'Roots and branches' by David T Jones is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week

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The new Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Roots and branches’ by David T Jones. It’s a poem about “old Cwmbran” in south Wales, and with lines such as “while age sat weary on the family’s creaking roots”, has resonant echoes of Dylan Thomas as it refers to the region's coal-mining heritage. On his Write Out Loud profile page David says: “I'm new to poetry and have never been published. But I have been reading for a while and I want to see how it feels to put some stuff out there and hopefully get some feedback - my first tentative footsteps ...”   

 

ROOTS AND BRANCHES

by David T Jones 

 

Wet afternoon archaeology

sends me dreaming back down

the damp streets of old Cwmbran.

Greyscale sketches of Christmas’s long gone

when we scampered and fought

while age sat weary on the family’s creaking roots.

Deep beneath our skipping feet

in shoes already tight,

ancient trees patiently revealed

a backyard bunker of gleaming coal,

backbreaking sacks marbled

with seams of old finger nails,

tarnished brass, graft and poor bright birds,

fuel for the fire to warm our tiny hands,

then turn to ash to feed the springtime roses.

 

 

 

 

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Martin Elder

Sun 11th Feb 2018 13:37

Congratulations David this definitely has a nice flow to it and as has been mentioned the feel of Dylan Thomas
Nice one

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carol falaki

Fri 9th Feb 2018 19:22

Not a word wasted here David. Every line tells a story and takes the reader in. Great

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 7th Feb 2018 10:22

There’s a quality to this writing that leaches from each line. One of the better POTW.

Well done!

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David Taylor-Jones

Wed 7th Feb 2018 10:22

Wow, this is amazing, thanks for all of your comments and support😃

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Stu Buck

Tue 6th Feb 2018 19:39

excellent fare indeed. a touch of heaney and, as mentioned, a touch of thomas, but quite holds its own

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Wolfgar Miere

Mon 5th Feb 2018 16:59

Congrats DTJ,

There is a tightly woven undertone here of the cyclical nature of all things. I very much like the line "ancient trees patiently revealed"

There is great comfort in nostalgia so why not indulge ourselves occasionally.

Very well deserved David.

David.

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raypool

Mon 5th Feb 2018 16:04

congratulations David, a worthy poem indeed. Shades of Heaney and Hughes with slate roofs almost in sight.

Ray

DESMOND CHILDS

Mon 5th Feb 2018 14:46

Congratulations David, Great poem.


All the best des

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Colin Hill

Mon 5th Feb 2018 13:36

I love David's work and this is no exception. Well done mate. Col.

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