Hi Ray, a clever, skilful piece, and funny too! Paul
Comment is about PRE - NATAL AGREEMENT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
David, you capture so well the scourge of modern times as Jeff mentioned, vanity - but also the ignorance of self-obsessed 'beautiful' people who can't see beyond themselves. If only they knew...! Paul
Comment is about The Girl in the Picture (blog)
Original item by David Cooke
Wed 28th Dec 2016 18:53
Beautiful words especially when they come from the heart. Thank you for sharing
Comment is about Formidable Love (blog)
Original item by Connie Walter
Thank you so much Raj, Patricia, Ray and Jemima for your kind messages and thoughtful words. I'll tell you the story behind this, the very first thing I wrote in 1990. Driving, alone, for a holiday in Scotland, I felt a sudden compulsion to write something. I stopped the car and these words came out pretty much as you have read them. What is ironic, is that that night (5.8.90) I met my partner who I am still with 26 years later. It would be interesting to hear if you or others have experienced anything similar. Isn't life a mystery! Paul x
Comment is about Home (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
Wed 28th Dec 2016 17:49
I love the whole of this poem Paul,especially the second stanza.Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about Home (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
Vanity & discarding beauty. The girl more interested in her own image rather than the beauty behind her....Jeff.....
Comment is about The Girl in the Picture (blog)
Original item by David Cooke
Proper wordsmith.....love the idea of using brackets too! Smart arse!.......Jeff...
Comment is about PRE - NATAL AGREEMENT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Andromeda.....will do! I googled the fetishes & they do exist! The Kentucky bar is particularly offensive ?....Jeff.....
Comment is about My Gay Mates (blog)
Original item by Jeff
Nooooooo! I'm 100% straight! Hahahahaha! I did meet some guys who were gay (now mates) & after a few drinks the conversation turned to utter filth & I went home to research it.....It was hilarious what some people do in their own homes! The two guys were just into normal stuff....but hey ho...to each his own......hope that clears things up?.........Jeff.....
Comment is about My Gay Mates (blog)
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Andromeda
Wed 28th Dec 2016 16:56
Haha Jeff you twisted fuck! I like this one, its light and comical and..rather educational? Keep on creepin on.
Comment is about My Gay Mates (blog)
Original item by Jeff
I don't want to fully read this, in case it's in your book Rick. I just know it is the real McCoy and f....ing brilliant. A classic etching about the time we both went through. I need to write about pissing about in Stonehenge , in the 60s till open to everyone.
Ray
Comment is about “Glastonbury Fayre” (blog)
Original item by Rick Gammon
A noble sentiment Paul and a well balanced view. I think if you try to break this down, there is a lot of living to do to reach the calm and considered philosophy here. More often we find life is a lot harder and suffering awaits us first.
(Only my opinion).
Ray
Comment is about Home (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
Whatever happened to romance, Jeff? No comment can really do this justice, as it stands alone amongst the proud detritus of the human condition. Mind you, if it turns you on, why not? It's not the sort of fun and games most of us have tried, and there is a sort of indelicacy to it, but having said that, there is no real offence in it for me, so good on you!! I think the smell alone would put me off thanks.
Ray
Comment is about My Gay Mates (blog)
Original item by Jeff
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Wed 28th Dec 2016 16:01
Hi Paul.This poem comes over as a neccessary message that we all need to listen to.
Patricia.x
Comment is about Home (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
Beautifully balanced and clear, David - a whole state of mind and a tribute to the vagaries of advertising. A very fine piece of work, with no extra padding.
Especially effective is the triptych form of the lines.
Ray
Comment is about The Girl in the Picture (blog)
Original item by David Cooke
Suffered from anxiety most my adult life.....this sums it up a treat. Agree with Stu & performed live it would be amazing...Thanks for sharing....Jeff...
Comment is about acute mania (11/17/2016) (blog)
Original item by Zach Dafoe
Almost all of it is true....which just makes it funnier....& still mates with them both...Jeff.....
Comment is about My Gay Mates (blog)
Original item by Jeff
Hi Chakraj, maybe you wrote this from personal experience but I think it also reminds us to reflect about ourselves and others - and life in general. Thought-provoking and meaningful. Thanks, Paul
Comment is about The Reality of You (blog)
Original item by Chakraj
Like that Paul.
Moving away is always good for reflection, renewal and restoration. Gives us all a fresh perspective!!
Comment is about Home (blog)
Original item by Paul Waring
Gideon Puccio
Wed 28th Dec 2016 06:05
I feel these words in my heart. Keep them coming.
Peace!
Comment is about FORGIVENESS (blog)
Original item by lynn hahn
Big hug Lynn.
Forgiveness helps you find that sacred place within you.
Takes you to a higher place.
Blend that with gratitude and your spirit will soar.
Raj x
Comment is about FORGIVENESS (blog)
Original item by lynn hahn
<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 27th Dec 2016 18:58
despite the theme of sadness running through this poem Leigh,it is beautiful! Welcome to write out loud by the way.
P&S.xx
Comment is about Who? (blog)
Original item by Leigh Tiffany Love
Sweet catharsis. Do I see struggle, restless, adventure and a craving for a 'footloose' life?
Keep them coming. Poetry after all is a personal thing Sharvari. x
Comment is about Solitude (blog)
Original item by Sharvari
Thanks, Ray. Yes, I saw there was the programme on tonight. It will pale as art in comparison to my masterpiece.
Comment is about SANTA KRAMPUS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
"His poems are replete with yarns and he loves to tell one" is what my instructor of literature Dr Akalu Getaneh once wrote a blurb for my book.Your remark is in the same wavelength.Thank you.
On www.allpoetry someone suggested the replacement of the second stanza by
// The thief unfastened
Four bolts of a tyre
The salesday
Got chastened
On owners sight
He ran away.//
As natives to the language I want readers take on the matter!
Comment is about A maverick seen mentally sick (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
<Deleted User> (16513)
Tue 27th Dec 2016 13:18
Deadly... words are sharper than a double edged sword...
Naughty... be it, to think awakening be your way...
Naughty thought sometimes awakening the one's sleepy soul. that's writer is... should be...
Comment is about Social Media Studies (blog)
Original item by Jeff
Very refreshing change John. Are you knocking Sir Cliff off his perch ? Did you know there is a comedy offering tonight- Inside no. 9. featuring Krampus!
I like the jaunty guitar rendition, almost bowdlerizing the theme!
Happy new year. Ray
Comment is about SANTA KRAMPUS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (16513)
Tue 27th Dec 2016 12:23
I thought they were stupid to entertain independence in their last referendum. Now after our referendum I think they'd be stupid to remain in the UK.
Comment is about proud Scots wha hae (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Belated Christmas greetings, MC. I'm in time for the New Year, though.
Comment is about THE NIGHT BEFORE CHRISTMAS - a nod! (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Absolutely brilliant!...laughed sooo much. Having worked on Orkney (Flotta isle) I can picture the whole scene!....please print the rest!...Jeff....
Comment is about “The Orkney Spring of Bradley Driver - Easter 1995” (blog)
Original item by Rick Gammon
This is another drastically edited pome - hopefully it will make the cut - every word is true. I've omitted some of the weirder moments ?
Comment is about “The Orkney Spring of Bradley Driver - Easter 1995” (blog)
Original item by Rick Gammon
Thanks for the comments & Ray - you might like my "toilet inspired" one...Mothballs n Piss...Jeff...
Comment is about Social Media Studies (blog)
Original item by Jeff
to M.C. Newberry: It was quite a trip. ?
to Raypool: I'll certainly let you know when the book is done. All being well, and since I'll have nowt to do with publishers, it's a straight print job - around 400-500 copies and ought to be mid January - the editing is ongoing - that ends on Dec 31, win lose or draw.
Thanks both for your kind comments - I'm in the thralls of, "It's all crap" at the moment - twas ever thus ?
Comment is about "Dingle Bound Epiphany June 1990" (blog)
Original item by Rick Gammon
elPintor
Mon 26th Dec 2016 21:29
I guess it's a roundabout way of saying that we run the risk of killing parts of ourselves when we deny their expression. While I realize that we aim to do just that by repressing undesirable traits and propensities, I'm also sure that much decency is inhibited for the sake of remaining secure in our outward circumstances. What I mean is, freedom is rarely free. Though, it seems to me that it must be that if we are naturally endowed with a particular talent or perspective, the world is robbed and incomplete while that which could promote change for the better remains subjugated to inferior demands.
Thanks for reading and commenting, David and Ray. I really enjoy the opportunity to discuss the finer details.
elP
Comment is about boxing day (blog)
Original item by nunya
You've nicely managed to capture a certain essence of the quality of experience at this rare time Mark. Good on you.
Ray
Comment is about THE NIGHT BEFORE CHRISTMAS - a nod! (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Can you let me know where and when a copy of your book is available Rick. (seriously). You have me by the balls every time, and this is a carousing wonder.
You've made my day. Ray
Comment is about "Dingle Bound Epiphany June 1990" (blog)
Original item by Rick Gammon
I yearn for the old days of toilet graffiti - often no less childish and sometimes witty - a place for social or rather unsocial comments. The whole social media is a mixed blessing , a melting pot that often reaches melting point.
Nice one.
Ray
Comment is about Social Media Studies (blog)
Original item by Jeff
There is no escape elP from the pressing need, even over Christmas. A prison of freedom.
Ray
Comment is about boxing day (blog)
Original item by nunya
I really the idea of writing like a parable with a deal of wisdom to inform and also entertain !
Thanks . Ray
Comment is about A maverick seen mentally sick (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
Positive and pleasing. The ideal is not always obtainable
but maybe we should try to aspire to it when possible.
Comment is about HO HO HO (blog)
Original item by lynn hahn
I think my late mother would have cast an eye over this
post and observed "It's the Irish in him!". I found myself
impelled down the lines - as if alongside its writer on his
travels. Absorbing, uplifting and memorable by turn.
Comment is about "Dingle Bound Epiphany June 1990" (blog)
Original item by Rick Gammon
Thanks David. I think we should muck about with fairy tales if we're in the bubble. All's fairy and squary in love and war. Xmas like all human constructions can be pretentious I think.
Ray x
Comment is about HOME CHRISTMAS EVE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
One thought that occurred to me was that the quote from Brodsky apart from being spot on did stimulate an afterthought, namely that what separates poets from such ill - assortments is the fact that they do not have very much power to control matters, and in such position they can freely express themselves. That is not to say they cannot be scarifying or elevating or indeed plumb the entire range of human needs and conditions. It would though be naïve to think that some do not have vested interests in altering the status quo in whatever direction they find themselves motivated. It would be naïve too to think we poets do not have egos that can be inflated ! By this yardstick it would also be naïve to dismiss those others out of hand surely!
Let us not forget the beauty of art for its own sake when we put poetry to use for other reasons.
A happy new year! Ray.
Comment is about We at Write Out Loud wish you the best at Christmas and a successful New Year (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Andromeda
Mon 26th Dec 2016 16:15
Really powerful. Some great lines in there
Comment is about This isn't what life had planned for me (blog)
Original item by Jeff
Andromeda
Mon 26th Dec 2016 16:09
"Leave me my thumbs!" Haha too true-and obviously, much more important than a head
Comment is about Social Media Studies (blog)
Original item by Jeff
Thank you Sir for the feedback and getting the gist!
Comment is about A maverick seen mentally sick (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
David Cooke
Wed 28th Dec 2016 22:34
Hi Paul Thanks for comms on my photo girl. David
Comment is about Paul Waring (poet profile)
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