This essay at looking at the Kestrel in a part
mechanical way is interesting.
I`m not a great admirer of half rhymes, but those in stanza two do seem to prepare us (sonicaly) a little for the short, `cut` `blood` `gut` and thud in the following moment of truth stanza.
That `deadly daggered grasp` says it as it is, as does the `plummet` (which better suggests an intending drop.
That `Bespoke` suggests a non evolutionary,
`fit for purpose` deliberate design.
The `bazooka` too much separates the aimed from the aimer to fit this.
Good though.
Comment is about Windhover (blog)
Original item by C Richard Miles
What exactly would ever 'get across' to an audience on 'Acoustics Night' except rants on local interests, screamed into the mike? Politics and sex?
Did your 'piece' engage or enrage the drunken, breast-flaunting lady?
Comment is about OPEN MIC AUDIENCES (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Super poem! Brilliant - 'and that was a fact' - and the closing two lines - genius. I can't wipe the smile off my face.
Just to be pernickety - pop an apostrophe into 'week's rent' (since you're so high profile).
Comment is about Philosophy made difficult #2 (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
The unkindest cut, Ken, was that I'd glanced away and it was just as I turned back to her she was pulling it back down. It wasn't easy remembering my lyrics when all I could think was "SH*T, WIND AND PARAFFIN!"
Comment is about OPEN MIC AUDIENCES (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
no problem MC - I think you may have misunderstood - I'm not warning you off - don't mind the banter to be honest - it's just the books on conspiracies I'm staying away from - the next 2 kennedy tomes will definitely be 'all fact..no conspiracy' :-)
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Kenneth Eaton-Dykes
Thu 6th Mar 2014 19:17
If bad poetry gets drunken women's tits out
I must start going to open mic.
Comment is about OPEN MIC AUDIENCES (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks very much Greg - very kind words.
FH - Thanks! I will no doubt revert to my old ways now and again. Will look for a local Apologists Anonymous branch to join if I do.
Comment is about I used to start by saying "Sorry" (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
Aww thanks..I just had to google "in-sling yer hook" (I only know some about am english sayings) and I get the essence of the poem now, reading it again. Beautifully written!
You two seem to be doing some great couples therapy with this poetry thing. :)
(I get some good practice from a little more intricate reading so I didn´t mean to put you at work there, just have to adjust to my little mindfog sometimes.)
Comment is about After you chucked me (blog)
Thu 6th Mar 2014 17:44
nice exorcism...best of luck that it lasts...
Comment is about I used to start by saying "Sorry" (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
<Deleted User> (6895)
Thu 6th Mar 2014 17:32
to save you the trouble Karin I can tell you its basically about one of the times so long ago when the term 'being chucked'meant ones being given the elbow by ones partner,as in-sling yer hook!
I did sling my hook so many times that we(Patricia and I)became so weary of going through that routine too many times that we decided to 'hook'up with each other and face the consequences-lol!
Up to now,no hooks have been slung(touch wood he says tapping his thin haired cranium)
the ending of the poem refers to the 'chuckee' realising his losses.In my case they were very nicely retrieved.
Hope that helps solve the riddle for you and thanks again.xx
Comment is about After you chucked me (blog)
This one caught my eye and it looks really good, however there are too many words for me to look up at the moment to be able to figure out the meaning of it. But I will be back trying to solve that riddle. ;)
Comment is about After you chucked me (blog)
Thanks Steve and good to hear that! I have seen glimpses of that kind of freedom in my writing as well and hopefully I will have more of those moments too.
Thank you again Wilde ones..yes, I think it has been pretty refreshing for me doing some process painting lately.
Comment is about Colours (blog)
Original item by Karin
Thanks so much guys for your feedback!
Comment is about Reconciliation (blog)
Original item by Karin
<Deleted User> (6895)
Thu 6th Mar 2014 12:11
great combination of words,title and image.
Well done Karin.xx
Comment is about Reconciliation (blog)
Original item by Karin
<Deleted User> (6895)
Thu 6th Mar 2014 12:09
this poem has quite a refreshing feel to it Karin.Really nice piece.xx
Comment is about Colours (blog)
Original item by Karin
Julian, the format for WOL main site is back to normal now! - thank you!
Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)
Original item by Stockport WoL
I write in exactly the same way, only its words that greet me with their magic.
Wonderful poem,
best wishes, steve
Comment is about Colours (blog)
Original item by Karin
I like this very much, David. Out loud, and proud. Paying tribute to the great names, but also celebrating the pleasure of sharing spoken words with "like-minded people". It could be the Write Out Loud anthem. Good on you, mate.
Comment is about I used to start by saying "Sorry" (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
That was amusing! I was looking for #1 but this poem seems to have mass produced itself? (Nice painting, by the way.)
Comment is about Philosophy made difficult #2 (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Impossible to follow in Gerard Manley Hopkins' footsteps - his Windhover is a classic. But a really good poem all the same. It's easy to take kestrels for granted but they are extraordinary creatures, which is well expressed here
Comment is about Windhover (blog)
Original item by C Richard Miles
Well done for trying to get that age group to observe. They are often action orientated and connect with snowballs, sledges, snowmen, skis etc. possibly imagine being an animal in a snug hole weighing up whether to venture out? What you've written, though, should be fine for getting their imaginations going
Comment is about snow (blog)
Original item by Neil West
I enjoyed listening to this, beautiful dreamy music and your voice and way of speaking is pleasantly calming. What a great way to put out your thoughts about the tragic matters of life. (Will check out your other audios later.)
Comment is about Tales of Love and Hate (blog)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
Well written, but dark Ian. I would have liked a note of hope somewhere. But maybe you're simply being true to what you saw?
Comment is about supping at the Silverback Inn (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Buy two next time and put one in the freezer for Tuesday, Dorinda.
Comment is about Why Is It? (blog)
Original item by Dorinda MacDowell
Hey, Shirley.
I didn't see that coming.
(I'm sure your dead lover doesn't mean you any harm)
Comment is about My Imagination? 99 word horror story (blog)
Original item by Shirley Smothers
It's worth understanding why Scotland is in the Union in the first place. As the Kingdom of Scotland they went bust in Panama and needed English money to bail them out.
Wouldn't happen again though, would it?
Comment is about Some of us want no part of a UK 'brand': Kathleen Jamie on independence (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
thanks for the kind comments on 'the perfect alibi' MC and the update on JFK. I'm having a breather from all things Kennedy at the moment as I gorged myself way too much over the anniversary with books and TV. I've got the biog 'an unfinished life' by Robert dallek and 'one minute to midnight' by Michael dobbs to read next - I'm staying away from conspiracy theories for a while because, to be honest, I think most are just sensationalist nonsense :-)
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
thanx. yea tell me about it. im using word 07. when I format this or other stuff, it goes crazy when I post it on varied sites. nevermind andy editing it. systems don't like each other. yes the book will be a good and different project. a lot of stuff had to be said.
Comment is about neda poem from our new book... (blog)
Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER
All power to your walking boots, Joe! Sounds like you have the makings of a book there, interspersed with your poems, if you can make the time to write it.
Comment is about Welcome sign of spring as poetry trekker Joe hits the road again (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Plenty of resonance here for anyone who has
had the pain of seeing a parent in care - and
the feelings of finality that the unwanted reality
induces.
Comment is about I FELT LIFE (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
your formatting may have gone a bit wrong here, Nick.
Andy has shown me some of his stuff from your upcoming book already, but i did enjoy this a lot.
interesting story - look forward to reading the full book
Comment is about neda poem from our new book... (blog)
Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER
phew. powerful stuff, Cynthia. i don't think i saw this before but as i am quite new to this site after a long break, it's likely i may have missed it.
excellent stuff and can relate to what you are saying here big style
Comment is about Beloved (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
we have the same problem where we live on a tuesday, Dorinda. lol
good stuff.
Comment is about Why Is It? (blog)
Original item by Dorinda MacDowell
thanks for the comment, laura over my take this bill poem. glad you like it. let's just say some of my friends have expensive drinks tastes but not thankfully when it is my round - lol.
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
thanks for the comment, laura. glad you like it. let's just say some of my friends have expensive drinks tastes but not thankfully when it is my round - lol.
Comment is about Take this bill (blog)
Original item by Gray Nicholls
<Deleted User> (6895)
Wed 5th Mar 2014 11:22
As Michael caine says in Alfie; If they ain't gotcha one way, they've gotcha another!
Best wishes, Steve
Comment is about STRANGE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Pithy with a timeless point to make: the
eagerness of a malignant mind to use "God" as an
excuse for the worst sort of human cruelty.
How often has THAT been witnessed down the ages?
Comment is about The Perfect Alibi (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
<Deleted User> (9882)
Tue 4th Mar 2014 15:32
poetically brilliant dig at the bingers!
who must cost this country,when it comes to the emergency services having to deal with them,an ABSOLUTE bomb!
Loved it!x
Comment is about Tipples (blog)
Original item by CathyLCrabb
A re-post - because it seems so relevant this week. The lines have been running through my own mind.
Comment is about Beloved (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Hello MC. Excellent stuff. And, yes indeed, the choice of subject for the monica was wide and varied - a rich vein. Blair would have given me more rhyming options (care, dare, there etc than Gove) and, in truth, I do agree with some of Gove's policies. The main advantage of Gove though is that he is so ugly - he looks like a target.
Thankyou for your thoughts.
Comment is about Slime-Ball Wizard (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
"United we stand, divided we fall".
The investment in North Sea oil surely came
largely through the money and confidence that
accrued from the United Kingdom as a whole - not from Scotland as a single entity. The words
"BRITISH Petroleum" come to mind.
Scotland already has its devolved seat of
government yet there still seems to be a large number of Scottish accents in the Commons and in
the Other Place, often affecting matters of interest to the English. Even so, we have
negotiated "give and take" to common benefit
for centuries, notwithstanding the SNP's
documented approach to the Nazis during WW2.
Is this really the time or place to pursue some
Fantasy Island scenario for a country with 5
million people but no guarantee of EU membership
or wider acceptance where power and influence lie in this increasingly global world? Is a
"romantic" idealism overwhelming the pragmatic
reality of life in a modern world?
Comment is about Some of us want no part of a UK 'brand': Kathleen Jamie on independence (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Wow...a stiletto job - and clever with it!!
I used to see Tony Blair in the same light - but -
(sing along)
"Tony Blair sent thousands off to war
Never learning from all that history before...
How do you think he did it?
I don't know (did he?!)"
(From "Pinhead Wizard")
Comment is about Slime-Ball Wizard (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Nice that you remembered that old poem. That means a lot to me -and so did that pip!
Best wishes, Steve :-)
Comment is about Starfish (poet profile)
Original item by Starfish
Thank you, Anthony and Kenneth, for your very kind words. I'm afraid I'm not very highbrow or deep so only daftness falls out of my head. It's nice to know I'm not the only one that likes a bit of that. I leave profundity to the clever people.
I am attempting to have a "proper" website at www.louiseetheridge.com if you'd like any more silliness.
In the meantime I will explore what you both like to write!
Best
Lou
Comment is about Louise Etheridge (poet profile)
Original item by Louise Etheridge
<Deleted User> (6895)
Mon 3rd Mar 2014 18:44
haha! good one Fitzroy.Somehow strangely hints at that old windmill challenger-Don Quixote...
don't ask us why.
Cheers.xx
Comment is about Middle Age Mystics: 1 Spain (blog)
Original item by fitzroy herbert
Thanks for this write up. Nodus is my current handle. After Thursdays gig, I walked to Castleford from Leeds on Friday night for a poetry group led by Anne Rhodes; now advertised at WOL gig guide; http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/eventview.php?day=28&month=03&year=2014&eventID=11079 Next day I walked to Cleckheaton & back after Talking Zebras poetry group at the Commercial; completing 50 miles over 3 days. That's 120 miles so far this year. If you want to know how I do it; try eating fresh ramsons, they're out in the woods right now.
Comment is about Welcome sign of spring as poetry trekker Joe hits the road again (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Kenneth Eaton-Dykes
Mon 3rd Mar 2014 17:10
Great poems Louise, Boobs and Bishops, very funny!
A most welcome scattering of refreshing humour
among the grey clouds of "enigmatic, profundity" all too often borne on the winds of W.O.L.
I look forward to future blogs.
Ken.
Comment is about Louise Etheridge (poet profile)
Original item by Louise Etheridge
Harry O'Neill
Fri 7th Mar 2014 13:39
Dorinda,
You think you`ve got problems? Here`s
me creeping into my umpteenth Lent and I`ve never cracked this fasting thing yet.
(and all those Moslems `doin` Ramadan!)
Comment is about Why Is It? (blog)
Original item by Dorinda MacDowell