Anyone who has had an aching heart could relate to this. Fragile, golden yet tarnished beating like the staccato rhythm of a broken tune... and only one person can mend it. Great work.
Talking of rhythm, "Schemie Burd" is certainly one that makes you think, as regardless of gender we all have to make our own way.
Comment is about For you (blog)
Thanks Helen, I love your poem My Inner Child, it's beautiful :)
Comment is about Nightmares (blog)
Original item by Amy
Beautiful!xx
Comment is about For you (blog)
Solar-how about leaving-'by the advisors of hate'
out of the poem?.We think its a bit too 'heavy'
xx
Comment is about overcoming (blog)
may the farce be with you!xx
Comment is about If questioned by an extraterrestrial (blog)
Ladies!-we thank you!xx
Comment is about Rat racing (blog)
It was a pleasure to be invited and perform there.
Keep well.
Comment is about ThePoetry Spoke - closes (blog)
Original item by Chris Co
National Press items -
Glad to help the cause of poetry - especially verse - on WOL!
The letter before mine had me nodding in agreement
and to have the two printed about poetry was indeed a bonus for this occasional Sunday Express
reader.
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Clever one jan...can I ask you to change 'shot' to 'shoot? hope you don't mind.x
Comment is about too big to fall (blog)
Original item by jan oskar hansen
That does pretty well sum it up! It should be required reading for the iriots that perpetuate increasingly ludicrous expectations before barbie dolls are walking every high street... Long live real people. :) best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Tightrope Woman (blog)
Original item by Amy
somehow inspired by
Cynthia Bluell Thomas's 11-42 comment on my poem
'From a train window'
Comment is about If questioned by an extraterrestrial (blog)
Hi Amy - welcome to the world of WOL - I should perhaps warn you now it is addictive! There is a lot of depth to the site and the years of archives, so you can definitely find some work to suit your tastes. best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Amy (poet profile)
Original item by Amy
Strong theme and some lines to prickle a conscious or two - if they had any... Best wishes, Dave - Oh and a belated welcome to WOL too. :)
Comment is about Poet Tree. (blog)
Original item by R.C Morose
Hello Hari - thank you for reading and commenting sir. Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about I Want You Now (blog)
Original item by Dave Dunn
Thu 19th Jun 2014 19:06
Hi R.C.
I like the poet tree particularly
while investment jerks
buckle their belts
After raping a little more money
out of the badly beaten
mother earth
Good stuff
Comment is about R.C Morose (poet profile)
Original item by R.C Morose
Thu 19th Jun 2014 18:58
Hi Daniel
Thanks for your comments on 'I want more',thats really encouraging. I really like 'The place where only dead men sleep' It has a real sense for me of what it must have been like. I can almost hear somebody singing 'it's a long way to tipperary'.
I can also relate to your comments in your profile about coming out as a wordsmith 'ready or not'
keep on keeping on.
Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
OO thank u so much sir. A comment from a person like u is like i got an award...now i feel success for this poetry.I will give u more detail about this poetry when i will get time then shore u will like it more....fine sir by
Comment is about Voice (blog)
Original item by Hari Das
thank Dave sir this portal is acting good for writers like me .Here i can see other writers style of work .it some way helping to get new ideas....ok by sir
Comment is about Hari Das (poet profile)
Original item by Hari Das
Kenneth Eaton-Dykes
Thu 19th Jun 2014 17:18
Hi Chris
Sad news. I'm sure you'll all pop up again some where soon.
Comment is about ThePoetry Spoke - closes (blog)
Original item by Chris Co
Thanks so much for taking the time to write. Yes, "the borderline area of hell" and the physical limbo, the movements become slow and silent in contrast to the usual life-affirming joy. I think I need to work on this......
Rosie
Comment is about Limbo Days (blog)
Original item by Rosie Vallack Mor
Hello Sourav
Welcome to Write Out Loud.
I hope you enjoy the site. We're really looking forward to reading some of your work and I know that you will be warmly welcomed by other WOL-ers too.
Thanks for already uploading a picture of yourself, it's is always nicer when we can see what our fellow WOLers look like.
Have a good browse around, there’s lots going on and if you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free. It’s the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
There’s always someone who’ll help you out with a problem, so just ask and someone will get back to you. It’s a friendly place, so welcome once again.
Graham Sherwood
Comment is about Sourav Raina (poet profile)
Original item by Sourav Raina
Yitzchak Chaim
Thu 19th Jun 2014 07:33
Most souls seem to have nothing and yearn to have everything.
Only the one soul that has everything yearns to have nothing.
The pain of nothing heals the soul.
The love of everything opens it.
Let it out-shake the breath you have been given.
Your soul cries to explode into the abyss.
The two sides of the coin always are shown
and they are never.
Growing hurts.
It is not natural.
We never want to change
That's why we aren't in charge.
The mover, the pusher, the awesome swing!
He makes it all.
He takes it all.
He is all.
Your soul is always smiling.
Your mind is always fighting.
The heart is stuck like glue.
How? Why? When?
Questions deserve answers.
What is known can only be shown.
Patience is a virtue.
It pushes and pulls and is never conquered.
This life is hard.
Hope dwells within the soul for eternity.
The battles are all won.
Time's a mother fucker.
Damn man can!
