<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 22nd Jun 2018 13:53
but can you write poems that are not about, er, writing poems Don? Or mention Brian and the word 'rhyme'?
Perhaps we should set you a challenge or a prompt? I'll set the ball rolling. As you're an Aussie maybe you could put into rhyme your thoughts on the current situation Down Under regards Aboriginal land rights? Or shark attacks? You choose ?
Comment is about I Can Write Serious I Can Write Fun (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Yes you are correct my friend
I wunder where you are ?
No doubt you're wondering round the site
Miles and miles afar
I did notice the lower-case 'e'
A subperior form used by your Queen ?
I must admit it must be rare
This form I've never seen ?
But then again I could accept
A typo error here ?
I think you must remember not
To type while drinking beer
?
Comment is about Wandering Wondering Thoughts (blog)
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<Deleted User> (19708)
Fri 22nd Jun 2018 12:59
Jan,
Thank You. A refreshing read!
CQ
Comment is about ‘Summertime’ by Jan Oskar Hansen is Write Out Loud’s Poem of the Week (article)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Fri 22nd Jun 2018 12:56
Don drinking vino?
Having a beano?
That"s what they do in Australino.
Comment is about I Can Write Serious I Can Write Fun (blog)
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A very evocative, emotive & earthly piece of work. T :)
Comment is about Comfort (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 22nd Jun 2018 09:39
excellent Chris - could be about so much more than bees - the kind of poem that builds and builds and finally blows your mind. Col.
Comment is about 39 (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 22nd Jun 2018 09:33
hugs all round with this one Hazel.
clever rhyme / juxtaposing of 'comfort of alcohol' and 'I don't recall'. Like that lots. Col.
Comment is about Comfort (blog)
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<Deleted User> (19421)
Fri 22nd Jun 2018 08:53
Great - For me this worked better when I heard it, rather then when I read it.
very nearly Timothy West!!!
Nice one Ray!
D
Comment is about SALTY TALES (blog)
Original item by ray pool
I am with you there Hazel. I so love trees. They are a real joy in so many ways as is this poem
I love the lines
Indignations sparking like a light bulb
With a faulty lead.
Absolutely wonderful. Thanks for posting
Comment is about Comfort (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
Beautiful piece Sir. Agree. Everyday simple act of kindness, a simple smile, a thoughtful empathetic listening to a friend who is sad can makes a world of difference. One can feel joy in giving. Must be experienced..Thanks. Heartening read.
Srikala , Chennai , Jun 22, 2018
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<Deleted User> (19421)
Fri 22nd Jun 2018 08:46
Great -
I love the second line, dust on a big picture! Clever!
?
Comment is about Nihilism (blog)
Original item by Mikey V Kinsey
I seen her today and we talked and it's still the same time boy. Time is just a concept that we made along the way
Comment is about Firefly//Envy of An Angel (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Fri 22nd Jun 2018 08:08
They might be pronounced the same down there Don, but here in God's country using the Queen's english they are quite different.
Comment is about Wandering Wondering Thoughts (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Fri 22nd Jun 2018 08:06
Damon - how long is it now?
Comment is about Firefly//Envy of An Angel (blog)
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I like this Hayley. The way you have positioned the lines (dwell on each before moving on to next). Intrusion/conclusion/illusion perfect end-rhymes. Although 'lose you' is different it carries on the 'oose' sound. I like it. Well done.
Don ?
Comment is about Distrust is a bad trait (blog)
Original item by HayzTee
Keith, Brian, Darren, Hayley - thankyou for liking this. It's interesting how a poem develops. It started simply with my fascination with wander and wonder, both pronounced the same. How could I put this to use ? Thoughts ? Yes. I was pleased with the end-product. Thankyou for your support
Don
Comment is about Wandering Wondering Thoughts (blog)
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This is a great article, Laura. Let's hope it brings more attention to our long-lasting service to the world of live poetry. Superbly written too.
Comment is about Get on board with the Write Out Loud gig guide! (article)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Thu 21st Jun 2018 23:25
<Deleted User> (18118)
Thu 21st Jun 2018 21:46
Great writing.
A scene with words.
Very much enjoyed.
Hannah
Comment is about In the Garden Again (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18118)
Thu 21st Jun 2018 21:44
How beautiful.
Starts with despair and then slowly dissolves into poetic hopes and dreams containing beautiful images and language.
Hannah
Comment is about Comfort (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
Hazel,
From all the trials and tribulations of life there exists within us a need to retreat to nature. I love the line ¨Hear it call me by my true name ¨. A poem which you declare yourself so very concisely. I enjoyed it enormously
Thank you
Keith
Comment is about Comfort (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
Ian, a pleasure to read. Once upon a time i think angels were quite helpful, but the world today is just too much for them i think they're all at home knitting socks for soldiers.
