Really excellent Ian. It has a long view and a gentle warmth to it - an allegory of the death of a close one I should say. Highly affecting stuff. Very distinctively written.
Ray
Comment is about Sacred Path (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
I love that this poem continues to ask questions , prompting the reader to think rather than take for granted anything.
Comment is about to what (blog)
Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER
A sense of frustration and isolation from the expected glories of creativity, is what I read here Stu. Beautifully and poignantly presented, a sort of rictus .
Ray
Comment is about dramamine blues (blog)
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I love the style of Shakespeare's work reflected here. Leaves me wanting more of the same
Nice ene
Comment is about Creating Another Shakespearean Tragedy (blog)
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There is so much detail just in these few lines in which you say much. Wonderful stuff here Stu. It also appeals to my melancholic side of my nature.
I also love the sense that there is an inevitability portrayed here.
Fabulous
Comment is about dramamine blues (blog)
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<Deleted User> (16099)
Thu 22nd Feb 2018 20:14
I understand I truly do..good write...
Comment is about Lips Lock (blog)
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Riya Jain
Thu 22nd Feb 2018 17:30
Beautiful, it expresses how lovers may feel when they are distressed.
Also read: www.skrible.weebly.com for similar content!
Comment is about A Open Letter For A Firefire (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18118)
Thu 22nd Feb 2018 16:28
Strong words that ring so true.
Hannah
Comment is about Abandoned children (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18118)
Thu 22nd Feb 2018 16:25
<Deleted User> (18118)
Thu 22nd Feb 2018 16:22
Ian,
Thank you for this poem which will speak to many but in different ways. It has a mystical quality which gives hope in a gentle but clear way.
Keith
Comment is about Sacred Path (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
<Deleted User> (16099)
Thu 22nd Feb 2018 01:52
Thanks for commenting on the 'amerikkkan trilogy v 2.0) glad you liked 'no.3' - I've posted each part previously as stand alone poems - but thought I'd repost the lot as the music version.
Thanks for taking the time to comment
Peace & Love
Ian
Comment is about 220August (poet profile)
Original item by 220August
Thanks for the kind comments on 'the trilogy' Martin - I've been away a while - somewhere dark - but now I'm back so thought I would post this as one piece (having previously posted each individual poem). to get me started again. Hope you are keeping well mate - hope to see you somewhere soon
Peace & Love
Ian
Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
Original item by Martin Elder
thanks you for the 'likes' kind souls
Peace & Love
Ian
Comment is about ameriKKKan trilogy version 2.0 (blog)
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Big Sal
Wed 21st Feb 2018 23:32
Had not heard the word 'sodapop' in years, not since high school reading Hinton. Very nostalgic-like read that has a good flow to it.
Comment is about From Caterpillar to Butterfly (blog)
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Big Sal
Wed 21st Feb 2018 23:27
Like a death stranding. Great imagery!
Comment is about Ricochet (blog)
Original item by K.T. Roberts
Hi again Jacqueline
A stunning poem told from a unique viewpoint. Very touching.
Thanks for sharing
Jon
Comment is about Living My Own Death (blog)
Original item by Jacqueline Phillips
Hi Jacqueline
Well done on a neatly constructed poem that rings true regarding social networking. Great rhyming too. Thanks for your recent like as well
Jon
Comment is about Our Social Networking Policy (blog)
Original item by Jacqueline Phillips
Thank you! My name means Noble it is Arabic.
Comment is about Saniya (poet profile)
Original item by Saniya
Coming back so late sorry Hannah. Your comments are "Hannah (not manna) from heaven thanks. Glad to have hit the spot.
Ray
Comment is about CONSIDERATA (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Sorry Suki, just trawling on past poems - there is such a conception of Liverpool being the source of all humour and street wisdom that it is an easy target I suppose. Thanks for taking the long view.
Ray
Comment is about BRIE de MERSEY (blog)
Original item by ray pool
How remiss of me to overlook your comments, sorry. Just minesweeping today and here they are.
Cheers, Col my pleasure.
Martin, Frankly I wasn't garnering my own bouquet here, but so pleased you fitted me up to it!!
great comment by the way.
Liking your likes, Frances, Hannah and Pat. !
Ray
Comment is about THE MEASURE OF A POET (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks Charlotte for the like . Much appreciated.
Ray
Comment is about TEETH (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Gawd 'n Bennett, David I just found your comment, mate. You have voiced my own thoughts in that spirit of playful "sorting out" that used to occur in the old days (so i'm told and seen) me old mucker.
Cheers Ray
Comment is about CRIMINAL WAYS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Coming back Mark to say your response is welcome and yes, communities don't just happen - I believe they deepen in meaning with history and particularly with the depth of older residents' memories. These of course can't operate in the kind of invading that you describe for commuting. My parents in law considered a move to Wisbech (new builds) but were just scared off by the isolation of the place. The M40 corridor attracted many centre developments to Oxfordshire, and of course it has the Cotswolds, which are quite protected I imagine. Bring back Betjeman with his hatred of "bogus tudor bars." I think it's ok to write wryly but have a deeper centre - i'm sure you'd agree!
Ray
Comment is about DISTANT VIEWS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Wow, after the first flush of comments, more growth! Thanks all. Suki, I usually try to deepen thoughts in endings to make an observation on life, cheers.
Thanks Frances as always it's a pleasure.
Cheers Greg. So glad you came back to say that. As you know, readings are like edges of cliffs, can be too close for comfort. I think David Andrew seemed to nod in approval - which was nice!. Good to see him back.
220 - Very glad you approved !
Ray
Comment is about FIRST JOBS IN THE GARDEN (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks to Ruby Rose Colin suki and Pat for liking and thanks to Tom and Stu for commenting. I have some vivid memories of this old case among many and it's contents. I don't know where form or when . But it made an impression none the less. Dear oh dear, forgetting things , that's slightly worrying!
Thanks again everybody
Martin
Comment is about Hidden treasure (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Thank you for selecting this poem Charlotte - your comment is welcome. I think if you have a compulsion it would be only natural (not supernatural, haha) to follow it up. There are many things unexplained that can be spontaneous and need examining. I'm sure you will follow your dream in this respect as I did. Keep an open mind at all times!!
Ray
Comment is about RESTLESS SOULS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
A wonderful tone picture like a tapestry and it has your indelible hallmark Tom. Thoughtful and languid, all done without artifice.
Ray
Comment is about Cyclades (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
Howdy Ray
Soz for the delay - got caught up on stuff and stuff!
Thanks so much for your note on my Valentine poem ? Much appreciated!
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
Hey Raj
Thanks so much for your note on my Valentine poem ? maybe I'll do that haha ?
Comment is about Chakraj (poet profile)
Original item by Chakraj
Thanks, both! Its funny how some poems just write themselves and others are a real struggle to get right! This came from a first line - ultimately the first line of the second verse - that I really liked and which described or led into a sentiment - feeling Welsh although born in England and not speaking Welsh. But bringing the rest together was hard work! I hope you feel that an affinity with the land making me Welsh, came through.
Comment is about Mostly Welsh (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
Hi Tom
thanks for comment on Ted Crow, I re-read recently (evidently) and found it more personally Hughes at the second pass. I hope all going well at the Northampton Review, I thought the first issue worked very well.
Dom.
Comment is about Tom Harding (poet profile)
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Lovely poem Chris, I really enjoyed the rhythm and the sentiment, ?
Comment is about Mostly Welsh (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 21st Feb 2018 08:02
CPD Suki - Compulsive Poetry Disorder - we just can't help ourselves!
Comment is about Crimewatch Verses Spartacus ~ Blame Russia (blog)
Original item by Suki Spangles
We tend to only hear the woman’s story, this needs to be said.
Comment is about #Me Too (blog)
Original item by Louis Audet
some very vivid and effective imagery here Martin
Comment is about Hidden treasure (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
hey thank you both. I know David I've been kind of stuck on the night poems for awhile now... I was thinking I need to have a change and write some 'day poems' but it just dosen't come naturally. thanks for the kind words though- always very encouraging.
Comment is about 4am (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
Indeed Brian. But it still is worth repeating. Nicola :- )
Tommy
Comment is about Let it be (blog)
Original item by Nicola Byrnes
This was an absolutely stunning poem and I was overwhelmed with the pain and love and sorrow and tragedy all at once throughout this piece. It hits close to home as my friend went through this, I plan to read more of your work.
Comment is about To the Man I Once Called Daddy (blog)
Original item by invisible
Hi there folks,
Cheers so much for all your comments and feedback, and your time. I sometimes wonder what the heck I'm doing writing/sharing this stuff. Well, we all need a hobby!
Suki
Comment is about Crimewatch Verses Spartacus ~ Blame Russia (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 20th Feb 2018 19:58
each verse is almost a little poem in itself. I liked the 'glamour' verse the most - it reminded me of those great actors and singers who found fame in Hollywood. Their rags to riches stories are truly incredible. Dorothy Squires was born (in her parents' carnival caravan) in the village just down the hill from me. A small but worthy claim to fame. Thanks for posting. Col.
Comment is about Mostly Welsh (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
yes Greg, I suppose it must be.
A new day. Well, in a new season, a new year certainly, in these I can appreciate the new batch, the next year's batch, but the turnaround of days I find I am inclined to think of as my own. Okay, I can keep up. Thanks!
& perhaps this raises MC's point on sacrifice, that it is right not to look East, again, at someone else's sun.
Comment is about 'Who has the courage to look out to the east again at someone else's sun?' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Tue 20th Feb 2018 18:23
Thank you Pat that is indeed a complement , coming from someone who’s poetry I admire.
All the best des
Comment is about Red Window (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18118)
Tue 20th Feb 2018 16:44
hanks so much for your recent comments on my poems.
Much appreciated.
Hannah
Comment is about 220August (poet profile)
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Tommy Carroll
Thu 22nd Feb 2018 22:36
Martin sir
well said sir
re your comments etc
re my work etc
yours etc
Tommy etc.
Ps etc.
Tommy ;- )
x
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