Comment is about Deep Soul Treasure Volume 1 (blog)
Original item by Ralph Dartford
Thanks for your comments Katie, you are very kind :) Best wishes Dave
Comment is about Pity-Poetry (poet profile)
Original item by Pity-Poetry
Thanks Katie, you are very kind :) Best wishes Dave
Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Dunn
Your poetry is odd and unique the way you have no stanzas; truthful and panoramic. I can see the steps of your thought process, each line is like a step. Very inspirational, a voice of wisdom.
I adore your sample. The hole in the pocket reminds me of The Beatles Yellow Submarine when Ringo finds he has a hole in his pocket.
Cheers!
Comment is about Twilbury Wist (poet profile)
Original item by Twilbury Wist
Hi, Dave. Thank you for the inspirational words of advice.
Your sample poem is absolutely lovely. Great imagery.
Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Dunn
I like the lack of use of the title in the actual poem. It gives it an element of wonder. Like there is a secret only the poet is wise to. Yet it also makes us use our brains more in thinking what a dinosaur has to do with it.
But then you explained it in a comment, which is helpful.
Comment is about The Gay Dinosaur (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
It is sad but very true that nothing is original, because it is all made from this Earth and the Earth has no care in being original, but merely plots our survival and demise; much the same as we do.
Comment is about Upon Originality (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thank you, Cynthia, for the kind words in appreciation of my poem STAGNANT and my poetry in general.
I have not spent much time reading other's poetry on this site until now. I especially connected to your poem 'The Dream-footer' in your samples; very natural imagery, absolutely pleasing, especially when reading it while listening to Chopin. The gypsy almost seemed to metaphorically be like that violet in the last stanza. Big, and perhaps a natural beauty about it no one else cares to notice.
I plan on going through each and every lovely bit of writing you have to offer.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
LOL - great stuff Lynn. In our house it is the cats that bring those gifts - rather a lot of those are frogs, some of which we discover hopping around far from the cat flap, but a couple were only discovered when furniture was moved, life long extinct... Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Unwanted Gifts (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
'Then after I’ve had a skin full
Half a bargain bin full...'
This poem is like a bag of pick 'n mix... but full of little gems.
Carefree to a meek and mild superman.
I really like this Martin.
Comment is about I want more (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Hi Lynn
Thanks for the reply about World Cup Widow. I just wanted to put a different take on the World Cup and from a female perspective. Domestic Violence is dreadful and statistically it increases when England lose. Love is blind... and lets hope they win.
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Wed 18th Jun 2014 23:03
Hi Cynthia
Thanks for your comments about a short walk. It was based on a walk I went on with my wife and friends around the coast of Anglesey in North Wales in the spring. It's a good point about Baroness, I like the way that word has turned out there even though I had previously thought about changing it.
Thanks again
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Hehe - a well spun tale Cynthia, with a hint of fresh mischief - on behalf of the young man of course... Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about The Single Man (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Well Richard I confess to 55 years of myopic vision, but perhaps sometimes when we close our eyes we see more clearly and capture that focus in words... Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Hard Of Hearing (blog)
Original item by Richard Alfred
You already have a powerful 'voice' as evidenced by this piece and your profile alone. Keep that underlying passion and let it drive your future path as it is a well of creativity that bonds with messages worth hearing. Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Archetypal Existence (blog)
Original item by Pity-Poetry
A belated welcome to WOL from me too. I hope the site proves to be a second home for you, with it's rich library of diverse poetry - and poetic voices. Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Twilbury Wist (poet profile)
Original item by Twilbury Wist
Ah yes, we all have so many of those fragments of time we could benefit from reclaiming! Well expressed thoughts...
Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about fracture (blog)
Original item by Twilbury Wist
And a belated welcome to WOL from me too. :)
I'm sure you will enjoy the wealth of poetry to be found here and we will hopefully encourage you further. Though some 48 years have passed now, I was once a teenage poet too, finding my voice in questioning the Vietnam war among other things...
Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Em (poet profile)
Original item by Em
Hope and heartache captured in one poem - I like it. :)
Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about My Smile Is Not For You (blog)
Original item by Em
Like it - indeed as you say there are so many people who would have had a totally different life if they just had the one person believe in them enough to open doors for them.
Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about "Schemie Burd" (blog)
Welcome to WOL Hari, I hope you will enjoy sharing and reading poetry with all the diverse people here. Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Hari Das (poet profile)
Original item by Hari Das
Hi Hari, an interesting piece that I feel will need a few readings before I can be sure I have grasped everything you have embedded there... Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Voice (blog)
Original item by Hari Das
HI Daniel, glad to see such topics being covered, I figure the medium of poetry should cover things that are often swept under the table, the lyrics of popular songs rarely manage to give victims an anthem they can adopt... Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Dunn
Thanks for your comments Daniel :)
I grew to like the Acrostic form some while ago - sometimes it can help structure a poem from a short phrase, almost like having a template to start each line with.
I hope you will enjoy experimenting with the acrostic form. :)
Sad about Elvis, often remembered for his less positive traits rather than the vocal skills he undoubtedly had. I think the line "There's a man works down the chip shop swears he's Elvis" from the Kirsty MacColl did a lot to focus on his ballooning weight issues in later years, not exactly the image his fans would want to retain!
ATB Dave
Comment is about SEESAW WHAT MORE IS IN STORE (blog)
Original item by Dave Dunn
Daniel Dwyran
Fri 20th Jun 2014 18:08
Really like this. A short yet fully complete work. Love the line 'the sheen that lights a raven's wing'. Wonderful.
Comment is about HOW WE USED TO LIVE. (blog)