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kJ Walker

Tue 8th Jun 2021 08:18

These casual conversations often occur outside shops, while both parties are waiting for their respective wives.
They're a fundamental part of our blokiness and can brighten up the day.

This well observed piece brings life to those snippets.

Cheers Kevin

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Nigel Astell

Tue 8th Jun 2021 00:31

Thanks for your likes
Stephen A
Holden
Aviva
julie
Moon. girl
Stephen G
and
Dewald.

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keith jeffries

Tue 8th Jun 2021 00:25

John,

How I enjoyed reading this poem as I have always been interested in the passage of time and its effects on the world about us and ourselves included. The human eyes are telling in so many ways. They portray emotions, personality and a glimpse into the inner person but it is through age that we see another developing feature. The elderly often display liquidity of eye which shows resignation, weariness and wisdom. The eyes seem to experience a different process of ageing. After all they have witnessed more than the body has experienced.

Thank you for this

Keith

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Tue 8th Jun 2021 00:00

Thank you Stephen, Leon, and Nigel for your comments

Leon the poem would suit a caring foster home too, or a shelter, but in this case it was a hospital ward (details noted at base of previous poem 'Naomi and I')

Nigel I am particularly good at remembering where things happen, such a conversation was in the hallway..., such a person was sat on the sofa when they said...., this is the bus stop where I thought up that song/dance/game etc.. sometimes it can be refreshing to be somewhere that there aren't memories already floating about, but other times it is really nice to recollect some things so clearly.

Thanks also to everyone who has clicked 'Like' for this poem

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Mon 7th Jun 2021 23:47

Thank you for commenting Nigel.
We go into depression through our weaknesses, but we come out of it through our strengths (whether re-found or new-found)

Thanks also to everyone who clicked 'Like' for this poem

Although I won't post it in love's tempest, since it was already posted in the meditations, the poem 'Inner Strength' was actually written during this time.

Here is the link to the WOL post for those who want to visit (or re-visit) the poem: https://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=110313

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Igneus

Mon 7th Jun 2021 22:23

I'm glad you think it fits those genres Aviva. Certainly would be interesting to hear it in that style.

Thank you for taking the time to comment on my poem

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John Marks

Mon 7th Jun 2021 22:13

Thanks Greg.

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Igneus

Mon 7th Jun 2021 22:04

I did try to make it rhyme as much as possible, so I'm glad it turned out seemingly made for rap.

I unfortunately do not know who Phillipos is. These poems are my very first foray into this field, so I'm not really familiar with much.

Thanks for the kind words, gives me that extra little push to write more

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Greg Freeman

Mon 7th Jun 2021 21:38

I spotted a Frank Zappa album title on the last line ...

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Greg Freeman

Mon 7th Jun 2021 21:37

'Time grinds the face of all mankind
Time wears the skin thin and haggard'

Great lines, John. Can't let this one go without commenting.

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Nigel Astell

Mon 7th Jun 2021 19:45

a space once filled is still
now it holds a memory.

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Mon 7th Jun 2021 19:26

Suggests a foster home?

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julie callaghan

Mon 7th Jun 2021 18:46

Thanks for the likes and for the comments Stephen G and Stephen A. I would definitely recommend a visit.... perhaps pick a rainy day this summer!!?

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julie callaghan

Mon 7th Jun 2021 18:43

Beautiful

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julie callaghan

Mon 7th Jun 2021 18:43

Beautiful

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Stephen Atkinson

Mon 7th Jun 2021 18:38

Thank you for the Like & comment Martin, much appreciated ?
And for the Likes, Aviva, Tom & Holden, always grateful ?

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Stephen Atkinson

Mon 7th Jun 2021 18:24

Are you Phillipos in disguise? You write very much like him? Anyway, good stuff !

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Stephen Atkinson

Mon 7th Jun 2021 18:19

My head hurts ? Brilliantly presented food for thought, John. As always ?

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Stephen Atkinson

Mon 7th Jun 2021 18:10

Lovely stuff ?

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Stephen Atkinson

Mon 7th Jun 2021 18:08

Sounds delightful, Julie, book me in for a few days ??

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Stephen Atkinson

Mon 7th Jun 2021 18:04

Both moving, and beautiful ?

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Stephen Gospage

Mon 7th Jun 2021 17:53

Brings back memories, Julie. I was there many moons ago.

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Stephen Gospage

Mon 7th Jun 2021 17:50

A nice observation, Martin. 'Dance the dance of blokes.' I must have done that.

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keith jeffries

Mon 7th Jun 2021 10:51

A natural encounter which is defined by it masculinity and casual approach. The ability to relate to another human being without being judgemental. A gesture of friendship at no cost. Now this is poetry as it speaks of harmony

Thank you for this
Keith

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Martin Elder

Mon 7th Jun 2021 09:07

wonderfully put. I agree fully that a heart should be one not stolen.

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Martin Elder

Mon 7th Jun 2021 09:05

This almost has a rap quality about it which I like. Wonderfully constructed.
Nice one

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Martin Elder

Mon 7th Jun 2021 09:03

There are so many great lines here that I cannot pick one out above the rest. Your words are definitely Dali like in their interpretation
can't beat surrealism
Love it

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Martin Elder

Mon 7th Jun 2021 08:59

I like the regularity of Tap Tap in the verses which almost give a sense of urgency.
Nicely done

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Martin Elder

Mon 7th Jun 2021 08:57

This has a beautiful flow to it which takes the reader on the journey that you describe.
Nice one

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Martin Elder

Mon 7th Jun 2021 08:55

Beautiful

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John Coopey

Mon 7th Jun 2021 07:32

Thanks for the Likes, Aviva, Holden and Stephen.

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Nolan

Mon 7th Jun 2021 03:08

Beautiful!

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Nigel Astell

Mon 7th Jun 2021 01:03

it seems this time of learning who you had become and the mental battle that you were in helped you so much.

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julie callaghan

Sun 6th Jun 2021 12:09

Thank you kJ. I am not sure I take the photos from Dr Amir Khan Twitter account. He gave me permission to screenshot them and use them on here. If you have Twitter he is worth following as posts some lovely videos and photos.

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kJ Walker

Sun 6th Jun 2021 08:31

Lovely words.
Where is the photo of? It looks familiar

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Nigel Astell

Sat 5th Jun 2021 20:26

The fear that these sirens bring
you can hear inside your poem Andy.

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Nigel Astell

Sat 5th Jun 2021 20:18

Those feelings stare and won't go away
inside this poem there is no hideaway.

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Nigel Astell

Sat 5th Jun 2021 20:10

Thanks for all your likes
Aviva
Holden
Stephen G
blackrose
and
Moon .girl.

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blackrose

Sat 5th Jun 2021 18:58

@Ghazala lari thank you?

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Nigel Astell

Sat 5th Jun 2021 12:47

Burning heat the race is on
thanks Aviva.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Sat 5th Jun 2021 12:43

Hot wheels, cool poem.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Sat 5th Jun 2021 12:29

Thank you for commenting Ghazala
Thanks for your good wishes too
Let us both have strength (or find it) for all that we face.

Thanks also to everyone who has clicked 'Like' for this poem

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John Coopey

Sat 5th Jun 2021 12:26

Nice picture of past times, Kevin. A favourite of mine was (still is) Nutrocker by Bee Bumble and the Stingers.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Sat 5th Jun 2021 12:16

Thank you Nigel for your poetic response.

Being believed in
Helps us believe in ourselves,
But even if the whole world
Acts with doubts and disbelief
And mistaken mistrust
We should doubt the rest of the world
Because we are closest to our own truth
And even we don't know everything that we can do.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Sat 5th Jun 2021 12:02

Thank you for commenting, John ?
(sorry for the late response, too)

Jumping the gun almost always leads to the unexpected ?

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Nigel Astell

Sat 5th Jun 2021 11:53

Believing in yourself
gives you that chance
that built up in every line.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Sat 5th Jun 2021 11:18

This would make a great heavy metal or even death metal song, I can hear it performed in that sort of style.

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John Coopey

Sat 5th Jun 2021 08:51

I’m pretty sure I’ve heard you do this at Well Spoken, Kevin. Tin tin, indeed,

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Rasa Kabaila

Sat 5th Jun 2021 08:16

Dear Nigel, thanks for your poem! I was just speaking with a patient the other day who had a mysterious shadow turn up on his lung scan in which he is waiting for the biopsy for the results. the waiting game sure is hard. Thank you for articulating this so nicely in your words. Best wishes, Rasa

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kJ Walker

Sat 5th Jun 2021 08:11

Thanks Greg
I'd love a jukebox too, but not only can't I afford one, but I don't have room for one either. Maybe one day if I win the lottery.

Keith I'm glad you explained yourself before the image of you in drag fully formed. I can remember being obsessed with Tocatta by Sky and playing it ad-nauseam on the jukebox . I don't even like that tune now.
I assume that some pubs do still have jukeboxes, but the one I mostly use prides itself on not having one.

Thanks also for those who pressed like.

Cheers Kevin

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