Comment is about There Are No Angels Here (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
love this poem, beautifully written
Comment is about Wandering Wondering Thoughts (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Clever. Love the mixed metaphor of building roots and planting walls.
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Thu 21st Jun 2018 19:29
Hi Ian, thanks for the explanation about 'Strange Fruit'. Glad to hear you had a relaxing internet free holiday. It's good to switch off every now and then but I have to admit I find it hard. All the best, Col.
Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)
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<Deleted User> (19421)
Thu 21st Jun 2018 18:57
Grim Norse poem about the disappointments of life. However, some of us didn't even get as far as disappointment. Great stuff.
Comment is about ‘Summertime’ by Jan Oskar Hansen is Write Out Loud’s Poem of the Week (article)
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Big Sal
Thu 21st Jun 2018 16:36
Thanks for your comments on 'strange fruit' Keith - sorry the reply has been slow - been away on holiday with no internet access ? BLISS
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
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Thu 21st Jun 2018 12:11
Thank you Binte, for the like.
All the best des
Comment is about Death of a doll (blog)
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<Deleted User> (19421)
Thu 21st Jun 2018 10:53
There are still remnants of its railway past on the Trail, Ray. Former platforms, a Station house and, almost ghost-like, darkened striations in the track-bed where the sleepers would have lain.
Comment is about THE BROCKENHURST TRAIL (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
It's me with my old steam head on again John! I recall us exchanging details re this line a while back. My esteemed other half and I visited the station where a road now runs at the back. Luckily I dug out a 60s photo of pre- beseeching days. Great place for cycling! In the day you'd have had to get a ticket for pooch I suppose so that's one beneficiary.
We saw a herd of cattle going through Brockenhurst incidentally.
A real goodie this one.
all the best, Ray
Comment is about THE BROCKENHURST TRAIL (blog)
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We only do rides that are downhill both ways, Colin.
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Nicola Beckett
Thu 21st Jun 2018 08:39
<Deleted User> (13762)
Thu 21st Jun 2018 08:37
I met Timothy West once - at my cousin's wedding. He was something to do with the Oxbridge college my cousin studied at. When I say I met him I didn't actually meet him. I just kinda stared at him every now and then. We all did. Didn't see Pru or any Irn Bru either. I seem to remember it was quite a dull affair and the marriage didn't last. TW's presence obviously hadn't provided enough special magic to make it last. Is Irn Bru a remedy for dementia . . ?
Col.
Comment is about SALTY TALES (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Thu 21st Jun 2018 08:33
Knight - I can see from your profile you are 23, yet your poem suggests that life has passed you by. It hasn't...you've got your whole life ahead of you. Put things behind you and move forward with hope and optimism.
Comment is about The Man Who Loved (blog)
Original item by Knight In Black Armor
Your words are very touching but rest assured that you are not alone with such feelings. You might not realise it or ever even know but to someone else your life may be of great value. Something you have said or will say may be what a distreesed soul needs to hear. We all have value. Often we never recognise it.
Thank you
Keith
Comment is about The Man Who Loved (blog)
Original item by Knight In Black Armor
The veil is thin- nice line.
Comment is about Butterfly. POEM 7/midsummers (blog)
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Thanks for posting and reminding.
Comment is about Mid-summer Eve (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18118)
Wed 20th Jun 2018 21:38
A little sloppy in the typing because I am on my iPad.
Comment is about THE BROCKENHURST TRAIL (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Jeff,
A truly excellent poem. It compares most favourably with the poem about Grenfell written by the African writer Ben Okri. It is worth giving his poem a read.
Well done
Thanks
Keith
Comment is about Grenfell Falls Green (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Wed 20th Jun 2018 18:31
Ray - You'll get the Scots revolting...as if they're not already revolting enough. (Only joking guys!) It's Irn Bru...or did you deliberately misspell it to fit with Ironbridge? I love that rhyme by the way.
I love Ironbridge and Coalbrookdale. I first went there in the late 70's and stayed at the YHA in a road called Paradise which I thought was great.
Comment is about SALTY TALES (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Wed 20th Jun 2018 17:41
I too was there in '66, but what will the country do when all us lot have died off and there are no more glory glory days to hark back to?
Comment is about Harry Kane (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18118)
Wed 20th Jun 2018 17:37
Heartfelt, from a lonely place.
Hannah
Comment is about Brought Low (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Fri 22nd Jun 2018 13:57
Mmmm...or how about a society forced to drink ice cold Fosters.
Comment is about I Can Write Serious I Can Write Fun (blog)
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