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Fear

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Fear, expresses no emotion.

It neither wraps itself

In cotton anger, or

Brittle sanity.

It lives in the deepest part;

Of your dream.

Taking up room -

Where the life-force should be.

 

This living ghost,

Consumes.

It does not chew it's food,

It devours it.

No table is enough to

Satisfy it's cravings.

When every opportunity feeds

Until you disbelieve.

 

This blanket, snug;

Comfortable to the suck,

Warms our realities.

Snuggy protection.

We can lose ourselves in

It's embrace -

Cover our heads and

Pray the monsters stay outside.

 

Fear controls what little we

See, feel, hear and taste.

Tho' we do what is wrong,

And think all that is right,

We are caged by our experience.

Now, though the bars,

Our eyes are forced to see

Monsters.

The monsters that will compromise

Our every move,

Ourselves.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 7th Aug 2013 12:26

Eli, better later than never! You probably write much differently after two years' further experience, but, just in case, IMO, there is more punctuation than really needed. I find myself using less with every poem, but prize-winners are still full of it, used very carefully. And do beware of the 'its' meaning ownership/possession as compared with 'it's' meaning 'it is'. Who would know in performance, of course, but once paged, it is important.

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Mon 31st Oct 2011 21:18


Interesting take on the emotion Eli..I rather like that third verse..it stands out for me. :)

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Eli

Fri 30th Sep 2011 01:26

Greetings.
Thank you for the comment.
I've rethought the snug and wraps, and have made a subtle change. This tightens up the piece, and it scans a little better.
The feels good.
What do you think?
OL.

Ps. Never thought about the regional issues. Food for thought.

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winston plowes

Fri 30th Sep 2011 00:19

A difficult intangible thing to get hold of, fear. You have some good descriptions in your opening stanza and then with the hunger analogy and I especially liked to way you handled this.

A couple of suggestions
snuggy - snug?
wrap - wraps?

These could be regional preferances, where are you?

Keep posting,

Winston

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Eli

Thu 29th Sep 2011 23:08

Greetings.
I would appreciate feedback/comments on the above piece.
OL, Eli

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