This is an honest and straightforward poem, constructed with a thoughtful economy of words. A carefully worded sense of loss and regret. One criticism is the use of capital letters when the previous line didn't end with a full stop. I've never quite understood this.
John Short
Comment is about Absent (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Making rounds, yes! Of course Graham, that makes perfect sense... like Santa Claus or the Tooth Fairy, the Muse has lots of writers to visit!
Comment is about Dear Muse (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
V, we all have to share her you know! Don't be too hard on her.
Graham
Comment is about Dear Muse (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
A lot to consider in this H of L. Accomplished in its description and allusions and it takes us on a grim journey which is exciting.
Ray
Comment is about Teethpods (blog)
Original item by Heart of Lead
Thank you Kate G. ? Yes, the muse is a beautiful thing, perhaps because it is so elusive, makes us appreciate all the more when it shows up!
Comment is about Dear Muse (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
Yes, Ray, music, a cater-cousin to the muse! I love music so much and it does indeed inspire me. In fact, I think I will go in search of a fitting song for this post! Thanks for reading and your comments. ?
Comment is about Dear Muse (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
Nicely expressed thoughts and perfectly in place in a den such as you describe Jason. The whole idea has a sort of folky feel that should be set to music I reckon.
Ray
Comment is about Old Man At The Bar (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
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Wed 27th Mar 2019 20:29
Ah, such beauty here Vautauw. A muse is such a wonderful thing.
Comment is about Dear Muse (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
I would just like to add that music too is the muse and the most ethereal form of falling into the loving arms of it - it too can be abrasive or seductive according to mood! We all know we have to wait for the muse to surface and bless us., Vautaw
Ray
Comment is about Dear Muse (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
These lines were motivated by the sheer variety of subjects chosen
for uploading to WOL, causing me to wonder about the hows and
whys behind the deed. Thanks for the "likes".
Comment is about DESPERATE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Set in quite a Tom Waits-type of atmosphere dear Jason!
But more than that steeped in the classic Jason Bayliss wisdom.
"Load me up with a barrel of woes,
I'll raise a drink to fallen foes,
And another one for my friends,
And toast each one 'til the bottle ends.,"
Haunting words Jason!
Thank you for them ?
Mae
Comment is about Old Man At The Bar (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Hey Don! My thoughts exactly!
Thanks a lot?
Mae
Comment is about Love Song (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
What a tribute to memory. Beautifully written as always. "The ghosts of the past sit on every chair." Surrounded by conjured up illusions based on living and dead. Quite profound and lovely. Always a pleasure to read your poetry.
Comment is about Old Man At The Bar (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Thank you Peter I really appreciate your comment on The Matriach. I hope to begin contributing more soon. In the meantime I am enjoying reading the wonderful work of other contributors including your own poetry which is superb..x
Comment is about Peter Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Peter Taylor
I'm pleased you've raised the plight dk
Of this punctuation member
The bully dash knocks it around
It's use a fading ember
Our fading ember cries "oh no
What will become of me?
My friend dk is trying hard
Preventing fade-eternity"
Comment is about Semi-Colon (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Experiment my girl. Nothing new emerges unless we try different ideas.
Comment is about Love Song (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
I was in the garden sun and half swooning with a virus, so these thoughts are a bit LSD. There's still life in the old dog yet.
Thanks Dorothy. Everything about me is inappropriate I'm afraid. I rely on my wife for external cleanliness.
Brian , thanks for your frankness. Yes I always expose the dark side of humour, where the rind grows. We have to vary the diet sometimes.
I'll applaud those thoughts Rachel. You make some valid points. This habit of loud sharing on phones may end up like public smoking - not thanks not interested in inhaling your titbits etc.
In fact a lot of stuff goes on visually I think which cuts off communication . In some ways a form of castration.
Good thinking Stu. The thin end of the wedge, and overrated in my problem. Not that I'm not addicted now mind you.
Glad you liked the offering!
Hi David. You're ahead of me on the technicalities. Think of the parallels available "online" though such as this offering.
There is a back story revealed of course which I have teased out ! All my feminine items go straight to Sunlight Laundry of course - or even to the dry cleaners. (Or is that the same thing).
Cheers all you voyeurs.
Thanks for stopping by, Frances, Peter Jon and Heart of Lead.
Ray
Comment is about WASHING LINE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Really a unique and beautiful take on the Sisyphus legend. The personal story of burdens is compelling, as it is often harder to carry such a heavy load of many smaller ones. Truly they pile up.
Comment is about Pebbles and Boulders (blog)
Original item by Amanda Steel
Thank you Heart and Jason! The experiment is completed and I guess not an utter failure!
Heart, you are very insightful, that's been proven! I just thought the bold letters would add to the effect!
Jason, the fact that it makes sense to you and that it actually means something is what makes this piece real!
Thank you both for the support!?
Mae
Comment is about Love Song (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Ah ha, you put the letters in bold so even one as unobservant as me would manage to see the hidden message. Glad you kept writing it.
Comment is about Love Song (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Nostalgic noblemen never need nymphs nests,
How very true. Love it.
J. x
Comment is about Love Song (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
"You had a five finger discount to my heart." Love that line. Great poem. Thanks for sharing. ❤
Comment is about Queuing For Love (blog)
Original item by Damon Blackery
Another sensitive journey well worth taking. Great congruence of mind and nature that reveals layers of probing. Always a pleasure Peter!
Comment is about YOUR BLUE EYES (blog)
Original item by Peter Taylor
Ah! the age old question. does listening to/ reading other poets work unduly influence one's own; and is that a good or bad thing?
Interestingly on the subject of influence, or put another way inspiration, I often wonder when and where it actually does come from.
Musicians often cite other famous musicians as having been important influences on their work and all too often it is too obvious (take Liam Gallagher and Oasis for example) who think they are the Beatles reincarnated.
Maybe words are different to music and those influences easier to mask in one's own work. I'm not sure.
Comment is about The company of poets: why listening and learning provides that buzz (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
See the beggars as they pass
Seeking foreign rule - what a farce!
Being run by the determinations of those
They can never vote to depose. ?
Comment is about Broken Promises (blog)
Original item by Wendy Higson
Yes, I agree Ray. Definitely in need of revision. Thanks so much for reading and your feedback. ?
Comment is about Love Lessons (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
I'm minded to wonder if in the mind
One way can suddenly be 2-way?
Or even if a 2-way route
Can turn into a through way?
But whatever path is taken
It seems to mean a new way
Of thinking and I'm sure you'll find
More fun for a Don Matthews day!!
…………………………………………...
Comment is about Neural Pathway Mixup (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Thank you Kate and Reinholtz!
Steven, on the rhyming issue... I tried? but will keep trying!
I do take suggestions though! ?
Mae
Comment is about Love (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
steven arthur
Wed 27th Mar 2019 12:03
steven arthur
Wed 27th Mar 2019 12:00
great piece lisa
Comment is about A lady in the streets but a freak in the bed (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
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Wed 27th Mar 2019 11:45
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Wed 27th Mar 2019 11:43
James
This poem is so beautiful, so hauntingly wistful that it deserves a 'love' button as opposed to a 'like ' button.
Dorothy
Comment is about LET ME BE (blog)
Original item by James Fiske
Wed 27th Mar 2019 10:47
for me
"Old Buzzard" Memorial Highway!
hahaha
Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)
Original item by Don Matthews
Thanks sweet Jason! ?Your support means a lot!
Mae
Comment is about Love (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
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Wed 27th Mar 2019 08:16
mmmmmmmm preaching to the converted.
Minds need to be given free rein - no inhibitions - and no restraints.
Dorothy
Comment is about Neural Pathway Mixup (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Ah thank you so much, Jason, your comment is much appreciated. I had the artwork lying around and was only recently reminded that I had attempted a poem to go with it ages ago. Finally got around to finishing it. Convenient when we get to rely on inspiration from the past.
Comment is about Teethpods (blog)
Original item by Heart of Lead
And a powerful return is made by Heart Of Lead. Really like this it's got a lovely mythological feel to it.
J. x
Comment is about Teethpods (blog)
Original item by Heart of Lead
Let me sleep where my body may lie, but in your heart never let me die.
Beautiful
J.
Comment is about LET ME BE (blog)
Original item by James Fiske
I did not recognize this was a rhyming poem at first, since it is in paragraph form. It is a forlorn poem and well titled. Loss is sometimes a necessary but keen pain.
Comment is about LET ME BE (blog)
Original item by James Fiske
Ok.... I'm a fan!! Wow...
Comment is about Heart of Lead (poet profile)
Original item by Heart of Lead
Why's there so much pain
And sorrow on the site
Romance filling all the blogs
It's bogging down alright
I wanna add some humour
It is a struggle though
Pain and sorrow's watcha want
With that I gotta go
At least there's two that like it
Two humour-seeking souls
Note the hyphen Dorothy
Doing it's set-out role ?
Comment is about Consumer Electronics Show in Las Vegas (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
@elPintor oh wow, i wish i could say or do something more than just say thank you for your comment, but honestly, i am in shock. Thank you. So much.
(I will also take the time to carefully read more of your work, i already checked some, but time has always been my enemy sadly)
Much love!
Mila
Comment is about 4.10.2018 (blog)
Original item by Mila F.
Tommy, you are very right. It's my mother.
Comment is about Talking To The Dead (blog)
Original item by Binte Afroz
Rich
Wed 27th Mar 2019 22:23
Wow, I read this about five times before I started to understand, and I'm pleased I did. Thanks for sharing, I think this is a really good poem. You relay the emotion really clearly, and I'm left wondering about the moments. Really good.
Comment is about Alone With My Loneliness (blog)
Original item by NilavroNill Shoovro