Many thanks again Greg.
This was written in a station canteen on a rainy day.
David
Comment is about SEPTEMBER (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Thanks Gregg.
At the crucifixion the soldiers cast lots for Christ's clothes just as those who demolish churches salvage and sell the fittings.
That's what I had in mind anyway.
David
Comment is about CASTING LOTS (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Thanks Greg!
Bruce was singing about darkness of a different kind ! But I am a great fan of The Boss!
You can catch more of my work including videos by searching on SUBACCHI+POEM.
David
Comment is about EDGE OF TOWN (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Well, I certainly like it, too. I've looked at some of your other poems tonight, and have you down as a very observant poet of place. Of course, I couldn't help thinking of Bruce Springsteen as well on this occasion ...
Comment is about EDGE OF TOWN (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
You build a convincing picture from impersonal construction materials to produce an attack on council planners. Not sure about the title, but I enjoyed the images.
Comment is about CASTING LOTS (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Evocative, Shirley.
It wouldn't have been a problem in the UK this summer. It's rained plenty.
Comment is about A Small Bud (blog)
Original item by Shirley Smothers
The last five lines of this are the ones that captured me, David. An unusual take on the seasons ... and originality is not easy to come by.
Comment is about SEPTEMBER (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Sid, thanks for picking up the comma error. It was meant to be as changed now. Bargee isn't a typo though (a barge worker/owner).
Many thanks for the kind comments.
Graham
Comment is about Ray Miller (poet profile)
Original item by Ray Miller
Shirley, many thanks for your kind comments on A Vendre. Graham
Comment is about Shirley Smothers (poet profile)
Original item by Shirley Smothers
Thank you. I hope when I read it out, it will sound as if the statements have been set in stone without any real commitment to reasoning! I will certainly stumble- particularly with that line. I will think about that Sid.
Comment is about Daydream (blog)
Original item by Cathy Crabb
Hello Isobel, many thanks for the lovely comments on A Vendre. I've had a bit of a dry spell lately. Graham
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Hello Shirley-across-the-miles.
Glad to see you're posting audio. I checked out your "Silly Poem...". Enjoyed it a lot.
Also, glad you liked Shandy Man. I think your description of my audio as "singing" is a bit flattering! It's certainly not something to be envious of!
Comment is about Shirley Smothers (poet profile)
Original item by Shirley Smothers
Thanks for the kind words Greg and regards, Graham
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Hello Greg.
Glad you liked Shandy Man, though I'm a bit concerned that you like to listen to me before you go to bed! Perhaps I should do you a cassette of bedtime stories to play you to sleep!
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks for your thoughts on Shandy Man, MC. There's a little off-beat riff in it which is very simple technically but quite difficult to get your brain to accept its timing.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Powerful and moving, MC.
I always feel moved by a line of simple white crosses in my home-town church in Hucknall. They are for 13 Polish airmen who fled Poland to continue their fight against Hitler from our local aerodrome.
Comment is about HEARTBREAK ETCHED IN STONE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Glad you liked Shandy Man, Karen. Thankyou for your kind posting.
Comment is about Karen Robinson (poet profile)
Original item by Karen Robinson
<Deleted User> (8659)
Mon 24th Sep 2012 20:40
I enjoyed this very much. There must be a more elegant way of saying this, though
About ten years ago when women reclaimed that they were attracted to Tom Jones
Comment is about Daydream (blog)
Original item by Cathy Crabb
tony sheridan
Mon 24th Sep 2012 20:20
Love this. I am a keen gardener. They crave a drink. It rains. Take care, Tony.
Comment is about A Small Bud (blog)
Original item by Shirley Smothers
tony sheridan
Mon 24th Sep 2012 20:02
Have you been talking to my wife Lynn? I raid the fridge and pie/cake tins for a midnight feast. She say's to me "I see you've been midnight feasting again Tony!!" Take care, Tony.
Comment is about Who Ate All The Pies? (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
His kiss is heady,
and his sprint a gale;
a fright of diamonds
in the winter’s sun.
Comment is about Snow Fox (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Glad you enjoyed it. Couldn't agree more, it's a great feeling.
Comment is about Block (blog)
Original item by Matt Tilke
tony sheridan
Mon 24th Sep 2012 15:30
That last line! Like your style! Take care,Tony.
Comment is about Snow White (blog)
Original item by hugh
tony sheridan
Mon 24th Sep 2012 15:24
Surely such a paragon of virtue could only ever
exist in dreams. But I guess there is fun to be found in dreaming!
Comment is about An Ideal Husband (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
tony sheridan
Mon 24th Sep 2012 14:55
I like this. It's great when the the words start to rush from brain to pen though.
Comment is about Block (blog)
Original item by Matt Tilke
A chuckle-fest...and food for thought :-)
""Anyone nicking your pies
Should be tried at the next assize!"
Comment is about Who Ate All The Pies? (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Amen to the poem and to the two posts shown.
Evil is out there and every generation seems to
suffer. It is a timely reminder amongst the
recent angst over police actions elsewhere that
the bottom line in duty can be sudden death.
Comment is about Nicola and Fiona, Rest In Peace (blog)
Original item by hugh
Laced sweet tea
Carpet burns desire
Stockings pulled up
High heels break
Tempting chocolate biscuit.
Comment is about By the wayside (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
Cheers folks :D Had a fantastic day - one to remember! A wonderful festival all round :)
Comment is about Attila's warm words for WOL's Laura Taylor (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
tony sheridan
Mon 24th Sep 2012 09:58
Thanks for your comments on my poems Lynn. Take care, Tony.
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
<Deleted User> (6895)
Mon 24th Sep 2012 09:15
We had good laugh at this one Lynn.xx
Comment is about Who Ate All The Pies? (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Hi Tony, welcome to WOL, enjoyed this and your other poems, well done.
Comment is about WASHED ASHORE (blog)
Hi Jade, welcome to WOL, I enjoyed reading your poems, well done.
Comment is about Jade Eloise (poet profile)
Original item by Jade Eloise
September 2012
Was a quiet night at the Ringers, what with some of our regulars off on their hols, lucky buggers lol. Any way there was plenty of quality and a great atmosphere. We had Kens always hilarious poetry on Old age and Prince Harry's antics from the Queens point of view. Carol entertained us with her Diamond planet and Deslexic was in a romantic mood with his poem May I. Mike was all about bike bells and Alvin Sawdust dazzled us with Rings on your Fingers. Joy France did a wonderful guest slot with pieces such as Lipstick, a touching poem about her Mum. A limerick for the Ring O Bells night ( which hopefully she'll post here) and she kept us all drawn in with Antisipation. Everyone enjoyed her fantastic guest slot.
FEEDBACK
Areas for Improvement
Cannot think of any, bigger audience?, feck all, sodall,let more people know what a good night this is, bigger audience?
Regulars spread the word, maybe we can get some more but i know lots of people were away this time so hopefully next month will be better.
Good Points
Very good, enjoyed it, Excellent as usual , Great night, Double cakes, Good atmosphere, Fecking great,Quality, quality, quality, Laughs, laughs, laughs and quality poetry and chilled crowd. Is there a better way to spend a Sunday evening?, Great Night, Great poetry, especially guest poet Joy.
Well great feedback. Next months open mic will be Sunday 28th and our guest will be Mike Hilton. So it's bound to be a great night. See you all then!!!
Review is about Write Out Loud - Middleton on 23 Sep 2012 (event)
Desperately sad story, well told, MC.
Comment is about HEARTBREAK ETCHED IN STONE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Gave way, not to fires, but ashes of doubt
And tears and stains
Of blood in veins that won't pour out
But oh God! It rains! It rains!
These are very good lines Lois.
Comment is about What Remains (blog)
A small bud, withered
But just a few drops of rain
Beautiful flower
I was inspired to write
this after reading
Nigel's poem.
Comment is about Shirley Smothers (poet profile)
Original item by Shirley Smothers
Crumbs Katy that was dramatic,transmitting perfectly and passionately what was happening---Well done!!!
Comment is about By the wayside (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
Great review Dave - I so regret not being able to make it! It sounds like a brilliant line up and a great evening.
I've only seen Jackie Hagan a couple of times - but loved the subtlety of her poetry and performance.
As for John Hegley - I like the way his poetry entertains. I hope his next gig does appear on WOL guide.
Comment is about John Hegley in Manchester, 2012 (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
An ideal poetic effort loved the rhyme and loved the fun--Well done.
Comment is about An Ideal Husband (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Well deserved praise from Attila, a fine performance I agree! X
Comment is about Attila's warm words for WOL's Laura Taylor (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks Larisa. I confess to some moisture at the eyes upon realising just what those words in stone meant in human terms when dependence on "family" and not the state meant any chance of happiness and survival.
Comment is about HEARTBREAK ETCHED IN STONE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
The Famous Five now for the Sexy Six
Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)
Original item by Stockport WoL
I shall have to inspire you more - - - love it
Comment is about Shirley Smothers (poet profile)
Original item by Shirley Smothers
I really enjoyed this Fiona. To me, grief has shaped the observations. I really like the sentiments.
Comment is about About your mother's face (blog)
Original item by fiona sinclair
David Subacchi
Tue 25th Sep 2012 00:04
You can catch more of my work including videos by searching on SUBACCHI+POEM.
Comment is about David Subacchi (poet profile)
Original item by David Subacchi