<Deleted User> (9882)
Mon 25th Aug 2014 10:38
'ocean roaring in the distance
at a rhythm too lovely for words'..yummy line!
-lovely airy poem.
Hope you keep on 'feeling the fall' Candice.x
Comment is about I Feel Fall (blog)
Original item by Candice Reineke
Anaya
Mon 25th Aug 2014 10:04
Jolene, beautiful metaphor of your memories woven into stars :) I'd love to hear more about the line "That is you or I falling to harmonize" and the very last stanza.
Comment is about Awoken (blog)
Original item by Jolene94
Thanks Jolene! I live in hot, humid Florida. So any semblance of a fall is amazing :)
Comment is about I Feel Fall (blog)
Original item by Candice Reineke
Your poem took me to a peaceful place, I enjoyed reading it!
Comment is about I Feel Fall (blog)
Original item by Candice Reineke
I wrote this kind of fast, it honestly was a whole different poem at first but it got erased so i wrote this instead. If you wish to know the meaning just leave a comment below. I feel as though I may not have written enough to convey my message.
Comment is about Awoken (blog)
Original item by Jolene94
Love this poem you read it so well at The Tudor ... loved the line chip of the old block and. not giving up ... the rawness and yet the simplicity of rocks ... rough ... smooth... she stuffs them in her pockets .... irresistible ... brilliant poem xx
Comment is about Turning Over Stones (blog)
Original item by Isobel
As with all my poems, they are just poems. So I'm not going anywhere, just yet.
Comment is about The end (blog)
Original item by Biscuit
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 24th Aug 2014 22:55
As always, thank you for your comments. They are very much appreciated. A philosopher? I don't think so - maybe more a hop scotch way of seeing the world ;-)
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Kenneth Eaton-Dykes
Sun 24th Aug 2014 22:36
Hi Shirley-Anne
I wrote this deliberate piece of nonsense in a cynical frame of mind for which I apologise, to see what sort of reaction it would attract.
And comment-wise it's done better than my usual stuff. Where have I gone wrong? LOveryL.
Comment is about Shirley-Anne Kennedy (poet profile)
Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy
Philipos
Sun 24th Aug 2014 21:38
Hi. Interesting and thought-provoking this one. Think I might have seen somebody of this ilk in my time or perhaps more than one. Enjoyed.
Comment is about Walking (blog)
Original item by Twilbury Wist
Thank you Daniel and Solar Winds. Appreciated. A cause close to my heart.
Comment is about Pre-Loved Skin (blog)
Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy
Great repetition. "Flip-flops and bottle tops" - brilliant!
Comment is about FLIP-FLOPS AND BOTTLE TOPS (blog)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
Philipos
Sun 24th Aug 2014 17:32
Hi Cynthia, I have responded to your kind comments regarding 'Bottoms Up' on my poetry site. Many thanks. P.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thanks for kind comment on Northern Soul poem, Daniel.
Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
Thanks for the comments guys! Much appreciated. Encouraging and constructive x
Comment is about Nero to Zero (blog)
Original item by Edie Hope
This reads like a prayer Cynthia.
Comment is about The Blessed Man (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Absolutely hilarious. IMO, the observers and thinkers always make the best writers; they can scorn all styles and dictates to do their own original thing. Go for it, Edie, and never self-deprecate for effect. You are some kind of talented!
Comment is about Everyone's a writer these days... (blog)
Original item by Edie Hope
Love it! The poetic skill in developing the minutiae to prod and develop the big social picture is superb. What an eye for detail that drives a theme instead of curbing it, with sharp, raw insight.
I am so glad you've chosen to take part on WOL. And it is fantastic that you are not trying to be 'good' because that would mean that you might be artistically choked by other people's opinions before you ever pick up a pen (so to speak.)
Comment is about Nero to Zero (blog)
Original item by Edie Hope
My sentiments exactly!
Age shall not wither me if I can help it.
Comment is about The Blessed Man (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Once again, a very poetic grasp of experience and its personal expression. If 'doubled with dreams' is an accident, it is sure a good one; the effect is excellent. But I do think you mean 'quiet' and not 'quite'.
Most people like a name, and a face too, to relate with. It does get a bit vexing, because some names are silly pseudo's, and that really annoys me personally.
I get the feeling that English is not your first language. Not sure why.
Comment is about Wide Awake (blog)
I'd rather be old (older than I am now) and glad - thanks.
I might even invest in a bidet! :-)
Comment is about A for Apathy (blog)
Original item by J F Keane
This deserves more appreciative comments. The theme is excellent, and well presented. I wonder if the long lines are a deterrent, looking perhaps 'too prosy'. There are many areas where a break/turn could be used to great effect. But that's just window-dressing; the poetry is really there, and line breaks are very subjective.
Comment is about All too late (blog)
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sun 24th Aug 2014 10:33
Good to hear you are so active with your war
poem project/recordings. You are in good
company. My brother recently gave me a double
CD by "Show of Hands" with music and poems of
"The Great War", the latter read by Jim Carter
and his wife Imelda Staunton. The Sunday Express gave it a big thumbs up!
Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Hi Cynthia
You're absolutely right about 'look at me' it is about looking in a mirror. Thanks for your comments.
I really like your latest, 'blessed man' particularly in the first verse
'hail to the morning I'm not dead yet'.
It was good to chat on Tuesday. see you again next month.
Martin
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Nice, I enjoyed that one.
Comment is about The Blessed Man (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sorry TC are there some typos in this or am I reading it wrong? Probably me! fail/fill?
Apologies if I'm wrong.
Graham
Comment is about Left Luggage (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Where the heck have you been? This is a very pleasant surprise! It is indeed good to see you back.
Graham
Comment is about Force of Nature (blog)
Original item by sian howell
Hello Biscuit,
Welcome to Write Out Loud, we hope you are enjoying the site and we're really looking forward to reading some of your work. I know that you will be warmly welcomed by other WOL-ers too.
Its good to see that you've already uploaded a picture of yourself, it’s really good to see what our fellow poets look like.
Have a good look around, there’s always lots going on and if you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free to do so, it’s often the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
There’s usually somebody who’ll help you out with any problems that you might encounter, so just ask and someone will get back to you.
WOL is a friendly, creative and unassuming place, so welcome from all of us once again.
The Write Out Loud Team.
Comment is about Biscuit (poet profile)
Original item by Biscuit
Hello NB,
Welcome to Write Out Loud, we hope you are enjoying the site and we're really looking forward to reading some of your work. I know that you will be warmly welcomed by other WOL-ers too.
It would be good if you could upload a picture of yourself, it’s really good to see what our fellow poets look like.
Have a good look around, there’s always lots going on and if you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free to do so, it’s often the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
There’s usually somebody who’ll help you out with any problems that you might encounter, so just ask and someone will get back to you.
WOL is a friendly, creative and unassuming place, so welcome from all of us once again.
The Write Out Loud Team.
Comment is about New Beginnings (poet profile)
Original item by New Beginnings
Philipos
Sat 23rd Aug 2014 20:38
Lovely to read a quality poem Cynthia. Enjoyed v much. P.
Comment is about The Blessed Man (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thank you so much Daniel for yours comments on 'Memory'
much appreciated
Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
Blooming brilliant. Such a varied repertoire of experience and exposure - mostly, I hope, in fiction and film. You are really funny.
Comment is about Belloc rewrites Sredni Vashtar (blog)
Original item by Marnanel Thurman
Very clever and funny. These 'elephants' are famous creatures, are they not? Is that the connection to Hilaire Belloc? (I'm fishing through my mind - not the Internet - and the waters are very muddy.)
Comment is about The six blind elephants and the man (blog)
Original item by Marnanel Thurman
This is really good, using powerful, evocative imagery controlled with great finesse so that the tragedy is clearly twofold - for your uncle and yourself.
The ending is superb. May I ask whether you might have meant -
'Did you expect me to follow you
there
as well?'
'here' seems to indicate that 'death' is shared. I could be wrong. It's just a thought.
I don't know why others have not commented on such an excellent piece of work. Perhaps they don't like that you have not identified yourself in any way.
Comment is about Hanging (blog)
It always takes two or three readings to bring the ideas together, but once connected, the impact is intense. I 'hip-hop' my way through the lines for the best effect. A true philosopher you certainly are.
Comment is about The Bone Shaker (blog)
Original item by Twilbury Wist
I love this - you weave imagination out of and into the picture. You, yourself, must greatly enjoy the painting first, before you sink your thoughts into the possible ethos of the painter.
Comment is about Pink Tree (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
This has great emotion and an inherent feel for the words to express it. It is a very large theme and kudos to you for taking it on, for sharing.
Line breaks are very personal, I know, but I do wonder if thoughts need to be quite so separated. It is written as one would read it aloud, with the emphases and pauses for best effect. Perhaps it is just me, that I find many poems on the page far more fragmented than necessary, like it's just the current 'in' thing.
Thanks for checking out my own works.
Comment is about It's Happening (blog)
'the serendipity of Providence' - now there is a thought - happy happenstance juxtaposed against the presumed beneficence of God - pretty contradictory -
But the poem has that particular charm of thoughts whirling around before slumber. And you have made some considered connections of ideas. It is very interesting.
Comment is about Life is boobytrapped (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
This has a good point to make, which isn't really clear until the very end. At least, I think it's clear. This is a 'mirror' poem, isn't it? Please set me right if I'm way off track - with apologies. As I read I was thinking 'reflective kid' and then 'reflective parent' until I finally settled on 'reflective self'.
I enjoyed your company on Tuesday evening.
Comment is about Look at me (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
The picture immediately draws you in to the title Armistice (Gods of war)... spot on!
'The ink upon this document
dries twice as fast as blood
that seeps into this continent
and mixes with the mud'...
Great work Ian.
Comment is about Armistice (Gods Of War) (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Candice - you have a great body of poetic work. 'All I want to do is write' and 'T'hell with Haikus' have a great inner warmth when I read them. 'Thinking of me?' and 'Discontented Diabetic' show a completely different aspect. I really enjoy your writing.
Comment is about Candice Reineke (poet profile)
Original item by Candice Reineke
'Drop dead gorgeous,
second hand beauty,
worn with wickedness,
dripping with cruelty'
Another cracker Shirley-Anne.
Comment is about Pre-Loved Skin (blog)
Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy
I concur with Tommy's comments Andy. I remember the news clips and tv coverage relating to him. DNA is a wonderful addition to forensic science. If only his case could have been investigated thouroughly and the DNA breakthrough earlier than the nineties.
A superb piece of writing to a most tragic sigtuation Andy.
Comment is about For Stefan Kiszko (blog)
Original item by Andy N
<Deleted User> (9882)
Mon 25th Aug 2014 10:44
one 'clean up job'that would make me personally grateful to WHOEVER did it on my behalf.
(suggest 'soiled' beds) x
Comment is about A for Apathy (blog)
Original item by J F Keane