The Christmas Party

Pull a cracker
enjoy corny joke
wear silly hat.

Spill vintage wine
tell a secret
no one knew.

Crimson red face
of the person
leaving so abruptly.

Perhaps they might
not come back
now common knowledge.

Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)

Original item by Stockport WoL

Thanks very much for the feedback! See, I kind of preferred solidify, as it seemed to fit better with the numerous images about smoke. Definitely agree on the repetition of night, although the repetition of haze, hazy and hazel was intentional, I guess it didn't come across that way haha.
Thanks again for the feedback, truly appreciated :)

Comment is about Anteros (blog)

Original item by Dorothea

Brilliant!
suggest you change 'solidify'for-

root yourself.

And also I would try not to repeat the same/similar words (ie)night.And hazel/haze/hazy.x

Comment is about Anteros (blog)

Original item by Dorothea

'no wisdom in the lines above'

UH!?..Ged,you must be joking!

A-REALLY-great piece of work.x

Comment is about Rhetoric (blog)

Original item by Ged Thompson

I like the way this rolls of the tongue. very good

Comment is about Advice (blog)

Original item by James Roper

I like this because it is so evocative
'Our eyes were wet and stung'
Fantastic

Comment is about What borders do (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Nice one Andy. Very festive

Comment is about Card Story (A Christmas Poem) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Nat
I love this because of the way it flows so naturally but also because of its wonderful optimism. Hoping you have had a great Christmas. Happy New year

Comment is about This Christmas (blog)

A glass full of the pure stuff! Lovely work!
Steve Smith

Comment is about A Wee Dram (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

Well made!
Steve Smith

Comment is about The Hill Runners (A New Poem) (blog)

Original item by Gary Smillie

Nice one mate, some great festive images! Ho ruddy ho!

Comment is about Card Story (A Christmas Poem) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Paris silent
You require a Paris street,
With the roaring silence chest
While Paris is cold, hostile ..
As a silent funeral, unknown ...
Require fever, anxious, in panic ...
Looking at Hotel "Duplex"
Require road "Emil Zola"
Looking at Hotel "Mirabeau"
Require road "Sever" "Cambronne"
But you're not! There you are!
Looking at "First Hotel" ...
Require rue "Pondishery"
"Motte Piquett" "Piero" coffe "
Looking at "Bonne Nouvelle"
"Petit Duke" There at the Arch of Ludovigut ...
"Aboukir" "Bastije" ... ??
If you are not! Where are you?
A hand with sweet Stroke hair.
As once streets of Tirane
When I was a child, at come in hand with you
It was the most beautiful time of my life
Respire! I understand where are you,,
You feel very close me..I feel
As once ....My Mother...

Comment is about Leon Qafzezi (poet profile)

Original item by Leon Qafzezi

You can find more of my work on line including some performance videos simply by searching for SUBACCHI POET.

Comment is about LOVE (blog)

Original item by David Subacchi

Thanks M.C.

Have a nice day

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

I bet Marie Lloyd and those of a famous time in
the music hall would have done something with
this. Cheeky and consistently enjoyable in a
great tradition.

Comment is about Song - Me Baby ... (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Some honest pain can be understood but some
proof-reading to correct errors might be
appropriate.
Check your words and in the main
You'll be welcome back again.
:-))

Comment is about Fuck You (blog)

Original item by Spoken_Thoughts

Not at all....

On the other side, your thoughts are much more clear about the mysteries that life has for us.

Thanks for sharing

:)

Comment is about Undead (poet profile)

Original item by Undead

Thank you, Graham and Laura for taking the time to help me with your comments and yes, Laura, I had missed the 'to', thanks. I hope to get time to look at it, consciously, and see what might be needed. As a performance piece, it is written on my heart and all changes will take some chiselling!

Nothing daunted, I'm about to stuff a turkey, serve Christmas lunch a day early and go present distributing amongst 3 of my 6 so Shipwreck must wait. Hope you all have a wonderful Christmas!

Comment is about Shipwreck (blog)

Original item by Judi Strega

Oh Annie! I enjoyed this so much when you performed it, especially with that ugly little 'baby' in your arms... what a hoot! You constantly surprise me and I like that!

Comment is about Song - Me Baby ... (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Merry Christmas Natalie!

Comment is about This Christmas (blog)

Hello Jack - thank you for the lovely comment you made about my gannet song.

Comment is about Jack purvis (poet profile)

Original item by Jack purvis

Extends the imagination

Comment is about 22-7-14 11pm. (blog)

Original item by Mikhail Smith

Amusing definitely

Comment is about “Darling! Are you in the bath?” (blog)

Original item by Mikhail Smith

Having just taken up poeting I cannot speak learnedly about content or rhythm. But it created pictures for me

Comment is about Song for a dead gannet (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Merry Christmas John.
Level pegging with the Arse at Christmas ain't soooo bad!
I wonder what 2015 will hold.
I just hope we can keep hold of Harry Kane and not lose him.

