancashire) (blog)
Original item by J R Harris
<Deleted User> (13762)
Thu 3rd May 2018 21:28
What a cracking poem and such a joy to read. Thanks for sharing Jennifer. Save me a plot. Colin.
Comment is about Paradise (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
<Deleted User> (13762)
Thu 3rd May 2018 21:23
<Deleted User> (13762)
Thu 3rd May 2018 21:20
I feel like I'm standing behind a rope looking in to one of those reconstructed buildings in an open-air museum - very vivid. Good one Keith.
Comment is about A Cameo of Years Past (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Ray,
thank you for your constructive crticism which I find very useful. I struggled with the title.
Keith
Comment is about A Cameo of Years Past (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thank you Anya , it's nice that you enjoyed the content of the poem. Stu likewise. I suppose I was after a feeling of threat reminiscent of Don't Look Now, which is I think one of the great films (Nicolas Roeg director). I feel there are so many ways of expression in the poetic cannon that it is a real challenge to hit the sweet spot. I might be there this time.....
Much appreciated. Ray
Comment is about FILM NOIR (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Sofia Urquiza
Sat 5th May 2018 09:58
Hi Hazel..no it wasn't the last line..I had saved it by mistake. Its complete now ?
Comment is about In Times of Doubt (edited) (blog)
Original item by AbSo2021