Yep - I'm sticking with my interpretation thank you very much. And Ray - I wouldn't say that your Heavy Make-Up poem was the easiest to follow LOL xx

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

"A few comments i get on here seem to be of the vein that sometimes my poetry is not that easy to follow, and i could go arund the houses abit". Run that by me again.

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

"passengers" - Yes, well spotted, that's dear ole Gordon & Yes, also - a great description of his "managing" the economy :)
you win a biscuit of your choice - maybe a fig roll? or a kitkat?
BTW - do you know the diffrunce between a northern lass and a kitkat??
Yep - you only get four fingers in a kitkat

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

and I violently hate going to the dentist!!!

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

hee hee, I guess I am kind of taking the mickey out of myself. A few comments i get on here seem to be of the vein that sometimes my poetry is not that easy to follow, and i could go arund the houses abit. Bite the bullet so to speak is get to the point, so it is the tooth that packs the gun but the bullet has become hard to find, hence the little silver fillings. The salad referencing word salads, tossed in the air in every direction and quite hard to put them together without a good dressing (does this make sense, i am very tired...ha! i infuriate myself sometimes...) but yeah, i am also like the idea of challenging violence with my poetry.

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

I didn't really think about whether Spartacus was or wasn't a cliche. I wrote it quickly and just wanted something that expressed immense power and liberation. I loved the Gladiator film - think it's the only one I've seen where I actually found that Ozzie actor attractive. Maybe I'm born into the wrong era - I should be a blood smeared warrior or a mad Bodicea...
Deletion is empowering for all of 5 minutes. I imagine that is why lots of poets remove themselves from WOL. That is one step too far for me. Email is one thing, WOL another - think I'm bedded down here for good now - no matter how many clangers I drop or how many are dropped on me. Thanks for your comments. xx

Comment is about Deletion (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Holidays can be exhausting - can't they? You should try it with a young pack in tow - it takes it all to a new level. Nice one. x

Comment is about Holiday (or – stop moaning ya daft bugger and get on wi' it) (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Your poetry is never an easy read Marianne - but you give us plenty of fodder to chew over.
I'm guessing that Mr Incisor is the aggressive one - the tooth that might just pack a gun - a gun filled with lead rather than filling. The salad is a little herbacious for the carniverous blood thirsty canine so you are challenging violence with your poetry? If I'm anywhere near warm, I love the thought process.

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Thank you dear Lynn for the comment on "Her Name Was Love". I respect and value your comments. They really help me and inspire. Every time I reread my poem I make some changes. I think today I made about 20 corrections in this poem. When nobody writes the comments I lose interest to this or other poem and don't look at it anymore. I think it happens with everyone. So, I would like to tell you once more: Thank you so much! With love and warmest wishes, Larisa

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

This is such a lovely poem, Larisa. You have great imagination, as well as the gift to write it. Love, Lynn xx

Comment is about Her Name Was Love (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

AWWW! up norf Benji would be a 'right little puddin'....nice enough to eat!(metaphorically of course!)lotsa love to him'n'all-Stef-xx(B-xx)

Comment is about My Walkies! (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Cyn - "black eyed susan" - maybe have another look, if you feel like it ?

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Really love the first part... I think you could have ended it there though.
It flows really well with the rhyming couplets too.

Comment is about Imaginary Friends (blog)

A deliberate cliche is a well-accepted poetry ploy, the more widely known the cliche the better. I really like your novel imagery with the 'egg' that can fling off into all kinds of ideas. An explosion of freedom much appreciated for its wit and its message.

Comment is about Deletion (blog)

Original item by Isobel

I like this a lot!

Comment is about My Inspiration (blog)

Original item by MissLucy

Really good, Dave. When are you finding time to string all these thoughts together? As Deborah says, a great poetry diary. Like Byron's? :)

Comment is about Holiday (or – stop moaning ya daft bugger and get on wi' it) (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I've heard of soap on a rope but not pope on a rope.

Comment is about 3rd World Athiest (blog)

Original item by Crackling

Don't you have any punctuation keys on your computer? (Sorry!) Some say the blank page (or screen) is the most exciting time of all, when the idea is gripping and we haven't ruined it with our actual words!

Comment is about An Awful View (blog)

Original item by David Mac

Gets better as it goes on, Dave, no two ways about it and cleverer than it looks at first glance. Last two verses are excellent, making summat sharp out of old saws. You've got me at it.

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

I accidentally wiped all my wife's emails the other day. Fortunately my daughter managed to retrieve them. It wasn't quite such a liberating experience.I like the poem, especially the 2nd verse, first 3 lines of which are excellent, I think.I do think the Spartacus thing has been done to death, though.

Comment is about Deletion (blog)

Original item by Isobel

I don't actually understand the whole intent of the poem yet (still working on it), but from a cadence point of view, and realizing the potential weakness sometimes incurred by too much alliteration, if you really want the avalanche of 'SSSZZZZSHSHSHSH' sounds at the end of the penultimate line, I would take out 'that we have written down'. Since the insert seems very important, could you incorporate it into a final single line? But you would lose 'a paper dove' as the last thought. Maybe these two thoughts could work together.

Comment is about Where The Paper Falls. (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

ha ha contaminated indeed, that's fish for you i guess. all the wrong type on that barge i'm afraid. thanks for your kind comments everybody xx

Comment is about Plenty More Fish In The Sea. (blog)

Hi again, yeah BObs playon but he's on at the november gig thurs 4 November, be good to see if you're coming on 7 october too, gonna be a good night, cheers Jeff X

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

I really like this Dave, i can relate to all the new experiences feeling like an overload and it's good to read about them knowing you're still there,experiencing it all rather than back and recollecting the details.Like a live poetry travel journal,kind of thing : ) Debz xx

Comment is about Holiday (or – stop moaning ya daft bugger and get on wi' it) (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

It made me happy to read your poem. It's much better than I could do in any other language.

You have a gift for joyousness. Thank you
Sharyn

Comment is about Her Name Was Love (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Lol, lol! Funny you should say that, my kids said had I got a dog to match my hair!! Thanks for comment, Stef, luv, Lynn xxx

Comment is about My Walkies! (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

You're a dental nurse, right? I like the invention, though miss the meaning. proud/ parade is very good and I loved the ending. I imagined a gun from which a flag drooped.

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

I like this poem Dave-you have also acquired a new fan-my missis!
you lucky man-lol! she loves this poem-Mr&Mrs Wilde-xx(her kisses,not mine-don,t worry-lol!

Comment is about How To Mend A Broken Heart (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

"Thats the story love has told" and all lovingly composed by....a lovely lovely Lady!-Stef-xx(M-xx)

Comment is about Her Name Was Love (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hurrah Hurrah!Benji,s a Star!(and rightly so!)..good one Lynn-Stef-xx(B-xx)
please note: my Mum has,nt DYED me to match her hair!
lol!(doggy type laugh)

Comment is about My Walkies! (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

They cut into the hill
Like detectives chasing down
A cold blooded killer
On the run

Thrusting into bush and tree
Across moonlight before the wind
At the furthest edge
Of a deserted train station

They cut into the past with a dagger
Across the evening colours of the sky,
Reddening with light

Warning all to run away

Pictures of their bombs still scar my memory


Even though

I wasn’t there

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Crapped on from a great height...

Comment is about gulled (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Pape can you hear me?

yeah wanna ya wan?

have ya gotta spanna/

Yeah, wanna ya wanna it for?

Hey God he's gotta spanna

Good to hear that, tell him to fix it.

Hey Pape God seys you gotta fix it cos you gotta a spanna.

Tell him ok no probs will do it later..

Hey God he says...

I know, I know, I heard him already.

Comment is about 3rd World Athiest (blog)

Original item by Crackling

Thanks Winston!

Comment is about Cliff Yates (poet profile)

Original item by Cliff Yates

Mmmm - sometimes it feels like that's all I've got...
Lovely to hear from you - I'd have left something on your profile if I could have found it. I used to enjoy your stuff - get yourself back up here! xx

Comment is about Deletion (blog)

Original item by Isobel

I enjoyed this, Lucy, it's just lovely as it is in my opinion.

Comment is about Mother - I'm not 100% happy with this. It needs work, comments/ideas welcome!! :) (blog)

Original item by MissLucy

Hi Cynthia, thanks for all them kind comments on my poems.
Let's run away together and live in the mountains!

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wow! - really good, really sad & has a ring of truth to it. mega.
just shows though how some of the gems on here still slip through the net & quality needs/deserves to be praised.

Comment is about You Turn Up Unannounced (blog)

Original item by David Mac

like the repeating of desire and truth in this piece... i am not sure you need forever at the end of the piece.. perhaps forever being removed would leave it on more of a mystery with disappeaed?

Comment is about Desire or Truth? (blog)

Original item by MissLucy

i like the ending here, lucy in particular.. i like the piece, but there are a few lil edits i would consider (go through it with you next time i see you) x

Comment is about Take me home (blog)

Original item by MissLucy

lovely stuff, lucy.. has a gentle flow to it that i like.. you could try experimenting with the references to mother in the piece, leave it in the title only see how that affects it, but aside from that aside from a possible comma in places, there isn't much (if anything) i would change here.. top banana! x

Comment is about Mother - I'm not 100% happy with this. It needs work, comments/ideas welcome!! :) (blog)

Original item by MissLucy

Hi - "bite the bullet" - thanks for the comments Dave.
all the best. B

Comment is about Dave Carr (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Carr

I quite like this.
Sorry Pope...
Sorry God...

Comment is about 3rd World Athiest (blog)

Original item by Crackling

Like this poem, the way the world swirls around the mother and child.
Nice stuff.

Comment is about Mother - I'm not 100% happy with this. It needs work, comments/ideas welcome!! :) (blog)

Original item by MissLucy

Yeah, i like this. Good question: desire or truth?

Comment is about Desire or Truth? (blog)

Original item by MissLucy

Pope = < £ & :-( WP

Comment is about 3rd World Athiest (blog)

Original item by Crackling

Echoes. True feeling finely expressed.

Comment is about Mother - I'm not 100% happy with this. It needs work, comments/ideas welcome!! :) (blog)

Original item by MissLucy

Explain your allusions. what is the familiar smell? A familiar sound, how cold is it? brittle, smarting, deathly etc. Bring it to life for us.

Comment is about Away From Comfort (blog)

Original item by MissLucy

Lucy there are some nice words in this piece, but for me it is spoilt by the overuse of cliches like, home is where the heart is, sight for sore eyes, etc. Say the same thing with better words and the work will improve immeasurably. Welcome to WOL by the way, we all learn form each other here.

Comment is about Take me home (blog)

Original item by MissLucy

Hi Stef - I was going to call it Sucker! In fact I read it today in St Ives and I did call it Sucker! cos Gulled would have given the ending away. But if you've ever been to St Ives you'd know the ending anyway! Those pesky birdies!! xx

And Ta old Crackling - I have heard tell of them there hedgehogs! They also do an ice cream called a FOXY!!! I must admit I did have one of those, just for research purposes you understand! xx

Comment is about gulled (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove