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Trevor Alexander

Wed 7th Mar 2018 15:34

Thanks Keith. Looking out the window, it could almost be spring, but I'm not entirely convinced yet! ?

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keith jeffries

Wed 7th Mar 2018 15:12

Trevor, thank you indeed for a beautifully crafted poem which filled my imagination to capacity. Keith

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keith jeffries

Wed 7th Mar 2018 15:04

MC., thank you for this comment. I am not at liberty to disclose the nature of the crime but it is one of the worst in the book. Yet what you say is very true. Stones have been thrown by many and he exercised no self control. His soul is in mortal peril. Redemption or none? It is indeed a dilema. Thank you again. Keith

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 7th Mar 2018 14:45

Which begs this question I put to you,
This miserable man - what did he do?
We are prey to demons from without and within,
And are today's stone throwers so free of sin?
But then again we must know self-control,
Or risk knowing the fall and ruin of the soul.

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 7th Mar 2018 14:32

This is a welcome endorsement of what we already know -
laughter is the best medicine!

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Hugh

Wed 7th Mar 2018 12:35

An amazing masterpiece of words and rhyme ,transmitting vividly what happened straight to our hearts.

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keith jeffries

Wed 7th Mar 2018 10:03

Hello Michael,
Your two last poems are the most eloquent expressions of love that I have read in a long time. Well done. This is poetry straight from the heart. Thank you. Keith

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Wed 7th Mar 2018 08:59

sounds like my worst nightmare and one that I have all too often suffered having thought and suggested wouldn't it be nice if we all went for a meal out on Sunday....

the smoking ban did for many pubs what Beeching did for the railways and the rest of them turned to grub to keep them afloat. Now we pile in with our raincoats, kids, dogs, grannies, Hunter wellies, walking sticks and raucous disregard-for-others attitudes to tuck into poncified, overpriced, served on a slab of slate or wood gastro-tosh. At least I don't have the recently bereaved ex-husband to contend with.

Well described Ray, a sort of cross between a Tom Sharpe novel and a Beryl Cook painting which I sincerely hope is a compliment!? Col.

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Wed 7th Mar 2018 08:28

The very best of luck with that Stu. Just to add to Suki's comment I had Jeffrey Eugenides in mind when I read this poem. Well, however and wherever it comes from, it's all good stuff. Fingers crossed for the funding. Col.

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Wed 7th Mar 2018 08:17

Hi Martin, I just wanted to elaborate further on my comment as I didn't want it to sound like I was talking about people with diagnosed mental health issues in regards to alcohol consumption. I hope it didn't come across that way. What I was trying to say was that I have known a number of people who continue(d) to drink quite heavily in social situations and indeed at home to unwind well into their mid and later life. But as I said, each to their own, it was just an observation in relation to your poem. All the best, Colin.

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Chris Bainbridge

Wed 7th Mar 2018 07:52

An epic Eve, well done! Clever and entertaining in equal measure - a worthy tribute to "our friend" Victoria.

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Vanessa Grosz

Wed 7th Mar 2018 01:29

Thank you so much for your comments. I really appreciate them.

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suki spangles

Tue 6th Mar 2018 23:13

Dear all,

What can I say? Pretty humbling to win PotW, and your feedback and comments are much appreciated. Magic!
Really made my week!

Suki

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suki spangles

Tue 6th Mar 2018 23:11

Hi Ja'Net,

Thanks so much for your observations and kind feedback ~ appreciated.

All the best,
Suki

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Martin Elder

Tue 6th Mar 2018 22:58

Thanks to Ruby, Pat and Charlotte for liking and to Colin, Hannah, Suki and Stu for commenting

Colin I always appreciate what you describe as waffle, you are right about people who sadly resort to alcohol to find help with their mental health

hey Hannah thank you that you find it so uplifting I remember 19 as being a real devil may care time for me and what I describe here was my friend and I going out for a day showing a couple of French girls the delights of Portsmouth

Suki you have quoted one of my favourite poets. I intend to live as long as possible in order to make my children's life as much as a misery for as long as I can. Well that's what I tell them. I'm not really that miserable

Thanks Stu for your encouragement. There is always the danger that I can make some of my poems a bit to sugary., so I have to work at it.
Hope to see you again sometime this year
Cheers mate

Blessings to all
and thank you all again

Martin

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Martin Elder

Tue 6th Mar 2018 22:46

Brilliant poem Suki. Really makes you stop and think about technology and the gathering if data about this that and every darn thing. Agree with Stu an excellent interview.
Well done young sir. Good to see you get POTW again. well deserved

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suki spangles

Tue 6th Mar 2018 22:40

Hi Stu,

This poem reminds me a little of 90s Douglas Coupland or Brett Easton Ellis, actually more the latter. Perhaps an excerpt from his "The Informers" novel.

It's interesting that you say this poem was inspired from a dream you had because that's how it came across too. Nice one!

Suki

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keith jeffries

Tue 6th Mar 2018 22:40

MC., thank you indeed for this additional information. It is much appreciated. Keith

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Stu Buck

Tue 6th Mar 2018 22:12

cheers guys. i dreamt about the lawn the other night. something horrifying and shapeless that was stealing children from a circular room with 5 safe areas and one exposed bed for the child who had performed badly during testing. the dream itself was completely surreal (as dreams are) and wouldnt have translated at all well. so i just bunged the lawn in to something i was already writing.

thanks brian, i appreciate you reading and completely understand the piece not clicking with you.

oh yeah colin, i am starting to write more stories, i like the surreal flow of my thoughts, i feel they fit quite nicely in to prose as well as poetry. ive just started applying for my masters actually, so many more creative writing exercises ahead (depending on whether i get funding which is a big IF unfortunately!)

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raypool

Tue 6th Mar 2018 21:58

Thanks Martin and Kevin, I got the idea to repeat the lines as a sort of incantation, to be as simple as possible , so a song could come out of it , absolutely; though I don't try songwriting. I don't know why I put refugees in there, but it seemed appropriate somehow. I agree Kevin as a song it would need some extending.

David, that could work in essence, a devious conclusion. The apples could easily be metaphors for labouring itself. There is certainly a twist in your interpretation - I plead not guilty, as I based it on a particular old fella my mum used to buy apples from. But time passes, and the world grows more involved I guess!

Thanks Col. Scrumping was a joy, and we had a tiny orchard near me as a kid - UNATTENDED!

Hannah, it is good that we bring unique views to poems, and build ideas and dreams upon them; very flattering thank you.

Cheers Suki. I think i've covered your points above; it is tempting to reconsider it now as a song. I'll come back to it and maybe put piano accompaniment to it.

Stu, again the idea of a song speaks, but with Sandy Denny onboard; wow that is a compliment. The best for sure. Thanks so much.
Many thanks for your likes Ruby and Pat.

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raypool

Tue 6th Mar 2018 21:42

This sounds like a chemical lawn derivative taken orally which produces hallucinations - but that doesn't of course explain it Stu. There is a sort of seventies horror flavour, with that clapperboard house with the three attic windows (can't recall it now). Murky and enjoyable in a shivery way. Does blood come from the taps? Tabitha is a scary name - too perfect to be true. Don't eat the magic mushrooms.

Ray

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Tom Doolan

Tue 6th Mar 2018 21:02

Hi M.C. - He was a true sportsman. His achievement will not be surpassed. Thanks for your feedback.

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Tue 6th Mar 2018 20:06

Stuart I love the last 2 lines...the rest of it is a bit mystifying for me I'm afraid.

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Tue 6th Mar 2018 19:50

quite a contrast from 'Patriot'. I like writers who can slip from one style style to another whilst exploring different emotions and landscapes. Very enjoyable. Thanks, Colin.

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Tue 6th Mar 2018 19:46

I'm not sure of the right words to compliment you on this but I like it and I think it's good. The repetition of 'I'm an American' had me thinking of Gil Scott-Heron and James Brown but only as reference points of which there are undoubtedly many and I'm by no means an expert. Your writing has real punch which I admire greatly. Thanks for sharing. Colin.

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Tue 6th Mar 2018 19:35

I've read this several times today and each time, like Pat, I head off in different directions. Any chance you could write me a whole novel like this? Col.

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Ja'Net McDonald

Tue 6th Mar 2018 19:20

Quite compelling. Love the fresh perspective. The poem has a type of catch 22 double helix structure:will we be more concerned aware when we have 3D television and can see theach world's tragedies right in our living room? Yet, if/when we do own that technology, will we have hearts and minds in tune with those trapped in suffering? Would we even care? Simply masterful writing! Well done!

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John Marks

Tue 6th Mar 2018 19:06

Thank you Martin. Appreciated. John

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Nicola Beckett

Tue 6th Mar 2018 17:37

Thanks Emer a little bit of anger and passion best to put that anger away and forgive Xx

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Nicola Beckett

Tue 6th Mar 2018 17:36

It's OK x

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Jon

Tue 6th Mar 2018 16:02

A breathtaking piece of work. One of the best poems I've read in a long time. Reminds me of Laurie Anderson a bit

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220August

Tue 6th Mar 2018 14:08

Thanks, Hannah. Glad you liked it...

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 6th Mar 2018 13:29

A true record breaker from an age of amateurs - which
originates from amator (lover). A timely tribute!
"Like a gazelle, he raced along that track
And from that time on there was no looking back!".

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 6th Mar 2018 13:20

My brother had a stroke one morning without warning in his early fifties and recently celebrated his eighty first
birthday - taking delivery of a new TV to mark the event.
Take heart, Louise, and use all that life offers to help
you progress from this devastating setback.
Adaptability has always been the secret of success
against adversity and the fact that you have produced
this poem for us to read and understand is a step
forward - and one of many I'm sure.
Bon chance!

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 6th Mar 2018 13:06

Haven't seen your pic or poems for a while.
You'd be welcome at the Oscars, Hugh!
"Nature (that Mother!) provides as per her needs.
But it's in improving nature where a man succeeds!"

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 6th Mar 2018 11:04

You will find entries for Goddard online. Another of his books is
"Flight To Reality".
He's reported to have experienced a
"slip in time" when flying through a storm over a deserted Scottish
airfield, seeing, through a break in the clouds, a sunlit operational
air field with ground personnel
wearing overalls not in use & planes not invented at that pre-war time.
His own account can be found at https://esoterx.com/2016/05/01/time-waits-for-no-air-marshal-victor-goddard-unthinkable-war
Add to that his part in the sending of
the small ships to rescue the troops at Dunkirk and you get
a flavour of an extraordinary life of a man of action deeply interested in
spiritualism.

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Stu Buck

Tue 6th Mar 2018 08:49

as i read this i am listening to sandy denny and its hard to drag her voice away from this ray which is a compliment i can assure you

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Stu Buck

Tue 6th Mar 2018 08:48

nostalgic without becoming sickly. excellent as usual martin, i look forward to seeing you at some point this year

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Stu Buck

Tue 6th Mar 2018 08:43

excellent piece and i wish you all the best louise, with strength and faith (wherever it is placed) you will get stronger. good luck with everything

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suki spangles

Tue 6th Mar 2018 05:24

Hi Martin,

Do not go gentle into that good night..

Suki

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suki spangles

Tue 6th Mar 2018 05:16

Hi Ray,

Did you conceive this piece as a lyric? This would work lovely with the right musical accompaniment.

I would love to hear your inspiration for this too. It is compelling, leaving room for the reader to interpret in their own way.

Cheers,
Suki

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Red Brick Keshner

Tue 6th Mar 2018 01:22

"Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 5th Mar 2018 10:37

This is so clever- deserved three readings before I was happy with my giving it proper attention.

Haven't seen you in ages. I hope all is well. Or am I wrong? I could have sworn I recognised the name from years ago. But your profile does not seem to bear this out."

Hello there,
Indeed it has been years!

First, the loss of the email with which my original blog (which is still floating around here at WOL!) was linked; hence the loss of access to said blog. Life then gets in the way of all sanity; and now an attempt at reconstruction and navigating the poetic waters again.

My gratitude for your kind words. Trusting all is well with you as well.

Feeling a little older and a bit more battered.

Such is life. :_)

See you round the site,
Frederick

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elPintor

Mon 5th Mar 2018 23:24

A thought-provoking piece that prompts many questions of both technology and the self. And, a super interview, too. It is obvious that your views are well-considered and I appreciate the opportunity to read them.

Take care Suki,
Rachel

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Chris Bainbridge

Mon 5th Mar 2018 22:35

Thanks to you all for those very kind comments! And yes...based (albeit loosely) on a real gig many years ago.

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Ian Whiteley

Mon 5th Mar 2018 20:57

Thanks for the kind comments on 'Sacred Path' Martin - it was written to commemorate by best friend who passed away in January - not sure where the picture is from - I nicked it off of that there internet - but it had the 'mystical' quality you picked up on - so seemed appropriate for the piece.
Hope you're well and hope to see you somewhere soon
Ian

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Ian Whiteley

Mon 5th Mar 2018 20:55

Many thanks for your kind comments on 'Sacred Path' Ray - you are insightful as to the nature of the poem as I have just lost my best friend in the last month or so - and this was my way of honouring him without being too over sentimental (I hope). Thanks for taking the time to comment mate
Ian

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Ian Whiteley

Mon 5th Mar 2018 20:52

Many thanks for your kind comments on 'Sacred Path' Keith. It is something that still affects me - having lost a close friend in January - I appreciate you taking the time to see its merits and comment
Ian

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Mon 5th Mar 2018 19:42

This poem expresses a love of life and nature.
Really enjoyed reading it.

Hannah

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Mon 5th Mar 2018 19:39

Love this poem.
So beautifully expressed.

Hannah

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Mon 5th Mar 2018 19:35

I love poems about childhood, I write about it myself.
It's that innocence and hope and acceptance of life.
Enjoyed this one.

Hannah

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