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Tue 2nd Feb 2016 12:44
Enjoyed the 'feel' of this one David.P&S. xx
Comment is about River (blog)
Original item by David Blake
I thought I had put a comment here before. I absolutely LOVE this. I could never write in this way; (I don't think - but, then, I've never tried.) Anyway, I so enjoy your work, for itself, and also, because you stretch me.
Comment is about Anthony and Katypatra (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
Hi Cynthia, You have so much going on in this poem, all cleverly described and entwined, I love it. I especially like the "puppy neck-wrestling a rag doll", and my favourite bit "specimens pinned to the sky board" - both perfect images! M:)
Comment is about Wind from my Window (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Oh, how sad. On his own, lonely, staring at the walls. Beautifully told.
M:)
Comment is about And the Walls did Weep (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
Lynn, this made me laugh out loud, probably cos I know you so well! Love your poetry and your so abnormal personality!
Comment is about normal (blog)
Thank you both for your comments - yes Wolfie I like that - thrashing (almost like that better than spiralling!) but yes the idea being its the 'flowers' tanacity keeping it the whirlpool of its own making. I also like your suggestion Cynthia - but it has an entirely different meaning that way - somehow sadder - thanks again xx
Comment is about Aftermath (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Yes me too!! Who the hell WANs to be 'normal'!! Nice one xx
Comment is about normal (blog)
No! That's the first I've heard of Paul kantner passing away. Airplane were great, Cheers David.
Comment is about PAUL KANTNER (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
You can find more of my poetry on line simply by searching on my name.
Comment is about PAUL KANTNER (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Lynn Hamilton
Mon 1st Feb 2016 19:09
Thanks, David. I've just watched the clip and it relates very well. Thanks for the link. PJH is an exceptional talent and well worthy of promotion! X
Comment is about Sweet Heart (blog)
I find a flowing lovely lyricism describing/capturing harsh physical reality or a poignant metaphor of great love, whether religious or human. I admire/applaud the care taken in structure.
Comment is about River (blog)
Original item by David Blake
Having put words on both the printed page and via the
CD format at my own expense, the pleasure is having
them in permanent formats - with the added luxury of
calling the shots as far as pricing and promotion is concerned.
The "value" is very much a personal thing as this is
basically a product and if you are in search of a market
for it, you will need to be open minded, patient and adaptable when seeking your public.
I once put an ad. as a "gift" item in a quality magazine
at some expense and got no replies at all. But there is
some truth in "You have to speculate to accumulate",
even if it's just recovering outlay.
Self-publication has an honourable tradition and shows
confidence in one's own efforts.
Good luck - whatever!
Comment is about First poetry collection nearly ready (blog)
Original item by David Addington
Thank you Cynthia : )
Taking on board your comment, have posted a re-draft of The Temptation of St Anthony to try and de-mystify it a little!
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Or a "hole for one" in some distant windswept northern golf course, perhaps?!
:-)
Comment is about DONALD THE ELEPHANT (TRUMP TRUMP TRUMP) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Interesting that Wolfgar makes this comment, because my first reaction was to eliminate the 'whirlpool' line entirely, leaving the 'flower' image in its 'muddy waters of life.' Just an opinion, of course, with respect.
Comment is about Aftermath (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Yvonne - where have you been? This piece is very illuminating for we mere men. The invisible bond between mother and child, which can only be germinated in the womb. We can only marvel at a connection we can not come close to.
Let's have less gaps in your postings please.
Rob
Comment is about THE BIRTH (blog)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
I do enjoy the almost casual style you write in, the words and sense of what you're saying flow easliy. I absotivley agree with your thoughts on this one.
M:)
Comment is about Killing the Long Game (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
Love it! And it's nearly always the guitarist who feeds back, in my experience!
Comment is about Feedback (blog)
Original item by Anna Ghislena
That's lovely, Michelle. I could almost hear the sea!
In fact, I think I'll pop down to the beach now.........
Jim
Comment is about Shapeless days and nameless nights (blog)
Original item by Michelle
Michelle - this piece is truly dreamy, but it feels like the main protagonist is struggling to find release from some pain or suffering. I am sure this means many different things to many different people. Well written Michelle.
Rob
Comment is about Shapeless days and nameless nights (blog)
Original item by Michelle
Lynn Hamilton
Mon 1st Feb 2016 13:16
Thanks everyone so much on your comments, particularly on this piece. I was worried about the reception it would receive.
David, I think you may have spotted the gap where the missing verse was. I took it out as I thought it was nasty enough. I have a hunch that this trade is now a lot closer to home.
I agree, Robert, about exposure, and I hoped that people would see that, that is the intention and not about using shock tactics to boost my ego.
Stu, I felt guilty and sick when I wrote it!
A totally agree with your 'creepy' comment Ray but hope that only refers to the piece! ;)
Thanks again for your comments, much appreciated X
Comment is about Sweet Heart (blog)
Had to spend some time reading and appreciating several times over, this is exactly what good poetry does.
Comment is about Shapeless days and nameless nights (blog)
Original item by Michelle
Congratulations comrade!:)
Comment is about Stepping up to the mic: Steve Pottinger is Write Out Loud's new chief executive (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Hahaha, thank you :) someone who sees what I see. Not that I felt anyone would really have anything negative to say, I just feel like it may seem like a weird piece
Comment is about Even when the light inside the Mind goes very dim (blog)
Original item by Eric Berard
I like the poem. It paints a vivid picture of a war torn event. And breaks freely to focus on God.
Steven Jacobson
Comment is about River (blog)
Original item by David Blake
Thanks Lea - glad you enjoyed it! And yes he deserves every word!
Comment is about No Mercy! (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Thanks for posting an extract from your wonderful Zones of Avoidance here, Maggie. Speaking as one who's reviewed the book! http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=48795
Comment is about Zones of Avoidance (blog)
Original item by Maggie Sawkins
Welcome to Write Out Loud, Rob. Enjoyed this poem about the ramsons - didn't know that was another name for wild garlic. I like the "star-white flowers" that "burst like fireworks". And if you're looking for feedback, I just stumbled over the phrase "a floating balloon", where the rhythm feels slightly wrong on that line, I thought.
Comment is about Rob Baylis (poet profile)
Original item by Rob Baylis
I think a couple of old dinosaurs like you and I, MC, are a bit to derriere garde to "trouble the scorers" of any poetry competition.
Comment is about THE POETRY JUDGE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
I tried to comment Stu and nothing materialized - how weird is that? I wanted to say that I'm all a-quiver and all a-shiver and so pleased you liked it. I like a dose of the old mysticicity (?)
Comment is about PSYCHIC VISION (blog)
Original item by ray pool
A real sting in the tail - almost a fairy tale sense of false security and that adds horror to the telling.
David has fleshed out the subject nicely. The word Sweetheart is creepy.
Ray
Comment is about Sweet Heart (blog)
Maggie - I can feel the narrator's pain throughout this piece. Even though drugs have only been a minimal intrusion on my working life, I do wonder at the self destruct button some people are unable to avoid. A fitting closure might also be 'You've made your bed. Lie on it. Lie on it. Die on it.' Well written Maggie.
Rob
Comment is about Zones of Avoidance (blog)
Original item by Maggie Sawkins
"American Wake", captures a mood. Captures something at least that stops the reader stampeding past it, giving it the attention it deserves.
Comment is about Maggie Sawkins (poet profile)
Original item by Maggie Sawkins
Jon - nicely conceived and portrayed. Makes the limited years in front of me seem like a blessing.
Rob
Comment is about By the light of the local Spar (blog)
Original item by Jon Darby
Greg is right on this one Jon. Cleverly lyrical like the turning of yellowing pages - the use of light really illuminates the poem . A powerful image.
Ray
Comment is about By the light of the local Spar (blog)
Original item by Jon Darby
Or, to express it another way Mark - how do you judge a judge? perhaps a judge can judge another and so on like a hall of mirrors revealing nothing but repetition.
Therein lies the rub, as they say.
regards Ray
Comment is about THE POETRY JUDGE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
A well-observed - if chilling - update of Betjeman's 'Death In Leamington'. Wonderful title, too.
Comment is about By the light of the local Spar (blog)
Original item by Jon Darby
Yvonne - but it spends once and once only (is that twice?)
MC - yes it would be good to see those who are fortunate putting something back in. Not necessarily money; time would be good too.
Comment is about SHARING THE WEALTH (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Enjoyed reading this, Jon.
Horrible prospect, growing old in a second-rate nursing home. Makes me even more determined to enjoy life to the full !
Comment is about By the light of the local Spar (blog)
Original item by Jon Darby
Sparking up & toasting you with a glass of red!
Comment is about Killing the Long Game (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
Stu - thank you! And yes I agree I have amended it - I'm glad you like it! And Rob alas no new love - just a wish!!
Comment is about A Wish (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
This is beautiful. It really captures the carefree spirit of a child.
Comment is about Little Humans (blog)
Original item by Eric Broke
Money is not the root of all evil...it is the LOVE of money.
How many very wealthy folk pass through life without
the spiritual reward of sharing some of their money with
the less fortunate but deserving among us. As JC asks-
how many material things can be owned and used at
any one time? And how little their value compared with
the value of enabling others towards a better life.
We read of those in the worlds of sport & entertainment
possessing enormous wealth and their often excessive
purchases. A certain TV/radio personality apparently
hooked on hugely expensive classic cars comes to mind.
Charity, properly adopted, benefits the donor and the
recipient. To see well paid "stars" fronting ads. on TV
seeking the money of hard-pressed ordinary folk for
various causes only makes me wonder just how much
THEY contribute from their riches? Perhaps we should
be told so that we might make an informed decision
about any action we choose to take...or otherwise.
Comment is about SHARING THE WEALTH (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I've just read this Steve, wow it blew my mind, it's so true how they demonise all the achievements that Mao Tse Tung achieved, although there was an obvious flaw in communism due to individualistic greed on behalf of those in power and the suppression of free thoughts but on the whole it had a point!, They are trying to do the same to Jeremy Corbyn too and frighten people away from voting the so called 'Loony Left' . Where as I think he seems to be one of the most refreshing honest people (besides Michael Foot) that I have ever seen in politics. We shall obviously find out when/if he is elected to Power (I say power lightly because we are in the pockets of the Americans and the Chinese and it seems the new kids on the block, the Indians) but for now while he can speak change I believe he means it, The press are running scared from this government by all the corrupt laws that are being passed in the house to make free speech illegal. And as for George Osborne well, I get angry thinking about him. Anyway enough, I could write a book on the stuff that makes me angry. You are a brilliant poet. Thank you
Comment is about comrade osborne and the little red book (blog)
Original item by steve pottinger
Many thanks to you all for the kind comments: the story is true, and set in the Berlin of the Cuban Missile Crisis when the Citu was in a state of tension.
Comment is about Berlin (blog)
Original item by terry ireland
Another fine write Celia. You do write so very well, bringing welcome and valuable thought to a readers fumbling mind.
Comment is about Changes (blog)
Original item by Celia
Jade Kelly
Tue 2nd Feb 2016 16:49
I empathize with those words...
Comment is about Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Taylor