Oh God, did I just have a senior moment. I now can't found any mention of Greaves . Sorry if so.... gulp.
Ray
Comment is about Jim Trott (poet profile)
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hello Jim. Thanks for comment on That was the Seventies. I just noticed your mention of Jimmy Greaves who I saw briefly at Spurs in 1970. Without boring you , I remember Gilzean backward heading a goal at the same match , I think. Owzat.
I agree with Laura, your sample poem is excellent. There is something magnificent about eccentricity. Let's hope it doesn't get squeezed out of society any time soon. Ray
Comment is about Jim Trott (poet profile)
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Well, I knew there was a reason to keep running back to poetry.
I am now a big Laura Taylor fan.
Congratulations on your so moving poem.
Comment is about The Melting of the Ice (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Oh my goodness.
If I were wearing a hat, I'd take it off to you. One of the best poems I've read in a very long time. Hand on heart.
Congratulations :-)
Comment is about The Melting of the Ice (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Hiya Jeff. Not been on here in ages. Glad I read this, though. It's a cracking write, Jeff. It feels very much of a tradition without being wistful or sentimental. Reads well off the page/screen. It looks lyrical - is it a song? Good structure and play with words. Colour me impressed. Hope you're well, mate.
Comment is about Diggers of the World Unite! (blog)
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This is something that feels like it was written by the bard in terms of it's rhythm and pace. I particularly like
'Your silence screams at me' what a great line Fab Vicky
Comment is about Foreboding (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Hello John
Thanks for your comments on "Martha Street"
Glad you enjoyed it.
Thanks also for reminding me about Gerry Rafferty. Am now about to search for my old Stealers Wheel LPs!
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
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Laura this is a magnificent work, something I would love to hear you read. As Stu says an emotional piece.
My favourite stanza begins
' her chest become a bellows' in return of the snow queen
Fab
Comment is about The Melting of the Ice (blog)
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Hi Vicki
Thanks for your comments on "Martha Street". Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment is about Pixievic (poet profile)
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The seventies, as the line in the song goes I remember it well. I am still waiting for 1970 ten to come round !
Comment is about THAT WAS THE SEVENTIES (blog)
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Hi Laura
Thanks for your kind comments. I'm slowly getting used to how this site works and hope to blog my profiled poem when I can work out how to do it :-)
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
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Yes, I got the Billy Joel rhythm too, Stu.
Enjoyed the poem, Ray. Great reminder of the 70s. I still miss them!
Comment is about THAT WAS THE SEVENTIES (blog)
Original item by ray pool
laura,
reading this all together is a very emotional experience.there is so much intimacy (particularly between you and your dad) and moments that perfectly capture the thoughts and feelings of times like that. it fits perfectly with finlandia and the whole thing is just wonderful. im really glad you reposted as a whole, as 1) its allowed me to fully appreciate it and 2) it reminded me of 'tempest swells the brass intent' which is brilliant.
Comment is about The Melting of the Ice (blog)
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am i the only one who started singing 'we didnt start the fire' after the first verse?
like this ray, its hecticity (must be a word surely?) sits against the sedate and stately remembrance.
Comment is about THAT WAS THE SEVENTIES (blog)
Original item by ray pool
I like the rhythm in this and plenty of the images, but (and you know there's almost always a but with me) - Robinson Crusoes? Don't get that. Did I miss a glaring 70's reference?
Comment is about THAT WAS THE SEVENTIES (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Robinson Crusoes and Ouzos, you get respect for those two!.
This brings back reminders of the tragic Fairport Convention road accident to me.
Comment is about THAT WAS THE SEVENTIES (blog)
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Steven I was referring to weight of numbers rather than a very few specific individuals. You will be pleased to know that I have indeed heard of the poets you mention. As regards to your male testosterone point - I rest my case.
Comment is about First the cheers, now the arguments over TS Eliot Prize winner (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I really like the flow of energy in this, it weaves, ebbs and flows again. It feels like it could be about ageing, or depression, or possibly both, as they go so well together it seems.
Comment is about Beige (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Thank you everyone for commenting very much appreciated.
Gus
Comment is about Never Knowing (blog)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Hello Jim and welcome to WOL. I really like your two blogged poems, some lovely use of language/sonics/ideas, but wondered why you hadn't yet blogged your sample poem, cos that's my favourite one of all :)
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment is about Jim Trott (poet profile)
Original item by Jim Trott
A dream of a poem, very well done. Does exactly what it says on the tin. But the tin is painted by Degas, an acrobat hangs on by her teeth to spin faster and faster... given time.
Comment is about Lucas B. Foley (poet profile)
Original item by Lucas B. Foley
i shall join the ever growing circle of admirers, but add nothing, as its all been said. hoping to read more of these.
Comment is about Man and Dogs (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Cynthia
Had I been quicker to read and comment I would have said what Robert Mann said! A beautifully observed moment.
M:)
Comment is about Man and Dogs (blog)
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great stuff martin. using colours as a vehicle for the changing landscape of life works very well, as does the floydian flow of the piece in general. its an eternal subject but you have made it fresh. nice!
Comment is about Beige (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
staggered no one has mentioned plath, dickinson, angelou
Comment is about First the cheers, now the arguments over TS Eliot Prize winner (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Frances - women poets you may have missed: Sappho, Aphra Behn, Elizabeth Barret Browning, HD, Marriane Moore, and many more.
They were always there. They were just hidden by the fog of male testosterone...
:-)
Comment is about First the cheers, now the arguments over TS Eliot Prize winner (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Cracking ending which gives it a whole new perspective.
As I was reading it I had echoes of Gerry Rafferty and "Night Mail"...
...and then the ending, which suggested something entirely different - that quote something like "the lights are going out....we shall not see them again".
Comment is about Martha Street (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
Yes very nice not much more to add to Robs comments x
Comment is about a haiku (blog)
Original item by Alex
Wow I like it - clever - as Graham said the 'shots' firing brings it home x
Comment is about Martha Street (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
Yes to look back & realise nothing is ever as we perceive it to be (or at lest that's how I've read it!) I like it - grey can seem a very boring colour but I like how you've given it life with the last line. x
Comment is about Beige (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Elegant and wonderful. I particularly like
'Its unheard siren-call beckoning the powerless moths'
I don't know if such a hammered home ending is needed.
Good Stuff!
Comment is about Martha Street (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
You wonder where its going and then bang!
Good stuff.
Comment is about Martha Street (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
Yes an ending that doesn't end. Incredibly clever writing CBT with all the candour and detail one would expect from you. Well done.
Comment is about Man and Dogs (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Cynthia this is definitely up to usual standard of a finely told tale in an almost casual narrative fashion. Nicely done
Comment is about Man and Dogs (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Poetry has had its female burning lights: Rossetti and
Meynell come to mind. And there are others who conjure
up delights like The Little Waves of Breffny (I stand to be
corrected on the title but that's OK).
Comment is about First the cheers, now the arguments over TS Eliot Prize winner (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
This glows with the warmth of a precious jewel I bet he wished he'd said "Yes, please".
Comment is about Man and Dogs (blog)
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Mon 25th Jan 2016 21:18
Thank you for sharing your poem with me. It's short but powerful. I very much enjoyed it. I'd like to have it tucked somewhere inside of a book to re-read countless times. :)
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
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<Deleted User> (13947)
Mon 25th Jan 2016 21:15
Beautiful and you made me laugh out loud. Your funny little line to the gentleman sounded so much like something I would have said. I am still smiling over it. Such a brilliant and complete story in your retelling of a brief encounter.
Comment is about Man and Dogs (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
I'm glad I stopped to read this poem, Cynthia. Beautifully observed.
Comment is about Man and Dogs (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thank you for the welcome, folks!
WOL is a remarkable organisation, and I'm really proud to have joined a team whose skill, determination, and commitment has achieved so much already. I'm looking forward to rolling my sleeves up and getting stuck in.
And I'll do my best to post some poems every now and then, too. :-)
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Original item by Greg Freeman
Alex - haiku heaven. A metaphor for good and evil, life and death or merely a lepidopterist's keen observation. Welcome to WOL. Keep up the good work.
Rob
Comment is about a haiku (blog)
Original item by Alex
That would be me; just as soon as she's had a couple of gins.
Comment is about A Wonderful Opportunity (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks for your comments on THE BIRTH, Ray, It is not my usual style as my instinct is to rhyme and so I am happy that an attempt at free verse should resonate.
Re THE RAGBAG SHEEPDOG I have had a couple of sheepdogs and a border collie previously and love the breed. Unfortunately now I have a shared drive and it would be too expensive to gate my property. Your imagery brought back happy memories.
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
Ah, yes, John - you mean that cup of tea don't you? Definitely an important role - every birth scene on TV sees the hubby being told to make lots of boiling water!
Indeed not my usual style but for once I managed to break free from the shackles with which Marriott Edgar bound me in my innocent youth.
Comment is about THE BIRTH (blog)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
love it. did not see the fourth verse coming, nice twist that shifts the whole piece and makes the re-read a completely new experience. clever bit of writing.
Comment is about Aisha with Beads (blog)
Original item by Jim Trott
Ah, but who makes the first cup of tea in the morning?
Comment is about A Wonderful Opportunity (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
tommyfazz@yahoo.com
Tue 26th Jan 2016 23:48
Are you taking the piss again? YOU comforting someone in distress? Mont Blonk!
Comment is about SAME THING (blog)
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