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Colin Hill

Sat 8th Oct 2016 08:30

wonderful elP

chemtrails always fascinate me - all those lives suspended up there - where are they going / coming from? - the contrast against a blue sky - the way they dissipate

and lots of loony facebook conspiracy theories surround chemtrails.

great title - seems like we / you are waiting / queuing within each verse.

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Colin Hill

Sat 8th Oct 2016 07:27

I wonder, when people regularly change their profiles, what are they adding or taking away? Or do they make some tiny alteration in order to be seen on the profile link? Like product recognition. Think I'll add a few full stops...

Great poem btw although not so sure I'm in total agreement with the third to last line!

MC, could be something to do with the device used or being used whether or not the smilies are recognised. If the device doesn't recognise them as compatible they appear as boxes. I think!

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elPintor

Sat 8th Oct 2016 00:49

inquisitive, fer sure, Rob..and an adult lifetime of making those who get close to me uncomfortable. Thems the facts..

Thanks for asking,

elP

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Martin Elder

Fri 7th Oct 2016 23:58

An excellent poem Tony well picked as poem of the week. The subject matter, the flow and pace all make this stand out. I look forward to reading many more of your poems

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elPintor

Fri 7th Oct 2016 23:42

You know, Suzi, I would never have guessed pregnancy. I was fascinated as if I were inside a submarine..science-fiction fantasy, you could say. A pretty thrilling read and a fantastic analogy, come to find.

elP

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John Coopey

Fri 7th Oct 2016 22:21

MC - many thanks for the observations. Indeed I am often mentioned in the same sentence as Oscar Hammerstein.

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Suzi Challenger

Fri 7th Oct 2016 21:00

Cheers me dear πŸ˜ƒ I did indeed write it when pregnant with my daughter; it was quite an anxious pregnancy for various reasons and there were a lot of late nights spent wondering who she would be, who I would be when she arrived.

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Suzi Challenger

Fri 7th Oct 2016 20:49

Thanks both for your kind feedback.

Laura, I will definitely blog my sample poem at some point - it was the closest thing to hand when I signed up!

Tony, thank you. It was originally part of a longer (and less successful) poem; sometimes there's nothing like a good chop to revitalise a piece.

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Tom Doolan

Fri 7th Oct 2016 20:21

Thank you for your rhyming retort
Hats off to M.C. Newberry
You are definitely a good sort
Birds of a feather you and me

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Martin Elder

Fri 7th Oct 2016 18:44

Thank you very much one and all. It is wonderful to be appreciated. Oh no I am sounding like a luvvie.
Didn't mean to bring you down David and Rose. There are so many people that have tin boxes like this.
Thanks again guys

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 7th Oct 2016 18:24

Touching - and true for many, I suspect. Written and read with just the right degree of humanity. As for "love", I
recall the great lyricist Oscar Hammerstein 11 making it a
personal thing to avoid, if possible, the use of the word
preferring to put across the meaning he intended by other
less direct routes. So, JC, you are not alone in your
creative quandary. But its appearance in your last line
is perfectly judged.

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John F Keane

Fri 7th Oct 2016 18:09

No doubt we will. Perhaps some could read for those who won't be present?

I will bring your book on Monday night also, so don't forget to bring Β£10 for it.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 7th Oct 2016 18:06

A fine way to acknowledge poetry day...to which I add:
Eternal scribe - long may you imbibe
Of the poetical liquor of living,
And day or night, find something to write,
And in that way keep on giving!

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 7th Oct 2016 17:55

Richly rewarding...in its intent and content.
Anyone who - like me - has watched the sun rise over this great city will recognise its silent promise of a new day
and a new beginning...and feel uplifted.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 7th Oct 2016 17:44

Poetry is worth its name when it "covers the waterfront"...
all subjects that have a relevance to the human condition
if approached with knowledge, self-awareness and, hopefully, occasional welcome wit.
I do not see why acknowledging and celebrating
differences should not be matched by finding delight in similarity. To be proud and ready to highlight or promote
origins is not the sole province of those who choose to
move elsewhere for whatever reasons.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 7th Oct 2016 17:33

Enjoyed the reality reminder in these entertaining lines.
NB Can anyone on WOL explain why the "smilies" come on my PC screen as little "boxes" and not pictures that
demonstrate the intention of the writer?

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Wolfgar Miere

Fri 7th Oct 2016 17:04

I did use one earlier and thought that might be my quota.

PS, it's not about any one, but about us all and how daft we are.

Smiley face thing...

David.

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Rose Casserley

Fri 7th Oct 2016 17:01

Jems,this has a prophetic feel to it,considering the build up of animosity twixt the Russki's and Yanks.

ooer comrade!

Roseki.x


πŸ˜ƒ

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Rose Casserley

Fri 7th Oct 2016 16:56

awww,Wolfness,no childish icons? HMPHF!!

😠

Rose.

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Wolfgar Miere

Fri 7th Oct 2016 16:52

Haha Rose, it might be me!

David.

PS, please seek help...I use the Samaritans.

Thanks for reading and comments Rose, Stu, Joyti, Trevor, Amber.

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Rose Casserley

Fri 7th Oct 2016 16:41

my dear (and I'm grovelling as I type this)Mr.David-Wolfgar-Miere-Moore-Thingy,please oh PLEASE!! for gawds sake,don't say its me!

Before you reply,I would like you to know,that at this moment,I am standing on the end of a plank,overlooking a reservoir,holding my six children in my arms,and if the answer is yes,I WILL JUMP! DO NOT try and stop me/us(unless I/they change my/their mind half way down)

And if it is me,I am ever so sorry,for offending your highest of all intelligences,and I promise to try harder next time,depending on if I/they are pulled out before our wellies fill up.


Should it not be me,then,please inform me as to who it is,and I and my six unsinkable brats wil assist you in hounding the louse bound bastard off the site.


In the meantime,please accept these very childish icons as a peace offering in the event of my death,that may come about as a result of writing puerile utter shit.


πŸ˜πŸ˜‚πŸ˜ŽπŸ’‹


Yours insanely

Raving Rose.OBE/BBC/1&2

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Trevor Alexander

Fri 7th Oct 2016 16:40

Many a true word...... Hahaha!

Like it, though. πŸ˜ƒ

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Rose Casserley

Fri 7th Oct 2016 16:25

Jems,love your like!


Rose.x

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Rose Casserley

Fri 7th Oct 2016 16:24

then,my dear friend J.J. get your hiking boots on and feel it for real! You can't beat getting up into them thar' hills!

Rose.x

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Rose Casserley

Fri 7th Oct 2016 16:21

Jems,haha! you nutter! ta chuck.Correct on the location Col,but what makes you think us Manckers,(now ex),were'nt into Jimi?

Whhatt!? obviously you did'nt read about my absolute detestation of Oasis and the like in mi' poem..'all the while I've been french'

Consider that as homework young man!

Tom,I am so very pleased that this poem was to your liking,considering my opinion of you,was that of someone with more of a taste for the less profane,lets say.But I am nevertheless,extremely thankful to you and the other guys.



Rose.xxx

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Nigel Astell

Fri 7th Oct 2016 16:13

Skills of Imagination

Inside a creative mind
are pathways of discovery.

Observing values of art
brings forth new ideas.

When this boldness starts
it needs a source.

Solid stone shaped sculpture
inspires Stockport Art Gallery.

Write Out Loud poetry
uses skills of imagination.

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John Coopey

Fri 7th Oct 2016 15:54

Nice one, Harry. It's good to still be vertical, isn't it?

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Tom Doolan

Fri 7th Oct 2016 14:43

provocative, hedonistic and stimulating.

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Tom Doolan

Fri 7th Oct 2016 14:34

Many thanks Harry and Rose for your kind comments and feedback.

Tom :D

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Colin Hill

Fri 7th Oct 2016 14:19

that bloody waffle iron 😬

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amberlee2000

Fri 7th Oct 2016 14:04

I love this poem!! THX for sharing it.

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Colin Hill

Fri 7th Oct 2016 13:59

listening to the MacArthur Park link I'd have to disagree with Hugh Cornwall's comment as much as I admire both men. Saw Hugh last year on his solo tour trawling through the hits and his voice sounded great. He joked about not making enough money over the years so maybe this is just a clever wheeze to bring in the dosh. Gotta laugh though.

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Wolfgar Miere

Fri 7th Oct 2016 13:51

Haha Stu,

I hope it is seen as a joke, from which no-one is excluded, even the bastard author.

Thanks Stu,

David.

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Stu Buck

Fri 7th Oct 2016 13:29

i would have taken this to heart but my poems dont rhyme

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Laura Taylor

Fri 7th Oct 2016 12:20

Another great piece. Makes me think of pregnancy, but what an original take on it. Some quite scary imagery in there, for me at least.

Enjoyed this very much πŸ˜ƒ

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Laura Taylor

Fri 7th Oct 2016 12:19

Wonderfully open and poetic this Suzi (and welcome to WOL btw!). It instantly had me associating and some of the real enjoyment of reading poems like this is exactly that mental groping in the dark and finding little lights there, but never the same twice.

Excellent, love it.

By the by - I read your sample poem too. Will you be blogging that? I hope so - it needs a bigger audience.

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Laura Taylor

Fri 7th Oct 2016 12:15

Aye I remember that πŸ˜ƒ

Deffo - trilogy sounds perfect! It'll come!

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Wolfgar Miere

Fri 7th Oct 2016 11:02

Ah, but your stuffs so much better, xxxxxxxxx😁

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Joyti

Fri 7th Oct 2016 10:58

Oh I loooove this soooo much!

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Tony Hill

Fri 7th Oct 2016 10:41

Short, bitter-sweet, but very effective, Suzi. Really lik this poem.

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Jemima Jones

Fri 7th Oct 2016 09:23

I can almost feel the wind in my hair Rose! Wonderful piece.Thanks for posting.Jemima.

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Jemima Jones

Fri 7th Oct 2016 09:20

Sadly beautiful Rose,if I may put it that way.Thank you.Jemima.

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Jemima Jones

Fri 7th Oct 2016 09:19

OMG! And heres me,thinking ecstasy would'nt melt in your mouth Rose! What a wild child you were! Enjoyed the poem,and thank you.Jemima.

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Jemima Jones

Fri 7th Oct 2016 09:12

Without doubt Rose.Thank you for your comments,and elpintor for liking.Jemima.

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Wolfgar Miere

Fri 7th Oct 2016 08:51

Almost unbearably sad Martin.

Lovely words.

David.

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John Coopey

Thu 6th Oct 2016 23:47

Thanks, Harry. I am always embarrassed about trying to rhyme "love", primarily because it is such a clichΓ©d thing to do but also because this is compounded by there being so few options. My excuse here is the sense of the poem (Michelle's masculine features) warranted sticking her mitts in gloves to hide them.

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Wolfgar Miere

Thu 6th Oct 2016 22:50

I think the last Stanza is a beautiful thing, though I do think that for some poor souls even that wondrous rotation is not enough.

A lovely piece though Harry.

David

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Suzi Challenger

Thu 6th Oct 2016 22:45

Yep, been there (both as mother and daughter). Lovely precision.

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Wolfgar Miere

Thu 6th Oct 2016 22:38

Thanks Stu,

I think its a pretty hopeless state of affairs all around.

I like to recall the Talmud quote which states:

"Whoever destroys a soul, it is considered as if he destroyed an entire world. And whoever saves a life, it is considered as if he saved an entire world".

It offers first no hope, and then redemption to the hopeless. It is like many things from that culture/religion, a riddle in which a person could go quite insane.

Thanks for reading and commenting.

I do like a firm Braeburn myself.

David.

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 6th Oct 2016 21:37

John,
Trying to discuss this mismatch between the mental and bodily is extremely difficult.

Full marks, Martin, for spotting the significance of the italics.

The rhyming - print and audio - is the next best thing to perfect and an absolute pleasure to the ear. (and all without the old tune!)

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