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Tableau 3: Tempest

 

2am came to call.

Storm began to flicker, rise,

raiding every cell of wellness,

strength and hope

of morning light.

 

Her chest a bellows,

body bidding;

battles raging inwardly,

breaking down defence

on every side.

 

Shadows cough,

calling Time, spitting

past is present,

though the history is pushed aside,

ignored in a room too small

for the enormity

of now.

 

Tempest swells the brass intent. 

The King and I sit hand in hand   

in fierce light, while strings shimmer

syncopating rhythms

as the bellows break

to render final bidding.

 

With tiny tings,

a winter ends

 

Sibelius calls forth

a new beginning.

 

 

 

 

◄ Tableau 2: Night of Years

Tableau 4: The Melting of the Ice ►

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Laura Taylor

Mon 24th Aug 2015 12:14

Ha - now you REALLY got it Steve! I ALMOST used the actual words 'crescendo' and 'diminuendo' but they seemed ultimately too clumsy and obvious, so I tried to build it a different way and it pleases me like you wouldn't believe that it worked, that you felt it.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment - your opinion means an awful lot to me, as I think you're a brilliant writer.

Steve Smith

Sun 23rd Aug 2015 20:41

I really like this -you have modulated it like a crescendo and diminuendo in a piece of music -I love the image in"history....is ignored/ in a room too small /for the enormity of now"
Steve Smith

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Laura Taylor

Thu 20th Aug 2015 09:24

Wow - thank you Cynth! :)

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 19th Aug 2015 16:10

A sheer pleasure to read and re-read, just to absorb all the nuances of style and imagery. Your metaphors are always mind-grabbing, and the musical assonance of your chosen diction 'sings' all through the work, connecting even stanza to stanza. Very 'polished' in the highest sense of the word. If such comes straight from your brain, I can only groan with envy.

Well, at least Dylan Thomas and T.S. Eliot did constant revisions. I can take some comfort.

A brilliant 'opus' you have created.

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Laura Taylor

Wed 19th Aug 2015 14:57

Thanks chaps - appreciate you taking the time to read and very glad you enjoyed it.

Haha Stu - well, there it is, eh? Once the poem is out in the world, it belongs not only to me, but to the reader, and is there for their interpretation. It's funny though isn't it? I thought it was glaringly obvious what the series was about. Didn't think it poetic enough. Huh :)

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Gray Nicholls

Wed 19th Aug 2015 13:01

excellent Laura. Simply.. wow..

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Stu Buck

Wed 19th Aug 2015 10:28

i love this. 'tempest swells the brass intent.' is as attractive a line as 'cellar door' ever was. it just rolls so beautifully off the tongue and in the mind. fanboy moment aside, the whole thing is building to such a nice climax. i have so many theories as to where this is going, each time i reread it i think something else. at the moment, im reading it as sibelius soundtracks reincarnation and even if im off the mark by a mile thats what i love about poetry.

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Laura Taylor

Wed 19th Aug 2015 09:40

I'm going to repeat this note in case anyone happens upon one of these poems at a time.

This is the fourth part of a series of five interconnecting poems. Recent events in my life were preceded by hearing Finlandia, by Jean Sibelius, on the radio, and it so completely described how I was feeling that it took me over, and informs the whole series.

As a big nod to Sibelius, I've decided to use a loosely-based symphonic structure, so the parts are laid out like this:

The Melting of the Ice

Movements:

1. Prelude
2. Tableau 1: Return of the Snow Queen
3. Tableau 2: Night of Years
4. Tableau 3: Tempest
5. Tableau 4: The Melting of the Ice

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