Best wishes for a good Christmas to you and yours.

Come on you Spurs!!

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

like the structure to this natalie.

excellent as always from your stuff.

have a great xmas and thanks for your support

Comment is about This Christmas (blog)

lovely

Comment is about Card Story (A Christmas Poem) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

well done andy

Comment is about more poetry published (blog)

Original item by Andy N

This was a naughty one for Christmas, Laura. Glad you liked it. Merry Christmas to you and your loved ones too. Xxx

Comment is about LE PERE FOUETTARD (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks 'Write Out Loud' for your support and kind words, if you'd like to hear our setting of Sassoon's 'The Dug-Out' (read by Siegfried Sassoon himself) and Owen's 'Anthem', here is the YouTube link http://youtu.be/G3KhDx9fjdU Merry Christmas all
Walter Wray (LiTTLe MACHiNe)

Comment is about A happy new year to all - and here's a look back at the poetry of 2014 (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

ohhh! pained poetry!and about the profane language-that really fucking annoys us! We can't stand bastard people who bleedin' swear!

xx

Comment is about Fuck You (blog)

Original item by Spoken_Thoughts

Sorry, about the language. I was really mad.

Comment is about Fuck You (blog)

Original item by Spoken_Thoughts

I like it

Comment is about Dumping a fantasy (blog)

Original item by Alexander Hume

thanks for your lovely comment , the bit you mention is about loss at sea and how we feel open in the presence of nature

Comment is about WHILST THE SEA SINGS PRAYERS (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

A Muslim Calvinist... whatever next.

Comment is about 'Muslim Calvinist' Imtiaz Dharker wins Queen's Gold Medal for Poetry (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

(last four couplets)

....and all the same to you chuck!x

Comment is about This Christmas (blog)

Steve,

Thanks.

As background, this was written end of celebrated big freeze of winter 1962/63 - I'm really that old.

The other protagonist could be pretty cold-hearted, also.

Comment is about Delirium in winter: the destination of snow (blog)

Original item by David Andrew

As for me I always enjoy listening to your poems, to your voice, John. Thank you very much and ...
Merry Christmas!

Comment is about LE PERE FOUETTARD (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

You are so good, M.C.Newberry! Thank you very much for all the wishes. But ... it looks that ... sometimes not everything depends on us.
Merry Christmas!

Comment is about The 22nd of December (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

It's not so easy to make the right choice.And who will tell me if it is good or bad? For me it doesn't really matter if you are Christian or Muslim. There is no a supreme religion or nation.They say that man is God's creation. But...to my oppinion today every person creates himself without waiting for the kind Elf.
Anyway, good poem, I like it.

Comment is about CONSIDER THIS (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Thanks for the reminder about the time of darkest
winter and the slow lengthening of the days to come.
Now - a long-distance note of greeting at
Christmas time -
"May hope and joy return to Ukraine
May its people be free from hardship and pain
May its future burn bright with an unquenchable
flame
And may its children stand proud and rejoice in
its name."
Merry Christmas!

Comment is about The 22nd of December (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

A most unusual production with the sad cruel inevitability of a wild thing meeting death
given a haunting interpretation.
I remember during a hike across the highlands
of Scotland finding the body of a large crow (I
think) that had been caught in a trap (that had
not been inspected as it should have been) and
had died a lonely and protracted death. I
would have kicked the person responsible for that trap and for his neglect! This post brought it back to mind.

Comment is about Song for a dead gannet (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

It's a hard life for us poor men - especially
when women wish it was harder! :-)
One man's mate is another man's poison - if you'll
forgive the misquote.

Comment is about A Fool (blog)

Original item by Spoken_Thoughts

Hi Anthony! Thanks for kind comments on my gannet song.Hope you have a great Christmas!

http://youtu.be/n0D48VeegOg

;)

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi Laura - thanks for the lovely comments on my gannet poem. I managed to record it myself using a programme called Garage Band on a friends computer. It's the first time I've recorded effects and stuff myself - loved doing the echoes! The only instrument I used was a little child's xylophone, just tapping two or three notes. Setting up all the echoes you get lots of accidental rhythms going on. Hope you have a great Christmas! xx

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

And Amen to those lovely sentiments Noris!
Same greetings to you and yours-ENJOY!xx

Comment is about Christmas... (blog)

Original item by Noris Roberts

thanks for the kind comments on 'a wee dram' Gray - pleased that you liked it - cheers mate ;-)

Comment is about Gray Nicholls (poet profile)

Original item by Gray Nicholls

thanks for the kind comments on 'a wee dram' mate - here's a toast to you and yours for the festive season - hic ;-)

Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

thanks for the kind comments on 'a wee dram' MC - I will raise a glass and cheer you this very evening - hic ;-)

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

thanks for the comments on 'wee dram' Laura - yes, I reduced the swearing at the Old Courts as I knew it would offend your delicate ears ;-)

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor