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August jam jars

 

Speaking with the quiet voice of death,

each August, mum would say

those wasps

I'll get a jam jar out.

The top would be pierced

with the round, grey knife sharpener.

I liked doing that,

it was satisfying

to make the hole,

the hole of death.

It would work.

The wasps would enter entranced,

tempted, bewitched, seduced

by the sweetness within.

The luscious, sugary fruit of the jam.

Once through the hole,

the hole of death,

which I had made,

with no malice,

they never emerged.

Gorged and exhausted

they fell one by one

into the water

prepared by mum

in her quiet way

as their grave.

 

The thought of it all inhabits my mind now,

with a strangeness.

I am compelled to ponder

the fate of the wasps,

which were compelled to enter

then trapped, trapped

in a world of sensual pleasure

from which there was no escape

but death.

The range of our senses is limited.

There are sounds we cannot hear.

Did they shriek before they died

how pleasure had betrayed them?

Did they know how the search for delights

had led to their doom?

 

And did a wasp

ever find a way out?

◄ Straight Guy on a Pride March

Who was having more fun? ►

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barrie singleton

Sun 27th Oct 2013 18:54

Oh Dave! You torturer - OF MY MIND. Glad I wandered back. Do we grow to realise the error of our murderous ways or just absorb a cultural nuance - set aside for wasps? Are you familiar with Zimbardo's 'Stanford Prison Experiment'? (Invoked again in recent squaddy behaviour.)
AJJ a neat condensation of a massive subject.

Steve Smith

Tue 15th Oct 2013 09:17

this is a nice piece of work, Dave.Darwinian ruthlessness is in us all.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 13th Aug 2013 17:08

This whole theme is very relate-able and catches the interest immediately, whether a specific common experience or not. Poetically, I did like your chosen vocabulary, and the use of repetition for emphasis.

Would you consider, for sound fluidity, a very clear image and a strong point:

the wasps would enter entranced
seduced
by the sweetness within
the sugary sweetness
of jam

Also:

then trapped
trapped in sensual pleasure

I think this enhances the 'buzzing sound' of your chosen words which I find very effective.

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 10th Aug 2013 15:35

We used to do it too. I also used to chop up worms to feed to my tadpoles - still feel very bad about that. And elderly neighbours who encouraged me to tread on snails in their garden when I was only about five years old.

I think there's a sort of morbid curiosity in all of us that we hopefully suppress as we grow into adulthood. (Unless we're psychopaths of course!)

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 8th Aug 2013 21:39


Dave,
We used to do this with empty beer-bottles and beer-mats in the square at Paxos in Greece.

I like the way the two lines:

`The range of our senses is limited.
There are sounds we cannot hear.`
(both line-stopped)

Plus the chill of those last two lines

Open it all to interpretation as a moral tale about ourselves in the present day.

It`s as `sweet` as the spoonful of sugar that made the medicine go down.

One of the things good poetry can do.

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