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It's Happening

It's happening.

 

I didn't think it would

To me, I

Blinkered myself

From harsh realities

I didn't want to see -

 

Plunged myself

Head long in sands

As, unbeknownst to me,

Those particles beneath my feet

Were leaking out into

Some secret

Ether.

 

When I was young

I had a naive notion that

All parts were mechanised,

Like robot cogs

Spinning bright, defiantly

Against the clock;

 

Reasoned -

Guilded fragments

Could not

Be hurt;

Metallic chambers

Simply rot.

 

But here,

Another family gathering

I notice you -

More back than forward

Looking now

As, cruelly whipping sheets,

You show the truth of how

Those innards actually

Are vile;

Vulnerable and sick

 

Like a mad magician

Unhinging his trick.

 

While left

Bereft,

Betrayed, I'm

Brimming with misguided tears

That bust at dams of innocence

Sweeping currents

Swilling at gone years;

 

Marooning me

On rough, ramshackled rafts

Of memories

And laughter

Jeered and

Past.

 

Then,

Lost -

You find me,

Washed up,

Sand grains later;

 

Hold me

Let the tide lap

Gently on your chest.

 

And finally we see as one, all that is left.

 

And find peace in the magic gone.

◄ Shiny Red Shoes

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 23rd Aug 2014 16:01

This has great emotion and an inherent feel for the words to express it. It is a very large theme and kudos to you for taking it on, for sharing.

Line breaks are very personal, I know, but I do wonder if thoughts need to be quite so separated. It is written as one would read it aloud, with the emphases and pauses for best effect. Perhaps it is just me, that I find many poems on the page far more fragmented than necessary, like it's just the current 'in' thing.

Thanks for checking out my own works.

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Andy N

Tue 19th Aug 2014 12:33

almost reads like a story this one, natalie. really draws you in. excellent.

<Deleted User> (9882)

Sun 17th Aug 2014 21:50

worse?....tell me about it! one that gets my nipples in a knot...believe it or not(Ha!).....descicion...desciscion...


oh yeah!...decision!..(THAT little sod)

Chears'm'deers....;0).x

<Deleted User> (9882)

Sun 17th Aug 2014 21:17

heckofalotof hard work gone into this excellent poem.Well done Natalie!

(I too nearly always slip up on that one-'naive')x

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