ian this is fantastic, like the song tupelo by nick cave mixed with deadwood. i totally get the underlying themes but even taken as a descriptive piece it is wonderful.
Comment is about Tumbleweed (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Wed 6th Apr 2016 09:13
Lynn,you must do a poem on this 'Panama papers' scandal.Can you believe how bloody hard faced these people are,even after being exposed! grrrr! Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about SCROUNGERS! (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Thanks for your kind comments on my poem, Boys and girls, Ray.
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
Hi Tommy, cheers for your comments on Scroungers. I like your profile piccie, and have to say that yes, I voted for Corbyn too.
Incidentally, I saw him in person yesterday giving a terrific speech at Harlow, pressing for all the important things for the majority, instead of the elite few. Power to the people!
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
<Deleted User> (13740)
Wed 6th Apr 2016 02:12
I like your poetry Martin especially returning to something she once saw allowing her to break all the rules break what had become law :)
Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
Original item by Martin Elder
I would not seek to separate Christians from their Bibles;
Religious belief should not be a cause for blame
But I stand shoulder to shoulder with any free-thinking man
Against those who maim and murder in its name.
just saying *wink*
Comment is about SEPARATION (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thanks very much for your kind and supportive comments on 'Catechism' Lynn - much appreciated
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
thanks for the comments and thoughts on 'Catechism' MC - we can only hope that we would be prepared to make that stand - but until we are tested, I guess we just don't know
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
thanks for the insightful comments on 'Catechism' Harry - yes, it was a very sad tale - but, in a way, it just made the poem more poignant and relative - it is only in what we say and our own actions that we can and should be judged - I think the victim in Glasgow was a truly honourable man..
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Thanks to everyone for the comments and likes
Comment is about Catechism (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Cheers, Tommy, thanks for your kind comments.
Actually, I wondered if it would have sounded better if I had sworn, lol, particularly about those paper clips! :o)
Comment is about SCROUNGERS! (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
What a great rhythm to this Ronnie. A small masterpiece of analysis and quite a deep concept all round. It can't be faulted in my view. It has humour too. It could be used almost as a reference manual for macho behaviour.
Comment is about Boys and girls (blog)
Original item by Ronnie Leek 1
STOP PRESS - due to unforeseen circs at the club, the April event will be Thurs 21st (3ed tues after that) thank you
Comment is about Write Out Loud Bolton is back - at new venue tonight (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Lynn Hamilton
Tue 5th Apr 2016 21:03
Thanks Martin. If in doubt, cover with woodchip and paint over. I have a feeling woodchip might have a resurgence but with much bigger chips (would have great texture). x
Comment is about Woodchip (blog)
Sh*t wind and paraffin! By the time I logged on I've forgotten what I wanted to say.
Comment is about Dotage (blog)
Original item by Dusty- Kennedy
Comment is about 00robin2.jpg (photo)
Original item by Dusty- Kennedy
Apologies and thanks for pointing out the spelling blip M.C.Newberry.
thanks so much for your comments
many thanks tommy
Comment is about Dotage (blog)
Original item by Dusty- Kennedy
In the late 18th century, the emergent America relied heavily on Mediterranean trade but that was fraught
with risk and danger. The captain and his charges
aboard a US merchant ship that was boarded by the
Barbary coast pirates (Morocco., Algeria, Tunis and
Tripoli - with their allegiance to the Ottoman Empire)
were held captive for 10 years. It has been estimated
that well over a million Christian captives were taken
between 1530 and 1780 by these Muslim autocracies
during raids on ships and lands beyond their own. The
UK and France were left alone because they could afford
to pay a "tribute" and it suited them to do so. The
depredations ceased when the US approved funds for a
punitive naval expedition to confront and defeat the
offending lands and their rulers during the following
decades. The line from the US Marine Corps anthem
"From the Halls of Montezuma to the shores of Tripoli"
- has the last words recalling that important victory.
Comment is about Heaven (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
This is fun - and so many of us will identify with "the here
and now" loss. My long-term memory seems to click in
when I'm lying in bed, putting off getting up!
In closing, I mentally edit your last line as -
"Just lost the here and now."
Comment is about Dotage (blog)
Original item by Dusty- Kennedy
The "holy teachings" upon which the prominent religions
base their beliefs were created when the world and
humanity were beset by fear and ignorance; when those
who could read and write were the religious orders and
even the nobility had to rely on them in that respect.
Ancient mankind around their campfires needed the
prospect of something better beyond their senses.
Now, the world - changed by science, its knowledge
widened and enlightened with the years, should contain
humanity that has kept up with and adapted to these
changes, able to select and match the ideas of two thousand years ago with what has accumulated in the
meantime. It is, of course, nonsense to take the stance
that this can't happen. It IS nonsense to take the view
that it SHOULDN'T happen. Adaptability - even in seeing
old writing with new eyes - is hardly a sin but rather a
blueprint for erudition and evolution. Religion comes
within its scope without its "positive values" being lost.
The sin is to go backwards - not forwards - and that is
where the absence of free-thinking is to be deplored
in a world that moved to reaching the heavens and not
just praying to them.
Comment is about SEPARATION (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Your last two lines sum up very many people's issues on this subject Dusty. Well put. Tommy
Comment is about Dotage (blog)
Original item by Dusty- Kennedy
...and you didn't even swear, well done. You'll expect me to like this work Lynn and I do. Tommy
Comment is about SCROUNGERS! (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Thanks Ray :) TS Eliot hahaa :D
Ooo I like your comment that it gives it a Tom and Jerry feel! Fred Quimby era, obviously! ;)
And cheers Steve :D I may well learn this one then!
Comment is about Dante's Cat (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
TS Eliot hahaa :D
Ooo I like your comment that it gives it a Tom and Jerry feel! Fred Quimby era, obviously! ;)
Thanks Ray :)
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
or,
I would not care to separate musselman from Christian;
?
I gather the saintly way is pretty much a universal: like bigotry and dogma. I don't think we will ever be spared the fanatics, but what do we with them? Forgiveness... that's hard!
Comment is about SEPARATION (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thanks Steve, I wrote another Batman piece to the prompt – Unlikely Couples.
BATMAN AND ALICE
wOW! sPlaT! How did I get here? KerPow!
"Welcome to Wonderland," said Alice.
KerPlunk! Holy BatMobile! What is this place?
"You must have fallen down the rabbit hole," said Alice.
Where's my BatPhone? Where's my BatMobile gone?
I bet CatWoman had a hand in this!
Suffering tadpoles! How do I get outta here?
"Just defeat the Queen of Hearts," said Alice.
Ain't that the broad that made some tarts?
Blam! She sounds like some kinda poker hand!
I'll need an ace up my sleeve to beat her.
"Quick, drink some of this poison," said Alice.
Bah! You must think I'm the Joker! Or something?
This is darker than a Gotham subway!
PussyGalore! You've got big rats down here!
"That was my Cheshire Cat," said Alice.
23042+10
Comment is about Day Three (blog)
Original item by Andy Sewina aka Danny Wise
Hello Harry
Thank you for your lovely compliment.
As for the Panama stuff, yes, you have a point, I think another poem may be coming on soon!
Comment is about SCROUNGERS! (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
I really love this poem, Harry.
While I think it would work without the last piece, I do like its inclusion and can understand why you have become fond of it.
I think the last verse works in either format to be honest. Maybe you wrote it differently in the original as it tends to drift into fantasy. In which case, I suppose it depends on whether you want it to stand out as different, or whether you prefer it to fit in.
Sorry, I'm not much help, lol :-)
Comment is about Afterwards...(again) (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Thank you for your comment on my profile. Much appreciated x
Comment is about kimafia Jones (poet profile)
Original item by kimafia Jones
I loved this piece....it helps me view my ideas for writing from a different perspective... Again it's a very lovely and inspiring piece
Comment is about Helen (poet profile)
Original item by Helen
Thank you Martin. That really means a lot. I am only just starting out, but it is something that I would very much like to do once I've built up my confidence a bit. I think at the moment I'm probably writing too much and that's something that I will have to work on.
I massively appreciate the feedback, thank you
Comment is about Into The Wilderness (blog)
Original item by Matt
Thank you Steve, M.C. and Stephanie. Wolfgar, remember what Wilde said about sarcasm. M.C. we should also remember that the Moors celebrated life with poetry and that Moorish rule was not sectarian - Al-Andalus was a place where free thinking Jewish Sephardic philosophers such as Maimonides (born in Cordova) flourished and where Muslim, Jewish and Christian scholars worked side by side in seeking to preserve the Greek heritage. This was at time when most of Christian Europe was still steeped in ignorance and superstition. The Moors also had a lively sense of humour:
The Inconsistent
When I sent you my melons, you cried out with scorn,
They ought to be heavy and wrinkled and yellow;
When I offered myself, whom those graces adorn,
You flouted, and called me an ugly old fellow.
Comment is about Heaven (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
I take your point there, it's more meant to be about perception of him in media as this confrontational personality than his real traits. I actually like Corbin, he's very honest. I just think perception of him in the view of those who dislike him is that he's blunt and doesn't think through his comments. Perhaps there's a better way to get that point across though. Thanks
Comment is about masterdebate (blog)
Original item by Matt
Ha! All too true, Steve.
Comment is about In the spirit of Leona... (blog)
Original item by steve pottinger
This a fab poem Lynn, and to think my parents loved woodchip ,it covered a multitude of uneven surfaces and anything that you wanted to hide. I have to confess that even I have used it in the past. But it was momentary lapse of judgement.!
Comment is about Woodchip (blog)
DL - to carry on from Harry's comment -
"There's something of a literary fib
In this lament for an idle nib"
Most enjoyable.
Comment is about The Pen (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
I can absolutely imagine you doing this one live!
And "shittens" is definitely entering my vocabulary!
Comment is about Dante's Cat (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
I echo M.C.'s thoughts on this. Lovely.
Comment is about Some Small Whisper (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
I have written enough "lyrics" and changed them to know
the doubt and hope to improve that can beset the
endlessly striving imagination.
Whilst new doesn't always mean better, in this instance
the style as shown here appeals for its dreamlike
consistency - the form being more appropriate to the
subject matter IMHO.
In the final analysis, perhaps the writer should write to
please him/herself. After all, authors have to live with
their words when the world has turned the page and moved
on.
Comment is about Afterwards...(again) (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
A thoughtful piece, taking the long view of history. Nicely done.
Comment is about Heaven (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
This made me smile. Especially the line
"Kerplop! Thunk! Blam! One thump, Pow! Swish!"
Perfect. :-)
Comment is about Day Three (blog)
Original item by Andy Sewina aka Danny Wise
I feel I should point out that a good friend of this website has just nominated Write Out Loud in the new wild card category. Just sayin' ...
Comment is about Deadline nears for Saboteur award nominations (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
This one surely ranks with T S Eliot, Laura. The onomatopoeia gives it a Tom and Jerry feel; a sort of "hit and myth." oops.
Ray
Comment is about Dante's Cat (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Stu Buck
Wed 6th Apr 2016 09:30
a touch of dylan thomas here i think, if only in the lines;
the log splitter's axe
the forceful blow
or the ravage of tooth and claw
lightning striking a shivering moor.
which are wonderful.
Comment is about HOW SHOCK TRAVELS (blog)
Original item by ray pool