Why rationalised
Why purged purified sanitised
It doesn't sing like your other work

Comment is about Deletion (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Beautiful! Love your style of writing. Enjoyed reading it. With warmest wishes, Larisa

Comment is about Take A Break....Chit Chatter (blog)

Original item by christine yates

Love it.
I think 'pulses' - but I'd move it to the next line.
Cx

Comment is about The Parting (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Try imaginary friends reunited

Comment is about Imaginary Friends (blog)

Would that be something completely different?
Cx

Comment is about now (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

What do you mean by that?

Comment is about now (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Hi Lynne

Thanks for your comment on mine, and I'm glad to have helped inspire you to write this. My own mother had a stillborn daughter. If she hadn't been stillborn, I wouldn't be here - they only wanted two kids, see. Not massively relevant, but thought I'd share that. She didn't see her kid either, that was back in '67.

Comment is about Empty (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

I missed the innuendo in the title at first glance.I like "late in the breathing hours" a lot. You could lose "now" from 2nd line.
I can't decide which is "correct" -Through my fingertips pulses or pulse?

Comment is about The Parting (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

thanks for the version of 'they cut into the hill' - am well impressed with that, must admit.. you took it in a very different way to me but I love it...

I'm off next week - will text you later in the week to see when you are free for a pop in as this piece is probably going to be one of a series of poems!

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

That's definately the other side of the coin Alvin, maybe a response poem from yourself is needed?

Andy, not performed it yet unless you count in a hotel room to my husband! Will have a go at the next Middleton WOL methinks.

Comment is about Crafty Crafters (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

people here have already said what i feel (isobel) really, but it's a piece that needs more than a few reads Marianne to me and i love challenges! x

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

there is something on and off on here for me, or perhaps it is something that one person wants than the other.

Perhaps the answer is in this line 'Secrets love to unfold themselves' which is my favourite line... It's a mystery that perhaps there is only one detective can unfold..

interesting stuff, i like it... x

Comment is about (Played) In The Minors. (blog)

i remember this well, cynthia.. perhaps it's something a few of us should do root back into our past.. mine are mostly crap, (earlier stuff) so perhaps not on my case, but it's a nice idea.. x

Comment is about The Parting (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

very very sad stuff, phil i felt and has a real lyricital quality behind it..

top stuff with a lovely ending..

top to see on saturday.. haven't seen you in ages! sorry to hear your news too..

Comment is about Be still your Tears (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

enjoyed all of it, Gem in particular the first few lines... have you tried performing this yet? would like to see how this is structured live, must admit..

top stuff as always x

Comment is about Crafty Crafters (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

You were born with a silver spoon in your gob
You quickly spat it out - that’s a real good job
Now all your gold fillings are worth a few bob
And here you are juggling peonies.

You climbed Mount Etna in your pink swimsuit
At the north pole the Eskimos said you were cute
You play the 1812 overture on your plastic flute
And here you are juggling peonies.

You eat chips with the best caviar
Drink tizer and champagne when you’re stood at the bar
And ride with James May in a dinky car
And here you are juggling peonies.

You’ve got about twenty engagement rings
Your fingers are loaded down with the things
Men are there just to give you your bling bling blings
And here you are juggling peonies.

I reckon you’ve made about a million men cry
You’ve never had a tear in your eye
But you’d rescue a beetle when you pass one by
And here you are juggling peonies.

You ride into town with nothing on
Lucky the pony that you sit upon
My love for you goes on and on
Because here you are juggling peonies.

Comment is about juggling peonies (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I prefer rocket - and you'll get one Banksy if you keep on with these lettuce-related jibes! ;-) And as an extra punishment, here's a few more verses!!

Comment is about juggling peonies (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

It is good to get comments but it can be hard when people like different bits. One poem I did a while ago someone said "leave out the third verse!" then someone else said "the third verse is the best one". But we're all different aren't we? One day someone on here will write the perfect poem and EVERYBODY will LOVE ALL of it! xx

Comment is about ADIEU (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I like cos, but then I like iceberg

Comment is about juggling peonies (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Powerful, sensual poem, Cynthia. Thanks from a comparative newcomer for re-releasing it

Comment is about The Parting (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I agree with Graham about cos and Greg about catfish scales. See Louis Macneice's poem Bagpipe music

"Their knickers are made of crepe-de-chine, their shoes are made of python,
Their halls are lined with tiger rugs and their walls with head of bison.

Comment is about juggling peonies (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Some might consider poetry a craft for the dextrously challenged who often value their work as priceless

Comment is about Crafty Crafters (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

Hi Ann, thank you so much for your truly lovely comments on "Empty". Touched me deeply. xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I really love this too, Ann, what a lot of visions to wake up with! I'd love some of your dreams! I once woke up with a song in my head, but only remembered two lines. Can't sing and can't play an instrument, so I can't see it ever being a "Yesterday" (which I understand came to Paul McCartney in a dream) xx

Comment is about juggling peonies (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

It is so interesting to read your comments my dear friends. One says I love the first line, another one says I love the last verse. But I would like to say: I love you all. Your comments are so important for me.

Comment is about ADIEU (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hi Isobel, thank you so much for your kind comments on "Empty". I have written a few that started off in free verse, and then they ended up rhyming here and there. May have another go at it soon! Thanks again. x

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Cynthia, thank you so much for your very kind comments on "Empty". Your support means so much. x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I really love this, Cynthia, and don't feel it needs elucidating at all! I'm glad you decided to share it with us again, being comparatively new to WOL. x

Comment is about The Parting (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

retrained an interesting concept

Comment is about Tamed (blog)

Original item by David Mac

I love the first line and the first verse, Larisa, and also the optimism in the last. xxx

Comment is about ADIEU (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I love this too, Larisa, it is really good, well done. xx

Comment is about Words, Words, Words..... (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

wanna see my peonies ? :)

Comment is about juggling peonies (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Treacherous throbbing and thighs being pervaded can you elucidate further

Comment is about The Parting (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

This is so funny and true, Gemma!
You make some great observations in this.

'It ain’t just marker pens and glue that get ‘em all high
If it takes all week
And is ten times more expensive
Than buying it ready-made
They will make it'

Comment is about Crafty Crafters (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

Your poem is all the more moving Lynn because there is not a trace of self pity. Such a sad sad thing to happen especially as you were so very young at the time. But I expect getting through it helped to make you the kind and lovely person you so obviously are. xx

Comment is about Empty (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks Graham - I did jot it down in a rush, so maybe one day will return to it. I keep thinking of more and more verses too. Cos that's the way I am ! ;-)

Comment is about juggling peonies (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Ann, Ann Ann! I really wish you'd have developed this with a little more time. What wonderful ideas too many to mention. Please never use cos, it's awful. I wanted every last line to be a variation too like the last one.
Terrific work but needs more time and thoughts

Comment is about juggling peonies (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Cynthia, you're very kind to me. Most of the poems I've whacked on this site I've had published or published myself.
Feedback is great. I submit so many coz I get bored too easy.
I myself don't give many comments coz I don't know much about poems or poetry and am no critic.
Thank you, thank you, thank you.xx

Comment is about The Parting (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Rest in peace and memory Sharon.

Comment is about Empty (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

This is the very first poem that I shared with WOL. I'm feeling nostalgic today, remembering so many comments which readers have shared.

Comment is about The Parting (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

If I were to guess, I would say this is about an off/on relationship, where hurt so deep has been inflicted that now the scars are toughened, resistant to any further infliction.

Would agree that the last verse is hard to fathom - that 'why' doesn't seem to fit cos it isn't a question. It feels to me like it should be a 'while'.

Moving a realtionship beyond the minors isn't easy for many of us. Needles and haystacks come to mind...

I like the poem - it is enigmatic but not too so.

Comment is about (Played) In The Minors. (blog)

Funny! FUNNY!! F U N N Y!!! Love your humour expressed with such language skills and line planning. Can't believe no one else has commented; but you have posted quite a few in a short time. That might present a problem if you're looking for feedback. But maybe you aren't. Still, the value of multiple posting is worth a think. In my experience, many readers/commentators don't like overload by a single poet. WOL may be unique in this matter; but it's a great site, well worth cultivating.

Comment is about Last Meal (blog)

Original item by David Mac

This is hard to fathom, and yet I do like it. I do get 'the minors', of course, and 'I play to win'; 'I'm impulsive like that'. etc. Would you be willing to offer any explanation, a practice I usually don't like?

Comment is about (Played) In The Minors. (blog)

And you are still 'we' - that is touching for me Lynn. Experiences like this probably do bind a couple together. I like the non rhyming end - I'm more into free verse at the moment - it seems to be the mood I'm in. You are brave to share this with us. x

Comment is about Empty (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

This really is good, Lynn. Sharing such an experience supports and teaches us all.Very poignant are:'mine was that one who was sadly born dead' and 'Nothing to show she had been'. And your poem is enhanced by rhyme and rhythm too. Well done.

Comment is about Empty (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Stef - I never do politics - now you know why! (And I don't do Arthur Askey impressions either - unlike someone I know!)

Comment is about nosing towards america (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

i.e Blair having been referred to as Bush,s little puppy..without the need for the unreeled toilet roll-? aythankyor!

Comment is about nosing towards america (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hilarious, and yet - so barbed with meaning. You are very talented. IMO, interpretation could take this into any field because you are addressing major universal themes, while gleefully thumbing your sophisticated nose.

Comment is about Tamed (blog)

Original item by David Mac

Oh dear! Silly me!! I must actually READ your comments Stefan! (I do - honest I do!!) I thought you were talking about the dog - you usually are! (Or so Gemma says!) xx

Comment is about nosing towards america (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I think it is the sound of it, like 'galloping ponies'. Hence Lady Godiva? Just a thought. Who knows what was whispered through your brain as you slept? Another life? Another world? I'm glad you caught a remnant of the feeling; it is a delightful fantasy, just as irrelevant as dreams are.

Comment is about juggling peonies (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove