Preeti I don't want you to be upset by these comments because they are seriously made.
I've read most of your posts since you joined WOL and to me they are like reading the headlines of the news without the full story. I want more than what you are giving me.
Please start fleshing out these skeletons and put some serious poetic flesh on the bones. I am confident you can do it.

Very best, Graham

Comment is about An evening with you (blog)

# There'll be a croeso in the Pilot!#..;0)Hmm! last Thursday of every month 'Dulasly'noted for future ref-defo!

We(my girly gang and I)got some nice runs in on Newbourough beach on tuther side of th'Island.Very enjoyable!

Hope I come across your Nordically looking countenance int'nearish future Daniel-

-no pillaging or 'you know whatting'if and when I do though! lol!x

Comment is about THE LOCAL PARKIE (blog)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Glad you enjoyed the poem Solar. (I know I am old) ;)
Tyddyn Mon Folk meet at the Pilot Boat Inn, at Dulas on the last Thursday of every month. (It was only a large pebble skimmed distance from Lligwy.). You could have heard it 'live' hehe Music and Poetry always encouraged and welcomed next time you are on Ynys Mon.
Thanks again Solar.

Comment is about THE LOCAL PARKIE (blog)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Tommy, you do have it bad :0
How you make your words come alive: visually, textually. I am imagining the situations as they unravel, line by line.
Loved this one, Tommy. Any pics of this goddess who enthralled you? :0
Preeti

Comment is about I never sleep (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I agree with Daniel. Your work is very deep, very personal. Did you finally read what the sodden letter said or are you actually speaking metaphorically about a woman you have lost?

Then she moved away,

as she stopped singing

in my garden nor laughing

at my jokes.

Very touching, very sad.

Comment is about Train window (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Lovely. People shouldn't be afraid to think.

Comment is about Thoughts (blog)

Cheers Dave for your appreciation of my comment. ;)

Comment is about David Cooke (poet profile)

Original item by David Cooke

DD ta for the observation on ''Train window''. Good points. Tommy

Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Here are the results of this one: http://buzzwordspoetry.blogspot.co.uk/p/blog-page.html?m=1

Comment is about Mid-August deadline for £600 Buzzwords competition (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Lovely!

Comment is about Mirror (blog)

Original item by Kassandra Morris

Thanks Steve

I couldn't think of a title, too upset.

Comment is about stephen smith (poet profile)

Original item by stephen smith

Ray - I don't want your suggestions. She was dying while I was writing this, and died before it was finished. Out of all the poems I have written since you've been off the boards you chose this one to comment on? It hasn't got a title because I'm too fucking heartbroken to think of one.

I'll hold back on what I really want to say to you but congratulations on winning 'the most tactless twat' award.

Comment is about Ray Miller (poet profile)

Original item by Ray Miller

This is just beautiful, the end, 'at least now I don't have to go look for a new love' is a very powerful statement.

Comment is about Lost (blog)

Original item by Jennifer

This is so sweet! And tender

Comment is about Isolated (blog)

Original item by Kassandra Morris

Nice plan :0

Comment is about If The World Was Going To End (blog)

Original item by Kassandra Morris

Thank you for your comment :)
Preeti

Comment is about Kassandra Morris (poet profile)

Original item by Kassandra Morris

Gripping stuff Gus - powerful and disturbing..

xx

Comment is about In The Time It Takes (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

A powerful one cos it's up to the reader what they make of it - and depending upon your own particular viewpoint you can read this in different ways.

So much more powerful than a preachy pro vegetarian poem - but with that dry under belly that leads you to think.

I love the title - like Laura, I imagine it's the only poem out there on this theme ;)

Comment is about Wild Geese in Tesco (blog)

Original item by Ray Miller

Thank you M.C., very kind of you to express.

There's actually a true story in here, I have to confess to carrying it around for a couple of days and just needing to bash it out and being none too happy with the opening.

With more skill it would have suggested human pillars of long-term support and comfort before revealing their true nature.

..and so you do my impatience and lack of ability a great service!

Comment is about Passing of the past. (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

Wow, this is so simple and beautiful.

Comment is about Drawn to you (blog)

Aha true Tommy, but if the world was going to end that's what I'd do. :)

Comment is about If The World Was Going To End (blog)

Original item by Kassandra Morris

Thanks very much. Appreciated.

Comment is about Eastnor Castle Easter Monday (blog)

Original item by Ray Miller

I think you can tell a good tale, but for me, the short lines and what appear to be mostly arbitrary line breaks and the beginning of each line capitalised make it quite difficult to read.

Comment is about Telling (blog)

Original item by Twilbury Wist

Hello Nonkonzo,

Welcome to Write Out Loud, we hope you have a good time exploring the site. We're really looking forward to reading some of your work and I know that you’ll get a warm welcome from the other WOL-ers too.

Thanks for uploading a picture of yourself, it’s really good to see what our fellow poets look like.

Have a good browse around, there’s work here on virtually any subject and there’s always lots going on. If you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free to do so, it’s often the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.

If you experience any technical problems there’s usually somebody who’ll help you out so just ask and someone will get back to you reasonably swiftly.

WOL is a friendly, creative and unassuming place, so welcome from all of us once again.

Graham @ the Write Out Loud Team.

Comment is about Nonkonzo (poet profile)

Original item by Nonkonzo

I enjoyed this. A rural remembrance that told one
story yet also suggested another - to me at least.
I found myself imagining a youth with a team of
"Shires" working the land in harmony as the years took their toll, and this dual image - trees and horses - took this poem to another level for me.

Comment is about Passing of the past. (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

The Paths on Mount Athos.

The wide mountainous forests stretch opaquely
in a dense wilderness of febrile beauty,
undulating and savage, stitching a network
of human habitats along the shadowed canopy.

The land is carefully placed, geographical perfect
for the long term task of learning and prayer.

In the past monks cut paths through fertile thorny bushes
and dense zigzag avenues of trees creating practical arteries.

A mighty number trod along them for centuries
but now Range Rovers and other spluttering transport
rather than feet and sometimes belligerent donkeys
tear up and down rutted dusty roads.

The monster machine of technology and industry
overtook the silence partnership of nature and man.

In that past a monk would have a scythe with him
to repair overgrowing areas of difficult passage
that they would notice as they travelled along their walk.

Any journey could be a time for conversation and prayer,
or maybe internal struggles that would solve themselves
along the way, maybe they walked alone,
but with God and the mountain they were never alone.

Technology moulded in the form of the mobile phone
and the oily combustion engine short circuits all that.

Mystic dialogues are bursts within a banality for speed
in the labyrinth of man’s narrowing panoramic horizon.

Comment is about Drawing (blog)

Original item by vincent berquez

Lovely Jennifer!(one typo-wither..no h)hope you didn't mind my pointing that out.

Thank you.x

Comment is about Lost (blog)

Original item by Jennifer

I vaguely remember these council 'Park Sheriff's' Daniel.How brave they must have been.But sadly,I wouldn't fancy their chances in todays parks.Enjoyed the poem.

God Bless our memories with them all! x

Comment is about THE LOCAL PARKIE (blog)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Thanks Andy for your lovely comments :)

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Joseph,all of your poems are such a comfort!x

Comment is about Poem: Draw Closer to God (blog)

Original item by Joseph J. Breunig 3rd

Jack Warshaw, Protest Singer/Guitarist Guest of Write Angle

The room was full. The audience, enthusiastic - and the mood quickly set as Jack Warshaw, highly versatile and talented guitarist/singer/writer, in checkered shirt, waist coat and 'working cap', went from instrument to instrument, (American Steel string guitar, fretless and 5 string banjos, 12 string guitar & Appalachian auto-harp), and song to song – the theme, clearly anti-establishment; (he was exiled from the US for his political protests against involvement in the Vietnam war).

He told when he and a friend saw the black stones in Washington, with names of the young men killed, his friend cried. Jack, inspired, after meeting a friend of that time, wrote the song, 'Long Time Gone'. 'It's good to see we both came through the war. Sometimes we shed a tear for those we don't see any more'.

He's a true fan of Woody Guthrie, 'Unlike Pete Seeger, he wasn't the best mate. He drank, smoke and womanised – had lots of kids all over the place but he spoke words that inspired me'.. 'I hate the song that makes you think you're not any good.... I'm out to fight those kinds of songs with my very last breath'.

Jack covered a lot of ground with his songs – 'Pastures of Plenty 'of migrant workers – played on his best 5-string. He got His old banjo from Tom Paley, member of the New Lost City Ramblers. It was taken from the African banjar – 'it, not NYCR has an archaic sound'. Played on the fretless: 'Wild Bill Jones'. Joe Hill from Utah, a union organiser for the Int'l Worldwide Workers, executed in 1912. - 'My Will is easy to decide, for there is nothing to divide. My kin don't need to fuss and moan. Moss don't cling to a rolling stone'. He tried encouraging overworked, underpaid workers with songs, 'all working people unite' and, sarcastically, 'You'll get 'pie in the sky' when you die...!'
He told of John and Alan Lomax – scholars and collectors of songs, who discovered talents including 'Dink's Song' (1904): 'Fare Thee Well', a Negro variant of 'Careless Love'. Lomax discovered the song on a field trip for Harvard: "I found Dink scrubbing her man's clothes in the shade of their tent across the Brazos river....in Texas. I was invited to come along and bring my Edison recording machine.

'Dink knew all the songs, but I didn't find her helpful until I walked a mile to a farm commissary and bought her a pint of gin. As she drank the gin, the sounds from her scrubbing board increased in intensity and in volume. She worked as she talked: 'That little boy there ain't got no daddy an' he ain't got no name. I comes from Mississippi and we never saw these levee workers till us got here' and 'If I had wings', about the poor living along the Mississippi'.

Current songs followed, including 'Junk Food Junkie', 'how the government is getting better at looking after our health and keeping us fit', by providing 'MacDonalds, Kentucky Fried Chicken and Pizza Huts. They get rich on profits while we get poor on cuts'. It had everyone laughing and singing along.

He also dealt with the lack of personal freedoms. 'To fight the war on terror, they protect you from yourself'. The song, 'Snoopers', 'Who's gonna snoop on the guy who snoops on the guy who snoops on you' was a winner! Then, the 'The Battle on Sexism', with the light-hearted 'Monongahela Sal', a song about a young woman dumped by her lover, but who gets even with a '44'. It mentioned the sad state of the polluted Monongahela, along with other rivers.

Jack's last song, Troubadour, was dedicated to his foremost mentor, Pete Seeger, 'This is for him, about him...He never had stage presence. He just came out and engaged. If not for Pete', Jack said, 'I wouldn't be standing here now! 'Here's to you, troubadour. Your songs go on forever-more'! From the audience reaction to Jack Warshaw, Write Angle's troubadour for the evening, it appeared the same applied!

At the open mic, Bruce Parry, aware that Leah and Jake had just returned from the US, played to the lovely sound of the dulcimer, some appropriate songs, 'Oh Liberty' 'Liberty' and 'The Flower'. He then read his story about 'Crossing America', which started in Arkansas (unimpressed) and ended in New Orleans. (loved it). His descriptions and obvious affection for the place were evident. He told about a small town where everyone loved his English accent, (asking him to keep on talking), how there were different church posters hanging around the town – with sayings he'd never seen before in the Bible or in the Southern States he'd travelled through to get there. He found the people so warm, curious and welcoming. He said it was like a 'Doris Day' film set! We feel pretty sure he has every intention of going back!

Michael Usuwana performed 'Issue Issues Commitment Issues', and explained how 'taking no risks is the biggest risk of all. You have nothing to lose and nothing to gain', and 'You need to follow rivers to see the sea'. Michael has become a 'favourite' and his career, like Dave Allen and Sven Stears, seems to be taking off. He's been travelling with a musical group to London, Leicester and Luton, - even showing his singing ability with a 'taster' of 'Zero to Zero. Take me by the hand. For you to be a hero, you have to be a zero......'
He then did 'Andrew', 'your mother carried you for 9 months but I'll be taking care of you for the rest of your life'. If I'm tough, it's because the world will be tougher...'

Chris Sangster, always the charmer, and now a musician/songwriter as well as poet, sang a song he'd written for Leah's birthday, 'The Best is Yet to Come'. Then a lovely poem, 'I'm not a Daffodil', ending with 'Don't worry-I didn't understand it either' (one of those poems that comes from 'somewhere out there)'. Then, a sad song (unusual for Chris) about 'Goodbye Love'.

Barry Smith, of Chichester's Open Mic, did 'Sounding Off', a witty poem about the codgers at the river, discussing political and ethical issues, and righting the 'wrongs' of the world, (taken from letters in The Guardian), while Stella Bahin paid an unexpected but welcome visit to speak of the Havant Lit Festival, of which she's 'poet in residence' this year. She did a poem 'Meat', about her dog, Austin Paws', outside on sunny days, roasting and toasting, coming in, smelling awful to someone who's omnivorous!

Richard Hawtree did a poem, 'Ballyvourney' starting with a quotation from Dante... 'You were not shaped to live like beasts but to pursue knowledge and virtue'. Followed by 'Hatchment', and 'Dolphinesque', about a door-knocker shaped like a dolphin, which brings elements of the sea to each person who enters. A lovely poem.

It was certainly a varied evening with lots of interesting song and poetry, both from Write Angle's guest performer and from the open mic! The raffle for two free meals at India Gate, Chichester, was won by Chris Sangster (2nd time winner) and a good time was had by all!

Review is about Petersfield Write Angle Poetry and Music + OPEN MI on 16 Sep 2014 (event)

another great ending here.

a good feature of your excellent writing.

excellent.

Comment is about Red Mind (blog)

feels like a extract from a poetic diary.

can really relate to this.

excellent.

Comment is about 3:04 AM (blog)

that last line finishes this off perfectly.

excellent stuff.

Comment is about Walls Within the Madhouse (blog)

lot of good images here, natalie particularly like the first and last stanzas but a top piece throughout.

Comment is about The Circle (blog)

like a good rant like this myself sometimes. top stuff natalie

Comment is about I Am Angry (blog)

i like the shortness of this preeti. says a lot in a few words. lovely..

Comment is about Drawn to you (blog)

good to see you blogging again, gus.

loved this as i expected when i opened the page up.

hope you are good

andy

Comment is about In The Time It Takes (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

lovely drawing.. was half expecting a poem to give with it however must admit.

Comment is about Drawing (blog)

Original item by vincent berquez

Hello Graeme,

Welcome to Write Out Loud, we hope you have a good time exploring the site. We're really looking forward to reading some of your work and I know that you’ll get a warm welcome from the other WOL-ers too.

It would be great if you could upload a picture of yourself, it’s really good to see what our fellow poets look like.

Have a good browse around, there’s work here on virtually any subject and there’s always lots going on. If you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free to do so, it’s often the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.

If you experience any technical problems there’s usually somebody who’ll help you out so just ask and someone will get back to you reasonably swiftly.

WOL is a friendly, creative and unassuming place, so welcome from all of us once again.

Graham @ the Write Out Loud Team.

Comment is about Graeme (poet profile)

Original item by Graeme

Hello Goodwill,

Welcome to Write Out Loud, we hope you have a good time exploring the site. We're really looking forward to reading some of your work and I know that you’ll get a warm welcome from the other WOL-ers too.

Thanks for uploading a picture of yourself, it’s really good to see what our fellow poets look like.

Have a good browse around, there’s work here on virtually any subject and there’s always lots going on. If you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free to do so, it’s often the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.

If you experience any technical problems there’s usually somebody who’ll help you out so just ask and someone will get back to you reasonably swiftly.

WOL is a friendly, creative and unassuming place, so welcome from all of us once again.

Graham @ the Write Out Loud Team.

Comment is about Goodwill (poet profile)

Original item by Goodwill

wow, that's just amazing

Comment is about Pissing Against The Wind (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

And your anger's justified :0

Comment is about I Am Angry (blog)

Hello Hunter

Welcome to Write Out Loud, we hope you have a good time exploring the site. We're really looking forward to reading some of your work and I know that you’ll get a warm welcome from the other WOL-ers too.

It would be great if you could upload a picture of yourself, it’s really good to see what our fellow poets look like.

Have a good browse around, there’s work here on virtually any subject and there’s always lots going on. If you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free to do so, it’s often the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.

If you experience any technical problems there’s usually somebody who’ll help you out so just ask and someone will get back to you reasonably swiftly.

WOL is a friendly, creative and unassuming place, so welcome from all of us once again.

Graham @ the Write Out Loud Team.

Comment is about Hunter (poet profile)

Original item by Hunter

No way, Dylan. I was flattered!

Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

David.
I hope that I have not offended you in my comments relating to Jim Morrison and the Doors. I know of the cemetery and it's many famous people who are interned there and your love of music. I meant what I said. I found this piece most elequent and superb.

Comment is about In Père Lachaise Cemetery (blog)

Original item by David Cooke

Yes, Greg, don't think I didn't toy with bringing that track by the Doors into it. I also wanted to include 'selfies' (but that will have to be for another poem)and the fact that when I offered to pass me 'handy plan' on to a young Fench couple when we were on the way out they said 'That's OK. We know this place by heart! There must be a moral there. Still, there's only so much you can squeeze into one poem and it's a bit long as it is!

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

The End, indeed. A memorable poetic guide to one cemetery's celebrities. Then there's the churchyard just outside Dorchester, where Thomas Hardy's heart is buried; very popular with Japanese tourists.

Comment is about In Père Lachaise Cemetery (blog)

Original item by David Cooke

Tommy, thats how I am.
Thanks for taking the time to comment.

Comment is about Drawn to you (blog)

Preeti, you do 'blow hot and cold' with your postings, are there no 'temperate' readings in your work? Tommy

Comment is about Drawn to you (blog)