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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Mon 26th Mar 2012 17:01

Thank you all for commenting, I'm not sure I'm entirely happy with it yet, but the main thrust is there. Best wishes, Dave

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 26th Mar 2012 16:32

I bet there is a legion of shop assistants out there who would pin this up! I'm not sure about the format but the subject matter is always contemporary and I like the pay-off.

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 26th Mar 2012 16:26

"If you can remember a cock
That was hard as a rock
Why worry when you find
Stuff coming harder to mind?!"
:-)
Good luck with your 27th March outing I see
publicised on WOL.

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Mon 26th Mar 2012 16:23

Hello, dear Jvonne!
Thank you so much for your comprehensive comment on my poem "With Love Only". I appreciate it very much.

With warmest wishes,

Larisa

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Mon 26th Mar 2012 16:10

Hi, M.C.!
Thank you so much for your charming comment on "With Love Only". And... I am very sorry for that foolish argument we had.

With warmest wishes,

Larisa

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 26th Mar 2012 16:09

I confess to something of a vested interest as my late eldest sister married a U.S. forces survivor of the post-D-Day operations and returned to his country and bore him ten children. His generation is rightly venerated for their deeds in defeating the vile barbarism of the Hitler regime (albeit that no one knew its equivalent lurked in Mother Russia!). It is the thought of men like him and what a U.S. government can publicly "spin" in our own age that brought about these lines.

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Mon 26th Mar 2012 14:22

enjoyed reading M62, J22

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Martin Peacock

Mon 26th Mar 2012 13:24

There's something definitely 'of the night' [to quote the almighty Widdecombe] about the phrase 'Homeland Security' that makes me think of National Socialism, 1984 ['a boot stamping on a man's face forever'], Brave New World and black uniforms in general [even though it's my fave colour/noncolour/what the hell is black anyway?] The American way of life has become increasingly, insidiously fascist ever since 2001 don't you all think? Doesn't matter that their prez is a black Democrat; Bill Hicks once quipped that, upon election every incumbent president is shown previously unseen footage by a cabal of fat cats and moneyshakers and kingmakers, showing the Kennedy assassination from the vantage point of the grassy knoll itself and then asked, 'any questions?' to which they reply, 'only what you want my agenda to be for the next four years.' This poem is a great illustration of US hypocrisy, MC. Nicely nice.

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Mon 26th Mar 2012 13:00

Some incredible lines here! Love it! Right up my street.

"So I can be someone else for a while
If only for a bit"

- yes I can feel that. Brilliant stuff.

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Mon 26th Mar 2012 11:10

for a minute their i thought i was racing... good one Ray

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Mon 26th Mar 2012 10:59

It would take age to talk my father-in-law into get the violin out, but once he did, it became part of his body. We both miss his playing now that he’s gone.

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Mon 26th Mar 2012 10:55

wow dont we all have troubles learning to play the violin... #you are not alone

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Mon 26th Mar 2012 10:50

uhmm so true yet many lack the courage to...

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Mon 26th Mar 2012 01:05

That's all right for you - to say, but I'm not stuck holding the baby until Monday when the granddaughter pops round for a couple of hours, which only seems like a couple of days when I have to clear and clean up behind her all the time. Have you seen the size of the cat's boils? This isn't Dear Marg, is it? Ta muchly Nick.

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Mon 26th Mar 2012 01:00

The screech or scratch is still better than I do with me little triangle. Dear Marg, d'you think taking it out of its packet might help? Oops, wrong magazine. Does this build week by week into a full orchestra? Ta muchly, Nick.

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Mon 26th Mar 2012 00:54

Just a minute - no repetition, hesitation, or diviation, Oops! wrong game. At least you exercised me giggle muscles. Ta muchly, Nick.

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Mon 26th Mar 2012 00:16

Yes Yvonne-
we were spinning a tail
about the cat.

Just thought it was the purrfect joke
to end this night of frivolity-lol!xx

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 26th Mar 2012 00:16

This is true
But hard to do.

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 26th Mar 2012 00:08

Thanks for your comment on 'My Violin'.
Were you just STRINGING me along?

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 26th Mar 2012 00:00

Ah yes I remember it well - I think?!
Thanks for a good giggle. xx

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Sun 25th Mar 2012 23:58

Don't dare correct us on Stradivarius-tee hee!
and just add-our cat was gutted over this!xx

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John Coopey

Sun 25th Mar 2012 23:54

Thanks for your thoughts on "Talkin' Brown Ale Blues", Nick. I hated the stuff but didn't have the brains to stop drinking it!

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John Coopey

Sun 25th Mar 2012 23:52

Hello Greg. I did embellish the effects of Newcy Broon a bit. It was, nevertheless, horrible. I drank it because it was cool (I was at Durham). It's main side effect on me was acidic indigestion of a nuclear order.
On another front, which of us is happier with the 0-0 draw yesterday?

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John Coopey

Sun 25th Mar 2012 23:49

Hello MC. Thanks for your comments on "Talkin' Brown Ale Blues". I'll have you know my guitar always sounds pissed how I play it!

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John Coopey

Sun 25th Mar 2012 23:44

Glad you liked, "Talkin' Brown Ale Blues" John. I hated the stuff 40 years ago. I'm teetotal these days and Newcy Broon offers no threat to that!

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Sun 25th Mar 2012 23:42

All this must be making you
very highly STRUNG Yvonne.

We really would love to be instruMENTAL
in helping you,but won't
HARP on about it.
Best that we CONDUCT ourselves properly
and BOW out gracefully.

Ps. a mate of ours called STRADDY
had VARIUS ways of overcoming this prob.

(Jolly good poem)

Wethankyor!.xx

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John Coopey

Sun 25th Mar 2012 23:42

Thanks for yer thoughts on "Talkin' Brown Ale Blues". I thought it was too acidic for me then (40 years ago); these days it would go through me like that Alien.

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John Coopey

Sun 25th Mar 2012 23:32

Excellent, Jim.
Although I can make more sense of this than a lot of the stuff on this site!

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John Coopey

Sun 25th Mar 2012 23:26

Bugger me, Chris! Mi name's up in lights.
Can I show this to mi mam?

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John Coopey

Sun 25th Mar 2012 23:23

Get ready for some "on the fiddle" jokes, Yvonne!
I liked the last verse best - neat and tight.
Perhaps I could help with your violin problems if you could help to sort out some of mine? (see Dear Marge)!

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John Duffus

Sun 25th Mar 2012 23:07

Many thanks Ray,
especially your helpful suggestions - both taken on board as I realized that it was a wee bit ragged and not thoroughly edited - so that has helped a lot! Also the rhyme is too sporadic and needs to be balanced better with the un-rhyming parts. Incidentally, this is about a real person - not just an abstract tirade, perhaps passion over-rides sensibility?
Once again thanks Ray.

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Sun 25th Mar 2012 23:05

Shall try to make this Chris..at the van but hope to be back...

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Ray Miller

Sun 25th Mar 2012 22:21

There's some nice stuff in this but I did find it a bit disjointed. You start off with something of a regular rhyme which eventually is abandoned entirely.I think the last 2 verses are best, actually, though "a lullaby of lsd" pulled me up sharp. D'you mean £sd? I think the poem would benefit if you scrapped the 2nd verse or at least whittled it down a lot.

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Ray Miller

Sun 25th Mar 2012 22:00

Thanks, Nick. At my age it's more likely the cycle to the top will kill me than the descent.

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 25th Mar 2012 21:55


I like this as an example of thinking `outside the box`...something I think we poets should do more of (to shake scientists and astromoners out of their weary `scientific` ruts and make them look at the real wonder of what they`re discovering)This does it in a `what if?` sort of a way.

I disagree (respectfully) with Yvonne...The music hall monologue is usually dramatic, and needs to be neat, whereas this is lightly speculative and can bear a bit of untidiness.

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Ray Miller

Sun 25th Mar 2012 21:54

Nice poem, enjoyed the middle verse most, especially this

The sputum and the rectum are symbols of your style

Spat upon or shat upon to lance that rancid boil

If you're averse to any criticism then just ignore me, otherwise

you increase not - is unnecessarily archaic

Deconstruct what's been constructed - kind of stating the obvious?

You scrutinize with your eyes,

judge and carp and stigmatize

Maybe that is sharper






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Harry O'Neill

Sun 25th Mar 2012 21:40


I once had an argument with a serious, intelligent advocate of the use of torture in a specific circumstance...and I don`t want to go there again.

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 25th Mar 2012 21:27


A neat little `dinky` warning one for the kids.

(They`re not easy to do)

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 25th Mar 2012 20:29


Thanks folks, much appreciated.

For M.C./
Yes you`re right about the repeated `even - changed it (it`s a habit)...Also changed `dies` to fades -it`s better...Not entirely happy with that penultimate bit, particularly the dots at the end - I might change it sometime.

Thanks again all.

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John Duffus

Sun 25th Mar 2012 17:06

Great Work examining how we seek to mitigate our personal pain by reflecting on the pain of others, then musing on the pain of human existence; our relentless and ineluctable folly - that even a civilised society cannot in reality, ameliorate the excesses of our savage instinct.

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John Duffus

Sun 25th Mar 2012 16:47

Completely empathise with the sentiment here. My mind is left reeling from all the tech-speak what is flung at you by elitist tech-geeks. Will this 5 trilobyte gigaplex plug-in i-site give me a multi-platform experience and revivify my choice impulse ratio?
I seriously doubt it 'cos it's all meaningless.

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John Duffus

Sun 25th Mar 2012 16:40

Wonderful - great words! "Velleminous wind" especially. Brought a smile to my face. Thanks.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 25th Mar 2012 13:52

What an honour! Rather a delicious poem too!

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 25th Mar 2012 13:47

Hi David - welcome to WOL. I am amazed at your powers of learning - I can't remember any of my poems! Good luck with the Cleckheaton gig, and the fundraising too. Hope you enjoy being part of WOL!

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Nick Coleman

Sun 25th Mar 2012 12:57

Paints a great picture, and more, Ray. (and also it reminds me of childhood races down the escarpment of the South Downs on bikes with no brakes)

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Nick Coleman

Sun 25th Mar 2012 12:54

Thanks for comments on the Mr Dyer poem. As forty years to the day since I moved here felt he deserved a tribute!

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 25th Mar 2012 12:48

Worthwhile for its accommodation of the
reality of human suffering on a personal and
far wider scale. But the challenge of whether
we have to accept the pain or fight to alleviate it is always there.

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 25th Mar 2012 12:30

Thanks Nick...I believe that the Bush brigade
did their great country huge damage by their
enthusiasm for, and their mealy-mouthed definition of, interrogation that was clearly
torture by any accepted definition of the word.

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John Duffus

Sun 25th Mar 2012 12:03

Yvonne,
Ha-ha, great response. I'm glad that you like the Goit !!
The Tuit of course, is a different kettle of fish entirely !! I'd be curious to know if a round one will serve you better than than the more common oval one. I'll be keeping an eye out for any Tuit definitions from you in the future.

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