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Graham Sherwood

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 12:53

David, whilst recognising that this is a significant piece of work for you, I don't immediately know how to appraise it.

I don't wish to be contentious as the subject matter is too important but my main feeling is this

It always concerns me how soldiers/armed forces personnel etc, who are disciplined to within an inch of their lives during their training and during combat etc, do not in many instance maintain that level of discipline when they are no longer in that role.

Plainly the psychological impacts are great.

Again this comments are not for argument just observation on your work which is as usual very profound.

Well done!

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raypool

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 11:58

What a corker John. Totally commendable - bloody brilliant in its format. You make it look easy, but it's a demanding discipline, and you have lightly tossed it off, in a manner of speaking. You need to twin this with Sunny Prestatyn by Philip Larkin.


Ray

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LEON STOLGARD

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 11:50

love it Stef but think Roses idea would make an improvement

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LEON STOLGARD

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 11:47

very entertaining as per usual jan my friend

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LEON STOLGARD

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 11:44

and so say all of us..don't we? beaut!

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LEON STOLGARD

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 11:40

I've done some serious snogging on many of their back rows I 'll have you know Stef. God!! I miss those times!

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LEON STOLGARD

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 11:36

for the liking Kev you have my thank's. Was indeed a spectacle eh Stef. Cheers both.

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Wolfgar Miere

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 09:33

Thanks Keith and 220.

All the best,

David.

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suki spangles

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 08:38

Hi all,

Cheers so much for all your feedback. Yes David, Passage to Bangkok - how apt! I don't smoke (now) either. The inspiration - the pot pourri of scents that emanate from these cosmic electronic bongs are often quite pleasant. I only exaggerated the whole experience ever so slightly..Had great fun writing this too. Wrong I know. The shame..

Suki

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David Taylor-Jones

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 08:14

Thank you Colin

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Douglas MacGowan

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 06:58

I like the play on words (a muck) and fun words like "wonky" in this piece.

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Douglas MacGowan

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 06:56

Definitely something most of us can relate to!

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Emer Ni Chorra

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 03:39

Thanks BigSal, I hope 2018 is good for you too. ๐Ÿ‘

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Big Sal

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 01:21

Happy New Year, and good to see your stuff again.

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Rose Casserley

Tue 23rd Jan 2018 00:05

nice one Stef but even nicer if you change the last line of the first verse leaving out 'to be renewed'

to me, it sounds a little contradictory to
'rerouted underground' if you see what I mean?


Rose ๐Ÿ’‹

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Rose Casserley

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 23:52

merci, beaucoup Grampsies.







Rose ๐Ÿ’‹

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Rose Casserley

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 23:49

gents (Martin, Leon, Stef and Desmond ) your kindnesses kill me in the nicest of ways

but the suggested activities you, Leon and Stef
have in mind, would kill me as in...REALLY! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

sod that for a game of tiddly-winks!


Rose ๐Ÿ’‹

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Douglas MacGowan

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 22:50

Which of the inner voices about this man are true? A good mystery there.

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Douglas MacGowan

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 22:42

I like the use of sense words that make the reader be able to see the scene and feel the cold.

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Emer Ni Chorra

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 22:40

Thank you Douglas ๐Ÿ‘

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Emer Ni Chorra

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 22:39

Thanks David. Your words of support are appreciated. ๐Ÿ˜Š

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Douglas MacGowan

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 22:39

A good poem for putting yourself in the poetโ€™s shoes and relying on observation instead of action.

I can definitely feel the poetโ€™s emotion.

And I liked the description of the โ€œpale white faceโ€ to indicate the subject had not experienced the sun in a long time.

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Wolfgar Miere

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 22:37

Like I said Emer welcome back, time for healing now.

Be free,

David.

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Wolfgar Miere

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 22:32

Welcome back, missed you.

David.

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Wolfgar Miere

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 22:17

Thanks Martin and SS,

Its good to see some people on here have reached out and helped in ways before. I have often found the outcast and those on the edges to be far more open minded in many ways. Maybe because some of them see a reality which is all too often hidden to those more fortunate.

I know from personal experience that sometimes all that is needed is someone to get down to street-level, and talk to you like a fellow human being as opposed to an outcast or a worthless piece of flesh and bone.

Love to all,

David.

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Nicola Beckett

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 21:20

Yes the only person you are true to is yourself, and once that happens miracles occur! X

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220August

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 21:17

Fun! Thanks for sharing.

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Robert Mann

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 20:59

David - thanks for the generous comments, and for reading and re-reading this piece. I think even that will lead to changes of mind on meaning within the individual concerned, which is the whole point isn't it?
Rob

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Wolfgar Miere

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 20:38

Having visited this several times Rob I very much like it. I agree with your attitude toward interpretation. We set our scribbles free to permeate the minds of others however they choose.

I believe there are different types of love, that of duty and blood and that which is more rare and sought after. I think I'll leave it there as the list is probably endless and variable.

Lovely stuff Rob.

David.

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Colin Hill

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 20:05

always love reading your poetry David.

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Colin Hill

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 19:55

Interesting programme running on Beeb2 on Thursdays called A House Through Time which uncovers the history of one particular house in Liverpool and all who have lived in it over the years - fascinating stuff, much like your poem Martin. I love history and our place in it. Col.

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Robert Mann

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 19:51

Colin - I'm sure, when we write, that we have a fixed perspective, but words have that precious quality of multitudinous interpretation. Pair that with the human imagination and the possibilities are endless. Glad you liked it mate.
Rob

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220August

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 19:45

Hannah,

From your sample:"I think the heart still hopes
Even when all hope is gone."

I think so.

I try and follow the Stoics (From Zeno to Marcus Aurelius) and be a realist and avoid the poets (as is the Stoic way). But I can't. I'm like a rat-terrier who chases rats; because he has too. My heart will always hope, as much as I try and mind my mind, because it has too.

Thanks for sharing your work.

August

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Colin Hill

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 19:44

'once I hit the enter button, the interpretation of meaning becomes the reader's' - I totally agree Rob. Fine poem as always. Thanks, Colin.

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Robert Mann

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 19:43

Ray - Like I said to Keith; it is what the reader thinks it is.
I'm glad you liked it.
Rob

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220August

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 19:34

Thank you! That was good. Your words carried me there.

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Colin Hill

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 19:32

like this lots Douglas. Thanks for posting.

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Colin Hill

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 19:26

excellent - love it!

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Julian (Admin)

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 17:02

I don't know how I missed reading this piece first time round. An excellent interview with an absolutely fascinating person.

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raypool

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 16:53

I feel as if I understand this Rob: the return of a loved one from a different motive to garner sympathy or comfort instead of the original feelings that draw us together; a sort of longing. Well expressed indeed if i'm right.

Ray

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sasha

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 15:47

Thank you so much @martinelder

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Nigel Astell

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 15:26

If you could record everything that has been seen and heard
- - -
a blackmailer for life I think

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Nigel Astell

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 14:27

Dark Five

Makes you wonder
how many others
just go missing
and never found - - -

perhaps no explanation given even if they do!

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John F Keane

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 14:08

There are lots of other cases like this.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mQHRznUw-hc

They all make you wonder.

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Colin Hill

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 14:07

Well done Tim - for POTW and for your continued work raising awareness for environmental issues. This gives me another opportunity of congratulating you on the poem / phloem rhyme in No.60 but there are also plenty of other delights sprinkled throughout. All the best, Colin.

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Big Sal

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 14:02

In other words: very funny.

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 11:05

and isn't every line of this absolutely true! And you can add cold callers to this opinion as well Benjamin they're another bunch of money sucking parasites feeding off our data.

Top stuff mate!

P&S

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keith jeffries

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 10:48

Hello Donovan,

I have read the sample and the two poems which you have posted. Your writing interests me. Please write more. Thank you. Keith

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 10:39

anytime you are in our neighbourhood Rose do drop in and enjoy a pillion ride with me

that'll defo blow the cobwebs away girl! ;0)

ta for the laughs.

Stef x

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 22nd Jan 2018 10:36

boy oh boy Rose this is a corker and do those fourth and fifth lines ring a bloody BIG resonating bell in my hairless but not brainless head?

too fucking right!

Stef.

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