incoming
The accent from
above; glove over
glove, folding flames
into the hearts of love.
And through those eyes -
as cold as caves -
rest the memories
of men made slaves.
Comments
simple but everlasting hun
Thanks steve for your constructive comments which I took on board....a bit rusty...me that is, not you. Clearly you have something very special and thanks for sharing it with the rest of us.Sian x
Nice one Steve, very subtly powerful, Jeff
Hi Steve, I have read this several times this morning and the picture it paints is very vivid and powerful, even though I'm not sure what it is about - on one reading I think I do and then I change my mind. I'm curious - what was your original title?
Great piece, nicky x
Haven't had the pleasure of reading this before. Brilliant in its brevity.
thanks
John
Hi steve
A big fan of this one. Originally and still. Winston
Lovely Steve...
simple yet so profound...
Photo is gorgeous too...
I often yearn for that kind of brevity. Very strong impact. As with lots of good poetry there are many questions raised in a few words, but passion and feeling come through and one is left wondering about the nature of the relationship with the friend.
Steve, in just a few lines you convey so many powerful themes and symbols. Great poetry. Some heavenly thing was surely upon you when you wrote / re-wrote it.
<Deleted User> (5984)
Fri 31st Oct 2008 17:24
Wow!!
So much power in so few lines
Mel
x
<Deleted User> (5499)
Mon 20th Oct 2008 22:52
Powerful and thought provoking! Each reading sets my thinking bouncing around metaphorically.
Dafydd
Steve,
What can I say?
Simple and Mesmeric.
Zahid
<Deleted User> (5646)
Sun 19th Oct 2008 16:04
Hi Steve,
i've read this several times. It's very deceiving in its simplicity.
Each time i read, my stomach does a somersault. Very powerful image.
Love Janet.xx
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Ged the Poet
Sat 6th Sep 2014 10:56
Read this today for the first time.
Kaboom! Very strong and powerful.
'Through those eyes... cold as caves'.
As valid today as throughout the centuries.