Well done for having a go at this, Isobel. Whether reading about it over the cornflakes, or watching the news, it's very difficult to find the words. I like the way you spotted the different ways we count the cost. We didn't really see the Indonesian tsunami; the film of this one has been stunning, overhelming. On Friday I kept watching the video over and over again, hypnotised by it. And now the fallout. The one word that struck me on the TV news last night was "flimsy". Such a little word.
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Philipos
Tue 15th Mar 2011 10:40
Hi Melanie - thanks for taking the time and trouble to comment on Psalms x
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Philipos
Tue 15th Mar 2011 10:32
Hi Laura thanks for commenting on Psalms - no insensitivity intended just trying to take the heat out of a heavy topic and I do understand what you mean - I guess I'm having to overly deal with other people's disturbing stuff at the moment x
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Aye - was pretty incredible that dream.
I have always wanted to fly, btw, right from being a kid. I went on my first plane flight at the grand old age of 28, in a noisy ole propeller plane to Belfast, and wept with happiness and euphoria the entire time there and back *shame* :D
Still can't go on a plane without pressing nose to window on take off, and I'm one of those rare individuals who positively enjoy turbulence :)
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I like this on the whole - but I don't think you need the 'me' or the 'how insignificant'
Comment is about It's all just words (blog)
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I like the idea of this, and think it starts strong, but gets a little out of control on the 4th line. Perhaps cut a few words out, tighten it up a little?
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Nice one Isobel for tackling this subject. I was thinking of writing something myself. It's took me back to a 'count your blessings' perspective. Went home last night, usually I grumble about having to do a bit of housework, but last night I was just really grateful that I had a house at all...and that all the people I love are still alive, and reasonably healthy, unlike so many thousands in Japan.
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wow how powerful from a few words..nicely placed too def had an impact huni xx
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aw i loved it hun...i was at the beach yesterday&ths pretty much summed it up lol xx
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i liked it huni xx
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wow! xx
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oooh very nice huni xx lol need some wine do you?lol..ive gne off the stuff lately prob the manky hangovers from it lol
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aaaw xx
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Tue 15th Mar 2011 09:12
Hi There Polina, Welcome to Write Out Loud. Hope you enjoy the site, Winston
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Philipos
Tue 15th Mar 2011 08:49
Hi Ann 'Half-Light', crepuscular eh - a new word for me - Half-Light always has a special meaning to ex-service folk who traditionally rouse from rest in expectation of an enemy attack x
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I don't know why but the image I have found most haunting is of two boats caught up in a vast whirlpool. They just seemed to be going round and round for all enternity! In fact all the shots of stranded ships seemed so surreal. Now we have images of children being "gone over" with geiger counters. It just gets worse and worse. Thank you for your poem. xx
Comment is about Human Nature (blog)
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Enjoyed it Isobel a lot.. Some of the images in particular involving the Nuclear Power Station on the news have left me shivering almost down to the ground considering a friend has a home near a nuclear power station in Morecombe.
I should write something too (this reminds me) but i loved this x
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Terry White
Tue 15th Mar 2011 06:40
Well written. Really makes you think about how strong of a hold we really have on this planet. We take so much for granted every day and think we've tamed this rock we live on.
Comment is about Human Nature (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Yes.
For those who take for granted... For those self-absorbed... Mother Nature reminds us to reflect upon that which is of real value.
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Thought-provoking and well-written Izz. The Japanese ambassador on the radio today twice used the phrase 'humbled by Nature'. It's so easy to forget the huge energies bound up in the planet beneath our feet.
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Thanks for your interest in Touch Wood, Cynthia. The title was a writing group homework. I came across the story of the whipping yew while away for a couple of days on the Welsh borders. We found the actual tree, and could see how it had been used. The thought of people being left there all night was horrible. As I wrote the poem it dawned on me that the fellow was innocent of the crime for which he was being punished, but maybe guilty of other, unconfessed misdeeds that had been preying on his mind for a long time. Whether the burden was lifted - or whether he was still alive, or sane at the end of it - I don't know!
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<Deleted User> (8951)
Mon 14th Mar 2011 21:18
This is well nice Melanie lovein it..
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<Deleted User> (8951)
Mon 14th Mar 2011 21:12
Deep deep words,
that travel through my veins,Changing lanes in my head,
these line are killer...
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Mon 14th Mar 2011 21:06
Really liked this-like a soulful blues. Do not agree about cliched; in the times the poem describes you fall back into "easy phrases" for comfort and they are more than counterbalanced by the original phrasing elsewhere.
Nice one
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Mon 14th Mar 2011 21:03
hi Melanie
thanks for comments on The Devine curse. I'm really grateful for your feed back and all your comments, they are fuelling my passion for writing more than ever. Never thought i'd get so much out of a web site that i only singed up for to shut my mate up . I'm really glad i did. Thanks xxx
Comment is about Melanie Coady (poet profile)
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The first three lines are great, the last two lines are good. The fact that the title is in the past tense and the poem is in the future is v clever!
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Original item by Melanie Coady
Have read your other blog poems and this is my favourite-I love this girl!
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Philipos
Mon 14th Mar 2011 18:25
Lots of re quotables here like Black box for a brain innovative use of metaphor
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Philipos
Mon 14th Mar 2011 18:23
Very droll this Kealan - I enjoyed the read
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Philipos
Mon 14th Mar 2011 18:17
Some times the small things stack up into mountains - you tell this story wittily and well - liked the small roll of fat over the jeans bit
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Philipos
Mon 14th Mar 2011 18:14
Ample-bellied cats eh - we've got a few round here - I only have a small back garden and they use it for a loo - something to do with territory - though I digress - interesting poem yours stacked with re-readable witty phrases
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Philipos
Mon 14th Mar 2011 18:10
Nice feel to this Andy with its brevity of language and the piccy with a lovely lady sets a soothing tone
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Mon 14th Mar 2011 18:03
HaHa-thanks, but No, no shaman round ere folks - thanks for comments & compliments.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
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Thanks for your comments on The Uncertain Narcissist-it was a bit of a departure for me! : )
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That is very kind of you Cynthia!
I was kinda inspired by picking up a collection by Gavin Ewart, a brilliant rhymster much admired by top poets in his day, and a comment by a friend about clone culture amongst gay men. But hey, we're all a little bit "bi" so I'm told : )
Comment is about THE UNCERTAIN NARCISSIST (blog)
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Philipos
Mon 14th Mar 2011 17:52
Hi Cynthia - thanks for commenting on Half-Light - you mentioned re-reading books which is something i very seldom do - are you working on a magnus opus with your reading or just for enjoyment? x
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Philipos
Mon 14th Mar 2011 17:48
Hi Ann - thank you for commenting on Half Light - perhaps we share an odd side that likes peering into the dark x
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
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Hello Anthony!
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on
'Berry Bridge'... It is a very special poem that was written for and influenced by someone very dear to me...
(I had deleted all of my other poems from 2010 in a fit of anger and sadness).
The Berry Bridge is a real place... but can also be any other place you so desire ; )
Hmmm... My secrets...?
I am extremely optimistic.
I am confident.
I am driven. : )
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hi laura, thanks for your feedback on the list.
I've removed the poem as I don't like to catalogue all my work..just give it an airing and get some feedback. its not often i have a piece that i think is finished.
i am bitter and my poems are all streaked with ascerbicity (good word!) Anyway i have a place i go to to write good poems, from the heart so to speak, but its so heavy i fear its morbid outpourings. hence writing more cerebral stuff that allows a dispassionate view. its just this writing lacks depth and seems to be mainly of interest only to myself.
anyway i might rework the other poem but will be more likely to just write something else. maybe this time from the spleen and really get the bile flowing.
i respect your opinion so thanks again x
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I like this a lot, Pete, for its haunting quality of the little things: 'every single sip from rainbow lip' and 'silk slips', 'smother sharp senses' etc. I've used these for the richness of your diction, rhythm and internal rhyme. You have used all the senses. I really liked the metaphor of 'all those rays that belonged to us' as transcending the physical into the emotional. Greatly enjoyed.
Comment is about the quality of silence (blog)
Outstanding in mood and tone, built skillfully with your revealing insights and special charm with emotive words.
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Original item by Marianne Daniels
This is really good, Gareth, well-crafted and thought-provoking. The opening two lines are a compelling 'hook' and then the poem goes from strength to strength with choice diction and fine imagery eg. 'like golden earrings flatter when they match' 'his beauty reflected in the grin of a bad boy's eyes'.
Comment is about THE UNCERTAIN NARCISSIST (blog)
Original item by Gareth Writer-Davies
Was Voltaire's 'garden' metaphorical? Seriously, uncovered ponds can be dangerous to small kids. But, if it's on your house lot, and access is private, enjoy the froggy freedom. All hail Common Sense!
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<Deleted User> (8730)
Mon 14th Mar 2011 10:54
You have lots of admirers, the sock on the head is very funny.
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melanie coady
Tue 15th Mar 2011 10:59
thanks lads xx i didn't really think about how i was writing it guys i just write it down the way it comes into my head lol maybe i should start reading over things lol
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