Love this line:

'Smoke sifts insidiously into the lungs.'

:D

Comment is about The Bath (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hello Ian,
Thanks for your thoughts on "Cradle - A Triolet".
I confess my start point was to find two rhymes with lots of possibilities. The inspiration came from reading "Stonehenge" by Bernard Cornwell - a source of much of my limited knowledge of history.

Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

Hello Cynthia,
Thankyou for commenting on "Cradle - A Triolet". Sorry you couldn't stop a little while longer.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks for the kind words, Simon.

Comment is about £10 million for this? (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Thank you.

Comment is about Give him a grid reference, for the love of god. (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Thanks, Simon!

btw...

Since Francine pointed out that Charles Saatchi isn't a Lord (that's his brother Maurice), I've tweaked the poem slightly....

Comment is about No means... yes, Charles? (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

once again,its time to say-yum!yum!

thanks,young K.x

Comment is about Our Berlin Wall (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

I think I'd probably see eye to eye with your wife - I'm just the same with my kids - though I might be fighting a losing battle with my youngest.

My grandmother was from the Serrrrffff so we were all brought up to speak correctly - don't know how my mum managed it really - she must have been forever correcting us. I love being amongst northern accents though - it makes me feel at home.

Comment is about Steve Higgins (poet profile)

Original item by Steve Higgins

Practical help - now that's what I need! Thanks Dave - the problem is that whatever drops down there starts to go mouldy - it's such a stupid design!

Comment is about Wondering (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Oh - I don't know whether I'm coming or going with this poem Dave! I guess it all has something to do with perception of time.

You'll have to let me arrive at my own conclusion at a more leisurely pace :)

Comment is about Arriving (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Nice one Izz - I enjoyed it. Decent DIY stores will stock plastic wood in varying shades - worth a try

Comment is about Wondering (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Well, this certainly gives pause for thought!
I believe it makes sense to me that I have arrived at not arriving to arrive ;-)

Comment is about Arriving (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Hey Josh, nice to hear from a fellow Mancs. Thanks for having a read of 'Richard Burton'. It wasn't totally serious though part of me is a proud northerner, another part wishes for a voice like Burton . .
Best Wishes, Steve

Comment is about Joshua Van-Cook (poet profile)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

Thanks for your comments Isobel. 'Bobby Kennedy'isn't quite right yet. Princess Diana's death was probably more immediate, more shocking but as an adult I could understand it and deal with it. Kennedys shooting was more difficult to comprehend for a 12 year old who thought the good guys always win.
Richard Burton was something I wrote as my partner is a fully paid up member of the Grammar Police. On one hand I'm proud to be a northerner and this is the way us Mancunians talk but I do have deep seated wish to be more well spoken. Richard Burton is probably a pretty good example as he was a miners son from the Welsh Valleys who cutivated that wonderful speaking voice after much -I suppose- training. Thanks for stopping by, best wishes, Steve

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

You can access more of my poetry including some videos by searching on line for SUBACCHI+POET.

Comment is about BARDI REVISITED (blog)

Original item by David Subacchi

I`d love to go to one of those things (in fish-net tights, and exit stage left high-kicking and singing; `When it`s apple blossom time in orange banana you were a peach of a plum`)

Comment is about Humanist Funeral Rap (blog)

Thanks for the encouragement Harry. It's Thursday actually and I'm very much 3rd string. But it should be interesting. Hope you and Yvonne enjoy your holiday.

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Dave,
I heard that you are `on` at the Bluecoat (on wednesday?) Why did you do that the week that Yvonne and I are going down to the Isle of
Whyte? We`re a bit miffed at not being able to be there rooting,
Have a good read!

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

John,
I noted this but had my nose to the poetic grindstone.

It minds me of reading somewhere that the real business of poetry is to re-awaken the feeling of myth (a pre-religous sort of reverential awe at the existence of mystery)

The lightly chanting repetitive form of this, coupled with the references to birth and death really do re-create that mythical atmosphere.

( and - for this one - the picture fits perfectly)

Comment is about Cradle - A Triolet (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Many thanks from the thesaurusly exhausted.

Ray,
You`re right about the ending to that long
bit...I`ll try and fix it anon.

Isobel,
The Hertz `scenery` (wide echoing ocean, hopeles love call` etc;) makes it a natural for love poetry (I just didn`t have one)

John,
And it comes out smellin` of daisies.

Thanks all.

Comment is about Passing (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

haha Ray I think it is too long to make its way in right now! Maybe if it was sackly? It is actually what the caterpillar says in Alice in Wonderland. Thanks for commenting.
Thanks Steve, it is sackly about them, but I haven't given up, since the way I smoke is immensely but sporadically, don't think they suit me. Yes I imagine it is in certain cricles, just like toe nails and tea cakes. But these travel bongs. They make me feel like we are in a comedy about the future. x

Comment is about Greens (blog)

Original item by Cathy Crabb

A fine piece Harry. A little worried about some of your comments though.
Isobel, I'm going to have to think about constipated love poetry. Anyone got a pencil to help me work it out??

Comment is about Passing (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Hi Cynthia

Thank you so much for your comments on my poems. I will admit I had a tear in my eye when I read them. It has really given me a well needed confidence boost for my writing, as I'm struggling a bit at the mo! x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Isobel

Yes - you are completely right, I'm changing it! Glad you liked, I do try and write some lighter poetry sometimes x

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

This is an interesting one Steve and something that's quite topical. How can you expect anyone from a particular locality to speak differently from their peers and why should they feel the need to?

And yet, there's now an instruction from the education department that teachers should be speaking and teaching the queen's English. It's going to be a hard one to enforce in the North of England - cos very many don't.

Comment is about Sounds Like Richard Burton (blog)

Original item by Steve Higgins

This is a very entertaining piece, enjoyed it hugely.

Take care and please keep it up,
- Josh

Comment is about Sounds Like Richard Burton (blog)

Original item by Steve Higgins

This is interesting, both from a historical and an ethical position. It's interesting that the war is in itself evil but it's participants aren't necessarily all villains, I believe that's true in all such conflicts on more than one side a lot of the time. Many believe duty to their country, their families or their deities comes before all else, and whatever I may think about those sentiments or their position in the war/ battle in question, I respect that it's what primarily compels them to act as they do. I have also learned something this day and I thank you greatly for the information.

Enjoy the time as much as you can,
All the best!
-Josh

Comment is about The Memorial Day (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hi Mike, thanks for your comment on "Worlds". I'm glad it appealed, it more or less started with me being somewhat over analytical of my own daydreams which most oft speak of a better tomorrow or even the present of a reality not so very far from our own. I guess you appreciated the pointers to ALbert Einstein and Edgar Allan Poe in that piece.

Much appreciated anywho, and all the best with the kids,

-Josh

Comment is about Noetic-fret! (poet profile)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Harry loved this when you read on Thursday..great to see it on the page...the poem... :)

Comment is about Passing (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

I remember when you read this at the Spoke Ged..still makes me smile :)

Comment is about Four Leaf Clover (blog)

Original item by Ged Thompson

Thank you for the comments, my dear friends.

Comment is about The Lonely Willow (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

My nickname at my last job used to be 'terry Christian' you can imagine why, but I'll see if I can dig out a microphone and have a go!
(-Posted this on my own page like the low tech person I am!) Thanks for taking a look at Richard Burton. best wishes, Steve

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

My nickname at my last job used to be 'terry Christian' you can imagine why, but I'll see if I can dig out a microphone and have a go!

Comment is about Sounds Like Richard Burton (blog)

Original item by Steve Higgins

Thank you so much, dear Isobel for commenting on "The Lonely Willow". With warmest wishes, Larisa

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

I love this too.

It's the same with Princess Diana - I'll never forget what I was doing the day she died - every minute detail of the day seemed clouded with the news.

Comment is about The Day Bobby Kennedy Died (blog)

Original item by Steve Higgins

Hi,Steve! It could be nice to hear your northern voice. Why didn't you record it?

Comment is about Sounds Like Richard Burton (blog)

Original item by Steve Higgins

Hello Ian - Thanks for your comments on "Camp". They are much appreciated. I wish I was as prolific as you!! - Jon

Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

great stuff John - one of the more complicated rhyme forms I think - because the rhyme pattern is easy enough - but making sense of the whole thing by using that pattern is where the real skill is at - and I think you've done this expertly
Ian

Comment is about Cradle - A Triolet (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

powerful stuff Jonnie - I liked it a lot - really gets across those brave, yet resigned, emotions.
Ian

Comment is about Camp (blog)

Original item by Jonnie Falafel

Francine :-) Think maybe it's a one off ha ha And yes, you should :-)

Comment is about Four ( June exercise ) (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

hey Laura :-) not sure that I am back but we'll see how it goes!

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Last Humanist funeral I went to, he over ran,
and there was no time left to play 'My Way'
(Thank God, Or whoever?)

Comment is about Humanist Funeral Rap (blog)

Do not be born beautiful!
Your beauty will fade away.
Be grateful to be born happy.
Happiness with you will stay.


Wise words Larisa - can't believe I almost missed this poem. Thanks so much for taking part - the competition is heating up!

The picture fits the poem perfectly and the weeping willow makes a perfect metaphor for the subject of loneliness.

Well done you!

Comment is about The Lonely Willow (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Sounds like a lot of fun Laura - though I'm afraid I'm a fair weather camper myself - and I definitely don't do no loo roll - a hangover from my childhood I think - you'll find stacks and stacks of it round my house - just to make sure I never run out :))

Great that you committed to going paperless also. I think the secret with that is having the confidence not to bother if it goes wrong - being able to pick yourself up and carry on - that's the key - and that ability only comes with time and experience.

I enjoyed the review.

Comment is about Paperless at festival - but no complaints about the Ravenstonedale loos (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thank you so much for your kind comment. X

Comment is about I am (blog)

Original item by Amy McCawley

Thanks Mike, I have been sat on this one for a while and desperately needed input so thank you. I am going to take your advice and have a trim down see if I can get the best from it.

Comment is about My pond (blog)

Original item by Amy McCawley

Really enjoyed reading this!

Comment is about Humanist Funeral Rap (blog)

Thanks Steve. I am not giving up though.Plants are pushers x

Comment is about Greens (blog)

Original item by Cathy Crabb

Oh Harry - you've excelled yourself with this cautionary tale!

I was hoping someone would do a humorous take on the theme and this is it - the big one!

On a serious note, love poetry is not something that rings my bell - unless it is very original in its handling of the subject - and restrained - it must be restrained - constipated even...

It's such a personal feeling that to throw it out to the vast wide world seems like a debasement in some way. Or maybe that's just cynical old me ;)

Poetic and marine excretions - I can do them!

Comment is about Passing (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

awwwwww absolutely lovely!!well done girl!x

Comment is about The Lonely Willow (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska