Thanyou for your lovely comments I hope I have plenty more poems to write wendy

Comment is about Jacqueline Phillips (poet profile)

Original item by Jacqueline Phillips

I Crave Death

If the devil
demands we sleep
it is so
he can steal
our defenseless souls.

Light of day
immediately tells us
a nightmare suffered
why then do - - -
I crave death.

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Elder

Fill your boots, as my sister would say.

Comment is about Self-Control (blog)

Natalie, reading or writing a poem; or both?

Comment is about Maybe a Poem Will Help (blog)

Thanks Natalie. I'm itching to get my shorts back on.

Comment is about BORN AGAIN. (blog)

Thank you muchly for your very kind comment Rose - glad you like this piece, though I think I will reserve judgement on it's relative merits for a while yet. It hasn't immediately struck me as being a stand out item, although I would concede we may not be the best judges of our own scribbles. :) Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Unmarked By Their Passing (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

without any doubt Dave,this is definitely your best poem-so far.Well done.x

Comment is about Unmarked By Their Passing (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

haha! a mars a day,helps you work,rest and be bonnie! good 'un Natalie.x

Comment is about Self-Control (blog)

Thanks Laura. They might end up tight but you can't see the working out. Trust me, i can ramble.

Comment is about BORN AGAIN. (blog)

mmmMMM - you specialise in these tight little poems don't you? I ramble on and always have to cut loads out.

I love this - so much in so few lines, and I am right with you. Summer's comin' round thank god!

Comment is about BORN AGAIN. (blog)

I think this is a very well executed prose piece, with strong metaphors to describe the feelings of self-repression. I know those feelings. I was in the ice for years. I came out of it eventually and yes it was painful and yes it did feel unstoppable at first - but then, I learned how to let it flow and it slowed itself. And that was really quite late in my life.

Thank you for sharing this. I like the layout and the care you have taken with the spelling, grammar, punctuation etc - just as important as the poetry and the message, in my opinion.

I hope to read more of your work. Welcome to Write Out Loud :)

Comment is about Emotionally unstable (blog)

Original item by Jenny

Just gorgeous :)

Comment is about Bows of Iridescence (blog)

Thanks Jackie; roll on summer indeed.

Comment is about BORN AGAIN. (blog)

Many thanks for your kind offer, Jackie. But my wife is an arterial bleeder (in the financial sense you understand!) She sucks up my money like a black hole.

Comment is about ....that ever I'll get back. (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I do like this Elisabeth (might I just mention a 'c' got lost at the beginning of the third stanza). Thanks for sharing this with us.

Sadly as we journey through life we see rather too much truth is lost...

Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Something lost (blog)

Original item by Elisabeth

No need to go to Greece John, I'd be quite happy to be a poor investment opportunity all on my ownsome, just hand over the cash (joke). A great little poem, made me laugh. Thanks for the giggle.

Comment is about ....that ever I'll get back. (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks very much for the nice comments Lynn.

Comment is about Blind Love (blog)

Original item by Jacqueline Phillips

A nice sweet piece of poetry Sash. Thanks ::-)

Comment is about PAUSE (blog)

Original item by sash

Just how I feel, roll on Summer. Nice poem by the way.

Comment is about BORN AGAIN. (blog)

with respect to your hard work Becka and what is a good little tale,apart from one thing-

Did Mama's premonition of the lovers having a crash come true,or couldn't the two lovers wait to get their hands on each other,and parked up sharpish for a bit of the how's your father?

Or had the truck laboured too much,and they were waiting for the AA?

Seriously,enjoyed this Becka.I,m just trying to make you laugh.Thank you.x

Comment is about The Thick and Crickets (blog)

Original item by Becka Brush

Certainly, like speech writing for example - if
words are required for a specific purpose then
they are a product that deserves the right and
appropriate rate for the job, assuming they are
judged acceptable for the purpose by those
commissioning them.
Fees for specific commercial demands are
for the "market" and should be approached by
both sides with appropriate respect for the
value placed upon the common purpose.
If any writer is commissioned to supply his/her
product (which is what it amounts to in a
purely business sense) then it aids both sides
to know the terms of any such undertaking.
Lucky, the poet who can demand and expect
substantial sums in any given context. But, they are just as deserving of their fee
as any composer writing music "on commission".

Comment is about Fair pay for poets: top performer Kate Fox issues rallying call to win better deal after Bradford beck row (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Hi, Laura,

Such a busy week it has been. and, finally, when I sit down to scope, my VODA account runs out beneath my fingers! But my husband donned his 'rainies' and sallied forth to the shop. (His phone refused to co-operate. Sometimes modernism just freaks me out.)

I do not think age equates wisdom - far from it. Experience might, but even then, not always. IMO, WISDOM asserts itself clearly at about age five, maybe earlier, six clearly, eight absolutely. After that, it is just application as needs be. The 'scope' may be expanded, but the 'power' remains inviolate, and frequently disturbing, for all your life.

End of rant! You are such an inspiration. And nothing makes me smile as much as you do.

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Hello Aly - the art of short story writing is
challenging and demands both imagination and
a wide vocabulary. It pays to invest in the
tools of any writer's trade: a good dictionary
and a Roget's Thesaurus (often obtained cheaply
in S/H/charity shops).
Mixing tenses can be effective but needs
practice and careful revision to ensure it works in any given context.
The appropriate use of language in any given
context takes practice and thought. As I
remarked elsewhere, the term "bark(s)" cannot
be accurately applied to a woman's voice in
most people's minds and another word can be
substituted. This understanding/knowledge
is not acquired "overnight" but keep at it!
You possess the most important ingredient - the
wish to create...and the polish that the right
words give to your work will surely come with
diligence. discipline and application.
Like all arts, writing short stories demands
proper devotion towards getting it right and
the rewards are self-evident to creator and reader. Finally, age is no bar to excellence.
You show commitment and that is more important!
When you love and respect something, you always
want to do the best you can...right?
Best wishes.
MC

Comment is about Aly Hatcher (poet profile)

Original item by Aly Hatcher

Thank You for your Comment on "Above The Skyline"

Thank you for your honesty, I will soon post a Revised Copy of this material.i will be the first to admit that my story is not yet a mature story. This story has not yet been revised properly, I will take the time to revise it soon. I began typing this and 30 minutes later posted it online. My reasoning to post it was to see what others thought of the story before I invest hours in my writing. This was originally just a way to blow some time. From the looks of the story and now seeing your comment I am inspired to create a more sophisticated version of this story. Just as a 15 year old student I sometimes struggle with the right words to say.

Thank you for honest feedback.
Aly.

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Thank you, I will soon post a Revised Copy of this material. I began typing this and 30 minutes later posted it online. This was originally just a way to blow some time. From the looks of the story and now seeing your comment I am inspired to create a more sophisticated version of this story. Just as a 15 year old student I sometimes struggle with the right words to say.

Thank you for honest feedback.

Comment is about Above The Skyline (blog)

Original item by Aly Hatcher

Thank you, Dave. Yes, writing things down first are often a good idea. Fortunately, this is not every night for me. Thanks again for your lovely comment. x

Comment is about 4 a.m. (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thank you, Jackie for your kind words, glad you enjoyed. x

Comment is about 4 a.m. (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Ha ha ha ha, great laugh, thanks Stef x

Comment is about Incomprehensible conversation with bush mush (blog)

Gentlemen thank you; thoughtful comments. The poem sprang from my recent receipt of polling papers confriming residency etc. in advance of the general (and local elections) in May. It struck me that since i first voted i've 'lost' many more elections than i've 'won'. I've come to feel that voting is a sop. Despite my cynicism though, i cannot shuck my mother's admonition that i'm duty bound to vote. She's right; but, pace Rifkind and Straw at al, i wonder why i bother.

Comment is about THE LOSING SIDE. (blog)

I've read a few of your pieces tonight, and found this one was the most stimulating, hence the one I have chosen to comment on... Overall I liked the first verse most, though the use of codeine and morphine in the third made me smile wryly... Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Tin Heart II (02/05/2015) (blog)

Original item by Zach Dafoe

Good strong thoughts within your lines. Jealousy is a powerful stimulus for writing and while it can become a drain upon the strength of love, turning it into a determination to protect your bonds and making them a better defence against the other woman is perhaps quite liberating... best wishes, Dave

Comment is about To Her (blog)

Original item by Becka Brush

I stumbled with the line 'That you'll gaze into them' and did wonder if you might have intended to type 'Then'... The spell correction feature on my computer sometimes catches me out by altering my typos the wrong way. :)

That aside, the piece is one many will identify with - best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Promise Me (blog)

Original item by Bailey Lewis

Hi Bailey, welcome to the site, I hope you will find sharing your writing here helps you to develop your work. Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Bailey Lewis (poet profile)

Original item by Bailey Lewis

Welcome to the site Jenny! Blogging in prose or poetry can be a great way to get our thoughts clarified and sharing them will undoubtedly help you to develop your style.

Enjoy it all! Dave

Comment is about Jenny (poet profile)

Original item by Jenny

Ah, the nagging doubts used to wake me at one time - but haven't done that for some years now. I think your thoughts and poems are valid and you should not allow any worries to come back and haunt you Lynn - not everyone will agree with us, but that is true of what others post too - diversity in thinking is a good thing and should not bring the demons of doubt to call on you at night.

On the rare occasions that I do have any nagging thoughts at night I just scribble down whatever additional thoughts I have and they are done with then, so sleep is not impeded further.

Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about 4 a.m. (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks Lynn, I appreciate your comments on 'Last Hope Of Redemption' my friend. :) Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks Lynn, I appreciate your support my friend. :) Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Last Hope Of Redemption (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Oh Brutal, brutal night
get behind me
with your cruel tortuous
contemplations
exploding lamentations
and the endless
tick tock tick
of the son of lucifer
the all intrusive clock

Comment is about sleep (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Oh Brutal, brutal night
get behind me
with your cruel tortuous
contemplations
exploding lamentations
and the endless
tick tock tick
of the son of lucifer
the all intrusive clock

Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)

Original item by Nigel Astell

Countdown

Vision of dreams
put on hold.

Without switch off
minus total shutdown.

Counting the hours
Moonlight now Sunlight.

Comment is about sleep (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

This made me laugh :))

I can outdo you on grossness with raisins though... I once nearly ate my daughters belly button... not many people can say that, can they? She was a newborn baby and it had dried up and dropped off and looked exactly like a raisin. When I told her the story years later, it knocked her off eating them for years!

Comment is about I quite like raisins, except for the one that got stuck up my nose! (blog)

Original item by Pauliegreg

Thanks for your comment on my last poem Paul - I'm touched that you found it thought provoking. And I'm also sorry that you are relocating to Torquay! You'll have to come back and visit us in Wigan whenever you can - and next time, I'd love to hear you perform some of your poems too!

Take care and I hope the move goes well. xx

Comment is about Pauliegreg (poet profile)

Original item by Pauliegreg

Glad we could give you guys a laugh.Cheers Martin and Rose-mucho!xx

Comment is about Incomprehensible conversation with bush mush (blog)

Simply beautiful.

Comment is about Does The Light Cry? (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Thanks Pixie, love your name by the way.

Comment is about MODERN WOMAN (blog)

Original item by Jacqueline Phillips

Short but sweet. Thanks for sharing Wendy.

Comment is about YOUR PAST (blog)

Original item by Wendy Higson

Thank you Jackie Phillips. I was hoping to depict someone who is a problem drinker and how hard it is for them not to drink. I'm glad it's strong as I feel the subject matter is too.

Comment is about Breathing Liquor (blog)

Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling

Love it! Makes the feminist within my smile!

Comment is about MODERN WOMAN (blog)

Original item by Jacqueline Phillips

Hi Frances, thank you for your comments. It was very good, and the review went down well locally so I have had press tickets to other events on the strength; reviews to follow. The laureate thing is gossip I heard and a comment in a Guardina article from some time ago, but I actually would not be surprised if he were to accept, if offered.
Andrew, I cannot believe you don't know the 'leaves on the line' reference. Being a bit disingenuous perhaps?
I was delighted to look at your website. More power to your elbow. Was the Oldham printer the one based at the back of premises on Union Street? If so, it is a fascinating place but he was too busy to take on a project of mine too.

Comment is about Simon Armitage in Washington DC, 2015 (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Hi Emma - I have to agree with Greg, this is definitely a strong poem.

Comment is about Breathing Liquor (blog)

Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling