C Byrne

Fri 3rd Jan 2014 19:01

Liked this - last verse is great. Got a feeling that there's possibly more of the story to add to this one.

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Jenni Pascoe

Fri 3rd Jan 2014 17:46

PLEASE NOTE: Pink Lane Poetry and Performance Nights ceased 1 year ago.

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C Byrne

Fri 3rd Jan 2014 17:40

The 'Template' is epic!

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 3rd Jan 2014 17:06


Hugely enjoyed,

(performing stanza two, you could vocally elongate the `morally` and get rid of the I)

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 3rd Jan 2014 16:32

Dave,
Reproduction and enjoyment wise dead `fucking` true! (isn`t it great to actually use the word correctly?)

Mind, I reckon you`ve `sexed` your `Gods` opposite to what I would`ve.

but what the hell!)

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Nigel Astell

Fri 3rd Jan 2014 16:22

or maybe you have just not paid your B.T bill, then wait for me to call round when I get no reply to ask why no answer, to which you just tap me up for the money owed - - -

I give it to you without any fuss so next time I phone I hear the voice I love so much.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 3rd Jan 2014 15:34

I love the eternal optimism (ego?) of the north!
Never underestimate the Gunners when they are
finding fighting spirit and form. Wasn't it the
Man. City manager who predicted his team would
top the Premier League at the New Year? Hah!

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John Coopey

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 16:38

I don't think so, Harry. I fear it's staying in Manchester.

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Kenneth Eaton-Dykes

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 16:26

Never mind Harry, it was money well spent, you'll look smart laid out in that new "Granny pulling"outfit.
(Top of the heap)

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 16:03

I wonder how our world must look on New Year's
Eve as successive midnights go by - and those
amazing pyrotechnics light up the sky. Would
aliens think we were attacking each other?

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 15:54

Endorse the views stated.
This was fun.

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 15:48


No injurin` Saurez till after we`ve won the Premiership!

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 15:46

Better actors too! And better at practising
taking penalties so they rarely miss when it
matters.

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 15:43

Jonnie,
Those last four lines a common comment on the mystery of evil. I wonder what Job would have thought seeing not only one but both hands (plus feet) nailed to it?

Me? I too think `it`s best to let it go` take a good, hard look (It`s a showing – not a telling) and think about the resurrection.

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John Coopey

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 15:41

...in fact, they are known in journalism as "10-man Uruguay".

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John Coopey

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 15:39

Unfortunately, MC, these days their hard-nuts are every bit as hard as our hard-nuts. (And they have skill as well).

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 15:33

Play up and play the English game
Of good old mem-or-ee...
When men went for the ball like men -
And the crowd told the referee.

Now the ref's a big girl's blouse
And most foreign players too
And this home of football now kowtows
To those we gave it too!
Chorus
Hack 'em Hack 'em Hack 'em down
You know the ways of old
Hack 'em Hack 'em Hack 'em down
Never needing to be told!
Hack 'em Hack 'em Hack 'em down
And recall when we were bold!
................................

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Andy N

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 12:12

nice stuff emmy again.

only concern i have here and it's only minor is the first two lines Heavy hands /on heavy hearts. while it works fairly well, i think it's really one line and as one line it's a bit clunky if you know what i mean.. you may want to consider a change for one of the heavies. perhaps wooden hands on heavy hearts or something..

just a suggestion as it's great stuff still.

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Andy N

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 12:07

can relate to this quite a lot, it perhaps a bit long for my tastes but the first half of the poem (taking nothing away from the rest) is magical. lovely stuff m8

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Thu 2nd Jan 2014 11:52

glad my comment made you chuckle,chuck!x

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Emma

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 02:16

Hey solar winds thanks for your comment :) haha no I'm not 92, it's the year I was born to many people with emmy as their profile name.

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Wed 1st Jan 2014 23:34

lets hope your last line proves right!
good poem Emmy.You aint actually 92 are you?
my god! those anti-ageing creams are brill!x

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Dave Bradley

Wed 1st Jan 2014 22:52

Enjoyed this Ian

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David Cooke

Wed 1st Jan 2014 22:50

Hi Greg Happy New Year yourself! Be good if you can make it to the Covent Garden gig. Yes, I have quite a few more in the Grimsby sequence. I was amazed by the quick response from Pennilessand the fact that they took the lot, although I was only expecting them to take one and wanted to spread them around!I thought they looked a bit Stand-ish, so I might have to try them with what's left. THough it takes them forever to get back and the lost time was a rejection!

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John Coopey

Wed 1st Jan 2014 20:49

I could have warned you, Ian, and saved you all the trouble!
Nice, light touch; a change from some of your more "thoughtful" stuff.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 1st Jan 2014 20:42

Happy new year to you too, David. Not sure I'll get to the Ariadne launch, but will try to make the Screech Owl one, date depending. Very impressed with your Grimsby poems in Penniless Press today. Have you got any more of those up your sleeve?

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Gray Nicholls

Wed 1st Jan 2014 15:07

thanks andy. strange how memories can interact with others similar memories, but thanks for the comment. glad you like this.

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Tue 31st Dec 2013 22:57

and the same to you Larisa.x

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Steve Higgins

Tue 31st Dec 2013 19:36

Thanks for looking in Hannah.I'm glad you liked the last verses as they were the ones I really worked at!Best wishes, Steve

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Cate Greenlees

Tue 31st Dec 2013 19:13

Hi Cynthia, thank you for your very perceptive comment on "Unwanted." It was written in anger for someone I love.
Have a very happy New years Eve and all the best for next year.
Cate xx

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David Cooke

Tue 31st Dec 2013 19:12

Hi Greg Happy New Year! Glad you liked the stamp poem. I'm thinking of maybe going to the Ariadne launch in January. Do you fancy it? Also will definitely be down to the Poetry CAfe Covent Garden for Grant Tarbard's Screech Owl launch, if you're up for it. I'll be reading with other contributors including Bethany.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 31st Dec 2013 17:43

Cate, it seems to me that this isn't, in any way, a literal piece about messy people. I find your poem very powerful, angry and deliberately strong - more like a last-ditch stand against a very difficult person - swirling one of those spiked clubs around your head, with intent to let fly if necessary.

I hope it gets sorted. 'Do not leave a footprint on my life' is a brilliant line, and a ghastly idea.

Happy New Year.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 31st Dec 2013 17:32

The recent poems are zeroing in with great intensity and intimacy, universally relate-able, and 'polished'. Keep posting.

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Nigel Astell

Tue 31st Dec 2013 13:13

I know what you mean about the poem

Happy new year mate and see you soon at Stockport

Now to finsh those cans left over from Christmas!

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Kenneth Eaton-Dykes

Tue 31st Dec 2013 12:28

Hi Harry

Being a couple of octogenarians, next time we move the earth, will be via the Sextons shovel.

Happy New Year.

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Isobel

Tue 31st Dec 2013 11:03

Nice one Dave. Yes - I suffer from the same voices all the time and it can be a bugger switching them off.

Dave B says it all - you capture it neatly and that last line really sums it all up. x

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Shevaughn

Tue 31st Dec 2013 08:03

Tommy,
Wow this poem is very well written, while reading it was like a movie playing in my mind (in a good way haha). I felt the intensity that you are portraying through this poem with every line. The passion that you and your then lover,mostly U, show,is magnificent.
Everybody has different perceptions of a poem.Many have judged mine by telling me how to write it,hell,that's my job not their's! But even then,there's no stopping people from doing that.
You are right,affection is blatant in your poem,Theres no doubt about that whatsoever. The way you have put your emotions down to writing is really gripping and arresting,When I reached the ending,I wanted to yell out "Tommy don't stop!!" Haha I mean the only thing I didn't like about your poem is the fact that it came to an end!
--Shevaughn.

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Lynn Dye

Mon 30th Dec 2013 23:12

Enjoyed this, Tommy, good one :-)

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David R Mellor

Mon 30th Dec 2013 21:09

thank you Hannah and M.C for your kind words

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Mon 30th Dec 2013 18:45

Beautiful. :)

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Mon 30th Dec 2013 18:44

I LOVE this. I'm new to this website and have been looking at numerous poems but this is the first one I've found that's really caught my attention. Do you have your own blog? I have just created one. Maybe you'd like to see it? http://lifeastoldbymypen.weebly.com/

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Mon 30th Dec 2013 18:42

I really like this, although I'm not so keen on the title. Do you have your own blog? I have just created one. Maybe you'd like to have a look?

http://lifeastoldbymypen.weebly.com/

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Mon 30th Dec 2013 18:38

I'm interested to read that you prefer the first two verses as I personally preferred the last two. I love the concept too.

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Dave Bradley

Mon 30th Dec 2013 17:37

Great questions, nicely put - among the most important questions there are. If 'God is' then clearly something is going on which is beyond human understanding. We do (as a race) appear to expect that we ought to be able to understand everything. Could be aiming too high.

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Dave Bradley

Mon 30th Dec 2013 17:28

That's a familiar feeling and the poem captures it well. Nice one Dave.

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 30th Dec 2013 16:25

Pertinent and challenging.
What sort of "merciful" Father does that to his
Son? And to what purpose? It only adds mystery
to the witty observation by Ogden Nash -
How odd of God
To choose the Jews.
Why didn't He do the job on the Romans - or was
that a tacit admission that Might is Right - on
Earth or in Heaven? OK - I know the Romans had
their day eventually but that was more a matter
of human action or inaction as time went by.
After all, we all love a change! And we all
love a good story too.

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David Cooke

Mon 30th Dec 2013 14:35

Hi Cynthia Glad you got the poems and sorry to hear that you've been unwell. Hope things pick up in the New ear and that you find some stuff in the book you like.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 30th Dec 2013 13:20

Books arrived safely almost immediately. My computer wonked out just before sending you a message, and hasn't recouped until today (incorrect info from experts silenced my Christmas period - not a bad thing - and I was quite ill too, but better now. Better computer access - better me - what's not to like!) I will greatly enjoy your poems. Happy New Year!

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Andy N

Mon 30th Dec 2013 12:54

thanks for the comment m8 over that christmas poem. thankfully it was on a set rate on that day is all i am gonna say lol.

glad you liked it seriously however. bit of a jigsaw poem this one if you know what i mean.

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Andy N

Mon 30th Dec 2013 12:53

thankfully it was on a set rate, nigel. lol.

glad you liked it m8. bit of a jigsaw poem this one if you know what i mean.

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