Hi Nigel, your comment/poem for my poem "Despair" inspired me to write this haiku.
Thanks, Shirley


A small bud, withered
But just a few drops of rain
Beautiful flower

Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)

Original item by Nigel Astell

A small bud, withered
But just a few drops of rain
Beautiful flower

I was inspired to write
this after reading
Nigel's poem.

Comment is about Despair (blog)

Original item by Shirley Smothers

Hello Steve. I wasn't suggesting the scansion was a problem but the grammatical sense. We try to "make ends meet" but I'd have thought "ends that won’t be made meet"is in need of "to" before meet?

Comment is about Beryl's laugh (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Hi Sid! Glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for your suggestion for amending the line, but I'll leave it as it is - it scans right when spoken. All the best.

Comment is about Beryl's laugh (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Thanks, Dave,this summer was '76, a proper summer.It's 31 lines, by the way.

A Pedant

Comment is about Crickets (blog)

Original item by Ray Miller

I think you should have

and turned time upside down

as if it were another strategy like cutting hair, negotiating strangers

Comment is about party piece (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Nice poem. I like the rhymes popping up here and there.You might try
Messrs. Faithless and False... for the assonance with "mirrors".
It's "wisp" of smoke
I think you mean "tiniest"....but maybe not.

Comment is about What Remains (blog)

Good afternoon Tina
and welcome to W.O.L.
Loved your poems.
is that Arkwrights shop
you are stood outside?

If so,check the sell by dates-lol!xx

Comment is about tina (poet profile)

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Thank you Dave, much appreciated :)

Comment is about Not plain Jane (blog)

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Almost compensates for the summer we never had Sid,,a potent potted "on the road" with sun and wine in thirty lines. Intoxicating.

Comment is about Crickets (blog)

Original item by Ray Miller

Great stuff Tina, I can hear it in my head rattling along like an express, great rap. On the page some bits stronger than others. Love from "They want me to work" to "not a campaigner". Keep it up.

Comment is about Not plain Jane (blog)

Original item by tina

and then......?

Lovely piece Ann, short and delicate x

Comment is about party piece (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Loved it too - the image of the whale's rib too - fab as always Marianne.

Comment is about A Speck of Dirt (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Wot? No acorns???? Like this Win. x

Comment is about fall (blog)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi Jade - a very warm welcome to WOL. Hope you enjoy being part of the site - good to see you posting a poem in the blog section:)

Comment is about Jade Eloise (poet profile)

Original item by Jade Eloise

I like this. I was lonely for a very long time. I gave up hope. Then my future wife took my hand. Please keep posting your poetry.

Comment is about Loneliness.com (blog)

Original item by Roy Chetham

Hi Jade. Wellcome to WOL. "affection tangled amongst bitter words" That line jumped out at me! How true that can be. I like your poetry. More please. Take care, Tony.

Comment is about Jade Eloise (poet profile)

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Thank you guys. It would seem minimalist doesn't always work! Cheers. xx

Comment is about Crescent Moon (Rewrite) (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

It was a great performance. Contemporary material performed with passion. There was no one to beat her.

Comment is about Attila's warm words for WOL's Laura Taylor (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Hello Nigel. Thank you for the comment on my poem "Despair".
Wow beautifully written.
Thanks
Shirley

Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)

Original item by Nigel Astell

To whither
Low esteem
Lift your
Head up
Little flower
Closed bud
Slowly opens
Fighting demons
Wiping away
Tear drops
Of depression.

Comment is about Despair (blog)

Original item by Shirley Smothers

Fantastic Four - - - but we want more

Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)

Original item by Stockport WoL

Good one, Hugh. Agree with every word, well done.

Comment is about Nicola and Fiona, Rest In Peace (blog)

Original item by hugh

The hills are alive with the sound of music. Keep on posting your poems Roy.

Comment is about Roy Chetham (poet profile)

Original item by Roy Chetham

suits that fitted bigger selves, hoots an absolution
excellent stuff and enjoyed the poem.
Maybe "ends that won't be made to meet"?

Comment is about Beryl's laugh (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

I like the 2nd verse best, the idea that the plane in view will send the cartoon.
heavy as a swan is very nice
"reporting back" - do you mean reflecting?
The closing line is a bit so-so, poem deserves a better ending.

Comment is about nimrod (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Love this. I sometimes stay at a caravan that my brother in law has in north Wales. The Gulls wake us every morning. We watch them feed the young Gulls that sit in the nests made in the old chimney pots on the houses over the road. Your poem took me back to the caravan.

Comment is about gulls (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks for the comments. Yes, Vignettes would almost make a good title.

Comment is about Crickets (blog)

Original item by Ray Miller

thanks Ann

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Long time no read!
pleasure to do so now.

Comment is about What if..... (blog)

Original item by Nicky Burrows

Ditto,the last two lines especially.

Comment is about Nicola and Fiona, Rest In Peace (blog)

Original item by hugh

El mucho better than the original!
ta chuck.xx

Comment is about Crescent Moon (Rewrite) (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Bravo!

Comment is about Attila's warm words for WOL's Laura Taylor (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Ha! What a riot. I just love this. Made me laugh. I really needed this. Are you singing. Besides writing poetry you can sing.
I am envious.

Thanks for the great read and song.
Shirley

Comment is about Shandy Man (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Hi John. I thought you might like to know that I added audio to my old poem "A Silly Poem about Hair". But no it's not me. I tried to record and first it wouldn't work. Then my voice just sounded awful. So no it's someone I paid.
Thanks
Shirley

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Nice words, my thoughts miss out the major & give the rest a kicking to boot! My vote goes for the party with the most jelly & ice cream!

Comment is about THE MAJOR POLITICAL PARTIES (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

I really enjoyed this. Energetic and engaging and intriguing. Thanks.

Comment is about Crickets (blog)

Original item by Ray Miller

Thanks, Lynn!

Comment is about Beryl's laugh (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Hi Tim - a warm welcome to WOL. Hope you enjoy the site - good to see you posting on the blogs!

Comment is about Tim Brenan (poet profile)

Original item by Tim Brenan

Hi Sid - welcome to WOL. Great poems!

Comment is about Ray Miller (poet profile)

Original item by Ray Miller

I enjoyed this and found it interesting too.

Comment is about Crickets (blog)

Original item by Ray Miller

Such a sad poem. Very well written. Brought a tear to my eye.
Good writing.

Shirley

Comment is about Lost Spring (blog)

Original item by Dorinda MacDowell

Nicky, this is so poignant, so 'deep', I am still sighing........

A very touching piece of work: thank you!

Dorinda MacDowell

Comment is about What if..... (blog)

Original item by Nicky Burrows

Hi John - the death of summer pieces i told you about in September are here.

http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=31647

(Part 1 and 2)

http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=31706

(Part 3 and 4)

Comment is about J F Keane (poet profile)

Original item by J F Keane

surprised i missed you coming onboard a bit back, Maggie but i have been quiet on here running round after Cathy and being ill (Being in hospital again since the last meet-up) but like your poem here x

Comment is about Maggie Waker (poet profile)

Original item by Maggie Waker

Hi Marianne ... thanks again .. every now and then I find something to say ... been concentrating on the music .

Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)

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Thx Greg. Or a good year for squirels (We couldn't find any at least). Win x

Comment is about fall (blog)

Original item by Winston Plowes

I like the way you've laid this out, Win, as well as its music, and its oaks/acorns conclusion. Bad year for acorns?

Comment is about fall (blog)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Howdy again :)

Ta for y'note on Purple - been planning this for a while now. I will be putting that free bus pass (if it still exists when I reach that age) to good use during off-peak times ;D Doesn't do to get caught too many times in the one supermarket!

Oh and as for gigs - yeh, likewise ;p

Comment is about steve pottinger (poet profile)

Original item by steve pottinger

Julian may very well be right...
Doesn't it remind you of SOMEONE???

Comment is about Caroline (blog)

Original item by John Togher