I love this - you weave imagination out of and into the picture. You, yourself, must greatly enjoy the painting first, before you sink your thoughts into the possible ethos of the painter.
Comment is about Pink Tree (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
This has great emotion and an inherent feel for the words to express it. It is a very large theme and kudos to you for taking it on, for sharing.
Line breaks are very personal, I know, but I do wonder if thoughts need to be quite so separated. It is written as one would read it aloud, with the emphases and pauses for best effect. Perhaps it is just me, that I find many poems on the page far more fragmented than necessary, like it's just the current 'in' thing.
Thanks for checking out my own works.
Comment is about It's Happening (blog)
'the serendipity of Providence' - now there is a thought - happy happenstance juxtaposed against the presumed beneficence of God - pretty contradictory -
But the poem has that particular charm of thoughts whirling around before slumber. And you have made some considered connections of ideas. It is very interesting.
Comment is about Life is boobytrapped (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
This has a good point to make, which isn't really clear until the very end. At least, I think it's clear. This is a 'mirror' poem, isn't it? Please set me right if I'm way off track - with apologies. As I read I was thinking 'reflective kid' and then 'reflective parent' until I finally settled on 'reflective self'.
I enjoyed your company on Tuesday evening.
Comment is about Look at me (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
The picture immediately draws you in to the title Armistice (Gods of war)... spot on!
'The ink upon this document
dries twice as fast as blood
that seeps into this continent
and mixes with the mud'...
Great work Ian.
Comment is about Armistice (Gods Of War) (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Candice - you have a great body of poetic work. 'All I want to do is write' and 'T'hell with Haikus' have a great inner warmth when I read them. 'Thinking of me?' and 'Discontented Diabetic' show a completely different aspect. I really enjoy your writing.
Comment is about Candice Reineke (poet profile)
Original item by Candice Reineke
'Drop dead gorgeous,
second hand beauty,
worn with wickedness,
dripping with cruelty'
Another cracker Shirley-Anne.
Comment is about Pre-Loved Skin (blog)
Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy
I concur with Tommy's comments Andy. I remember the news clips and tv coverage relating to him. DNA is a wonderful addition to forensic science. If only his case could have been investigated thouroughly and the DNA breakthrough earlier than the nineties.
A superb piece of writing to a most tragic sigtuation Andy.
Comment is about For Stefan Kiszko (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Great title, photo and the last verse fits perfectly.
'She's smiling as she
leaves me her echo
in our space....
Good play on the words 'fail' and 'space' in that stanza. Seems to underline the severity of it.
Comment is about Left Luggage (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Wow... Martin this is such a very moving piece of work. So much love and strength within your writing and a wonderful scene setter.
'Just one more time
For them to draw close, to be near
To say go to sleep now child
And goodnight
Before her last farewell'
Beautiful words.
Comment is about memory (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Hi Candice - Just playing 'catch up' and love this. I too am fortunate to live less than an hours walk to a beach and the sea. This work is a great reflection of inner-feeling. Many time I have gone there and had the sunset to myself and feel at one with the surroundings and a warm inner glow. I penned 'Beach Fight' on a crowded day at the seaside. Every day is different.
Thank you also for your comment on 'Where Donkeys'....' ;)
Comment is about The Beach: My Remedy (blog)
Original item by Candice Reineke
Thoughts in England
Persuaded by Salmond and the SNP
Scots may say goodbye to you and me.
But there's referendum cheer for me and you -
That means less votes to stay in the EU!
Comment is about Stop yer swithering! Elvis McGonagall joins independence debate (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Anaya
Sat 23rd Aug 2014 10:51
Funny I wrote about leaving too ;)
Comment is about Left Luggage (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
This needed to be said. And the time factor adds to the disclosure. Your (intended)use of cliche has it's place here, adding to the weary abuse he and his mother and family suffered. And I hope you don't mind my adding a 3rd victim to this episode, Stefan's mother who died shortly later.
Well written Andy.
Comment is about For Stefan Kiszko (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Cheers Chris, I agree and shrug sometimes, ta Tommy
Comment is about chris stevenson (poet profile)
Original item by chris stevenson
Hiya Alex, I'm here to say ta for the thanks on a work I did. I must read more stuff on this site as I am engulfed with writing and words. Cheers for your post. Tommy
Comment is about Quiet Comet (poet profile)
Original item by Quiet Comet
...and you Laura are the mistress to fortune, or something, anyway ta la! ;) for ''Hockey anyone?''
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
...and you Laura are the mistress to fortune, or something, anyway ta la! ;)
Comment is about Hockey anyone? (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
haha - a Milton/tenacious D mash-up eh? could be worse ;-) thanks for the comment on 'crooked road' mate
Ian
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
When I am old and sad
I just don't give a fuck
Who wipes my dirty shitty ass.
Comment is about A for Apathy (blog)
Original item by J F Keane
Writer to books
Poet to W O L
Years that pass
Show that decisions
Right or wrong
Make you one
Of the best.
Comment is about Indecisions (blog)
Original item by J F Keane
Glad you liked the Northern Soul poem. Yes I've seen the recent docus which obviously helped me a lot. I used to dance to Tamla and stuff at the Top Ranks suite in Reading in the 60s when I was 14/15, but like you knew nothing about hat northern scene. There's quite a lot in my own ubringing that helps me identify with it. DOing a crap job all week and then getting away for the weekend.
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I like this a lot, David, particularly "Hallucogenics /and hopeless solos / warped the walls in bedsits / of never-never-land,/ but lads in bags and polo shirts / danced all night till morning." A phenomenon I didn't have a clue about until years later. Did you see the recent BBC4 documentary? Part of Wigan's heritage, almost as much as the pier.
Comment is about Soul (blog)
Original item by David Cooke
Elle Buetow
Fri 22nd Aug 2014 13:01
Ahhhhh. I just wrote this a few days ago. Silence is the loudest noise!!
Comment is about What if (blog)
Original item by Ged Thompson
Elle Buetow
Fri 22nd Aug 2014 12:59
Wow. Ok. This really, really touched me.
I love your mind
Comment is about Her & Bear (blog)
Original item by Ged Thompson
Elle Buetow
Fri 22nd Aug 2014 12:53
Thanks Ken and Candice. Really appreciate the comments :)
Comment is about Pre-Loved Skin (blog)
Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy
Thank you! I appreciate it
Comment is about The cry of the black birds (blog)
Original item by Rollo
I like this one, the idea that it is thought - thought and memory - that you meet on the field puts the whole thing in the mind, which is right, I think. And I'm also aware in any battle Odin sometimes has the better man fall to more quickly fill his shield-tiled hall. good stuff.
Comment is about The cry of the black birds (blog)
Original item by Rollo
This is great Daniel, I was chuckling every time I read 'Where Donkeys poo and seagulls screech'. my favourite line is 'Grandma's at Bingo every night
her handbag with her like a leech.' Nice one
Comment is about WHERE DONKEYS' POO (blog)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
Shirley-Anne, I agree with Ken. This is a beautifully candid conviction.
Comment is about Pre-Loved Skin (blog)
Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy
Kenneth Eaton-Dykes
Thu 21st Aug 2014 16:34
Hi Shirley-Anne.
This is a wonderfully presented poetic description
of one of the many monstrous levels to which mankind is capable of sinking. I hope the confidence lacking Cretins wearing these products, take notice.
See you at the Ringers on Sunday?
Comment is about Pre-Loved Skin (blog)
Original item by Shirley-Anne Kennedy
thank you for the comments.
Candice - i wish I painted it! It is gorgeous yes? It is by Thomas Lamb
Comment is about Pink Tree (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Thanks both :)
Well Ian, each line runs into the next, so 'this' isn't in isolation if you know what I mean. Although, have to say, that is the one word in the whole lot that I do think is weak, so nice one for spotting :)
Comment is about Twisted Harvest (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Cheers for the feedback, Cynthia. It's good and enriching to recognise the achievements of poets around the world, I think, and to remind ourselves of the conditions that many of them have to work under.
Comment is about 'Lioness of Iran' Simin Behbahani dies aged 87 (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Travis Brow
Thu 21st Aug 2014 06:19
Thank you for your lovely comment Cynthia.
Comment is about TENDER GODS. (blog)
Hi Tommy .. thanks for commenting on 'there are no dead' .. I was thinking about how quickly a tragedy disappears from the news every day, and somewhere an unknown family still grieves ..
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Hey hey,
Awesome quotes from your profile.
Taking them in before proceeding with a very enjoyable read.
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
great stuff Laura - I like the minimalist approach - a lot said with very little - and no spare, leftover words - 'cracking' (the only minor bit I'm not sure about is the line after 'running' - 'this' just seems a bit vague when all the rest is so pin point and threatening - not sure if there's an alternative that brings out that dormant threat more (?) but as I say, that's a very minor quibble :-)
Ian
Comment is about Twisted Harvest (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Thank you!
One day when we least expect it I'm sure!
Comment is about The same but different (blog)
Original item by Quiet Comet
Ah thank you, Your comments are really appreciated.
Strange how night time can make small problems so troubling.
Comment is about Wide Awake (blog)
Original item by Quiet Comet
Preeti Sinha
Wed 20th Aug 2014 16:27
Preeti Sinha
Wed 20th Aug 2014 16:27
Preeti Sinha
Wed 20th Aug 2014 16:25
This is brilliant. Fantastic. Couldn't have been said better :)
Comment is about LAST POST (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Preeti Sinha
Wed 20th Aug 2014 16:23
This is delightful! But I love football :) Diving adds to the drama :0
Comment is about FOOT IN MOUTH (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 23rd Aug 2014 16:29
It always takes two or three readings to bring the ideas together, but once connected, the impact is intense. I 'hip-hop' my way through the lines for the best effect. A true philosopher you certainly are.
Comment is about The Bone Shaker (blog)
Original item by Twilbury Wist