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In the Garden Again

I'm listening to my thoughts

I'd like to light a fire

But there's washing on the line

In the garden next door.

I'm listening to the trees

And watching as they dance

In full leafy green regalia

A strange arboreal  Strictly.

I'm listening to the birds

A mother twittering crossly

As baby comes too close

I'm breathing softly.

I'm listening to the wind

Shifting sodden clouds

Looming grey and gloomy

Heading home for evening.

I'm listening to the space

Between me and them

And wondering "is it mine?"

Because I feel it.

 

◄ The Oyster

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Taylor Crowshaw

Sat 4th Aug 2018 11:10

A beautiful soothing piece of poetry. Thoroughly enjoyed it.
Taylor ?

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Thu 21st Jun 2018 21:46

Great writing.
A scene with words.
Very much enjoyed.

Hannah

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Tue 19th Jun 2018 07:54

Lovely - most relaxing!

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Martin Elder

Sun 17th Jun 2018 20:34

some beautiful description here Hazel. Very nice indeed

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Hazel ettridge

Sun 17th Jun 2018 18:51

Thank you for reading and commenting.
Colin, I have sparrows aplenty, and thrush and baby robins. I also spied a couple of baby seagulls on next door's roof.

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Hazel ettridge

Sun 17th Jun 2018 18:50

Thank you for reading and commenting.
Colin, I have sparrows aplenty, and thrush and baby robins. I also spied a couple of baby seagulls on next door's roof.

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Sun 17th Jun 2018 09:49

lovely writing Hazel - if you need any sparrows I have plenty to spare - newly fledged and going cheap!

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Binte Afroz

Sun 17th Jun 2018 06:59

Enchanted! It's a rhythmic beauty.

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Sun 17th Jun 2018 04:51

Hazel as I have come to know I can say this for sure.
this moment came to you because you were open and unconditional to it. not wanting anything. giving everything in return. and that is your greatest beauty.

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suki spangles

Sun 17th Jun 2018 03:46

Hi there Hazel,

Very lyrical. Flows beautifully too.

Cheers,
Suki

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 16th Jun 2018 22:02

Each I’m listening line is wonderful. This is a charming piece Hazel.

The inquisitive last lines are the key to this

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keith jeffries

Sat 16th Jun 2018 20:58

Hazel,
A poem which embodies tranqulity and observation of the world about us. I particularly like the line, ¨In full leafy green regalia ¨. There is also an Englishness to it.
Thank you
Keith

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