Love this one Luke, very powerful storytelling and a great flow

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Thanks for your generous comments Beno, I really appreciate them. I always pick themes that are full of feelings for me and then I visualise the scene almost like a panel in a comic book. David

Comment is about Dawn by the river (blog)

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I totally connect with your poetry, its really what a I love to read. Its got everything for me. I enjoyed this very much. You describe things so well you can actually be there, as the author, in the poem, feeling and seeing it all. Thank you David. I'm already looking forward to the next one.

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Hi Keith,

Many thanks for your comments. When I saw the Tower and understood its significance, I knew I had to mark my visit in some way. The sun shone on the world's colours as brightly, the winds blew as strong, today as they did in antiquity.

Chris

Comment is about The Tower of the Winds (blog)

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Chuma, thank you for your comment. Keith

Comment is about Enveloped in Darkness (blog)

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Artur, your poems speak from the heart which is the sign of a good poet. Thank you as I have enjoyed all three of them. Keith

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Beautifully simple Luke . My own dad knowing he was terminally ill bought a pair of shoes saying to me that he was going on a journey. My mum took them back to the shop quite soon afterwards. He never wore them.

Ray

Comment is about Favourite Shoes (blog)

Original item by Albert Van Skywalker

Thanks, MC. I feel a bit conflicted in that I have avoided tax through things like ISA's, pension contributions and lump sums, redundancy pay, gift-aiding to charities etc. So whilst I am clear that the Paradise revelations are morally reprehensible, my hypocrisy (and I suspect of everyone else's if they are honest) is about others getting "bigger gulps of air".

Comment is about TAX EVASION (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thank you Keith, I was trying to catch some of the profoundly otherwordly experiences that pain and loneliness can bring.

Comment is about Dawn by the river (blog)

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David, This poem is remarkable in its varied content as one witnesses the break of day which should spur hope yet brings only reality which lies within a soul of disquiet. Strangely I have spent such a night many years ago in a relationship of some difficulty. The poem although sad has a profound quality to it. Thank you. Keith

Comment is about Dawn by the river (blog)

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Chris, this poem is beautifully and dramatically written. Crafted in a manner which befits the edifice concerned and the wealth of history it contains. Thank you for this. Keith

Comment is about The Tower of the Winds (blog)

Original item by Chris Hubbard

A very powerful message to all of us who keep things for 'best' - when exactly is that 'best' ever going to come?
I'm getting those shoes out of the cupboard right now! Thanks

Comment is about Favourite Shoes (blog)

Original item by Albert Van Skywalker

It's been said that aerodynamically-speaking, bees should
not be able to fly! But using human standards of
reference is not a guaranteed way of coming to understand
what is possible in this world.

Comment is about 'Bees had radar in their wings and brains that humans could barely understand' (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Great stuff JC. Love the use of that old hit to put across
the message. But tax has always been a controversial
subject - ever since naughty King John and those who
followed put the squeeze on the people to fund various
ill-advised enterprises in search of even more gain.
As for modern taxation, this really began with the start
of the 20th century as previous administrations made a
point of keeping tax low. Then 20th century politicians
sought to get their hands on our money for their own
ends - and it's still happening, with our cash handed over
to all sorts of unattractive parts and foreign political
posers who build themselves empires and millionaire'
mansions at our expense. I pay my tax, but I do wish
politicians wouldn't see it as THEIR money, to waste
and fritter away with scant regard for its origins.
We should revert back to the Victorian example of low
tax and political economy - and the sooner the better!

Comment is about TAX EVASION (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I like the rhythm in this Artur ?

Comment is about Guiding Pen (blog)

Original item by Artur Hulboj

Beautiful sentiment and a lovely flowing rhythm

Comment is about Mindless Whispers (blog)

Original item by Dipta Gomes

Ray
Cheers for kind comments on the dresser. They mean more than you'll ever know. I always have this nagging feeling that stuff I write isn't good enough to be posted so your comments have helped me loads.
Thanks again fella

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Nicola, this is so very lovely; the wish of many. Thank you. Keith

Comment is about The trouble with me (blog)

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HI David. As I put in my poem about the Wheatsheaf - two minds as one. What more can I say? I wrote this on Saturday so fairly concurrent with what you describe. I like your version so far . It's great to see a similar thought pattern in different hands. Piston is the in - word !
Thanks mate.

HI Beno . I think if we find something morally repugnant we are maybe on the road to a better appreciation of life and its responsibilities. No doubt the hunting fraternity would have a cast iron opposite view or should I say a loop hole to escape through' hey, welcome to the real world!
Appreciate your kind comments.

Also, thanks Col and Rich for liking this one!

Ray

Comment is about BLOOD SPORT (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Those crazy leaders.

Still love your 'Dear Margaret'.
Found it on YouTube.
Great piece, one to remember.

Hannah

Comment is about Hashtag Arrogance (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

''Just relax'' !
That is amazingly good.

Hannah

Comment is about Just Relax (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Bloody Lovely!

Comment is about The trouble with me (blog)

Original item by Nicola Byrnes

Jon, drenched in an affectionate nostalgia with such amazing detail of both your parents and their impact on you. A truly remarkable poem. Really very well done. Thanks. Keith

Comment is about The Dresser (blog)

Original item by Jon Darby

Thanks for posting this. I had forgotten how beautiful this song is. I went straight to you tube and relived it. Lovely.

Comment is about (blog)

Original item by Nicola Byrnes

Thank you Rich, I could picture it, too.
Thank you Jon, I really appreciate the kind comment.

Comment is about May Flowers (blog)

Original item by Maria Renea

Many thanks to Rob. Hannah, Jon, Colin, Suki, David Keith and Ray

Rob
I am afraid there are times when I get very lazy with my punctuation. smack across the knuckles for me. Though I do appreciate the sentiment of the lumberjack song always well worth a listen.
Hannah
I totally agree with you. This comes form a time when trees where chopped down by hand and much of our house, furniture and ships were made from oak. This has meant that many of our so called forests are no longer so. some having little or no trees to speak of,whilst others have been replanted with fast growing pines.
Jon
I suspect I am like you and Hannah in that I feel that I have quite and affinity with trees although not really a hugger, I like the very living nature of them. Oak trees in particular take a long time to grow lasting for hundreds of years if they remain untouched. I often wonder what tales they would tell if they could speak
David
I am honoured that you refer to Seamus Heaney with regard to this poem. I find the natural beauty of nature itself in flora and fauna in all of its glory incredible
Keith
thanks for that. I often worry that sometimes I am a bit too wordy in my efforts to try and describe what I feel and see in my minds eye.
Ray
thank you as ever for your reading and appreciation. I think you are right in that there has always been a connection between men and trees and therefore wood
Colin
I am truly fascinated but what you state about what you do with wood, is this a hobby or work? some of these things have seemed to me to be almost a dying art at times though I do know there are still a few folk keeping these old trades alive. I always feel its sad that when trees are cut down now either to build another wretched road or for some other ridiculous purpose that the timber is wasted being either cut up for logs or simply cut into wood chippings, when there are so many endless creative purposes they could be put to
Suki
glad you liked the poem and it made you think of 'Shipbuilding' and therefore starting the debate. I personally although being a great fan of Elvis Costello and having seen live twice in the dim distant past like both versions.
Once heard one of the attractions describe Chet Baker at the recording of shipbuilding as a wreck of a man at the time but had still managed that magnificent solo.
Once again thank you all so much for reading and commenting and to Beno for liking
it uplifts me to make feel I am not writing total bilge
Cheers guys
Martin

Comment is about The rhythm of the trees (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Hi Maria,

Lovely way to write about this.

I can picture this garden, somehow.

Comment is about May Flowers (blog)

Original item by Maria Renea

Desmond, Thank you for your comment. I think the answer lies somewhere between between knowing and believing. Keith

Comment is about What Comes Next (blog)

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Hi
Great poem! Made me laugh out loud and think a bit too. Funny but with a touch of sadness. Great stuff.

Comment is about Missing Out (blog)

Original item by J F Keane

Congratulations Ralf, I can remember Hurst,Peters and Moore;the 1966 World Cup win. I think every farther and son shared that moment. Worthy poem for POTW.

Comment is about 'Leaving Upton Park' by Ralph Dartford is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Nice poem Keith, big question so many small answers. One day I think we will all know hopefully.

All the best des

Comment is about What Comes Next (blog)

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Hi Cynthia
Superb poem. Disturbing when you think of the subject matter but made me stop and mull over the whole topic. I was in a congregation myself that clearly split men and women a good while ago, but not in a good way.
Thought provoking stuff.

Comment is about Worthless Women (blog)

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Hi Maria
Lovely poem. An aching sadness in it but lovely nonetheless.

Comment is about May Flowers (blog)

Original item by Maria Renea

Tia, I love how the idyll comes to nought which expresses so well the transient nature of life. Thank you for this. Keith

Comment is about By-the-Sea (blog)

Original item by Tia Lattanzio

Yahoo! Mr. Dartford. You are 'the people's poet'!

It's really great to 'know' you, an honour.

Comment is about 'Leaving Upton Park' by Ralph Dartford is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Simon, I shall try to catch up on your work. Your bio is full and very interesting, introducing a writer well worth pursuing. 'Damselfly' is delightful.

'Caterpillarpoet' is a great site name. Very imaginative, and full of implications - metamorphosis and all that.

I wish the average day had more bright hours.

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Hi Joanne
This one kind of took me by surprise. I was enjoying the first half very much then the second half became the opposite of it.
You've captured the kind of relationship many go through very well.
I felt sad for the person affected in this and can sense the aching for real, simple love to break through once again.
A well conveyed piece.

Comment is about Don't Let Go (blog)

Original item by Joanne German

you're on a writing roll Tommy - really enjoying your recent posts. Col.

Comment is about Excuse my hand (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

the town has an interesting history of culture - like Hollywood I wonder how many creative dreams lay broken like driftwood on the sand, like your characters in this poem. Thanks for posting Tia.
Colin.

Comment is about By-the-Sea (blog)

Original item by Tia Lattanzio

Suki and David - I enjoyed hearing both versions again - I think I prefer Robert Wyatt's despite being a big Elvis fan. There was a bit of a young Brit indie jazz revival in the early 80's which I remember quite clearly getting into: Everything But the Girl, Working Week, Weekend, Carmel to name a few. At the time it very much acted as my entry into a different world of jazz beyond that of the commercial big bands and Kenny Balls beloved by many parents. Sry to stray off topic Martin. Col.

Comment is about The rhythm of the trees (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Good to meet you too, Marilyn, and to hear your poetry in London https://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=68107. Very pleased also that we reviewed your book here a few months ago https://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=68107

Comment is about Land of Three Rivers anthology launch, Gateshead, 2017 (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Very nice! Hope you write some more poems.

Comment is about Destined to succeed (blog)

Original item by Mrinmoy Dey

Love that response. Yes tears do tend to fall once the spot light is off of us. Hate that but so true

Comment is about LET GO (blog)

Original item by lynn hahn

Nice to meet you too dude! I must stop saying that in such esteemed circles. Lol.
I loved hearing you poems read live by you. It gave them so much depth and feel. You were good at it too. You didn't show your nerves at all. You must do it more often I think you work deserves it. Thanks for reading it. Beno

Comment is about Do they really want what’s best? (blog)

Original item by Rick Varden

I've always been a towny, so I don't get fox hunting. It doesn't seem right. I've tried so very hard to see the other side, but to date I just cannot. This poem in its short single verse puts you in the hares place, the fear and panic. I don't like to think about it . Maybe I should?

Comment is about BLOOD SPORT (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Nice poem. Letting go is so hard but necessary. Its the beautiful sunrise after a nightmare that urges us to hope for better.



Photos tell a sunny

tale

Seldom are the

dark moments

recorded

This line struck a chord in me. In the same context but different sense:

The sun sees us masked
Its the moon who sees us unveiled...

Comment is about LET GO (blog)

Original item by lynn hahn

I'm not against anthropomorphism per se but I don't think bees can co operate. They just do. A limited range of things in a pre programmed way. They couldn't use their 'skills' to other ends except in fairy tales. I'm a big bee fan. Just don't get this poem. Will read again. Carefully.

Comment is about 'Bees had radar in their wings and brains that humans could barely understand' (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks, Ray.
I'm prepared to put my own hypocrisy on hold in the interests of a good swipe.

Comment is about TAX EVASION (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Hi Jon. I was thinking of Alan Bennett reading this lovely poem. His eye for detail and in particular re his family resonated here I thought. Such a well fleshed out theme that reaches in to draw out tears of memory - the sadness is in the abandonment that death brings to material things.

Ray

Comment is about The Dresser (blog)

Original item by Jon Darby

Hi David,

Yes, you're right! Thanks for sharing this too, really enjoyed! This poem obviously hit the mark..

SS

Comment is about The rhythm of the trees (blog)

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