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Laura Taylor

Fri 3rd Aug 2012 16:40

ooooooo this is niiiiice :) So good to see you blogging again too Cynth!

Beautiful alliteration and assonance in here, and I thoroughly approve of shirring, rumples flotilla, purling etc

mmMM. A really satisfying read, sonically, and really quite calming :)

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Shirley Smothers

Fri 3rd Aug 2012 16:38

Hi Yvonne. Thank you for your comments on my sister Sandra's poem "It is Time."
She put a lot of herself into this poem. I will pass your comments onto her.

Thanks,
Shirley

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Shirley Smothers

Fri 3rd Aug 2012 16:36

Hello Margaret. Thank you for you comments on my sister Sandra's poem, "It is Time."
I know it was heartfelt. I will pass your comments on to her.

Thank You
Shirley

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Ray Miller

Fri 3rd Aug 2012 10:57

Nice poem.First line's good and I like telephone imagination.

but beside the front door geraniums and herbs cling

to the upper story’s cliff face,

I found this confusing - the front door is on upper storey?

Don't think you need "inside" before your rooms.
Nice finishing line.

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Noris Roberts

Fri 3rd Aug 2012 02:54

This is absolutely beautiful! If you want to, place the link and the poem in my wall in Facebook. This is my way of helping since I'm far away and because of other considerations.

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Tommy Carroll

Fri 3rd Aug 2012 00:55

Newbury: get off your elbow, lay-down your crack-pipe and answer the door to your debtors.

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Tommy Carroll

Fri 3rd Aug 2012 00:55

Newbury: get off your elbow, lay-down your crack-pipe and answer the door to your debtors.

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Lynn Dye

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 23:12

Only just found this, John, gave me and the old man a good chuckle. Thanks, another belter.

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Lynn Dye

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 22:59

Enjoyed this, Hugh, I think it is very real, warm and human.

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Thu 2nd Aug 2012 20:06

Well titled
well written.

what more can we say?
except-
hope you are well Fiona.xx

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Katy Megan Hughes

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 18:53

Aah! and now I've seen your other poetry I understand : )

thank you

katy

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 18:33

Hi Nicholas - a very warm welcome to WOL!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 17:08

Encouraged by you, Win, to snapshot a 'canal moment'.

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Hazel

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 16:56

Hi Winston thanks fot the comment on my untitled. I sat with the dictionary looking for a meaning of a word nothing to do with writing, but then started to scribble.

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 15:48

Dear Mr Carroll - I assume that
"revolutionary socialism" excludes good manners and literacy.
Cheers.

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Ray Miller

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 14:22

Thanks, Steve.The sun exiting the sky is not a line I've used or one I've came across before.I remember the old Dylan line "the sun isn't yellow, it is chicken". My sun is an egg. Now, at least we know which came first.

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Thu 2nd Aug 2012 13:46

Great stuff Lois...well crafted.. :)

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Yvonne Brunton

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 10:55

Hi John
Thanks for your endorsement
In a witty, brief refrain.
If I could pep your sex-life
I'd do it all again
But I am so bowled over
By your keen olympic praise
That I think you'll have to manage
With other tried and trusted ways!

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Greg Freeman

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 09:52

A great poem for the canal collection, Harry! Hope this ends up pinned to a lock gate somewhere

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 01:06

Hi Winston, thanks for leaving a comment on 'Life's Towpath' - yes I certainly did need a prod! I have had few moments of inspiration recently, so thanks again for stirring me into action. :) Best wishes, Dave.

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 01:03

Hi Winston - yes I certainly did need a prod, I have had few moments of inspiration recently, so thanks again for stirring me into action. :) Best wishes, Dave.

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 00:57

Thanks you very much Pat & Stef, you are as ever very kind to me. :) Best wishes, Dave

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John Coopey

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 00:26

If I'd to choose a favourite
This would be my pick;
Reminds me of my love-making
(And over just as quick).
But then again in other ways
(And this might make you groan!)
Breathless and perspiring
And mostly on my own.

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winston plowes

Wed 1st Aug 2012 23:46

A very interesting idea Hazel. Super. Win

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winston plowes

Wed 1st Aug 2012 23:43

Loved this Lois, "I am not a nummber" Win

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Paul Sands

Wed 1st Aug 2012 23:17

Winston
Did you make it to 92?

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winston plowes

Wed 1st Aug 2012 22:54

Glad I proded :-)

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Wed 1st Aug 2012 21:58

Your best so far Dave-clever lad.xx

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Ray Miller

Wed 1st Aug 2012 18:21

Yeah, sorry, I'm not trying to be precious about my "work".Black humour was my intent but I'll take any laughs going.

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Isobel

Wed 1st Aug 2012 17:47

:) Sorry Ray - but it made me smile too. Children full of beans do that to you, don't they?

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Isobel

Wed 1st Aug 2012 17:45

An OBE to your wife then - but I don't imagine your wife would find it half as easy without your support in this Ray...

There is so much to like in this. The title drew me in immediately. Unconditional goes hand in hand with love - the 'regard' immediately sets the tone of the confusion that you speak of later in your comments.

I love the use of pantomime and biblical imagery - I'm imagining that Cinderella may have been one of your own children - who maybe didn't push the boundaries quite so much.

I love the ending - the funny party invitation theme of the beginning continued, but concluded in such a sad, sad way. Within the poem there is a sense of detachment - the sort you maybe have to maintain, if you are a foster parent. Caring without over-caring - it must be such a difficult role.

This poem really made me feel and that's what poetry is about for me.

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Ray Miller

Wed 1st Aug 2012 17:40

Thanks, Katherine, though Fun! is not what I was aiming at.

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Ray Miller

Wed 1st Aug 2012 17:38

Hello Katherine.Shame about the non-rhyme of glow/ comes.How about glow/flows?
With none to cross the undrawn line - maybe "Though none can cross...." Is anyone smiling about it, though? I assume you mean the special olympic lanes.
Seems a bit arbitrary to include 3 commas and omit question marks.It's sad, I know, but I notice these things.
Enjoyed the poem and the dedicated follower of fashion poem.

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Ray Miller

Wed 1st Aug 2012 17:00

Hello Isobel. Thanks for the comment on Unconditional Regard. My missus is the one deserving of a medal, though.

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Wed 1st Aug 2012 16:00

Ha...love it..specially the albumen line for me..cracked me up..pun intended!!

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Wed 1st Aug 2012 15:52

Oh Rach...I have missed reading you.. :) x

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Wed 1st Aug 2012 15:47

Super, super stuff...so many great lines..and a killer of an ending..great!! :D

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Wed 1st Aug 2012 15:36

Ha! Like this very much..

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Wed 1st Aug 2012 14:05

awww sympathies sent with a smile John...x

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Wed 1st Aug 2012 13:41

being hurt so much by the occasional touch is a cracker of a line...Well written lady!!

:)

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Harry O'Neill

Wed 1st Aug 2012 13:00


Lois,

Nicely concise...more.

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Harry O'Neill

Wed 1st Aug 2012 12:52

Chris,
Ah memories! The old Gordon Institute, thethe smell of the embrocation...the blood (mine)after being whacked continually on the nose. Tons of enthusiasm - no skill...never even considered for the team...Nights at Bixteth street Stadium with my dad and his docker mates...Bill Carroll (the lumberjack) being felled by a blow from `Impervious` Joe Hyams - and the solitary cry of `timber!` from the back as he crumpled to the floor. `Mugs Alley`(what a place that old stadium was!)

The key word in the poem is `discipline` The end after `expect?` says it all: The `blinded`the `damage` the results of the `cuts` and the fact that it`s as clear as A.B.C. (Amateur Boxing Club.)

I like the generational implication behind your`We haven`t given them the tools`

Good poem.

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Katherine Shirley

Wed 1st Aug 2012 12:26

Thank you Andy!

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Katherine Shirley

Wed 1st Aug 2012 11:54

Fun!

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Katherine Shirley

Wed 1st Aug 2012 11:49

Hilarious.

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Katherine Shirley

Wed 1st Aug 2012 11:41

Fun!

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Andy N

Wed 1st Aug 2012 01:19

excellent stuff - logged specially in to say how i enjoyed this.. although really enjoyed all of it - the first two stanzas are my favourite x

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Andy N

Wed 1st Aug 2012 01:10

really enjoyed last week, folks. really nicely audience and from which i delivered a set i was proud off. nights like this are brilliant to perform at - something i recommend big style to beginners and people who read for sometime. i did one of my very early Write out loud bits here some years back (end of 2008?) and have always enjoyed coming back here time after time. great stuff - long may it carry on! x

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Isobel

Tue 31st Jul 2012 21:48

I think Louise Faszakerly represented poets from the north west in a collaborative olympics poem with poets from other parts of the country. Their poem is in the stadium somewhere now. It was very funny cos they were told they had to include the words 'National Lottery' somewhere in the poem because they were funding it. I imagine that phrase would stick out like a sore thumb :) You'll have to approach Louise, Greg and see if we can print it on the site - she is a member after all. Or perhaps there will be loads of copy right issues...

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Tue 31st Jul 2012 20:29

I very much appreciate this, thank you.

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