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just that little bit harder

Heavy hands

on fiery hearts,

gripping tight feelings that don’t last,

up against our own walls

were caught before a new door,

emptying our pockets that were once full,

looking back to step forward

will try not go through it all

and ignore what happened before,

hoping something might change

maybe work better,

so will try just that little bit harder

and win this fight we brought on ourselves.

◄ coming back

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Emma

Mon 6th Jan 2014 02:25

thanks andy for the comment.

ill defs have a look at changing it :)

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Andy N

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 12:12

nice stuff emmy again.

only concern i have here and it's only minor is the first two lines Heavy hands /on heavy hearts. while it works fairly well, i think it's really one line and as one line it's a bit clunky if you know what i mean.. you may want to consider a change for one of the heavies. perhaps wooden hands on heavy hearts or something..

just a suggestion as it's great stuff still.

<Deleted User> (9882)

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 11:52

glad my comment made you chuckle,chuck!x

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Emma

Thu 2nd Jan 2014 02:16

Hey solar winds thanks for your comment :) haha no I'm not 92, it's the year I was born to many people with emmy as their profile name.

<Deleted User> (9882)

Wed 1st Jan 2014 23:34

lets hope your last line proves right!
good poem Emmy.You aint actually 92 are you?
my god! those anti-ageing creams are brill!x

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