hi lynn, many thanks for the kind comments on my poem.

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

yvonne, many thanks for the kind comments on my poem.

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

Original item by Yvonne Brunton

This is superb Ann. A poem to be proud of. Win x

Comment is about our bench (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Loved it.

Comment is about Promises, Promises (blog)

Original item by kayberley

lovely poem ann.

Comment is about our bench (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I enjoyed this very much, Hazel, lovely poem.

Comment is about AWAKENING (blog)

This is quite lovely Ann. I signed in to read your revised poem and saw this. Perfect! I think you've come a long way.

Comment is about our bench (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Cynthia - I have changed my tent poem a bit - think it's improved. Thanks for your comment. x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Have re-jigged - thanks to comments from Graham & Cynthia particularly. I think it's a bit better now.

Comment is about tent (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Apologies for preferring to be hands on
when it comes to donations Marianne.

Doesnt stop me though
as an ex-marathon runner(100)
to donate advice.

Wear nothing but the best of shoes.
run in leggings rather than shorts
in this iffy weather-
once cold strikes the muscles-you are goosed!
keep a lightweight waterproof tied round
your waist-in case of said cold or rain.

If you have'nt run a marathon before
do not try to outpace your capabilities
just keep a comfortable rhythm up.
Dont take on too much water-otherwise
you will be having to stop for weewees
and that can affect momentum.

When taking water at various 'stations'
do so-ONLY-from the genuine stewards-because
you quite often get arsholes giving you
believe it or not cups of urine.

The 'killer' stage that you have been warned of hopefully is the twenty mile 'wall'
that is when the real challenge begins.
If you feel like poo at that stage-just walk
dont be tempted to push it.

Be careful-be lucky-be FIRST!!!!

P&S.xx

Comment is about Brighton Marathon Donations (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

It is an interesting poem, Ann. Would you consider making it shorter? Sometimes, I think, lengthening an idea weakens rather than strengthens a concept. I always have to fight this tendency. It occurs to me that bringing it into 8-line stanzas might accomplish the same end, sneaky but effective?

Comment is about tent (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Execellento!

Comment is about 2005 (blog)

Something from James Baldwin
"The poet or the revolutionary is there to articulate the necessity, but until the people themselves apprehend it, nothing can happen ... Perhaps it can't be done without the poet, but it certainly can't be done without the people. The poet and the people get on generally very badly, and yet they need each other. The poet knows it sooner than the people do. The people usually know it after the poet is dead; but that's all right. The point is to get your work done, and your work is to change the world."

Comment is about Noetic-fret! (poet profile)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

I really like this. 'the unreachable sunset' is terrific. Why did you use the punctuation in the last stanza? I do follow the 'ALMOST STOP but NOT QUITE of the semi-colon; it's intriguing, like getting old, but not dead yet.

Comment is about we run (blog)

Original item by Brutus Paulinus

This is a good poem with a fine theme. For myself, I found stanza 1 a poem in itself, and not really essential to the 'gardening imagery' of the other three stanzas, the crux of your idea. In stanza 3, I suggest a little reworking of adjectives (or elimination of some) eg. 'a wash of watercolour poppies' and substituting another word for 'colour' in the final line. Your diction has captured a sympathetic portrait and a great mood. Always with respect.

Comment is about Weeds (blog)

Original item by Andrew Barnes

haha now if you say ford fiesta sport with xr2 body kit inc plastic arches and metallic grey paint in laquer, now that a cool car. if xr2 same shape, even better.

you mean the model after, the 1987 model? moved like a rocket. the 4 square spot lamps under the bumper was a cool touch.

Comment is about FORD ESCORT (blog)

Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER

OHHH!! the flippin patience(or lack of it)
with some people eh Lynn.

All the space in the world
to cycle in,and there they-always-are
right under your ***** feet!!

It makes our bloody blood
bloody well bloody boil!

(deep breath-relax)

Nice informative poem-
you lovely little pedestrian you!

P&S.xxx

Comment is about Live And Let Live? (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

sorry for correction but XR2i was the king.

Comment is about FORD ESCORT (blog)

Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER

Hi Marianne. I believe I've seen this on FB also. I'd like to add to Mike's comments here. Good luck with the run - it sounds like a great cause. Isobel x

Comment is about Brighton Marathon Donations (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

I liked what I imagined might be the sound of this - which I think might have communicated the mood of it, which I liked too. MS

Comment is about Saint to Starve (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Thank you so much! It really means alot and your contribution will make a difference. Thank you for your kind words and support - I am really nervous but everybody has been amazing. Eye of the tiger! X

Comment is about Brighton Marathon Donations (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

just listened with big stupid grin on my chops all the way through. Wonderful stuff! Maybe the moral is: don't let the big eyes of the man help in any way shape or form - or you'll get back ache. Ta muchly JC great job, chow for now, Nick.

Comment is about Mammaries Are Made Of This (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

at first I thought, what a funny title, a-ha my slow lonely little grey cell noticed. CLANG! that was the penny dropping. Back ache on the way for your slim waif - great idea and so beautifully put. Enjoyment or even pleasure came my way today, Ta muchly, Nick.

Comment is about A Cup (blog)

Original item by Yvonne Brunton

re D.Date not really alone, it's makebelieve, honest! just an idea that nipped in for a cup of tea and got put down on paper. Pleased you made a comment. Thanks muchly, Nick.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

re D.Date. I'm not really sad, in that sense, but sometimes an idea whips across the mind and has to be netted. Ta muchly, Nick.

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Another great piece of work Otis. Gives me food for thought. This piece like many others in your repertoire is mind candy for a philosopher of sorts that lies too often dormant in me.

Nice one Otis, I am inspired again and while reading your work have a red stripe in hand listening to the pain of an artist called Burial. An artist of music of which I think you could admire.

Biggupz Otis.

Peace and Respect.

Mike

x

Comment is about ICON (blog)

Original item by J. Otis Powell‽ (with interrobang)

Marrianne, this is a fantastic cause you have given yourself too. I know quite a bit about orphans and children of abandonment. It is something close to my wife's heart, as she comes from a country with similar problems and heart break. All the very best for your run. People like you seem to be in short supply. I wish you well for the coming event, and don't give up either on the run or the foster of such a charity. I will earmark a tenner for you but wish I could give more. Fantastic Marrianne, my heart goes out to you and all the children suffering from neglect of things we take for granted.

Best wishes and much love to you.

Biggupz marrianne.

Mike

xxx

Comment is about Brighton Marathon Donations (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hello again MC and thanks for your comments. Im struck, although i shouldn't be really, by the varied interpretations and views of the same poem expressed by different readers. You're bang on in your reading of it, in as much as it chimes precisely with the sentiment i sought to invest it with. But, as we all know, once the poem's out there it ceases to belong to the author and has to make its own way, for better or worse. Also, i fully agree with your take on the confusion between the meanings of solitary and lonely. I am by nature happily solitary but that doesn't necessarily mean i'm lonely. I sometimes am but not that frequently. Thanks again.

Comment is about Solitude Gets Lonely (blog)

Can't fault it Jack. wonderful treatment I love it.
,

Comment is about My Anarchist Son (blog)

Original item by Jack Pascoe

John,
What an enormous pair of knockers! If some poor fella fell down between them He`d never be heard of again!...Stay clear man (I know it will be a long walk around) and safe.

And don`t give her my phone number!

Yours in fear and trembling,

Harry.

Comment is about Mammaries Are Made Of This (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Hiya RM..Thanks for the comments on my last two...and to be honest I am struggling like mad to write any decent stuff at all...It is like the want is there but the words fail me and it is a horrible feeling...sighs big time..

Comment is about Richie Muster (poet profile)

Original item by Richie Muster

Yes, thanks for that Yvonne, it is a good idea.
I struggled to make that work and thought the mid line rhyme a clever idea. Perhaps to so?

Comment is about Ode to Perfection (blog)

lol, speechless #hides

Comment is about Capital Crime (Eats, Shoots and Leaves) (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I had a lot of fun reading this with all its wonderful rhymes. For some strange reason I was reminded of 'The Gas Man Cometh' by Flanders and Swan. I'd have made the last line folowed the rhyme pattern rather than going for the midline rhyme, maybe like:- 'Now it's a perfect piece of wood'

Comment is about Ode to Perfection (blog)

woow Larisa,lovely im must say... this poem is enough to fill any woman with pride.xxx

Comment is about I Am a Lady (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Ha ha, Yvonne.
The down-side to this is that when you're sunbathing you can't get your arms by your side. (A perpetual problem for my wife!)
In a similar vein I did one called "Liposuction" a little while ago as I tried to kill two birds with one stone!

Comment is about A Cup (blog)

Original item by Yvonne Brunton

absolutely loved it... one day "we will all be planets" and it wont be just an idle dream.

Comment is about We All Could Be Planets (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

sweet mammaries indeed... i enjoyed it i kept bobbing my head to the beat...

Comment is about Mammaries Are Made Of This (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

thanks for comments

yeh fairy tale thing is good. ring of roses hints at the widespread deaths, the plagues and consumptions that wipe populations out. heroin, ketamine, even codiene knocking themlike flies today.Pollution...i grew up in middle of oil refinery by the sea...i have permanent bronchitis and pneumonias had a go at me before now. but a fighter i am and no drug/disease/dosage going to get me.Im indestructable...i get sad for those who fell under.

JUST SAY NO.(especially to dog shit and bleach)

Comment is about 3 tin rings (blog)

Original item by Rachel Bond

I like the allegory of "insufficient harvests" (lack of love?) affecting "isolated farms" (lonely people?)...it works powerfully well with the brevity employed...as does the whole stanza that asks and answers its own timeless question.
N.B. It's my view that "solitary" if often mistakenly equated with "lonely" in the general way of things. One has no essential relevance to the other. The former
describes a state of being; the latter, merely its effect on some but not all in that situation.

Comment is about Solitude Gets Lonely (blog)

I bet you're glad you got that off your chest!
There seems no let-up to the inspiration (and
perspiration) from someone who is never in any
danger of going tits-up!!
But I wonder what Perry Como-tose would have to
say about this?! :-)

Comment is about Mammaries Are Made Of This (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thank you for your kind words.

Comment is about Enter Violet (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Agree with everyone else, Steve, a most compelling read.

Comment is about 13th Floor (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Dear Fay: Your humor has brightened my day, thanks. This is a response to your lack of appreciation for orange, it's from my poem Free Jazz on my blog http://writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=24327.

True blues isn’t news

But baritone notes from a tenor horn

Can move ancestors

Fire is needed more than light

So orange lilies scream at the Sun

That’s duende I announced

I scream to ease my troubled mind

She said

To breathe inside thickness and doubt

To throw others off my scent

That’s catharsis we agreed

A flower is a lovesome thing

When it screams
J. Otis Powell‽ (with interrobang)

Comment is about Fay Roberts (poet profile)

Original item by Fay Roberts

Hi , thanks for your comment on Compassion, I agree.
Regards Hazel

Comment is about BT (poet profile)

Original item by BT

The ribaldry continues unabated (fortunately)
What a laugh I enjoyed every line.
What hiccough? sounded more like a false start to me but I was too busy laughing to care.
You've reminded me of a poem I did on the same subject a couple of years ago. I'll put it on WOL
Where did you get that picture? good choice.XX

Comment is about Mammaries Are Made Of This (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Hi loved the flow of this poem and the way you run the lines on so successfully. I thought you must have written it in response to the current news.I like the way you have linked this to the Brontes and rather than being defeatist you engender steely determination. Great.
I was up in the High Peak this Easter - plenty of snow left on the tops in the wild moorlands - inspiring!

Comment is about Inspiration from Bronte Country (blog)

Original item by C Richard Miles

enjoyed this could that we be planets of ourselves

Comment is about We All Could Be Planets (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

enjoyed this journey loved the language

Comment is about Inspiration from Bronte Country (blog)

Original item by C Richard Miles

Just been up North for a family visit over Easter. Seeing the local news about planned wind farms on Thornton Moor near Haworth reminded me of this poem I wrote a couple of years ago another snowy April.

Comment is about Inspiration from Bronte Country (blog)

Original item by C Richard Miles