I'm just glad it seems to have worked and that some people have liked it. I was a little unsure as to whether it would work or not. It's a little different stylistically for me, but I wanted to take a chance with something.
The Garden Gray - why not if the weather is kind - thx for the great support! Not sure I can live up to such high praise, but your generosity of spirit and support of my poetry is something that is really helpful!
Hey Pete, yea I was trying to turn the poem around on the listener, it seems to have worked to some degree - so that's nice. :). Hopefully I can make Rochdale for your Sunday night - I'll try. I'd like to hear your set.
Hi Isobel, again really glad you like the poem. I'll certainly perform it at Wigan. I guess it does reflect a little of the good, the bad and the envy hehe. That could be a poem title right there!
Thx for the positive feedback - V much appreciated and thx for reading...
Best of
Chris
Comment is about The Spectacle (blog)
Original item by Chris Co
Liked this very much I think if you know the place you love the place.
for me the ne coast is full of magic
Whitby
Robin hoods
Scarborough
brid Flamborough Head the light house
and maybe for me best of all cpt cooks village or staithes thanks for this poem
Comment is about Filey (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Loving it..
Comment is about Would You Not Prefer a Chair Mrs Atwood? (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
I love this Chris - you'll have to perform it in Wigan!
I like the undercurrent of jealousy that I can sense running through this - the page poets real assessment of 'the spectacle' maybe :)
Comment is about The Spectacle (blog)
Original item by Chris Co
Thanks Julian - that's praise indeed!
I find commas a mine field. The structure of the poem is an issue for me. Often words that should hang together are carved up to make it look like a poem. The commas are my way of differentiating what should be separate, where the pauses should go - though I probably only started to do that properly half way through this cos I don't like an overly punctuated poem.
I think when you are a performance poet, you hear the voice in your head reading it - the pauses matter - though they may not necessarily follow a pattern someone else would see. Perhaps it would be simpler just to take them all out!
Thanks for your very generous comment - I shall make some enquiries with Gregory :)
Comment is about The Lonely Whale (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Hya Chris.
Gray posted this on Facebook, rightly so. So I thought I would chip in. Enjoyed the reading of it at the Brooklyn. I like the idea of turning the poem round and aiming at the listener directly. Keep transpiring, perspiring and beguiling.
Cheers
Pete the Bus Driving Poet.
Comment is about The Spectacle (blog)
Original item by Chris Co
Hi Chris (mate)...you are a true star you are!
You are one of those special Poets who write special words covering special things and subjects that only special people see...
You have not disappointed in your above Poem...
Really enjoyed Gallaghers Pub n barbers?? lol
It will be great in The Summer (if we get one) as maybe you could hold the event in The Garden?...
Thank you for putting together a good night!
Thank you for being you!
My Bests Mate - Gray
Comment is about The Spectacle (blog)
Original item by Chris Co
This has a lovely insistent rhythm, Cynthia. Very moving.
Comment is about The Candy Train (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Hey Harry,
Just really glad that you and Yvonne enjoyed the evening. Hopefully we'll have many more good nights to come.
Best of
from me - and the two ladies in charge.
Chris
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
As ever Cynthia you are way too kind. I think I saw somewhere on WOL that you had a good reading. Congrats!
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Hello Cynthia
Why thank you kind lady for your comment on an idea. It gave me an idea which I may share with others when it matures .... and the vodka wears off.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
tony sheridan
Wed 22nd May 2013 09:28
I think it stands as it is. Nice one!
Comment is about call (blog)
Isobel, this is a wonderful poem. Indeed, as Cynthia says (and she should know), a masterpiece. Tidal flowing rhythm, subtle use of assonance, alliteration too.
Now, get it sent off to a suitable magazine pronto, though you might want to reflect on your inconsistency in use of commas.
And it is a cracker. Wasn't there a nature poem competition recently announced in Greg's news columns?
Comment is about The Lonely Whale (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Almost forgot. The other thing that struck me was your signature at the end of the poem... cbt. Cognitive Behavioural Therapy.... pretty much the opposite approach to psychoanalysis! Sorry for going off at tangents!
Comment is about it (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
I'm not sure Freud really was a clever bloke. See Jeffrey Masson's 'Against Therapy'. Freud was the pseudo scientist extraordinaire! Though you do capture the essence of what he asserted. It's inspired me. Expect a Freud sceptical piece sometime around 2017! I work at a snail's pace.
Comment is about it (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sometimes stars shouldn't listen to the management or the PR department. I guess you could write about Charlotte Church in a similar way... The repetition of 'over' and commenting 'mis' is especially effective. I'm shocked people don't know who she is.
Comment is about Dear Katherine (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Hi Cynthia,
You were up late commenting on poems! Thanks for your comment on 'The Poem Fails' ~ That's an impressive back catalogue you've got. I'll start reading and commenting soon.
Very best wishes~ Jonnie
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thanks for your comment Cynthia - I'm glad you liked it! Sorry I missed your spot at Sale - let me know when you're on again - not been there in ages. x
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thanks for your comments on Lonely Whale Alex. It's probably one of my more thoughtful pieces - the theme is an inspiring one for me - I think the feeling that you are on different wave lengths to the rest of the world is probably quite a common one.
Glad to hear you were there to cheer the boys home. It clashed with just about everything for me - and I can't bear the logistics of large crowds!
Take care. x
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
A pleasure to skip through - and slyly potent too.
Comment is about Old Age (blog)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
Ditto - mine is floppy, with brown-toned pages curled around the edges. A pristine new copy sits unused on the shelf, unfriendly like. A thesaurus becomes a treasured extension of your own mind.
Comment is about The Word Gremlin (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
Excellent poem - topic and development. There is so much more here than one obvious idea. Masterfully executed.
Comment is about Angelina (blog)
Original item by steve pottinger
Funny and very pointed. The last three lines are terrific. There is always a fresh way to recycle human truths.
Comment is about IDEAS (blog)
Original item by Pete Slater
After I stopped chuckling, I went back again. Very interesting. Innovative. And poetically skillful.
What an impressive bio! I hope you stay with us at WOL.
Comment is about The Poem Fails (blog)
Original item by Jonnie Falafel
Nice piece of work -love it,
Steve
Comment is about IS THIS POETRY? (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
This has some very effective lines. It's a huge challenge.
Comment is about In The Belly Of The Whale (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Alluring - and very sensitive.So many prickles have disappeared from your poems.
Comment is about The votive offering (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
In a former life I was a night bus driver for a short while. This brings the memories flowing back good and bad . .
Comment is about The Night Bus Driver (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
This is clever - and funny. Neat trick - 'all over my body' instead of 'all through...' I suspected a joke with all the hyperbole, but you kept it very tight. Good one.
Comment is about Sultress (blog)
Original item by Simon Austin
thank you stefan and francine for your kind comments x
Comment is about whalesong (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
<Deleted User> (6895)
Wed 22nd May 2013 00:31
I will not print your profile photo off!
I will not print your profile photo off!
I will not print your profile photo off!
Why?
Because Mrs Wilde does'nt believe
I need it to cover a 'stain'above my bed-
you do,dont you?
S.W.
Comment is about Katy Megan (poet profile)
Original item by Katy Megan
<Deleted User> (6895)
Wed 22nd May 2013 00:22
<Deleted User> (6895)
Wed 22nd May 2013 00:20
oh you!
you had poor old Mr Wilde driven into a frenzy!
haha!
Clever stuff Simon-bottoms up!xx
Comment is about Sultress (blog)
Original item by Simon Austin
<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 21st May 2013 23:14
King of Whales? never!poetry princess? dah!
if this poem was an eatable item,
we could feed on it till 'ell froze over!xx
Comment is about whalesong (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 21st May 2013 23:08
man needs to make a much better conquest first-
the conquest of himself,eh big guy?
(as in me poem-'Darkside'...plug plug!)
This is such a cooooool poem
cheers Ian.xx
Comment is about In The Belly Of The Whale (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Glad you liked it ladies!
Alex - your ghostly presence is most welcome - just don't turn into a poltergeist and start throwing things at me ;)
xx
Comment is about The Lonely Whale (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Have to agree with Yvonne... fascinating subject!
Comment is about The Lonely Whale (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Profound thoughts and feelings as it takes you on its spiritual journey!
Once again Ms. Bond - you do not disappoint!
Comment is about whalesong (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
I like the idea and thought behind 'Casting human souls
into the cosmic breeze' in the sense that we live on...
Comment is about In The Belly Of The Whale (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Hi Lynn thanks for checking out my last poem and your kind words, I always value your opinion
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Glad you liked it, Isobel.
A friend of mine has been through the same procedure, for the same reasons, so the poem has a special resonance for me.
Comment is about Angelina (blog)
Original item by steve pottinger
thanks i went a bit over the top there, i was just in mood. youre right, zillions of interpretations :)
Comment is about whalesong (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
A gentle smile is worth its while in this humdrum life Thanks for these warm lines. There's a hairdressers not far from here called "Short Cuts". That makes me smile too.
Comment is about Parking (blog)
Original item by Dorinda MacDowell
A sharp memorable word picture, opening with a
line that sets the tone perfectly.
Like it!
Comment is about Mourning for summer (blog)
Original item by Andy Ainsworth
Charming piece of tight rhyme and metre - it can be done!
You'd like my garden :)
Comment is about COMMONALITY (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
lol arr I see all I just noticed was Allowed not Aloud ,,,dumb ass I am,,,,funny as now I see what you meant,
Gawd lol my bloody spelling
Comment is about Written in Stone (blog)
Original item by Richard Alfred
Ian Whiteley
Wed 22nd May 2013 19:25
thanks once again for your comments on 'noticed' Yvonne - I'm glad you like the 'flag' words earlier in the poem - I had an exchange of views with Harry on this - I wrote them in early because this man lived like a ghost when he was alive - he was a ghost when he died. So you got it spot on regarding what I intended. Very perceptive as always :-)
Ian
Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton