I know who this is all about, still I don't understand the last 3 lines.Is it a reference to one of "his" poems?

a first collection. That

MA in creative writing.

I'd have thought MA should be ending the first line.

The burglar alarms did ring,

eventually. January

prefer "rang" to "did ring".

Comment is about The cat, the damselflies, and the deer (blog)

Original item by Greg Freeman

To be finally PART of the roots. Yes! We are plant food after all.

Comment is about La Vida Local (blog)

I agree Chris. Write Out Loud has always been about giving individual poets a voice, a forum for expression. Those of us who have the privilege to be able to write and read our work out loud without such fear should support by signing, though it might be even better if we could get a petition to the Qatari embassy in London. Not sure how we would organise that. Anyone?

Comment is about Qatari poet jailed for life to hear appeal verdict this month (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Hi Ann

Thanks for the welcome, it was very much appreciated that you took the time to do that.

Thanks again

William

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Soooo funny Anthony. Glad I clicked on the link :)

Comment is about Poetry v rap: who comes out the winner in BBC contest? (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Hi Tony, thanks for all your comments :)

Love this piece, get where you're coming from and the way it flows is really nice.

Comment is about The Rapids. (blog)

Brilliant Ged. I think it's a scene many of us have looked at before and I love the way you portray it with such coldness.

Comment is about Caught Between The Devil And A Dragon (blog)

Original item by Ged Thompson

Really like this one Ged some great comments in there, and I totally argee with your sentiment!

Comment is about The Latest Craze (blog)

Original item by Ged Thompson

im loving the boots...:)

Comment is about Bindi Foster-Brown at Write Out Loud Sale - 20 November 2012 (photo)

Nice one! Take care, Tony.

Comment is about Where (blog)

Original item by Marnanel Thurman

Hi Wez. Love this! Have been back to look at where I lived and grew up a few times. Childhood floods through my memory. Well done!! Take care, Tony.

Comment is about Way Back Home (blog)

Original item by Wez Jefferies

Thanks for the tip Cynthia, going to go through that list now.

By the way, have your read any Anna Kavan?

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hello Cynthia, thank you for your kind words on Submission.
You pose a question about tenses.

The beginning and end are in the future tense as the death has not happened. It is a commentary of how I think I would feel if something were to happen and its effect.
The central piece is reminiscence of the components of a relationship.

I'm sorry if it feels confusing but I never usually explain my work too much. My ending I feel is more profound, prophetic even.

Many thanks once again for your views, always appreciated.

very best regards,

Graham

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x7WdvzITaLk

Nuff said?

Comment is about Poetry v rap: who comes out the winner in BBC contest? (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Cheers for the comment, Harry.

I see you have a Liverpool and literary background, so do you fancy coming to read / perform with our group, The Liver Bards, at the Ship and Mitre (upstairs room), Dale Street, on third Mondays of each month? Next meetings are on Monday 18 Feb and Monday 18 March. There is no meeting in April though; instead we have a special Monday 6 May Liver Bards at the Ship and Mitre, as part of the Liverpool Literary Festival.

PS When the slow withdrawal of the light .... great line.


Our New Brighton-based group is at the Magazine pub on second Mondays every month.

Both clubs start at 8pm. Both are open floor, where every poet gets to read twice in two five-minute slots.the slow withdrawal of the light

PS

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Ah yes, St Theresa the Little Flower!

Cheers for the comment, Harry. Yes it was just a strange period of stress I had, followed by sequences of epiphany, so I thoguyht I'd blog it here. You know what we bred-in-the-bone Catholics are like!

I don't put my poems up here any more. Just oocasional colour-written prose like the above posting.

I see you have a Liverpool and literary background, so do you fancy coming to read / perform with our group, The Liver Bards, at the Ship and Mitre (upstairs room), Dale Street, on third Mondays of each month? Next meetings are on Monday 18 Feb and Monday 18 March. There is no meeting in April though; instead we have a special Monday 6 May Liver Bards at the Ship and Mitre, as part of the Liverpool Literary Festival.

Our New Brighton-based group is at the Magazine pub on second Mondays every month.

Both clubs start at 8pm. Both are open floor, where every poet gets to read twice in two five-minute slots.

Comment is about Truth often comes in drag - as a paradox (blog)

Original item by Steve Regan

Wow! Hello MC, and thanks for visiting and responding to Australia Day. I am also grateful for the heads up on the square-rigger. I shall follow the progress of that project. Quite interesting. Have a pleasant week!

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

There is a truth in here and your language avoids the typical. A fresh and philosophically interesting take on how we define something, something that intangibly refuses to be defined.

Balance, resolve, scales, they're too physical in our typical understandings. Even in a metaphysical sense, they're all hard edges and cannot possibly add up to, nor equate to love or an explanation to us - of love.

But I feel you know that, whether that was a deliberate expression of part of an inner understanding.

Irrespective of my interpretation - I very much enjoyed this poem.

Best

Chris

Comment is about Scales (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I'd echo M.C. Oh and elegant - no poetic turbulence.

Best

Chris

Comment is about Lily going by (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Sentimental sod :) Spot-on.

Best

Chris

Comment is about Samantha Louise and Sweet Sarah Jane (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thank you for your comments, I will allow for the cryptic here... there are many different types of silences - some we own, some we don't.


Thank you Noetic-fret!!

Comment is about Silence (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Thank you for the comments - I am very humbled by your thoughts.

Cynthia - I was referring to 'beyond' but that links with what you say too. Thank you for your words. I am a big admirer of your work too x

Comment is about Meta (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Important story, great to raise this. All poets should add their signature via the link.

Comment is about Qatari poet jailed for life to hear appeal verdict this month (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

"In my rear view mirror I see
People with bad ideas" - making me think about where I've been

Comment is about Anniversary (blog)

Original item by J. Otis Powell‽ (with interrobang)

Brill stuff Harry

Comment is about Should he go to Specsavers? (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Thank you Thomas for a good chuckle

Comment is about Where (blog)

Original item by Marnanel Thurman

Effortlessly touching in its honest truth.

Comment is about Samantha Louise and Sweet Sarah Jane (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Harry - these lines followed the appalling street murder a few days ago of a youth who was being pursued through the streets of Pimlico, London by a gang who fell upon him when he tripped and knifed him to death before sauntering off, nonchalantly tucking their weapons out of sight.
This is the reality of modern "multi" London town today.

Comment is about STREET SCENE - LONDON 2013 (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Nice thoughtful poem Ged.

Comment is about Blue Lights, No Siren (blog)

Original item by Ged Thompson

I like this Steve. (my own mother enlisted me with the `Little flower` contingent)

They fetched one of her relics over last year and you couldn`t get into Liverpool Cathederal for the crowd.

These mothers knew something we didn`t know.

Comment is about Truth often comes in drag - as a paradox (blog)

Original item by Steve Regan

Hugh,
You`re getting to be prompt at this on-the-spot rhymed reportage.

(all this and those last-liners too!)

Comment is about A miracle recovery for baby Sam (blog)

Original item by hugh

Thomas,
This is what I call a noble case of being kind to animals. And a neat little sonnet (but should that comma be after `life` in line five?)

Comment is about Margaret (blog)

Original item by Marnanel Thurman

A pithy all-actioner (with a `feeling` last line to kill the impression of slickness)

Comment is about STREET SCENE - LONDON 2013 (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

One can feel like two,
In the same way two can feel like one.

brilliant line, so poignant and so very true

well done

Comment is about 'Cos it's the ones that love you (blog)

Original item by Wez Jefferies

Dave,
I like the way the laconic inter-play ofthe words in the first six lines describes the situation...and its aftermath. Also the play on the word `surface` and `life` afterwards.

Nothing is said about depth in the poem at all and there is no exclamation after `oh Mike`...Which makes those last two lines (to me) seemmore like a groan than a cry.

A very suggestive poem.

Comment is about Jumping the queue (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

While i dont agree with it all mate, its a really good piece

well done again

keep the faith (-:

That made me smile

Comment is about My Opinion of the Christian God is shitty (blog)

Original item by Wez Jefferies

Just re read it, again,

so again fucking brilliant, well done

Comment is about Way Back Home (blog)

Original item by Wez Jefferies

I really like this poem, well done, its gritty and dark and very real, no bullshit about it your wearing your heart on your sleeve

Well done mate, fucking good job!!!!!!!!

We need more of this

Comment is about Way Back Home (blog)

Original item by Wez Jefferies

Bravo Anne,
This is what I call `stickin` to the last!` (and it`s got a story too!)

Comment is about city in the sand (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Lovely, lovely, lovely, John.

Comment is about Samantha Louise and Sweet Sarah Jane (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Beautiful John, just beautiful!

Comment is about Samantha Louise and Sweet Sarah Jane (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks for your feedback on my driving seat poem Ged. It was an uncomfortable experience for me - I'm glad that came across. It all makes for good poetic fodder though, so something positive came out of it. x

Comment is about Ged Thompson (poet profile)

Original item by Ged Thompson

and mine.

http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=33742

Comment is about How does it feel ... to be a part of your body? (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Personal Odour? Fishermen? Surely some mistake!

Thanks for your feedback on 'Mackerel In The Bath' Yvonne-glad it raised a smile :-)

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

Original item by Yvonne Brunton

Thanks very much for your kind comments on 'Snowblind' Tina - they're very much appreciated
Ian

Comment is about tina (poet profile)

Original item by tina

I like this, the first verse is amazing x

Comment is about Snowblind (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

Oh Win - that sounds sad :(
xx

Comment is about The Magician Cat (blog)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi all. Thx for the comments. Cats are very much in my mind at the moment. The pic shows squeak (left) and his sister Bubble (right). sleeping togehter on Bubbles' last night last Wednesday.

Comment is about The Magician Cat (blog)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Cats do lots of magic things!

Comment is about The Magician Cat (blog)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Not a great poem - but it was such fun to do - and to read aloud! Subject was our "homework" for my writers group - I think I'd probably not bother to write some months if it wasn't for them!

Comment is about city in the sand (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove