I've heard you read this many a time over the years Harry. Each time a delight, as fresh and beautiful as a meadow in sunlight. Gentle, lilting, evocative and just as good on the page.
Love to you and Yvonne from me & Nat
Comment is about Interlude (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Hi Cynthia. Thanks for commenting. And hurry up with that book!
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
This one slipped past me Harry as I'm less on WOL these days, but it would have been a great loss to miss it. Full of romance in all the senses of the word, and with some lovely turns of phrase. Thanks for commenting on my last two, but this is better than either of them!
Comment is about Interlude (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Kenneth Eaton-Dykes
Tue 27th Jan 2015 12:16
Hi Harry
A very relaxing read, it flushed the unpleasantness of the day from my mind. Harry! Do not apologize for breaking accepted conformity. Should have been broken long ago. You pioneering little devil! The quality of this piece "I think" outshines most offerings on here
"Words, eased by a quiet need from a quiet heart"
(Sloppy old git)
Comment is about Interlude (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Excellent subject, good presentation in a nutshell. I do believe that people have always felt exactly the same bewilderment through all human development. And somehow, we do expand our mental horizons. But, no way can we absorb 'facts' like the automaton standing at our elbow.
Comment is about Mountains of Facts (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Terrific poem, Andy. Such a command of language and craft, to create 'theatre'; the atmosphere sizzles along and then trips lightly into your two-stanza ending with farcical humour. IMO, really,really good.
Comment is about The Sermon of Reverend Collier (blog)
Original item by Andy N
This is really good, Martin. IMO, many lines are outstanding; 'BRIGHT CAREFULLY SPRINKLED SPOKEN WORDS' is superb.
'hair long and blonde'? Was there a 'blond-dye thing' in those years? Or were those the only girls you/boys actually noticed? I like the honesty and hate the implication - my problem, not yours.
Comment is about The college years (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
I love this line
'And let the slip-wind steal away your care.'
I dont know why, I just do.
I think this may have faired well in competition Harry.
But may have been wasted on what 'other peoples' Ideas of poetry are as you say.
This moves in a lovely fashion, at a lovely pace with a lovely sentiment.
Very nice work Harry
Going to send a link of this to my friend who will like it a lot I think.
No street cred as the streets are mean, but beautiful poetry
Comment is about Interlude (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Never be afraid of criticism of something which you sincerely believe to be a source of personal enlightenment. It is no one else's business. By the same token, pushing personal ideas about how others should think is not acceptable either. Persuasion is one thing; bullying is another. Leading by example says it all - either way.
So this little poem is a real prod to thought. Good for you.
Comment is about The Light of Faith (blog)
Original item by Shirley Smothers
Just to say Harry,
Your critique is always very gentle, courteous and kind.
I'm not in the habit of thanking people for a critique as such, as much as them taking the time to make that critique.
We would soon be drawn into thanking people for positive critique and not negative. Quite often it's the latter which helps us as much or even more than the former.
What I'd like to say thanks for is your honest critique and also for you being a gentle, courteous and kind person.
I normally send these things private to people.
But today....Fuck it!
Big public one on your wall to say thanks and I think You're fucking great! (-:
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
They say wisdom is healed pain Harry
Thanks
Comment is about Hearts & Thorns (blog)
Original item by Ged Thompson
Graham, it was a 'tongue-in-cheek' gift, to see if I would put my money where my mouth is. I am a sucker for a challenge, especially a dare. Actually, I checked out the 'fresh stuff' and figured we'd never eat it all in a month - like - I wasn't having a PARTY.
As for 'cultured', the in-joke among my friends and family is: 'You can take the girl out of the country, but you can't take the country out of the girl.' And it is only too true!
Comment is about BURNS NIGHT (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Alem,
I was impressed by the way the pidgin (but easily decipherable) language in this made the reader give more attention to the actual story. You are to be congratulated on your ability to use a `foreign` language so.
I wonder if it would help native speakers to make readers pay more attention to a theme if they tried their hands at a kind of pidgin`` poetry. I had a go with my canal boat post once (trying to point out the `miracle` of travelling uphill by water)
A very commendable effort.
Comment is about To hell I am inured (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
Are you starting another career in Science Fiction? This is very vivid, captivating and thought-provoking.
Comment is about Eviction (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Thanks very much Harry. I don't write many Villanelles so this was something of an experiment. However it seemed to take off and I was pleased with the end result. Glad you liked it.
David
Comment is about JANUARY (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Tue 27th Jan 2015 08:24
Hi Cynthia, thanks for commenting on Wonder Woman. I agree, the boob line is one I keep coming back to, will have to rework it a bit. Thanks for taking the time to read & comment, I really appreciate it :)
Lea
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Dave,
Isn`t it funny how the scientific secularists reckon that no one else has noticed that there is a huge amount on inexplicibility about the world we all live in...and seem to rejoice and wallow about in it.
without searching humbly for some sort of reason why?
Comment is about Mountains of Facts (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
David,
I`m a bit behindhand but I couldnt`let this one go.
An excellently executed Villanelle (the second in a couple of weeks...see Dave Carr`s)
I like that three syllabled `traveller` in stanza four
and the way the formality of the form ``allows`` the `doth`.
Comment is about JANUARY (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
CBT haggis from a can??? And I thought you were such a cultured lady.
Well done on the edit MCN, I've called off the Tartan Jihadis.
Comment is about BURNS NIGHT (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Good stuff, well deserved, going from strength to strength. Look forward to working with you this year :-}
Comment is about 'If we enjoy it we will try to publish it': Indigo Dreams aim to give new poets a chance (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Mon 26th Jan 2015 20:24
Thanks for the comments, appreciated. I have corrected the couple of typos.
Yes, I'll take the change on board and a little think about it. Thanks, Cynthia.
Comment is about Children (blog)
Original item by Jernau Morat Gurgeh
Great to hear about the award. Go Ronnie!
Comment is about 'If we enjoy it we will try to publish it': Indigo Dreams aim to give new poets a chance (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
My question was about Burns Night - not Burns, tho' with hindsight I am minded to replace the harder "tolerate" with "bother with", not that it will be enough to placate the ire of those readily offended at the impertinence of my poetical presumption.
But I have at hand the following from you know who:
"Some rhyme a neebor's name to lash;
Some rhyme (vain thought) for needfu' cash;
Some rhyme to court the countra clash,
An' raise a din;
For me, an aim I never fash:
I rhyme for fun."
Cheers.
Comment is about BURNS NIGHT (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thanks for tip re: posting frequency. I don't get chance to type stuff up very often so I sometimes get a bit carried away :)
And thanks for the comments! Always appreciated. T
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Yes, it does. This poem is beautiful in itself, and is enough to 'stop the heart'.
Comment is about My Heart Is A Level Crossing (blog)
Original item by Tom
This is a very powerful story. Overlooking the awkwardness of some muddled English, (which may be deliberate) the theme, the scope of expression and the relentless tone are well-expressed and quite evocative.
Your credentials are so impressive, this must be a kind of 'style' that you are developing as an identity.
I look forward to going back to prior posts.
Comment is about To hell I am inured (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
I like the premise. I am encouraged to find and tidy-up a similarly-themed poem tucked away in a notebook. Thanks for the encouragement - it has been nagging at me.
Comment is about A Stranger's Smile (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Hard to believe you can be all those things and still be a loner; but I do know exactly what you mean - the hidden cupboards, the secret tunnels, the locked boxes etc.
Comment is about Jernau Morat Gurgeh (poet profile)
Original item by Jernau Morat Gurgeh
A good poem, capturing kids really well. I hope you receive lots of comments. I enjoyed it very much.
May I submit one suggestion?
'Scurrying like rats in the sewers
Swiftly hiding from the flashlight....'
which starts the lines off at a good clip, instead of a bit of a limp.
Perhaps you mean: 'mischievously down at you'?
Comment is about Children (blog)
Original item by Jernau Morat Gurgeh
What a lark! We celebrated 'Burns Night' with my first ever haggis (from a can) with mashed swede and potatoes, and a generous dopple of Scotch. Edible, very spicy, and definitely helped along with the booze (good quality stuff too.) I blush to admit I didn't actually get out my volume of Burns' poetry which I really meant to do, but time got away on me - although I do pull it from the shelf quite often - there are a lot of poems of great variety!
We shudder to think what 'lamb's lobes' might be. After we ate heartily, we looked it up, and found only 'hanging bits', at which point my husband turned almost green. But I reminded him of the Far East diets, and that it might just be the 'hanging parts of the liver' etc. etc. which even then seems a bit gross. 'Offal' is a really mixed bag, so to speak.
Comment is about BURNS NIGHT (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Mon 26th Jan 2015 10:05
I really love this, and am enjoying all your other work too. Thanks for sharing it :)
Comment is about (blog)
Original item by Twilbury Wist
How dare you MC
"Why should we tolerate Burns Night"
That's how it starts! Je suis Rabbie
Comment is about BURNS NIGHT (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
I really like this poem, Tom, I find it quite song-like. Good one.
Comment is about My Heart Is A Level Crossing (blog)
Original item by Tom
Thank you very much, MC. I appreciate your comments.
Comment is about A Stranger's Smile (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
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Sun 25th Jan 2015 19:12
awww! bless 'em all-the little....angels! very good poem tim.xx
Comment is about Children (blog)
Original item by Jernau Morat Gurgeh
Sun 25th Jan 2015 16:44
:D not in this lot, fortunately.
Comment is about A bag of things (blog)
Original item by Jernau Morat Gurgeh
Well intentioned and well deserving of success.
Poetry always needs this sort of positive and
enthusiastic approach to publishing and I applaud
the combination of the famous and the unknown
in print. Inspiration is not a one-way street.
Comment is about 'If we enjoy it we will try to publish it': Indigo Dreams aim to give new poets a chance (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
"Meanness of spirit" = the effects of whisky on muddled minds.
:-)
Comment is about BURNS NIGHT (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
This is a most pleasing example of how to put a
moment of fleeting human interaction into words.
Spot on - with its content and rhyming pattern.
Comment is about A Stranger's Smile (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
As a celebration of the great man's work, "Burns' Night" is an abomination. Forgotten is the very stuff of his driven beliefs. But your meanness of spirit is typical, with a show of generosity such work would be improved. Tommy
Comment is about BURNS NIGHT (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
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Sat 24th Jan 2015 15:12
to be honest and respectful Martin,I could as we all could if need be,
do some nit picking on certain poems-
but I prefer not to,and simply use my own way of approaching and mentally repairing any faults as long as I can get the main gist
a kind of 'reading over.
So having mentioned that,you won't know if I have or haven't found anything in this poem to actually fault.
Keep guessing haha!,while I say,I have enjoyed reading this poem very much.Thank you!x
Comment is about The college years (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
This past week has been very busy. I really look forward to reading more of your work. Unless you have an inexhaustible back-up supply (which you well may do) take care not to post too many all at once; your interested 'audience' may not be able, or choose not to, keep up with your output. And some very good stuff will go unacknowledged.
But I'm definitely coming back for more. I should have been more alert in years past. Or was I?
Comment is about Tom (poet profile)
Original item by Tom
Liked the surprise. Of it being the school crossing. Nice poem.
Comment is about Bunfight At The Kerbside Corral (blog)
Original item by Chris Briggs
Few words, yet they say so much about the lady in question.
Comment is about Grandma (blog)
Original item by James Roper
I love the descriptive lines but personally I can't truly feel what I think your words are trying to convey.
Comment is about It Feels So Far Away This Evening... (blog)
Original item by Tom
Laura Taylor
Tue 27th Jan 2015 14:04
Absolutely fantastic Andy - you should be well proud of this one!
The syntax is incredible. Reckon this is the best one I've read by you so far.
The chaos of the room is totally re-created and re-presented here - marvellous stuff!
Comment is about The Sermon of Reverend Collier (blog)
Original item by Andy N