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Petrova Fairhurst

Sat 15th Jan 2011 22:20

Hi Elaine,
there is such melancholy in "The Old World" lots of lovely images too, "a mirror to reflect /
The unconfessed imaginings of life" and also, "Trees held onto liquid bunches of fruit"

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Naomi Hefter

Sat 15th Jan 2011 22:09

Hi Isobel.there seems to be nasty comments flying around the place.i just had to report some random twat who kept writing nasty things about my work . dont worry about it x

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Naomi Hefter

Sat 15th Jan 2011 22:07

ive reported you to the admin team. Who the hell do you think you are to tell strangers their work is bad!!??? who the F*** do you think you are??you are clearly a very insecure person who justs wants to feel better about yourself. You vile nasty person. do your self a favour and get your self something constructive to do

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Isobel

Sat 15th Jan 2011 22:05

I've no idea what all the commotion is about. I just wanted to say that when I made that comment it was a jokey one. I had an ostrich picture up as me. I have no illusions about looking like a WAG - nor would I want to.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 15th Jan 2011 21:57

Your explanation has made this flare into life with great pathos. I don't think I could have done it alone. Thanks.

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Naomi Hefter

Sat 15th Jan 2011 21:56

if you leave another nasty message i will report you. get a life!!!

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Petrova Fairhurst

Sat 15th Jan 2011 21:54

So many images I love in this piece; "the ovens of August", "left all our bumps in the bed", "yipping and yowling in cacophonous chorus"

A well told tale :) x

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Petrova Fairhurst

Sat 15th Jan 2011 21:48

Thank you Cynthia.

I have written many pieces for my son, Joseph.

This piece was written in September last year though the event took place in November 1991.

This type of pain, I think, never leaves, its something we learn to live with and is dulled with enough time.

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Petrova Fairhurst

Sat 15th Jan 2011 21:47

Thank you Cynthia.

I have written many pieces for my son, Joseph.

This piece was written in September last year though the event took place in November 1991.

This type of pain, I think, never leaves, its something we learn to live with and is dulled with enough time.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 15th Jan 2011 21:35

I have loved dearly two cats who were friends and helpmates through many hard times. This poem is delightful, although I do not expect to curl up with my cats when I die. Mind you, I still feel them in spirit, even under the bedcovers sometimes.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 15th Jan 2011 21:29

I cannot know if this is a real life experience for you or not. But, regardless, your bold, gut-wrenching clarity of expression must make such a loss a little easier for someone in a similar situation, the expression of it is so vital.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 15th Jan 2011 21:23

This is superb. I really like 'under-belly view' and ''fairy grotto cockpit' (just mentioning two images of all the great lines.) The formatting is classy.

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John Coopey

Sat 15th Jan 2011 21:18

Cynthia, I enjoyed this. It reminded me of the excellent "Elergy on the Death of a Mad Dog" by Oliver Goldsmith.
"The man recovered fom the bite,
The dog it was that died".

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 15th Jan 2011 21:17

I think we poets live within metaphor and symbolism, even when we are unaware. You have personified the tree 'its roots blink' and 'as if in vigil of a deep lament' so it cannot be just observation. IMO, you attached 'life' meaning to it by your very words, and then particularly 'human life'.

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bernard shelton

Sat 15th Jan 2011 21:15

Kosova

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bernard shelton

Sat 15th Jan 2011 21:14

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John Coopey

Sat 15th Jan 2011 21:09

Thanks for your comments, again, Dave. This time on Doing It Twice. The after-dinner speaker I filched the story off (Steve Womack) also adds that the only time these days that he thinks about doing it twice is just before he's done it once. (I wish I'd said that!).

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John Coopey

Sat 15th Jan 2011 21:04

Thanks for all the comments, guys.
Banksy's right - it is an old joke. I heard it as part of an after dinner speech by Steve Womack (worth checking out).

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alan barlow

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:38

oh indeedy

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Philipos

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:37

Thank you for commenting on Wind-Blown Tree Dave - I really appreciate the feedback

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Philipos

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:30

Hi Ann thank you for your comments on Wind-Blown Tree - I don't know why it is but I always feel there is some kind of tragedy when I saw a tree blown over - a life pulled out of the ground to rot whereas mankind rots beneath

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Naomi Hefter

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:27

who are you to leave such a vile comment on my blogs??? poetry has no right or wrong. i just write from my heart!!! if you happen to rea my comedy poetry you will find a flip side to my style.. but clearly you think you are too good so i advise you just stick to your own work instead of insulting other talents

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Dave Bradley

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:25

Vintage Coopey. Very enjoyable

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:23

Interesting! And a bit spooky!

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Philipos

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:20

Hi Alan - I'd like to think I thought as deeply as you suggested about my poem but I simply stopped and wrote what I saw on my evening walk - yours was a very interesting take though I have to say - as to the offset printing that's just started happening and I have absolutely no idea why - thanks for the feedback appreciated

Thank you for your comments Ann - I don't know why it is but I always feel there is some kind of tragedy when I see a tree blown over - a life pulled out of the ground to rot whereas mankind rots beneath

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:20

Poem was inspired by a garden I passed this morning, when I was on the bus. It was the rusty swing that did it!

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stella jones

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:19

really enjoyed how the line below read,
take the piss out of school teachers
not fat chicks,

I have come back to this a few time josh..makes me think life can be shit sometimes, for the most simple of reasons..nice work.

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Dave Bradley

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:18

Atmospheric. I enjoyed this, Ann. For some reason it reminded me of the Radley place in 'To Kill a Mockingbird'.

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Philipos

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:18

Hi Alan - re: Wind-Blown Tree I'd like to think I thought as deeply as you suggested about my poem but I simply stopped and wrote what I saw on my evening walk - yours was a very interesting take though I have to say - as to the offset printing that's just started happening and I have absolutely no idea why - thanks for the feedback appreciated

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Dave Bradley

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:15

I like this - just enough to get the imagination working on place, time and mood.

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stella jones

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:12

I enjoyed this read very much Dave..the interpretations that can be put to it are great, but just the thought of him leaving his tidy life and deciding to venture into the jumgle is so very interesting..hmmm the again ending did make me wonder how many times he had done this tho!...neat write.

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stella jones

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:08

hi..yea I agree bout the state of mind we are in at any one time..food for thought indeed..ordinary?..some of the best reads are of the so called 'ordinary' type, well I think so anyways lol.

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stella jones

Sat 15th Jan 2011 19:04

Oh I did enjoy the feel of this one...yea it left me smiling which is a good thing isn't it? :)

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stella jones

Sat 15th Jan 2011 18:58

I think you and Gemma must have had a great life together Ann, and that is all we can wish for..made me go awww too..x

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stella jones

Sat 15th Jan 2011 18:55

Oh wow good write Petrova I particulary like the lines

The tears refused;
keep them in to fill the space
where you practiced football.
Push them under ribs you strummed
with perfect fingers.

When I read those I thought, Oh yes, these fit perfectly the emptiness of inside..x



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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Sat 15th Jan 2011 18:53

for gawds sake Rach-remind me never to say a single thing wrong about you in future!

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stella jones

Sat 15th Jan 2011 18:49

I too on reading the first line wondered, ambiguity is such a great thing to hide behind isn't it?

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Rachel Bond

Sat 15th Jan 2011 18:48

I have to say stefan that I love this pic you have chosen...he looks like my dad (on a good day) and im not joking. its ace ;)

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Sat 15th Jan 2011 18:32

teef in or out? (yours J.A.)ta for indulging-my rectification completed-oh and boy did it feel good.

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 15th Jan 2011 18:13

Done as instructed oh ghazal master! x

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alan barlow

Sat 15th Jan 2011 18:08

i see youhave have done it again with your "left of field" verse ?!

ive read this a couple of times now and i like the write but i keep reading and thinking more that it is a figure who has fallen from grace and whose mask has slipped and defences fallen so the media and world may snack on the remains of the day, than a tree

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winston plowes

Sat 15th Jan 2011 18:08

Your ghazals have enough elements to be ghazals in their own right, I don't think you should give them the (slightly dispirited) "Nearly tag". Win

I liked this. Had the effect of stopping the music which I think is what you were going for, Win x

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Winston (Admin)

Sat 15th Jan 2011 17:50

Hi There Harry. Welcome to Write out loud, hope to see some more of your work posted on here, Winston

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Winston (Admin)

Sat 15th Jan 2011 17:40

Hi Barry, Welcome to Write Out Loud, Winston

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Sat 15th Jan 2011 17:16

how I wish I were a nob like sarah parker,then after giving you my adress you could come round(preferably just as I am putting a thin lardy leg in my jimjams and give me a bloody good going over...just in case...hello I,m Sarah Parker! hey Naomi you wanna do one of your poem type jobs on Parkers kid(FIGHT!)and as for izzy..aw no way is she a WAG-shes more of a...er...smashing Nana mousekori look-alike..this grey n gorgeous git welcomes you.xx(mm thats nice!)

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alan barlow

Sat 15th Jan 2011 17:13

chuckle chuckle

obviously more banksy the artiste than jeff banks then ?

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alan barlow

Sat 15th Jan 2011 17:06

haha cheers stef im saying nowt ambiguity is king and i was wondering who would pipe up first well done ;-)

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Sat 15th Jan 2011 17:01

touche!(bitch!)...thats me cursing myself not calling you a...oh you,ve got me at it now and just when I was about to say you are such a f.......

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John Aikman

Sat 15th Jan 2011 17:00

You and Mr. Black are going to have to Duke it out, aren't you!

:-)

I wanted to have an affair with a french film star...I just didn't have Deneuve.

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jx

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John Aikman

Sat 15th Jan 2011 16:54

A manly kiss is fine...no tongues just yet though!

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