What we need is a "dislike" facility so as not to ruffle too many feathers without incurring the inevitable flak . There is humour but also bad taste may I say John. I've always found a complete lack of romance inherent in the revelation of reproductive organs.
Ray (with respect).
Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (18118)
Tue 6th Feb 2018 21:20
<Deleted User> (18118)
Tue 6th Feb 2018 21:12
Amazing writing.
All day long doors, where I live it's heavy fire doors.
Sometimes we are outside the door, sometimes in.
Really enjoyed.
Hannah
Comment is about Doors (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
<Deleted User> (18118)
Tue 6th Feb 2018 21:05
This is a brilliant poem. So full of truths.
The tail wags the dog.
Love is the key.
So clever.
Hannah
Comment is about Only Connect (blog)
Original item by mike booth
totally lovely and a beautiful piece of writing
Comment is about 'My Song of God' by Ewan Thomas Holt, Age 11 (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
a wonderfully rye look at the banality of everyday existence.
what is it ee cummings said...
'unbeingdead isnt beingalive'
Comment is about Doors (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
very nice sentiments and writing. takes me places while leaving me grounded. if thats makes ANY sense at all.
Comment is about Buried in the Sunlight (blog)
Original item by Chris Hubbard
fucking hell laura thats proper brilliant.
whenever i read your poems now i do so in your voice, with that spit and bile you give every piece you do live.
i love this, its fucking ace
p.s - got banned from facebook for 30 days but was gonna send you a message asking how you were doing (january/lack of light etc)
Comment is about Not Exactly Miss Jean Brodie (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
excellent fare indeed. a touch of heaney and, as mentioned, a touch of thomas, but quite holds its own
Comment is about 'Roots and branches' by David T Jones is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Laura/David
Except that men didn't adopt outrage and anger towards
women in general or even in particular for this overtly
sexist act of harm...and all the others that have been
inflicted upon men by women down the years. I blame
Delilah for this!! ?
The procedure you specify in JC's poem is an import
previously unknown in western societies and in my own
view should be prosecuted as "bodily harm" under UK
criminal law, especially if inflicted on those not able (in
law...by age) to agree with what is done to them.
But the fact it exists doesn't remove it from a satirical
swipe from whatever source. Irreverence of the "ouch"
variety is hardly an unknown characteristic in our
national character and long may it be so.
Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Yes because that's exactly the same thing isn't it?
Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I seem to recall that when a certain Ms Bobbit decided to
remove her male companion's penis with a knife over in the Land of the Free - men managed to find a jest in
there somewhere. Ergo - the difference between the
sexes' attitude to such things. The freedom to give
offence is not to be driven into silent servitude by the fear
of giving offence.
Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I'm disgusted that you would even think to joke about FGM. It completely overshadows any other humour in there.
Your timing is shit, too
http://www.un.org/en/events/femalegenitalmutilationday/
Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
A hole in one - one might say!
Your range of inspiration defies the imagination. But your
posts are never less than entertaining (that rare and
increasingly absent term for poetry) and always cleverly
constructed.
Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Indeed Laura. The whole poem is a joke.
So what did you think of the poem?
The tight rhyming structure given the shortness of the lines; the close shadowing of the original; the effectiveness or otherwise of the enjambment in "The problem for me it's/ where stuff fits": the weakness of the 2nd chorus? Can a poem have merit if its contents are offensive? Multum in parvo.
I am intrigued as to what you think.
Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Do you not want to answer my question?
Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Josh I think the op
is reversed
a body transplant
or so i've learned!
Tommy ?
Comment is about Amputated (blog)
Original item by Josh C
I sometimes wonder
-if it were reversed-
that we'd now regret
the wrinkled skin in which
we were once nursed?
Tommy (sigh) ?
Comment is about Not Exactly Miss Jean Brodie (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
What did you think of the poem, Laura?
Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Are you actually making a joke about female genital mutilation with this, John? Really?
"And clitoris which Fatima had not
No longer got."
Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 6th Feb 2018 08:40
the cleverness of this lovely poem is in the fact that believers and non-believers alike can relate to much of it. God described as 'a regular person' in the opening line projects an image of equality that sets the tone for the rest of the poem. And wouldn't a God of equality be appropriate for this moment in history? And who could resist the prospect of finding life again in some indefinable 'heaven'? The third verse shows a respect for family and the world around us and the duality of the last verse provides the perfect summation of his thought process - non-believers are free to have faith in themselves whilst believers live with God within them. For an eleven year old to condense down into a few simple lines two millennia of religious doctrine and make it highly relatable is quite an achievement and one the various churches should take some heed of imo. Thanks for posting Cynthia and well done Ewan. Colin.
Comment is about 'My Song of God' by Ewan Thomas Holt, Age 11 (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
G'day Cynthia,
This is so uplifting for me - it reminds me of myself at Ewan's age; looking, noticing, challenging, thinking.
I should have expressed in verse, as he does here, the sheer wonder and mystery of this world.
I bet he gets hooked on poetry for life. What a prospect!
Chris
Comment is about 'My Song of God' by Ewan Thomas Holt, Age 11 (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
John, I got to witness you in action, and though my visit that one night brief - I will never forget it. I was impressed with how you organised the event and how welcome you made people feel... And I still cannot believe I drank all your beer! ?
Comment is about Farewell, John Togher: Write Out Loud Wigan's organiser to step down after 10 years at the helm (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Wycliff
Mon 5th Feb 2018 21:45
Time heals all wounds. It's all up to us to attract what we want for our own happiness. Law of attraction is real.
Comment is about MAYBE (blog)
Original item by Nyanjiru Wambugu
Wycliff
Mon 5th Feb 2018 21:40
Embracing the worst predicament of man that is mortality is the best way you can live a life fully with the idea that you can't re-live your past so all that is left is to live in the present like there are no second chances...
Comment is about (blog)
Original item by Nyanjiru Wambugu
Thanks Des.
Comment is about 'Presidents Club' by Shirley-Anne Kennedy is Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Perfect. I hope that cow rots and pieces can drop from it and give you freedom through the putrefaction.
Comment is about forward (blog)
Original item by Ria Richardson
congratulations David, a worthy poem indeed. Shades of Heaney and Hughes with slate roofs almost in sight.
Ray
Comment is about 'Roots and branches' by David T Jones is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Great poem Martin
best line for me
Kissed the dog stroke the wife
Comment is about Doors (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Mon 5th Feb 2018 14:50
Thank you Pat,much appreciate your comments.
All the best des
Comment is about Into (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
Mon 5th Feb 2018 14:46
Congratulations David, Great poem.
All the best des
Comment is about 'Roots and branches' by David T Jones is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
<Deleted User> (13762)
Mon 5th Feb 2018 13:36
I love David's work and this is no exception. Well done mate. Col.
Comment is about 'Roots and branches' by David T Jones is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
David,
Congratulations on a worthy accolade to a flourishing poet. You deserve the honour. Keith
Comment is about David T Jones (poet profile)
Original item by David T Jones
Mon 5th Feb 2018 07:05
Congratulations on POTW. Well deserved, great poem.
All the best des
Comment is about 'Presidents Club' by Shirley-Anne Kennedy is Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Hi Cynthia, You are too kind! I certainly enjoyed building the imagery here, and I'm pleased you liked the result.
I wrote it recently after hearing Sting's old song "Fragile" - and its line "How fragile we are ...."
Best,
Chris
Comment is about A Song for the Fragile (blog)
Original item by Chris Hubbard
A fine effort Jackie to convey the inexpressible! When you're told your death date (as I was) words fail you and you DO have a heightened sense of the blessing that is 'being alive'. I like your poems a lot. Keep writing! John
Comment is about Living My Own Death (blog)
Original item by Jacqueline Phillips
Hello Nyanjiru, Welcome to Write out Loud. I particularly enjoyed the poem you offered as a sample. It was so well crafted. I like your use of the word roam as it is very appropriate. Thank you for this. Keith
Comment is about Nyanjiru Wambugu (poet profile)
Original item by Nyanjiru Wambugu
Thanks Rose
No need to apologise we all get busy with stuff.I do quite like Jim he was quite a poet in his way.
Riders of the storm was a classic.
Comment is about Doors (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
There is obviously a great deal of thought gone into this poem which puts to shame some adults let a lone an eleven year old. Its really heartening to know that he is thinking about such ideas and processing them.
Lovely poem Cynthia
Comment is about 'My Song of God' by Ewan Thomas Holt, Age 11 (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Fred, thank you for your kind comment. It is much appreciated. Keith
Comment is about Three Score Years & Ten (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Absolutely love this Kieth, it’s like reading about myself and my own thoughts. I still think I’m a teenager sometimes but then reality hits home, especially when an angina attack comes on! Cheers
Comment is about Three Score Years & Ten (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thanks once again Keith, yes I do relate to the words, which were once again inspired by Ian Curtis, who’s biography I was reading at the time. Unfortunately he took his own life at 23, and part of that was having to be someone he didn’t really want to be.
Comment is about I’m a little bit scared (blog)
Original item by Rick Varden
Thanks once again Keith, yes I do relate to the words, which were once again inspired by rock singer Ian Curtis, who’s biography I was reading at the time. Unfortunately he took his own life at 23, and part of that was having to be someone he didn’t really want to be.
Comment is about I’m a little bit scared (blog)
Original item by Rick Varden
Frances Macaulay Forde
Sun 4th Feb 2018 17:07
Thank you so much for the like on 'Dieback', so glad it brought me here, to read your lovely words...
Loved what I've read so far - especially 'Waterbirth' reminded me of a short piece I wrote when my daughter was born - a long time ago.
Hope you don't mind if I share it with you:
The Moment of Birth
-------------------------
My Darling One you are so new
helpless - yet so strong!
You didn't really need the Doctor
guiding you along...
Now I know how every mother feels
at the moment of birth.
You caused such pain, such draining
of strength, yet
when you finally arrived in just a second
all that had gone before
was completely forgotten
and I held you to my breast - now calm
then gently with my fore finger...
caressed your tiny arm.
Frances Macaulay Forde - 1976
Comment is about Carol Falaki (poet profile)
Original item by Carol Falaki
raypool
Tue 6th Feb 2018 21:38
Sorry peeps, bit delayed, rushed off my old pins with poetry readings and a music concert back to back. God it was hell in there! I'll come back to this re your valued comments tomorrow (Wednesday), as it needs a clear mind , cheers!
Ray
Comment is about RESTLESS SOULS (blog)
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