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Nigel Astell

Mon 19th Nov 2012 12:29

Looking back
Saucy bottom
Little cheeky
Forward thinking.

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Nigel Astell

Mon 19th Nov 2012 12:14

Nice one John fingers crossed for the outcome

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Mon 19th Nov 2012 09:36

Thank you for commenting on my last poem Isobel . I feel that my writing is taking alternate directions - sometimes becoming more experimental and sometimes more direct. Hope you are well. x

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Mon 19th Nov 2012 09:33

Thank you Cynthia for such a warming response to my poem. Hope you are well x

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 19th Nov 2012 00:34


Larisa

Nice pithy use of the haiku...and true too.

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 19th Nov 2012 00:25



M.C.

A belated thank you for your appreciated
comment on `Linda...`

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 19th Nov 2012 00:20


Thomas,
Intriguingly strategical use of the sonnet form to let lines nine, ten and eleven answer the question you pose in lines seven and eight...how one half answers the other, and the last two lines invite comment on the point you have demonstrated, particularly the last two words.

An excellent example of a `game play` sonnet aimed at the intelligence.

You don`t get this `brain` stuff very often.

Enjoyed.

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 18th Nov 2012 22:53

Arse surely? I loved it too

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 18th Nov 2012 22:52

Thomas I thought the first eight lines of this were exemplary. They could stand alone.

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Sun 18th Nov 2012 19:56

Thank you, Tony!

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tony sheridan

Sun 18th Nov 2012 19:31

Today is the first day of the rest of your life. I had a t-shirt with this on it back in the 70's. Great poem! Take care, Tony.

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Sun 18th Nov 2012 17:21

Thank you dear Hugh!

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Hugh

Sun 18th Nov 2012 15:11

An excellent piece of advice.Made me smile.

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Hugh

Sun 18th Nov 2012 15:09

So much happening within so few words.Brilliant !!

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Julian (Admin)

Sun 18th Nov 2012 13:31

Each line would be a grand starter line for a poem in its own right. Clever idea, Dave.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 18th Nov 2012 12:16

Good one - punches us all right between the eyes. A great 'list' poem, as they say.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 18th Nov 2012 11:53

Very compelling. 'Your spirit in the smoke does form..' is lovely. And I like the stanza layout.
Was there a specific reason for the 'right' shoulder? Other than a connection with 'alright'? IMO, I thought the soft 'oa' sound carried the emotion well, like sighing and mourning, without the sharpness of 'right' at that precise point.
You might double check whether 'all right' is still the accepted spelling, although 'alright' is certainly casually used.

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Julian (Admin)

Sun 18th Nov 2012 11:02

Feedback from workshop attendees, passed to me by Diane Green, who funded the events on behalf of Kirklees Libraries Reader Development Service.
All the attendees loved the workshops and came along to the jam.
They are much encouraged and also 3 new people came along to the monthly write out loud poetry evenings. It is a popular and growing movement- the open mic poetry.

A thoroughly enjoyable and worthwhile session. Really enjoyed Julian's approach to creative writing and made a huge difference to personal self confidence and ways of presenting ideas. Wish it was running for a few weeks more.

Very enjoyable evening, humorous and lively and encouraging.

Very stimulating-turned some expectations upside down.

Went away with lots of ideas. Would like some serious stuff too in the future.

I wish the workshops could have gone on until at least Christmas.

Really enjoyable, friendly and extremely useful. Julian's enthusiasm has been inspirational.

I have been encouraged to read my poetry before an audience which I would never have dreamt of doing before.

It has been great to have a go at something new and to learn that writing a poem is not as daunting as I thought: good value, cool poems, interesting characters.

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Greg Freeman

Sun 18th Nov 2012 10:27

Enjoyed and shared the feelings expressed here, Hugh. I'm not suggesting you transfer your loyalties, but have you had a look at this site as well? http://www.footballpoets.org/

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Isobel

Sun 18th Nov 2012 09:19

Well to be honest with you Tommy, quite a lot of poets on this site do!

I think the problem is that we see too many poor examples of it. It's not just about getting the right syllable count - it's about injecting some kind of soul into it - so that those short lines leave you with an after taste. That's how I'd describe it anyway. Other people might see it differently.

I think it's a perfect format for shops though - where people don't have time to read longer swathes. It might just attract people to poetry who wouldn't normally read it - providing that window of opportunity, if you'll pardon the pun!

If you prefer more extended writing you might like to try John's 'Full Blood'. I bought that just over a year ago and really enjoyed it.

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 18th Nov 2012 04:02

haiku ... who gives a tight-arsed ##### ##

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Cathy

Sat 17th Nov 2012 22:55

Funny! And the wedding picture is colourful- it's like all the differing letters in a ransom note.

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 17th Nov 2012 21:33

Like standing in a crowded space. Well knit snippets. Unusually clever stuff. Well done!

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 17th Nov 2012 21:32

David, thank you belatedly for your comments on Tontine, always much appreciated. Regards, Graham

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tony sheridan

Sat 17th Nov 2012 19:15

Love your sample poems. Poems on blog please. Take care, Tony.

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darren thomas

Sat 17th Nov 2012 12:08

It's sounds like a list of argumentative clichés and what with 'we've got to get the story straight' - were you ever in the police!?

Not sure why this resonates so much with me - maybe I've had all those statements balled at me at one time or another.

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darren thomas

Sat 17th Nov 2012 10:29

I'm intrigued by this one Dave. Gonna get my snorkel on and have a swim through its corals...

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John Coopey

Fri 16th Nov 2012 21:26

Hello MC.
Glad you liked "The Last Rhyme".

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John Coopey

Fri 16th Nov 2012 21:11

Where you bin, CRM? I've missed your skill on here.
Very pictorial and the rhythm rhythm evokes the machinery. Nice how you slow it down in the last stanza to "kill" the picture.
I hope the setting to music manages to do this as well as your spoken word.

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John F Keane

Fri 16th Nov 2012 20:56

I have sent off the ebook to Peter Ashworth. Hopefully, it will guide his consultations towards the right decision.

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John F Keane

Fri 16th Nov 2012 19:16

Thank the gods for that! Thought we were stuck on seven forever.

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David Cooke

Fri 16th Nov 2012 18:45

Hi Sid Thanks for comms on Bastille poem. Never thought about the 'hers' - I'll have a think about it!

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Julian (Admin)

Fri 16th Nov 2012 18:28

Hi Larisa. I don't want to just open this up to all translations immediately, but to do it in a controlled way.

The wiki will be different software where you can upload the original and the draft translation side by side, for discussion by a group.

However if you would like to upload just ONE poem with the existing translation, we could perhaps use that as a means of trying out what it might be like once the wiki is in place.

You must be willing for people to comment on the poem and on its translation. If you are, firstly you need to join this group, then go ahead and blog a poem and translation in the same blog, then, in <Profile for entry> dropdown menu, select Poetry in Translation Group. Then message me to let me know. But PLEASE don't expect immediate response!
Spasiba.

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Ray Miller

Fri 16th Nov 2012 18:13

Thanks. It's all true, actually, Isobel. 8/11/1980, Path of Peace won the November Handicap at Doncaster at 25-1 and my wife and I got married.Seems like only yesterday. Wish it was yesterday, I'd have made sure I got the bet on!

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Nigel Astell

Fri 16th Nov 2012 17:00

After eight it is never too late - - -

The membership is growing

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Isobel

Fri 16th Nov 2012 16:04

And I'm left wondering how much this is down to imagination and how much is true :)

It's very funny - it kind of reminds me of a quirky english film. :)

I like the dryness of the humour and the title/name of the horse is perfect.

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Fri 16th Nov 2012 15:55

Looking forward to this one Jan, it's going to be a great night!

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 16th Nov 2012 13:40

Amen! Even if the process takes age(s)!!

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Janice Windle

Fri 16th Nov 2012 12:46

Hello Anne, thank you for your comment and your advice. This is a very useful site if one uses it properly - I am still a beginner. Your poems on here are lovely - the teashop one reached me very directly and I like the poems about the sea-creature and the owl for their observation. The owl "like a blanket over a birdcage" sizing up his children - very good phrase for the owl's considering tilting of the head as it looks about, as well as its making sure the family grows!

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Hugh

Thu 15th Nov 2012 23:56

A vivid poetic picture of how things used to be.Well done!!!

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Francine

Thu 15th Nov 2012 23:05

J'espère que ça marche...

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tVDxg95cGNA

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C Richard Miles

Thu 15th Nov 2012 22:54

Thought I'd enter this - will be performing it at Helmshore Mills this Saturday 17th Nov for Bury Choral Society who have chosen it for their commission for a young composer (Zakiya Leeming) to set to music!

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Ray Miller

Thu 15th Nov 2012 22:15

Nice poem, I like the opening line best. Of course, the shorter the poem the more things get noticed and for me the last line doesn't add anything that's not already there.

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thu 15th Nov 2012 21:25

Oh, sorry! I didn't notice Blog entries by Poetry in Translation Group. But..., anyway, what about translations from Russian into English?

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thu 15th Nov 2012 21:20

Hello, Julian! I would like to know if I can post my translations from Russian into English and where? Best wishes, Larisa

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John F Keane

Thu 15th Nov 2012 21:04

Fantastic poem, Meshach. The ebook is growing...

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Paul Maxey

Thu 15th Nov 2012 20:37

Hi Tony, I like this one, Ah the perils of Mammon,where did I put that lottery ticket?

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