Hi Wardah, I love the interplay of joy and pathos.

Best of all it ends with hope, expressed longingly in the last line:
"I hope that when we meet once more there will be no end..."

Some more please. Let your inner voice be heard Wardah.
Take care,
Raj

Comment is about I dream only of You (blog)

Original item by Wardah

I'm having trouble finding a good plumber too.

Comment is about paths home (blog)

Original item by nunya

Old Shoes / New Shoes - will you be splitting your poetry output between your split brain good man? If you get tired of them shoes and develop yet another personality may I suggest Worn Out Shoes? ?

pissing outside under the stars is highly recommended for the furtherance of poetry and mankind in general. Keep it up!

Comment is about LOOK UP EVERY ONCE AND A WHILE (blog)

Original item by old shoes

It seems almost like the wounded circling always in on itself..unending...

elP

Comment is about WHEN LONELINESS CALLS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hey there, Colin and David..

I am still wrangling with this one, just a bit. It really doesn't move along in the manner I would like, but I am becoming resigned to the fact that, though it may lack poetic value beyond the first few lines, it is still a valid entry in the personal blog.

You know, Colin, punctuation is a sticky point for me. I try not wrangle with it for too long, knowing that what may seem obvious to me, is truly lost on most readers. But then, there are instances when punctuation can truly make a line or verse stand as an instance within itself. Thanks for paying attention.

David, I've never read, but only listened to Thomas in a spare amount on youtube. Being here among "poets", I am somewhat ashamed of that, yet I know that I am more well read on many other ideas. But, even being mostly ignorant, I still subscribe to the idea..."do not go gently..."

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f1LaNMQsn5w


Good night to the both of you,

and thank you kindly, my friends.

Rachel

Comment is about gulf (blog)

Original item by nunya

Really beautiful... That kind of love that everyone waits for and not all get to experience.

Comment is about To my Angel who waits (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Thank you Raj. I really appreciate the feedback ? Looking forward to reading some of your work.

Comment is about Know This (blog)

Original item by Wardah

We owe them, Harry. They fought for the democratic right of today's gobshites.

Comment is about BIRDSONG 2 (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

John,
My own dad (who had been a seaman stoker in WW1
used to come in slightly tiddly, light up, sit on his wooden chair and tell us stories about how the `deck crowd` never, ever fraternised with the `below` gang...How the Aussies that they took to the middle east were so tall...How they were chased into port by a sub (who shelled them from outside)...and so on and so on...Between each tale he would take a drag on his fag and say dreamily; `Life was one continuous round of pleasure`...Honest!

Comment is about BIRDSONG 2 (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Susan,
I came upon this just after having had another look at Joy France`s `Loyalty` advert poem.

I was comparing Joy`s to your last one (which is more a remembrance and contemplation upon a childhood event)

I was impressed at how rhyme helps both to `come home`and how Joys style of `delivery` (which is very much her own) helps her poem to `work` so much.

Both have made think of what `poetic` intonation is in modern conditions of performance.

(I`ts only me rambling on as usual ?)

Comment is about Time to Rhyme and Say Hello (blog)

Original item by Susan Greene

reminds me of the death of the moth by Virginia Wolf

Comment is about Behind The Veil (blog)

Original item by Seanin Hughes

It must have been absolute carnage, MC. Faulks sees it as a secret war that was too horrific for those involved to tell their loved ones about. Those of our and subsequent generations should count our blessings that we are privileged to live in easier times.

Comment is about BIRDSONG 2 (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

my pleasure ?

Comment is about Bokhutlo (poet profile)

Original item by Bokhutlo

I shall try to catch up with more of your work. I really admire the lyricism of your poetry, and the finesse of diction. A little learned sophistication is a blessed thing.

In your photo, is that a twisted 'knot' upon the sand? That would certainly complement your bio.

Comment is about Chris Armstrong (poet profile)

Original item by Chris Armstrong

This is a very sensitive and strong poem, self-destructive but perhaps, in its own way, a healing.

I am intrigued by the ambiguity of the message. The words and effective feeling could apply to a woman in miscarriage, or a still birth. I realise you are a gentleman. Perhaps even a daughter or son committing suicide, or simply a child leaving home in young adulthood after bitter words. Or, lastly, a split between two adults who have been a couple.

Considering the title, the poem has many tentacles. Surely a fine thing.

Comment is about Revelation (blog)

Original item by Chris Armstrong

Lets Get Physical

Pear drops are falling
Portia was feeling sad
the very fit Butterfly
shy but stocky Robin
both spoke happy thoughts
very soon Mr Sun
will turn your skin
and shape you up - -

just like we do
down at the gym!

Comment is about Nicola Hulme (poet profile)

Original item by Nicola Hulme

I suppose, when I think about it, folk tales are 'romances' on the one hand, and 'sermons' on the other, both types thinly veiled metaphors of 'life lessons'.

Maybe sermons are really folk tales. Now that is pause for thought.

Comment is about The Lighthouse (a romance) (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Frivolous and fun! Who hasn't occasionally found themselves in the same situation on WOL? It made me
smile and that's always welcome.

Comment is about Time to Rhyme and Say Hello (blog)

Original item by Susan Greene

Stimulating stuff, JC!
I have a History of the 5th Division by its major=general,
printed shortly after WW1 and it contains a folded faintly
typed menu from a Western Front officer's mess in 1918,
secured with a rusty pin inside the front cover. I have
touched that pin a number of times, in the belief that it
was put there by my father's hand - whose own pen-
scratched and dated recollections can be found over
the rear fly-leaf of the same volume. His passing mentions
of the deaths of names known to him are especially
poignant and time does little to reduce the power of the
dreadful meaning for those involved and their distant "living in hope" families.

Comment is about BIRDSONG 2 (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Cynthia your comments on my blog are always the most enlightening and enjoying that I get always thank you for the read.
David patrick Simon

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Cynthia,

I've read and liked your lighthouse poem.

The two poems complement each other like two sides of a coin.

Comment is about Far Out (blog)

Original item by Adam Whitworth

will do Wendy.
Or should that be won't do?

?


Rose ?

Comment is about Don't Go (blog)

Original item by Wendy Higson

The cups part relates to the tarot cards. Cups are related to emotions and the queen of cups is in charge of her emotions. Also relates to water.

Comment is about Queen of Cups (blog)

Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling

I think the gift he's given me of not knowing where truth ends in the family legend and story-telling begins is indeed priceless, Graham.

Comment is about BIRDSONG 2 (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I very much like the idea behind this Lauren but I found the repetition quite tiresome. However I'm sure others would disagree. I do think there is scope to play around with the presentation of this poem if you so desired. Here's a quick example:

I didn't visit you today
or say your name
or send you love
Did you notice?
Do you care?

In this way the poem would be reduced to three verses (if one was ditched) and much of the repetition reduced. Repetition can be a slightly controversial technique in poetry - some like it for its sing-song structure whilst others want to take a carving knife to it as to them it just gets in the way. I'm not sure there is any right answer as like all things it is down to personal preference.

Hope you don't mind me waffling. I'll shut up now before I start repeating myself! All the best,

Colin.

Comment is about Did you notice? (blog)

Original item by Lauren Spurling

I found myself staring at the opening two words and repeating them over and over - very effective and so too the accompanying '--' which forces the reader to pause. As always your poems allow room for movement on behalf of the reader. All the best, Col.

Comment is about gulf (blog)

Original item by nunya

Thank You Very Much

Comment is about Bokhutlo (poet profile)

Original item by Bokhutlo

Karen, my heart just aches for the characters you paint..it's a superb talent you have.

elP

Comment is about Open (blog)

Original item by Karen Ankers

Priceless and all true I would think! JC

Comment is about BIRDSONG 2 (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

July's FANTOMIC event was a lot of fun and a great social. It was great to see familiar faces from Liverpool's busy poetry scene as well as hearing from first time readers. Five hours after opening doors at seven we called it a night and everyone agreed FANTOMIC is the most relaxed gig on the calendar. Well done to everyone who found their way to Hyslop Street to share something of themselves with us. We cried with laughter and then some of us plain cried. It was quite a ride. Thank you all. FANTOMIC.

Review is about Fantomic (the phantom mic) on 19 Jul 2017 (event)

This is such a heartfelt poem indeed, a mother always loves her child from the moment of her child's existence, such a pious bond she has with her child. The way you've conveyed this important message is clever and genuine too. Love it, kudos ??

Comment is about Bokhutlo (poet profile)

Original item by Bokhutlo

Oh wow, thank you all! Really. It means so much.

Comment is about Raw Meat (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon

Your writing just keeps getting better and better.

Comment is about Raw Meat (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon

Hi Rachel pretty much spot on. I think we are drawn in and engulfed by eyes, or rejected. memory too resides in the eyes, as the hands remember actions. Glad you like it.

Col you have hit a spot there I forgive but I can't forget. Once heard that voice really embeds itself. I have strayed onto alternative territory.

That's a great line David. Not heard it before - is it your own, if so to be applauded. Lots of extra possibilities there. Thanks also for likes, Michaela and Patricia!

Love for all Ray

Comment is about YOU FALL IN LOVE WITH EYES (blog)

Original item by ray pool

In efforts to contrast the song, "wake me up" by Avicii. This song was designed to follow the same rhythm and melody of Avicii's song, however, the meaning is quite different.

This song was designed to relate to all the people who have dreams in their life that seem so far away, yet when they close their eyes or go to sleep it becomes a surreal reality. We want to live our dreams as we wish forever, as we play the game of life being challenged daily. And if we win the game, even for a minute, the prize we obtain is the love we deserve and have worked for.

Comment is about Let Me Sleep (blog)

Original item by Joseph Calderon

Sad but true ?

Comment is about Yes i love him... (blog)

Original item by Akanksha Agnihotri

Much enjoyed.

I'm posting a 'sea' poem this afternoon - pure coincidence! Just wanting to let you know. I almost decided against it, and then thought 'no', I'll still do it. It's a huge variation on my usual works. Small world, isn't it?

Comment is about Far Out (blog)

Original item by Adam Whitworth

Fast and fruity.

I'm really not sure where 'cups' comes in. Would you be willing to explain?

Comment is about Queen of Cups (blog)

Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling

Sad, long story. A more common situation than we might think.

Comment is about Yes i love him... (blog)

Original item by Akanksha Agnihotri

Michaela,thats the beauty of meals on wheels.No,not the ones-delivered-on wheels,the ones from McDonalds we eat while motorcycling.

dead easy-no hands!


P&S xx

Comment is about Raw Meat (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon

Lynn,watch they don't disturb the satellite dish,otherwise no songs of praise for you lady!

P&S xx

Comment is about THERE ARE ELEPHANTS ON THE ROOF (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

I acknowledge the concerns about mankind's perceived
detrimental influence on the climate >that may have its
origins in the smoke-filled skies of the great industrial age,
now perhaps being replicated by emerging "giants" like
China and India.
One thing has always intrigued me and has never been
properly answered: the situation in Antarctica, a region
vulnerable to volcanic activity and about as far from any
human industrial activity as you can get, with no explanation
- or proof? - of how mankind's industrial pollution actually
finds its way to that most remote "bottom of the world" location.

Comment is about Mercedes Benz (blog)

Original item by Tim Ellis

unusual piece.Kind I usually love and in this case do.And I agree about busy days no matter what season.

Comment is about Raw Meat (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon

Ok, I'm always up for a challenge! Here is my attempt at a poem for children - Tim Taylor

Kevin, the Chameleon Astronaut

As he sat in his space ship
young Kevin knew that soon
he’d be the first chameleon
to walk upon the moon.

He clambered down the ladder
in his special reptile suit,
his high tech lizard helmet
and his little welly boots.

He wandered round the surface
picked up a rock or two
then Kevin came to realise
there wasn’t much to do.

See, chameleons eat insects.
They zap ‘em with their tongue.
This didn’t seem the kind of place
Chameleons belong.

There were no beetles anywhere
or even centipedes.
All he could see was dust and rock,
nothing that Kevins need.

He thought he’d change his colour
to a lovely shade of green,
forgetting that inside the suit
his skin could not be seen.

His boggle eyes went searching
for somewhere he could play
but all there was for miles and miles
was grey, and grey, and grey.

It had all seemed so exciting
to be the first in space.
Who would have thought the moon would be
a very boring place.

Comment is about Could you write a children's poem? (blog)

Original item by Poetry for schools

A belated thanks to all.

(John, it`s double edged...I`ve just spent hours and
hours putting Lego-bits together...so she can get the
newly discovered thrill of un-clipping them apart and
then giving me back to put together again...and again
...and again...and again...she`s merciless!)

Comment is about N`Shya.....and me. (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Duet poem written in a distinct style, challenging and fun to do.

Comment is about Polarity (blog)

Original item by Maxine

Thank you very much! It was a quick one thats for sure. Busy summer days make it hard to write poetry in time before the day is over!

Comment is about Raw Meat (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon

I agree that we could help the planet somewhat if we all stopped eating beef, Wolfgar. On the other hand, I've always been sceptical about the "cows cause more global warming than cars" theory. True, they produce methane which is a more powerful greenhouse gas than CO2, but the source of the carbon in methane is atmospheric CO2 via the grass and feed that cows eat, and methane in the atmosphere eventually oxidises back to CO2 with a half life of about 7 years, so over the long term this pathway causes no net increase of greenhouse gases. The problem with burning fossil fuels is that we are taking carbon that has been safely stored underground for millions of years and adding it to the atmosphere. Also bear in mind that before humans started farming livestock, the plains of the world were covered in vast herds of bovine species - buffalo, bison, aurochs, yaks etc which would have been producing methane as part of the natural carbon cycle, and domestic cattle have merely replaced these.

Comment is about Mercedes Benz (blog)

Original item by Tim Ellis

This is a powerful number Michaela, and open to interpretation. The title in itself brings possibilities to mind,
which it would be indelicate to put on paper. Intriguing i'd say..... none of your stuff can be lightly dismissed!

Ray

Comment is about Raw Meat (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon

Always love seeing Canadians on here .. keep up the vivid words!!!!!

Comment is about Study Abroad (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon