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andy n

Sun 13th Feb 2011 09:34

Hi Petrova; - Heard off Jeff you may it over to Wigan and i heard you did really well - Wigan is a little bit too far for me from where I live but I am going to try to come along to one or two in Spring... i remember my first proper reading a few years back however - took me a few days to stop shaking but you'll find honestly once you get going with it - you'll never stop - lol..

hope to see you at bolton sometime xx

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andy n

Sun 13th Feb 2011 09:29

welcome abroad adele.. enjoyed your sample piece. x

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Dave Bradley

Sun 13th Feb 2011 09:16

your verse serves well!

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John Coopey

Sun 13th Feb 2011 08:46

Hello Ann.
Thanks for the comments on Red Lady of Paviland.
I think if you studied about the Red Lady you'd know that the supposition on which I base the poem (killed by a mammoth) is a bit of a stretch. More likely a regal ritualistic burial.
Also, the cave was miles (perhaps hundreds of miles) from the sea.
Anyway, once again, thanks for your thoughts.

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John Coopey

Sun 13th Feb 2011 08:41

Hello Cynthia.
Thanks for your thoughts on Red Lady of Paviland.
The pressing rhythm I tried to achieve by the unremitting trochaic metre and then vary the line length using alternate full and truncated tetrameters. Simples!
I bet Lomgfellow would be awed to be in the same sentence as me!

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John Coopey

Sun 13th Feb 2011 08:37

Thanks for your comments on Red Lady of Paviland, Petrova.
I don't normally do unrhymed stuff but when I tried rhymes in it they seemed to detract from the spiritual solemnity if it.
Anyway, thanks again.

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John Coopey

Sun 13th Feb 2011 08:35

Thanks for your thoughts on Red Lady of Paviland.
I was inspired by the recent Neil Oliver programme on Ancient Britain.
There's bit of a poetic licence stretch in that the cave is at the bottom of the sea cliffs, where I set the poem whereas when the Red Lady was alive the sea was miles away, probably with South Wales continuously joined to the West Country (maybe even Brittany).

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Banksy

Sun 13th Feb 2011 08:18

I dont know about cute, but I sure am "cuddly" - since I stopped smoking 6 yrs ago !! xx

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Banksy

Sun 13th Feb 2011 08:17

I dont know about cute, but I sure am "cuddly" - since I stopped smoking 6 yrs ago !! xx

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 13th Feb 2011 06:55

Rubbish! You're cute 'n cuddly I'm sure! ;-)

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 13th Feb 2011 06:48

What a lovely poem - I'm glad you posted it!

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Isobel

Sun 13th Feb 2011 00:26

Lots of rich imagery in here Jane and some lovely ideas. I don't as a rule enjoy nature poems, preferring things that engage more of an emotional response. However I can see that a lot of effort and craft has gone into this. I enjoyed reading it. xx

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Isobel

Sun 13th Feb 2011 00:19

Hello you! Long time no hear...
Thank you for your comment. Hope to see you at a Bolton gig some time soon. Can't make tomorrow but hopefully next month, if I can write something. x

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jane wilcock

Sat 12th Feb 2011 22:39

Hi Isobel, Just found this and thinks its good fun. Poverty of many sorts is always with us but some relative poverty can be nauseating!! Hoping you are well and inspired, much love, Jane

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David Cooke

Sat 12th Feb 2011 22:32

Hi Jane THanks for the comment on Empty Nests. Glad you liked it. I'll have to check out some of yours. David

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jane wilcock

Sat 12th Feb 2011 22:23

Thanks for your comments on Solar Energy, Cate, much appreciated. This is good. I had lots of dens and good friends too. I'm not sure whether a Wii and a mobile phone substitute for the exploration you describe, but then I'm not a child today so I couldn't say. The poem runs into the last verse wonderfully. Best, Jane

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 12th Feb 2011 22:07

I'm afraid it's more the orthopaedic shoes these days Mr Banksy! ;-) xx

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jane wilcock

Sat 12th Feb 2011 22:05

Lovely poem, I think there might be another series about that path( if he finds it) and where it leads judging form this one! best, jane

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jane wilcock

Sat 12th Feb 2011 22:01

This is great and I absolutely agree with the sentiment.Jane

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jane wilcock

Sat 12th Feb 2011 21:58

Hi Cynthia,
It is lovely to hear from you. I very much appreciate your comments. Many thanks. I got caught up in producing a childrens poetry performance last summer and then looking at script writing. I have now entered a parellel universe of "space" and hopefully will write more. I love tea( really and really!) and I like this a lot- what an ultimate "to live beyond evil"

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Banksy

Sat 12th Feb 2011 21:46

I bet you've still got them corsets, haven't you ? - you know the pink perforated rubber ones with wire & rubber suspender buttons - you have, haven't you ? go on, tell me you have :p

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Banksy

Sat 12th Feb 2011 21:40

Win- thanks for the comments
(retro-fitted smile)
to be honest, playing devil's advocate, I'm probberly just all bitter'n twisted :D

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Banksy

Sat 12th Feb 2011 21:39

Cyn- thanks for the comments
(retro-fitted smile)
to be honest, playing devil's advocate, I'm probberly just all bitter'n twisted :D

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Banksy

Sat 12th Feb 2011 21:38

thanks for the comments
(retro-fitted smile)
to be honest, playing devil's advocate, I'm probberly just all bitter'n twisted :D

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Julian (Admin)

Sat 12th Feb 2011 20:45

mope not
poem emits time
love evolves
earth takes heart

Excellent idea Cynthia. Playful.

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Sat 12th Feb 2011 18:06

hi Jules-ta for latest comments-yes indeed your style has changed-I prefer variation-I finf plodding along in the same style quite boring-cheers again-catch you later-SW

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 12th Feb 2011 16:46

This is a heartwarming story, very topical and well told with consistent poetic craftsmanship. Your visual imagery and character development is superb. The final verse with 'gently reeled him in' is masterful in connecting and closing all your ideas in the entire poem.

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 12th Feb 2011 16:39

I like this a lot. When I studied archaeology I did my disertation on the Red Lady. I used the picture you've got here, and I went to the museum in Oxford and was able to draw some of "her" accoutrements, which included a pendant made from a deformed growth from a mammoth tusk. Brought back memories. I always meant to go and see her cave, but never did. Maybe one day!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 12th Feb 2011 16:33

Dave, it has been a privilege to read this 'series' of poems. Your poetry 'journey' has been inspirational to me.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 12th Feb 2011 16:28

This is priceless, a dead hit square on the nail of envy? rebellion? disgust? honesty? etc. etc. It's a complicated world.

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 12th Feb 2011 16:27

Oh! Gnarled! I wondered why my spell check thingy underlined it in red (and slapped me on the wrist!) I kept thinking it must be narled, but that didn't look right either. Silly me! Anyway, thanks so much for kind comments! xx

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 12th Feb 2011 16:23

John, this is super. The subject development is totally engaging. I really like the chanting, hymn-like motion of the poem. The opening four lines have a Longfellow feel, like 'Hiawatha'.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 12th Feb 2011 16:16

I so like your unorthodox imagery that just captivates your readers.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 12th Feb 2011 16:07

I am reading two books simultaneously, one on science and the other on spirituality. I suddenly realized I was bridging the two ideas with 'density/destiny' and 'earth/heart' etc. Then the other words just kept leaping out at me. The one I liked the most was 'Love/Vole'.

Later: I have just read the poem 'the Decline of the Fishing Industry'. 'Vole' here and 'voles' there is purely an interesting chance.

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Greg Freeman

Sat 12th Feb 2011 15:26

I think this is very good, Ann. I like twine and time and frame, and brittle and little. And maybe I'm stretching it here,! but corsets and realistic. These words give it a structure, a bit of whalebone. I reckon it should be gnarled rather than knarled, but maybe you prefer it that way.

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Jon

Sat 12th Feb 2011 13:29

Hi Isobel,
Many thanks for your kind comments X

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Jules Clare

Sat 12th Feb 2011 13:28

This is about a 17 year old who got ran over last week whilst standing on the pavement in
Spennymoor. He has multiple fractures and is in a coma. This poem is a tribute to his dad,
Andrew. I met his relatives on the bus an hour ago, and they asked me to write this poem. I hope Adam survives.

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Jules Clare

Sat 12th Feb 2011 13:11

Thank you Ann, I only wrote it yesterday in an Italian restaraunt in Willington after hearing the couple next tyo me exchange love patter! I thought you have too much to lose.

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Jules Clare

Sat 12th Feb 2011 13:10

I read this at James Cook Hospital Radio recently, giving hope to all those who had undergone major operations. What a radio session. You can access the podcast via www.southsidebroadcasting.com then podcasts then feb 1st

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Tommy Carroll

Sat 12th Feb 2011 13:06

Hiya Petrova, :o)

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chris yates

Sat 12th Feb 2011 11:36

You have still got a lot of living to do spread your words through your poetry excellent !!! xx

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 12th Feb 2011 11:24

You are a caring soul, I think! x

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 12th Feb 2011 11:23

Wow I can certainly identify with this. It is losing your number one fan - and your best friend too. Oh well! I like the directness very much. xx

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Tommy Carroll

Sat 12th Feb 2011 11:14

Hiya Melanie, thanks for your brief visit! ;o)
Tommy

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Ray Miller

Sat 12th Feb 2011 11:07

Thanks, Isobel. The oddness of the rhyming scheme is probably the result of all the revisions.

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Jules Clare

Sat 12th Feb 2011 10:36

Brilliant. My friend who I wrote a book with (posthumously) wrote a similar one. I am now best friends with his son. I will post it now. It is called Things I Remember.

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Jules Clare

Sat 12th Feb 2011 10:34

I have been through this five times. I am ready for peace, tranquillity and love. Heave you noticed that my poems have changed to love poems lately?

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chris yates

Sat 12th Feb 2011 10:31

So sad to be switched off!! this happened to My sister after a brain hemmorage took me ages to get over it,broke my heart!!very touching xx

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chris yates

Sat 12th Feb 2011 10:27

Hi Jules what wonderful wacky and thought provoking poetry loved it all xx

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Jules Clare

Sat 12th Feb 2011 10:16

Hello Christine - these poems are excellent. I write about mental health as a service user. I also write about nature as I have a qualification in Environmental Studies. At the moment, amazingly, I am writing love poems! Please get in touch if you want to know more

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