<Deleted User> (13762)
Sun 21st May 2017 09:47
I'm not sure we are awake at all Karen - the 18-24's don't vote and there's hardly riots in the streets despite just about all our public services being on their knees and the wealthy continuing to get more wealthy at the expense of the poor. Vive la Revolution not ?! Corbyn might have some of the right ideas but him and his cronies are hardly made of the stuff that inspires revolt and surely it's a revolution we need. Maybe the French saw that in Macron - youthful and eloquent - not the bearded old lefty and clueless acolytes that can't get their numbers right that we've been lumbered with. Excusez-moi. I seem to have gone off on a rant of my own! A good poem provokes ?
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sun 21st May 2017 09:12
'writing on the wall' seems very apt with all that's going on or down in the world these days. If only all the politicians and soldiers turned to art maybe then we'd live in peace (man)
good to see yer scruffy beard gracing the pages of WoL matey.
Comment is about wisp: John Wayne 0344 (05/20/2017) (blog)
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A real rant. Hard to read without shaking your fist.
Kevin
Comment is about Excuse Me (blog)
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I don't know what a dumper is, but I get the picture anyway. nice one
Kevin
Comment is about THE CAMP COOK (blog)
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Many thanks, Sonia.
The disappointment I've learned to cope with. It's the hope that I can't bear.
Comment is about FAREWELL TO THE LANE (blog)
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Excellent. Loved reading this Karen.
I particularly liked the way it flows, unfolding the truths one by one.
A good wake up call.
Raj
Comment is about Excuse Me (blog)
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Unbent and unbowed. Love it.
Best of all are the last two lines:
I travel lightly along
with the setting sun.
Raj
Comment is about unbent (blog)
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Thanks, Suki, what you see above is the 31st revision - as of Sunday morning I ain't looked at it yet - I foresee another day of editing to lick it into shape.
At least a day...but not today...
Bad lines pop up like Hydra's teeth - I will slay them all - come out you b*studs - show yourselves - I'll fight you to the death.
p.s. My recently deceased cynosure Shirley loved owls - I promised I'd write a pome about owls.
pps - Just gave it a once over...like I'm prone to do ..a few lines disappeared... :)
ppps - A good friend told me I wrote farrows when it oughtta be furrows - looks like I birthed a litter of pigs ha ha :)
Comment is about About an Owl (blog)
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Ahhh this is beautiful... bitter sweet growing up!! Loved it!
Comment is about The Mayfly Dance (blog)
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Feels like a nostalgic farewell and an excited beginning! Loved it
Comment is about FAREWELL TO THE LANE (blog)
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Thanks Rosie.
Always good to receive your comments.
Have a refreshing, relaxing and blessed weekend.
Raj xx
Comment is about Seduced by life (blog)
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sorry for being disrespectful, i dont mean it..
song
Comment is about THE CAMP COOK (blog)
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elPintor
Sun 21st May 2017 04:00
You've a certain gift for being plain without being blunt, Karen--feelings so identifiable yet skirting blocked and rote definition...very enjoyable (for lack of a better word) work.
Rachel
Comment is about Excuse Me (blog)
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Thanks for the comment Pintor! I really love exploring the visual language of type, so this was an experiment in that.
Comment is about Selfie Culture is Just Culture You Stupid Fucking Baby Boomer. (blog)
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elPintor
Sun 21st May 2017 03:49
It's rather an oddity that one generation is unable to perceive how the next is only an outgrowth of itself..
Rachel
btw..the editing is stimulating and notably creative
Comment is about Selfie Culture is Just Culture You Stupid Fucking Baby Boomer. (blog)
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elPintor
Sun 21st May 2017 03:28
Dear Suki..such a smart guy...
You bring up a great point. What stands as glory for the masses is often the very destruction of those who have stood vulnerable for their sake or simply in their stead.
And, we should forget neither the power of language nor the ability to subvert it...it will always remain a valuable tool and/or weapon to anyone who is able to wield it effectively.
Rachel
Comment is about transfixation (blog)
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elPintor
Sun 21st May 2017 03:15
Irreverent..if I could like it twice, I would.
Rachel
Comment is about THE CAMP COOK (blog)
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elPintor
Sun 21st May 2017 03:11
can't help but like your sample poem, Daisy...but it's so nonconsumerist and unAmerican--hah!
Rachel
Comment is about Daisy (poet profile)
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Hi Ray,
Funnily enough, I grew up in Rainhill, Liverpool, where they held the Rainhill Trials - Stephenson' Rocket, all that.
Your poem reminds me a little of all that.
Nice one!
Suki
Comment is about TO THE NORTH! (blog)
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Hi Rachel,
The Elysian Fields aspect also made me think of the bitter-sweet nature of hero-worship and how the Powers That Be often use it for their own ends. For example, the way politicians use Help For Heroes as a platform for their Newspeak.
Very imagistic too!
Suki
Comment is about transfixation (blog)
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Lovely structure to this, Rick. Enjoyed. Thanks for sharing.
Suki
Comment is about About an Owl (blog)
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<Deleted User> (9882)
Sun 21st May 2017 00:02
good for her Raj! beautifully written piece.
kind regards to,
you,and the *advocate of newly found compassion.
The accompanying image is so fitting.
Rose ??
Comment is about Seduced by life (blog)
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Hi David , I'm so glad to get your interpretation on this , as it highlights one of the aspects of what the poem might represent, an important one. The dignity of hard labour, you might say in this case, and perhaps also pride. Of course in retrospect the whole experience has gained the patina of nostalgia; obviously for me my memory was tinged with the commonality of steam railways . I don't think rail travel today gives much change to those who beg for the past glories.
Thanks mate. Ray
Comment is about TO THE NORTH! (blog)
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Thank you Jade!! Your comment means a lot to me. Colin, thank you for your words, I intended the poem to be more passive but empowering as though they had already gotten over everything and had accepted they'd need to leave rather than hatred.
Thanks, xx
Comment is about What We Leave Behind (and what we take) (blog)
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Wow. Starkly, heart achingly beautiful.
Comment is about Desolate (blog)
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Hello M.C. , .. thanks for your comment ... I wrote it very quickly while logged in here ... which concentrates the mind a bit ... it's about a real event where I failed, so I'm probably reading it stressing different thoughts to myself .. I usually leave well alone and don't edit endlessly ... cheers.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
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A memorable foray into flights - real and imagined - to
take us way above the norm of our humdrum lives...I
was with the writer all the way, loving every sentence.
Comment is about 'How strange it seemed to look down on your life from somewhere else' (article)
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Always relied upon to produce memorable word-images,
I absorbed this flight of fancy and personal doubt.
The author's poem "With Thanks" remains a personal
favourite, copied and near to hand for another route to
higher places in the mind.
"Now, as our planet's gently curving sphere
Bows to the grace of the resurrecting morn,
My thanks for at this moment being here
Compels me bless the day that I was born".
Amen Harry!
Comment is about (blog)
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Touching - like the fading notes of a melody that moves
the spirit and lingers in the mind.
A personal caveat would have seen me try to maintain
the rhyme and rhythm in the final verse - e.g.
There is no life, there cannot be,
I placed my life wherein you lay.
You all expect too much of me,
I regret the minute...the hour...the day!
Comment is about As if the song would come again (blog)
Original item by Mikhail Smith
Thanks, MC. Good to know you and your bro are still carrying your bats.
Comment is about CHARITY MARATHON ROW (blog)
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Hello Paul, I have only been this site since the beginning of March and today I came across your profile. I have read some of your poems which I have enjoyed enormously. Keep writing as I look forward to reading more. Thanks. Keith
Comment is about Pauliegreg (poet profile)
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Aye Up Ray - thanks so much for commenting on 'Gone' I'm pleased that you liked it - but it's sad, in a way, that it had to be written at all. I appreciate your feedback mate
Ian
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
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Thanks for commenting on 'Gone' Louise - I'm pleased that you liked it and appreciate you taking the time to let me know
Ian
Comment is about Louise Clarke (poet profile)
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Thanks so much Col. I enjoy the idea of footplate rides, and there is a very masculine drive involved. I love the idea of departure and arrivals and what that brings to us. I do have a book called "Mile by Mile on Britain's Railways (1947) showing every detail of the main lines starting from London - so I cribbed some of that. I'm glad you got the flavour! Now the confession: the last two lines were conceived before the voice over idea in a film context. They were to imply that all that way of life had now disappeared. Of course the contemporary note of the reading rather contradicted that. There are the horns of the dilemma. Well spotted. Not sure how to resolve it without a rehash!
Always grateful for your eagle eye. Aythangyow.
Ray
Comment is about TO THE NORTH! (blog)
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Hello Raj,
Yes, writing does that hey!! Sets something free and you come out the otherside of "whatever" lighter...Brighter!
Or in my case...fall asleep!
Thanks for your comment.
Very Best
Sonia
Comment is about One Day! (blog)
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Awwww Rose, cheers. Yes I'm all equipped with hard hat and you can say I'm in a drilling mood. Big time.
I was tempted to title it: "Frack You" then changed my mind.
xx
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<Deleted User> (9882)
Sat 20th May 2017 09:19
I see you've got your hard hat on today Raj..?
love the intermingling of hacking and fracking.oh,
and the knack of sacking.
this poem gets my backing..(coat reaching time)
Rose ?
Comment is about The Crack (blog)
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Benjamin, This a beautiful poem and it comes from the heart. Keep writing. Thank you. Keith
Comment is about Still (blog)
Original item by Benjamin210
wasn't this the third part of a trilogy? Any chance of a post (or a re-post if I missed the others) of all three together?
really good, by the way.
Kevin
Comment is about Shirley Died Today (blog)
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Hi Rick. I've read lots of your posts on this site, and am enjoying reading your book (which I took from the Doncaster Tap-- Thank you). I couldn't pick a single one out as a favourite, as they are all so good. but I must say, seeing them in writing doesn't compare to hearing you perform them. any chance of posting some recordings on here?
Cheers Kevin
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Very powerful Louise and excellent imagery.
Agree with Colin on his suggestion of TV scriopts.
Perhaps even a series of Podcasts!
Excellent work!!
Raj
Comment is about The Shed (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 20th May 2017 07:52
ditto the previous comments. I think I have said it before Louise, that you could develop your writing into TV scripts. Here's a link to the BBC Writers Room that might interest you:
http://www.bbc.co.uk/writersroom/about
just a thought but 'Perfectly perfumed petrol' is a bit of a gobful of p's. All the best,
Colin
Comment is about The Shed (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 20th May 2017 07:43
a chuffing good read this Ray - Fireman Higgins' feeding the firebox is almost orgasmic and the lad checking 'his watch with half an eye on the future' and his sweetheart is a great image - as too 'taut as a longbow' and 'show her legs'. There's tension of all kinds building throughout the narrative. Is there a back story with this? The last two lines threw me a little. Cheers, Col.
Comment is about TO THE NORTH! (blog)
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This is an extremely thought provoking poem. I shudder at even the thought that someone might be going through this anguish! I hope it was conjured from your imagination Louise! I read it more than once... well written!
Comment is about The Shed (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 20th May 2017 07:29
I very much like the idea behind this poem. WoL has a good number of writers from around the world and for me it is particularly gratifying when they post something that reflects their surroundings in some way.
We can all write about love and death, happy and sad emotions etc but it's another thing to look out the window at the world around us and convey that to someone in a different country. So thanks for your fruity Southern poem. Colin.
Comment is about THE FRUIT GROWER'S LAMENT (blog)
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Thanks for sharing this Sonia. It strikes me as a moment of catharsis. All those thoughts buzzing inside your head and spirit, desperate to get out.
You've expressed yourself now and hopefully you feel better for it. Take heart cause someday you will meet him in that place.
Well done!
Raj
Comment is about One Day! (blog)
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keith jeffries
Sun 21st May 2017 10:03
Hello Zach, I endorse every word of ColinĀ“s comment. A profound but true statement told without any frills. Thank you. Keith
Comment is about wisp: John Wayne 0344 (05/20/2017) (blog)
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