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The Poem

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The poem was a friend,

the tried and trusted companion

of countless open-mics,

an anthology, blogs,

and three slams,

one a triumph.

He loved that poem,

loved the fact that others loved it too,

sometimes read it aloud

to himself,

caught himself,

as it lay on a table, touching it, patting it,

looking at the crumpled, much-traveled paper

with gentle eyes and warm heart.

 

He spoke to it,

it had so much of himself in it.

Sometimes it seemed to talk back.

Sometimes the flow between them seemed alive,

and then he could almost believe

in the Trinity.

The father, the word, the spirit.

 

But then, for a while, it said too much.

It said

“You will never write anything better than me”

“You're over the hill, old man,

you've shot your bolt.”

“I'm as tired as you are,

put me out to grass.”

 

Friends became concerned,

family worried,

no-one understood.

The moods, the silence,

the staring into nothing,

the frantic scribbling,

the tearing of paper.

 

And then one day, on a wall,

he read the words of the Teacher, the son of David.

There is a time for every purpose under heaven,

a time to be born and a time to die,

a time to plant and a time to uproot,

a time to tear down and a time to build,

a time to search and a time to give up,

a time to keep and a time to throw away.

 

And he went home

took out the poem

and said

“You were right,

you were perfectly correct.

But we are in this together.

We will carry on,

and take what comes,

my friend.”

 

not autobiographical - I've never won a slam, and never will.

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Elaine Booth

Mon 21st Mar 2011 22:11

Finding this late in the day I know but glad I found it - so much to identify with. However no sooner have I written a poem and aired it in public than I am deeply unsatisifed and need to move on to the next! The right response for the right time is what it's about - patience to wait and listen doesn't come easy to us humans though - especially not the listening bit! x

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Andy N

Mon 14th Mar 2011 08:22

good stuff, dave.. can relate to this a lot m8

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 13th Mar 2011 18:13

You know what I think already. Age in no way lessens talent; apathy does, and self-pity and laziness. A fresh mind never wearies; it is impossible.

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Anthony Emmerson

Sat 12th Mar 2011 14:00

Hi dave,

I like others, found lots of "themes" in this ; time, age, familiarity, progress and the gaining of wisdom and maturity. I agree with Ray re the penultimate verse; it watered it down a little for me.

Regards,
A.E.

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Greg Freeman

Sat 12th Mar 2011 10:13

This encapsulates a big theme, Dave. That moment when you realise you're at ease with yourself, whenever it comes in your life. All kinds of things can flow after that liberating moment.

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Dave Bradley

Fri 11th Mar 2011 23:22

Thanks for commenting Melanie, Cate, Izz, Ray, Philipos and John.

It's a profound moment when a person realises that they have probably done their best work. What do they do about it? Denial, anger, keep trying - or accept that there is a rhythm to life?

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John Coopey

Fri 11th Mar 2011 23:05

Nice one, Dave.
I poach the forms a lot of Kipling and Betjeman, then feel a complete amateur when I compare what I've come up with to their original.

Philipos

Fri 11th Mar 2011 20:33

Dave - sometimes we can be overtaken by our poems and our poetry writing - we seem aloof sometimes to the outside world which is the price we pay - the feel good factor coming from writing a winner is incalculable - I'm well with you on this

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Ray Miller

Fri 11th Mar 2011 17:17

Enjoyed this a lot, Dave, though I could have done without the penultimate verse. I have such a poem myself, what friends refer to as "the Kate Moss poem". I don't think I'll ever write one that is as popular with an audience, which is a bit sad. But then, I've just been asked to do a support slot at a John Cooper-Clarke gig - my hero! So Whoooo!

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Isobel

Fri 11th Mar 2011 16:59

I can identify with this too! I used to love my Alfie poem - still do, though I don't ever perform it now. I always thought nothing could compare - but in the end, you move on. Now when I look at it, I think it is naive and doesn't work on the page. With performance poetry, you just have to hear it live to get the electricity and the emotion. Us poets are really mad - we attach far too much significance to the written/spoken word - but we are all rather wonderful too. I'm glad I've discovered other people even madder than me. I love the poem - there is so much to identify with. x

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Cate Greenlees

Fri 11th Mar 2011 16:48

This is something all us poets can relate to in some way or another. Writers block can just hit out of the blue and you can seize up for weeks, months and sometimes years. You just need something to kick start you again to get back up in the saddle again.
I really like the idea behind this Dave.
Cate xx

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melanie coady

Fri 11th Mar 2011 11:45

beautiful hun just beautiful..i have a poem i feel this way about,im going through some torment at the minute because nothing i write seem to match up,maybe because when i wrote the poem im on about i ended up in hospital for a week after it lol its called eight neglected wonders of a womb xx

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