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suki spangles

Tue 31st Oct 2017 23:14

Hi Ray,

Wow! What was your inspiration for this? Was it a novel or film, or did it drop into your poetry mind ready-made?

A wonderfully dark magical realist tale ~ a miner, used to the dangers of the subterranean depths, almost meets his nemesis via reverie, dream-nightmare-fantasy..

Very atmospheric, and a fun read too. Beautifully constructed..

By the way, as it's almost November I hope this poem also doesn't disappear into the archive mist. It might be worth re-uploading in a few hours when WOL resets for the new month's admissions.

Suki

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Jeff

Tue 31st Oct 2017 18:50

To anyone who thinks Dubai is a nice place!

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Paul Welsh

Tue 31st Oct 2017 18:21

Thank You

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Jon

Tue 31st Oct 2017 15:36

Hi again Richard
Great image and clever use of language here..I particularly like the second verse that begins 'walking and searching for Windy days,eyes aching with fear'.

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Jon

Tue 31st Oct 2017 15:29

Hi Richard
Nice little poem mate. Made me smile and think a bit about my own advancing years.

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Richard

Tue 31st Oct 2017 14:42

Really nice and funny and I love the idea of your dad always saying these daft things to you when you were young.
My parents were good parents, particularly my mum but they didn't really say stuff like this that I can remember and its great and holds lovely memory for you

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Richard

Tue 31st Oct 2017 13:57

"The city loved him and he loved it back" like a line from Woody Allen that one.
I know you well Jbd and this is a new mood for you in some ways, though obviously it mirrors you typically .
You always paint a picture with your poetry and often you sugar it with the past anecdotal.
Knowing about this phase of your life as I do helps me when I read it, and as ever you always convey beautifully the simplicity of your understanding of other people you feel empathy with. 10 out of 10

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Andy N

Tue 31st Oct 2017 12:42

great piece, martin. can really hear your voice in this. hope you read this at Stockport soon.

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Rick Varden

Tue 31st Oct 2017 12:29

Thank you very much.

Fred

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 31st Oct 2017 12:03

Anyone with the name ""Leadbeater" is off to a good start
when it comes to writing about English scenes. I wish him
well with this collection and have made a note for my own
purchase.

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Laura Taylor

Tue 31st Oct 2017 10:23

Haha David - I'd not seen that. Fantastic!! ? Thanks for posting it.

Ferris - I was never convinced enough of his 'irony'. I thought he had misogynistic tendencies. I loathed his routines about reading and the waitress, Goatboy (thinly veiled paedophilic comments), Jimi Hendrix raping Debbie Gibson etc. There was way too much of that kind of stuff in amongst what I thought could be great commentary.

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keith jeffries

Tue 31st Oct 2017 10:00

Hello Jon, thank you for commenting on my latest poem ´Desire´. It is kind of you. Keith

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keith jeffries

Tue 31st Oct 2017 09:58

Hello Wendy, thank you for commenting on my latest poem´Desire´. It is much appreciated. Keith

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Jeff

Tue 31st Oct 2017 09:09

Really good read....sums it up totally...Jeff

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<Deleted User> (13762)

Tue 31st Oct 2017 08:52

Well done Desmond. I've been enjoying your poetry since you joined WoL a few months back so I'm pleased to see your name up in lights on the front page. Unfortunately I have had very little time this past week to read much on the site and am just starting to catch up a little now. Agree with Martin and Stu re the flow. Keep 'em coming. All the best. Col.

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Wendy

Tue 31st Oct 2017 07:25

Thankyou Keith a lovely poem it makes you stop and think and it's true love Wendy

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suki spangles

Tue 31st Oct 2017 04:29


Nice flow to this Fred. Nicely set out too.

Suki

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suki spangles

Tue 31st Oct 2017 04:21

Hi Desmond,

Congratulations of winning PotW. All the best!

Suki

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priyakhi barbara

Tue 31st Oct 2017 03:50

Thnks dear.. ??

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Stu Buck

Tue 31st Oct 2017 03:48

a cracker indeed. flows down the page like an intricate waterfall of words and images. and its got the word ghost in it (twice no-less) so its topical too. well deserved.

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Ryn

Tue 31st Oct 2017 00:52

I am in love with this. So well written.

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Rick Varden

Mon 30th Oct 2017 23:59

Absolutely brilliant Keith! I thought it was just me who wants to be 18 all the time. What you explain here is so true and a smile from someone in a certain way really cheers the soul. Many thanks for this I will keep it nearby, always to remind me that’s it’s not odd to be looking for smiles and glances to keep me alive! Keep up the great work here. Love it.

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Chris Hubbard

Mon 30th Oct 2017 23:49

Hi Colin,
I remember being astounded in 2000 when I saw "Eternity" in sixty-foot tall letters on the Bridge. I thought 'Now you've really arrived Arthur' (he died in 1967). His sheer tenacity in reaching so many people went way beyond obsession. I believe it was Australia's largest and most visible creative artifact up to that time, and will surely be hard to beat around these parts. Antony Gormley's "Angel of the North" at Gateshead is a more permanent British analogue.
Chris

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keith jeffries

Mon 30th Oct 2017 22:36

Jon, Colin begins his comment by saying that there is a little bit of us all incoperated into this poem. How true. When I about twelve I went to Fleetwood with my Mum and Dad where we stayed in what was called a Flatlet, which was a self catering flat. We could not afford a hotel. The Flatlet was very close to the pier where it was my delight to play on the one arm bandits. This poem as with so many of your other poems is highly evocative of days past. What brings it to light is your vivid memory for detail. Thank you Keith

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Martin Elder

Mon 30th Oct 2017 22:21

I am not in the least bit surprised that this has been chosen it is a beautifully flowing and well deserved POTW. many congratulations Desmond

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sandra consolata

Mon 30th Oct 2017 20:26

I definitely like it, its nice

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carol falaki

Mon 30th Oct 2017 18:13

Hi Eric Thank you for your comment

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Richard Hartley

Mon 30th Oct 2017 17:29

Excellent, Lynn - and it sounds as if your life has taken an upturn for the better!
Good luck with that, on every level.
Richard

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raypool

Mon 30th Oct 2017 11:59

Thanks Col. My list of comments swollen by one, excellent!
Glad you liked it. Take good care - It's hard to be everywhere at once I know but absence makes the heart go pounder.

Ray

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Mon 30th Oct 2017 08:25

Nice one Ray. Just checking in and catching up as best I can with limited time. Hopefully normal service will resume shortly. For now though I have to buzz off again. TTFN. Col.

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<Deleted User> (13762)

Mon 30th Oct 2017 08:06

Love it - and your comment.

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<Deleted User> (13762)

Mon 30th Oct 2017 08:05

Absolutely!

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Mon 30th Oct 2017 08:01

Interesting story Chris, the repetition of his one word graffiti reminded me of how Aboriginal rock paintings are regularly repainted, the message in effect repeated over generations and kept alive. And there is a sense of that continuation with the word being emblazoned on the bridge. I love stories like this as they really fire my imagination. Thanks for posting. Colin.

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vaibhav

Mon 30th Oct 2017 06:57

Hi M.K , i wish everything gets better in your life and please stop killing yourself with smoking reds as i myself hung up on them.
Wishing you safe and happy journey ahead

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DESMOND CHILDS

Mon 30th Oct 2017 06:44

Thank you Martin you comment is appreciated

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Wardah

Mon 30th Oct 2017 00:36

Thanks for the comment Philip its always appreciated.

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Philip Stevens

Mon 30th Oct 2017 00:27

Personal stuff... letting go is part of our healing process

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Wardah

Sun 29th Oct 2017 23:48

Thank you Jemima really appreciate the comment.

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keith jeffries

Sun 29th Oct 2017 22:40

Jon, this is one of the most beautiful and touching poems that I have ever read. Thanks. Keith

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tommyfazz@yahoo.com

Sun 29th Oct 2017 20:30

Stupid fucking photo shot twisted image.

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tommyfazz@yahoo.com

Sun 29th Oct 2017 20:23

Martin ta... cheers mate x

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Jemima Jones

Sun 29th Oct 2017 19:56

such a neat little piece Wardah.Thank you.Jemima.

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Jemima Jones

Sun 29th Oct 2017 19:36

really great read Connor.Thank you.Jemima.

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Jemima Jones

Sun 29th Oct 2017 19:29

Love this Fred.What is the saying? "there's nowt as queer as folk" Thank you.Jemima.

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Jon

Sun 29th Oct 2017 17:39

Hi David
A really nice read this. Love the last few lines in particular,

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Jon

Sun 29th Oct 2017 17:28

Hi Keith..Hope your're well mate. Great poem. A sense of peace and yet passion can be felt throughout.
Nice one ?

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Martin Elder

Sun 29th Oct 2017 14:21

short simple and very very effective
nice one
Tommy

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Martin Elder

Sun 29th Oct 2017 14:20

You caught m up with this from the start and just left me wanting more. Marvellous poem Connor

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Martin Elder

Sun 29th Oct 2017 14:18

what a fabulous poem all the richer for having a personal meaning for you
Nice one Chris

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Martin Elder

Sun 29th Oct 2017 14:13

Like it Desmond , it leaves the reader hanging on as if waiting for more. but more would be too much.
Nice one

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