A two day poetry bender which sounded like a wild wild wild time.
Comment is about Soho (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
I love your take on it Greg - very original! And what a cat - more of a puma, I'd say :))
Comment is about The cat, the damselflies, and the deer (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Funeral of lives
Run like a crazy for your coffin
run in fever for finding a bus
That will carry people ,pain,team..
Run to refuge,residence,-cemetery
But and for going there you need a friend
Fiends for a grave,gravedigger friend..
To seems like you and not somebody else
Friend for marble,friends for...
Run.run in this funeral
Funeral of lives..
Run,like in my funeral
Leon Qafzezi-Poetry books 2012
Comment is about Leon Qafzezi (poet profile)
Original item by Leon Qafzezi
It is ironic that I have just read this as I have just finished listening to this very topic superbly discussed on Radio 4's Start the Week, with Joan Bakewell, Tim Montgomerie and Blair's speech writer, Philip something. Chris Mullin admits hating having to read speeches prepared by others containing meaningless phrases. Well worth catching on Listen Again: http://www.bbc.co.uk/programmes/b01q8l31
You have the makings of an even better poem here. How about equating the speech's effect with the durability of an ice-cream cone? Great, important, choice of subject.
Comment is about Clare Foges -this girl is on fire. (blog)
Original item by hugh
JANUARY 2013
Despite clashing events we had a great night at the Ring O Bells with everyone in high spirits. Carol Keys started us off with a New Years Eve themed poem. While Joy got us all involved with her Balls themed poem. Pete read a big f@ck you to the world and Darren wowed us with his newly written words. New poet Carol Kelly made us think with her creative piece about the Cournals daughter. Alvin Sawdust had us all in giggles with Cockneys Sell Fruit, while Deslexic said Good God. Joe the ranter joined us for the first time at the Ringers and ranted about the British pastime of queuing. Julia spoke of a modern day Robbie Burns and I read through a Window Pane. Our guest Gus Jonnson read some touching and honest poetry about his past, his mothers OCD and how painting is a messy form of poetry. He kept us all captivated with reflective words. So a great night.
FEEDBACK
Areas for improvement
Noise from downstairs, a fez for everyone, £1,000,000 for each, bit cold
My apologies for the noise on the stairs. As for a fez for everyone, not sure where to get them and I can't afford to give you all lots of money lol. And the cold, I'm afraid the radiators were on so there isn't much I can do for this.
Good Points
Excellent content as usual, Overall pretty good, The fecking lot, Lovely wasn't a disappointment, Nice quiet but comfy, Enjoyable evening, some great poetry as usual, Great evening, Lovely,Chums, creativity, food and raffle.
Some great feedback there. And I'd like to say a big thank you to everyone whose supported me, practically the Nearly Dead Poets and Just Poets who compered the nights and Carol Keys for making the cakes. But I couldn't have done this without the support everyone as given me. Now I pass the reins proudly back to Gemma "the poet " Lees and I'm looking forward to her return. Next months guest will be the talented Catherine Coward. See you all then.
Review is about Write Out Loud - Middleton on 27 Jan 2013 (event)
Thanks again folks
Joe - I do love how people interpret poems - that's the absolute beauty of them innit?
Francine - thank you :) Yep, to me, the Look/See/Observe were MASSIVE clues, but then, I was the writer so it's obvious when you already know!
Comment is about Huami (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Just for fun ... and in the hope that it will inspire a few more entries to Dave's Cat's out of the Bag January WOL competition
Comment is about The cat, the damselflies, and the deer (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thank you Hugh! Really appreciate your comments - Katy
Comment is about hugh (poet profile)
Original item by hugh
Hi Anthony - thanks for comment, I was, of course, enough rock and roll to make up for it!
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
<Deleted User> (9882)
Mon 28th Jan 2013 00:25
tony sheridan
Sun 27th Jan 2013 20:40
Hi Hugh. Thanks for your comments on The Rapids. Glad you like it. Take care, Tony.
Comment is about hugh (poet profile)
Original item by hugh
Thank you, Laura : )
You've been writing up a storm! I must go through some of what I've missed...
xx
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Thank you : )
You've been quiet too lately - hope all is well and you are just busy having fun!
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Love the initial mysteriousness and perception of this, Laura - though the 'Look..., See, Observe were obvious clues.
Observe was my favourite part (as well as note).
Comment is about Huami (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
we've all moved on a long way in the past half-century - if the destruction of a species and self absorbed killing of other species is the crime - where are the great 'sportsmen' from the stars who will visit us and obliterate humans in the same way? let's face it - the fox is no greater a self-centred troublecauser than man himself.
i prefer my sport to be based on carrying a ball across a line of whitewash. inter-species combat just doesn't do it for me.
Comment is about Vermin (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Thanks Yvonne - I meet more than my share here in the "tourist land" of central London, tho' I am better than most at spotting them in time to take avoiding action!
Comment is about STREETWISE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Ian - Man is a predator and whilst "progress"has subverted the instincts, they have their place in nature, just as hounds will do what hounds do and foxes do what they do. I grew up in the English countryside of half a century ago and recall its occupants as generations of unsentimental realists who practised husbandry and whose hard-nosed acceptance of nature's harsh realities made it possible. The fox was no friend to any species but his own and the enemy of most.
I recall a barn being cleared of rats in ways that would have caused palpitations in today's sentimental breasts had they had been foxes. The crime seems to be to dress up for the event and even worse, ride a horse!
Comment is about Vermin (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
If i remember correctly Ged, didn't you win with your amazing poem. I came second x
Comment is about Jess Green (photo)
Original item by tina
Must admit I've recently got into the bad habit of slipping in what attempt to be comical lines in otherwise serious poems. I think you're right - it doesn't really work in this one. Thanks so much for commenting! :)
Comment is about Sonnet on Death (blog)
Original item by Irina
Well done Katy,an unique piece of verse,full of action and vivid descriptions.
"kitten scramble onto bed"
"you declare your predatory love ."
"You recite poetry loudly,off the cuff of your duffle coat."
Comment is about Soho (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
Fabulous flow of words,possessing a clever stream of rhythm and rhyme.Well done ! More please Tony.
Comment is about The Rapids. (blog)
Deliciously decadent Katy. You just need a little rock'n roll and you have the full set!
Comment is about Soho (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
http://news.yahoo.com/blogs/sideshow/cat-born-without-leg-bones-getting-operation-thanks-011228150.html
Easier maybe for this one Win. My black cat does a passable imitation of a tea-cosy when he's all tucked-in
Comment is about The Magician Cat (blog)
Original item by Winston Plowes
Katy thanks!
I know I`m a bit of an old fart but-honest - after reading the rest of it, I`ve never read anything so hugely humorous as those last four and a bit lines
Thanks again.
Comment is about Soho (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
Whites of her lies refers to 'don't shoot until you see the whites of their eyes' which is being at war and 'her lies' could be your better self admonishing your lesser self. The tripartite thing is referring to the Christian god and you feeling like god, which we all do especially as 'artistes'. That's the way I 'interpret' your poem anyway.
Comment is about Huami (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
I avoid town Ged- unless I have to...noo I avoid town. Please explain the 'Caterpillar' to me-Tommy
Comment is about The Latest Craze (blog)
Original item by Ged Thompson
Hi M
As Cynthia says...
You are one of the best poets I have ever read.
X
Comment is about Meta (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Thought I recognised the name, so I clicked on it and this pic came up, I was at that competition, it was nice to meet you Jess X
Comment is about Jess Green (photo)
Original item by tina
After going over this word by word sentence by sentence I am so sorry to tell you my friend that this piece is not only good but.........
Fucking brilliant
(I was in the car with you)
Comment is about The Driving Seat (blog)
Original item by Isobel
I like this
Money cant buy you happiness but it can afford you a much better standard of misery.
Good one Tony
Comment is about First Class Ticket. (blog)
Its really nice this Tony, such is life, fast and slow, hard and soft, light and dark, lovely stuff.
Comment is about The Rapids. (blog)
three decades under your thumb
each one curves lines
of journeys won
Comment is about Meta (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
tony sheridan
Sat 26th Jan 2013 20:15
Love it. Take care, Tony.
Comment is about I believe in fairies (blog)
Original item by Ged Thompson
tony sheridan
Sat 26th Jan 2013 20:11
Unicorns, The little people, Fairies.....etc. Did they ever exist? Did we forget about them?.....Maybe they had to let us do are own thing. Nice one. Take care, Tony.
Comment is about Four Leaf Clover (blog)
Original item by Ged Thompson
lovely poem . Great contrast in the two womem and in vocabulary used to describe each. ( long vowel sounds/short vowel sounds.Scrums is a great word - never seen it used as a verb before.
Comment is about The Girl on the Jubilee Line (blog)
Original item by Mark Niel
tony sheridan
Sat 26th Jan 2013 19:01
M.C.N
it would garner exactly the same amount of sympathy if the protagonists were dressed in their fancy dress and deemed to call it a 'sport'. Man has no place in setting himself 'above' other animals on this planet - especially when subjecting them to (in)human barbarism in the name of sport.
thanks for the comments
Ian
Comment is about Vermin (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
great rant! I enjoyed this. Hope you managed to get past them. XX
Comment is about STREETWISE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
great but a tad puzzling Mike. Have you mis-spelt Ladies or are you after the old boys?Isobel may think it gross but you should hear what the bus drivers round our way call the elderly who whiff a bit! xx
Comment is about Old Laddies (blog)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
I like the poem but the words 'Oh dear' in line don't seem to fit in with the rest of the vocabulary - too trite for this artwork
Comment is about Sonnet on Death (blog)
Original item by Irina
How come we never saw this job advertised???
I was quite irritated when I read this in the papers - we all know abbout these Speechwriters but isn't it pathetic that someone who purports to have an Oxbridge education does not write his own speeches? I enjoyed your use of inverted phrasing Hugh as, for me, this highlighted the irony of Cameron using a hired pen.
Comment is about Clare Foges -this girl is on fire. (blog)
Original item by hugh
Mark,
Trying to home in to what I said about `scrum`.
I feel that she should have been absorbed in some way out of the dreaminess - instead of fighting her way out through a `scrum`.
(and - by the way - what happened to the `judder`...the `savage panicking shudder`.(imo) also militates too harshly against the dreaminess)
The contrastive astringency of the first four lines of that last stanza made it a very good poem....I look forward to your next.
Comment is about The Girl on the Jubilee Line (blog)
Original item by Mark Niel
love the cunning use of the word 'clipper' here, Hugh as it left me wondering if you were writing about a woman or a ship( although the title seems to lean more towards it being a woman I don't want to relinqish the idea of a ship.)Although I am usually allergic to repetition the deliberate repetition of 'placid'is well thought out and very effective - as is the len gth of the poem . We are given a brief snapshot which leave us wanting more of this ephemeral image of perfection.
Comment is about Lily going by (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Loved your reading of this so powerful as the spoken word and so well read.XX
Comment is about The Sad Loss (blog)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
Cynthia
I`m always doin` that comma thing
Yourpoint about the last line is sound
Changed `em...thanks
Comment is about Lily going by (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
I think this is a good example of the impact free verse can have when done well - and we don't find too much of that. You have a great sense of rhythm and cadence in this piece which gives it the right flow to draw the reader /listener on.
I love caring for my granddaughter 1 day a week by choice- but it leaves me exhausted. You have so well got into the mind of someone who has to do it because blood is thicker than water. XX
Comment is about Caught Between The Devil And A Dragon (blog)
Original item by Ged Thompson
Harry O'Neill
Mon 28th Jan 2013 17:30
Yvonne,
Your comment about `clipper` has been very helpful.
It made me think of the billowing sails of a clipper being too full for the intended image (a clean beauty cutting across placidness)This in turn fetched up some words for `sharp`and an anxiety I blogged in the discussions about fear of copying Hopkins (as if I could!)So I`ve changed it
...Lost the alliteration but`shippy` turbulence and wake are still there.
Thanks.
Comment is about Lily going by (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill