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Twisted Harvest

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crouched

quiet in the crackling grasses

 

hidden

listening to clouds swell heavy

 

ready

waiting for the judgement hour

 

of cutting

scythed where the ears can’t hear you

 

running

trusting steel to complete this

 

sowing

now that the earth lies sanguine

 

sodden

drip drop rinse and release your

 

sinning

gather in the twisted harvest

 

buried

quiet in the crackling grasses

 

reaping

 

 

 

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 30th Aug 2014 11:20

This is really engrossing. I think writing poetry is like 'harvesting', very much as you so eloquently put it right here. You know - the personal, often unintended, exposure of the conscious and unconscious. IMO, I read a fine metaphor here. But metaphors work according to experience. Someone else will read an entirely different scenario - life and death and sin and - and - and - . IMO, such versatility of meaning is the mark of a great poem.

Isn't writing absolutely glorious! Like your brain goes into gears you never dreamed of. And then, you appreciate so much more the experiences of other writers.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 21st Aug 2014 14:24

Thanks both :)

Well Ian, each line runs into the next, so 'this' isn't in isolation if you know what I mean. Although, have to say, that is the one word in the whole lot that I do think is weak, so nice one for spotting :)

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Ian Whiteley

Wed 20th Aug 2014 20:32

great stuff Laura - I like the minimalist approach - a lot said with very little - and no spare, leftover words - 'cracking' (the only minor bit I'm not sure about is the line after 'running' - 'this' just seems a bit vague when all the rest is so pin point and threatening - not sure if there's an alternative that brings out that dormant threat more (?) but as I say, that's a very minor quibble :-)
Ian

Preeti Sinha

Wed 20th Aug 2014 14:38

What brilliant imagery.

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