I love the direct style that tells a story with the simple and compelling way you have used here.
Quite wistful Jim.
Ray
Comment is about The Hat (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
david,
very nearly missed this (such a lot of poetry gets put up here (i am the guiltiest party...)) but it is beautiful in its brevity, restraint and use of metaphor.
Comment is about Seam Less XI (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
Cheers Jim. I'm not a dog man in general but he was a special case. You're right it elevated me for sure.
Ray
Comment is about THE RAGBAG SHEEPDOG (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks Jim - some vitriol in this . I'm afraid this might be the future with its conformist lemming mentality . Nice to see your picture - is that a bass? My favourite instrument as I'm a keyboard player !
Stu. This actually is drawn from someone close to home. It's hard to take the piss out of. but I like to try. He is definitely in a tug of war as a person. Thanks for your comment. Ray
Comment is about HEADLESS CORPSE WALKING (blog)
Original item by ray pool
great stuff. love the phrasing. i hold a degree of sympathy for such people, they are very much crushed under the boot of western society. blame the boot not the beetle.
Comment is about HEADLESS CORPSE WALKING (blog)
Original item by ray pool
I really like this one, Ray. It conjures up wonderful images.
Therapy for both parties, I think.
Comment is about THE RAGBAG SHEEPDOG (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Hi Ray.
I like this a lot.
Sadly, we've all met this kind of person. No substance to them; held together only by a sense of their own self-importance.
Awful, ignorant people.
And they're on the increase..........
Comment is about HEADLESS CORPSE WALKING (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Yes, it's good! Trouble is I'm reading mainly Iris Murdoch books...my mind can only boggle.
Comment is about Shelved (blog)
Original item by Michelle
Thanks for the observation. Currently reading your thoughts
Comment is about On my end (blog)
Original item by Eric Broke
Bless you Stu, you are my singular and select audient for this one. I had to look up thaumotrope but it was featured in the film Sleepy Hollow, which I also love.
Cheers Ray
Comment is about WEATHER GIRL (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Hi Steve, great to hear from you! Fine mate, hope you're good, thanks for you comment on Diggers poem, its written as a poem, did it as I was compering Diggers festival, but potential as a song as you say, will have a look at it. Hope all good. I am in Wakefield doing a gig with Ian whiteley on afternoon of sat 20 feb if you fancy it, cheers and all the best, Jeff
Comment is about Steve O'Connor (poet profile)
Original item by Steve O'Connor
Cheers for reading and commenting on 'Shelved', much appreciated.
M :)
Comment is about Pixievic (poet profile)
Original item by Pixievic
Thanks. Glad you enjoyed Nicole.
(Bugger. I haven't written a sequel. I wonder if I get away with changing the last line from "four" to "two"?)
Comment is about Nicole (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
Thanks for all your comments guys. Raymond is so pleased!
Comment is about Jim Trott (poet profile)
Original item by Jim Trott
I was always on the look-out, Yvonne, for a girlfriend who was an expert on horse racing and the bible. It was a bit niche.
(Just for quiz purposes you understand. I had a different job description for other nights of the week).
Comment is about COOPEY'S GROUPIES (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Oh wow - I love this - what a great way to imagine remembering someone who caused pain - I'm going to try it!! Nice one - beautifully written xx Vic xx
Comment is about Shelved (blog)
Original item by Michelle
Hi! Thanks for taking the time to read & comment on 'Open Heart Surgery' I'm glad you enjoyed it (if that's the right word!!) I look forward to delving into your words soon xx Vic xx
Comment is about Rachael J. Low (poet profile)
Original item by Rachael J. Low
Thanks Rachael glad you enjoyed it!
Comment is about Open Heart Surgery (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Yes indeed!! It's not easy this 'love' thing - friends or otherwise!!
Comment is about Foreboding (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Thanks for taking the time to read & comment on my words - I look forward to reading some more of yours xx Vic xx
Comment is about Pauliegreg (poet profile)
Original item by Pauliegreg
Thanks chaps appreciate your comments - hope things pick up for you soon Lizzie x
Comment is about Decisions (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Russell Thompson
Thu 28th Jan 2016 14:21
Great news! Congratulations, Steve.
Comment is about Stepping up to the mic: Steve Pottinger is Write Out Loud's new chief executive (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Lynn Hamilton
Thu 28th Jan 2016 13:10
Hi Wolfie
All good things come to those that wait, apparently. Thanks for reading. x
Comment is about Craved (blog)
Lynn Hamilton
Thu 28th Jan 2016 13:09
Hi Vicki
Thanks for reading (something I've been guilty of not doing recently) and commenting. x
Comment is about Craved (blog)
Lynn Hamilton
Thu 28th Jan 2016 13:05
Thank you Lizzie, much appreciated. x
Comment is about Craved (blog)
Thank you R Miller, I look forward to reading some of your work along with adding more from my archives.
Comment is about BALLPOINTING FOR DAD (blog)
Original item by GeeProcessor
I agree with the comments about your telling a good story, and having a gift for an ending. I'll watch for more of your writing being posted.
M:)
Comment is about Jim Trott (poet profile)
Original item by Jim Trott
Jim - welcome to WOL. Loving your work so far. Lets have lots more please.
Rob
Comment is about Jim Trott (poet profile)
Original item by Jim Trott
Jim - love the animalistic quality of Aisha and equally the quality of the writing.
Rob
Comment is about Aisha with Beads (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
Jim - a ripple from a distance disrupting the peace, like a butterfly effect. Nice concept, beautifully crafted.
Rob
Comment is about Martha Street (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
Jim - Raymond, more a Walter Mitty than Che Guevara I would think. I like the story telling, but felt short changed with the last stanza coming far too soon. Any chance of adding more before that ending?
Rob
Comment is about The Rebel (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
Jim - a dark tale of the unexpected and yet there is a foreboding throughout. I love that this is possibly the first act or chapter to an overarching story. Let's have more as soon as possible.
Rob
Comment is about Nicole (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
Hi Alex
Thank you for your comments - I'm very pleased you liked them. It's a real compliment when it comes from someone whose writing I admire :)
Comment is about Alex Smith (poet profile)
Original item by Alex Smith
Tom - how many times in how many parallel universes does the same chain of events play out? Like the piece and the thought provoking topic. Nice one.
Rob
Comment is about It’s A Funny Thing (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
As I am sometimes wont to say, 'shitting hell!'. Whoof - big goosebumps!
Beautifully crafted, acutely observed (which I strongly suspect is internal with a little added poetic licence, clearly!), and with what us round here call a 'killer ending'. 'Cept in this case it really is :D
As Stu says, you have a way with endings. You're a natural storyteller Jim, and I do love it when we get fresh meat with real talent! :)
*awaits more secrets*
Comment is about Nicole (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
Tom - I really like this. Great observation, impeccably described.
Rob
Comment is about Winter Kitchen (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
Morning Jim
Y'welcome :)
Ha. I haven't worn one for over 10 years ;)
Comment is about Jim Trott (poet profile)
Original item by Jim Trott
Aah, once that line has been crossed eh?
Rob
Comment is about Foreboding (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
lovely this ray, especially winged and flitting thaumotrope which is a sexy sentence indeed. tinges of farce and longing. which could be the title of a shite rock bands debut album. im rereading now and its unfolding like an origami lotus. will report (pun intended) back later.
Comment is about WEATHER GIRL (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Cheers Yvonne for your generous comment on Monsoon wind. Tommy
Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
Simple, beautiful, invites fond memories into one's cranium :)
Comment is about You and I (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Whoa. Powerful in its pure simplicity. Love it!
Comment is about Open Heart Surgery (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Hi Noris
This is really well written.
I love the intensity of your work, even though it sometimes leaves me blushing - but perhaps that's just down to my sheltered upbringing, long ago, ha ha.
Comment is about Vibrating in the unison of the scream of passion (blog)
Original item by Noris Roberts
Thanks so much for your feedback everyone!
I'm new to this but am challenging myself to write a new poem every week
Looking forward to reading everyones work :)
Comment is about Queen of Sorrow (blog)
Original item by Rachael J. Low
Lizzie
Thu 28th Jan 2016 02:14
Lovely poem, my favourite is the second verse. Just slightly. Xx
Comment is about Craved (blog)
Francine
Fri 29th Jan 2016 15:05
Awesome! :-D
Comment is about Stepping up to the mic: Steve Pottinger is Write Out Loud's new chief executive (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman