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Sat 13th Jan 2018 16:47

also a hundred reasons for enjoying this poem Tim. Thanks for reposting and for the video too. My favourite is No.60:

Even the sheets where I scribbled this poem
were once just bundles of xylem and phloem

all the best. Col.

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Nigel Astell

Sat 13th Jan 2018 15:28

There was an extra spring in your sonnet when both overtaking summer's breath - - - it got sorted.

Loved it

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Tim Ellis

Sat 13th Jan 2018 13:50

I've posted this poem before on WOL a couple of years ago, but I'm giving it another airing because I spent a very long time just before Christmas making a video of it, which I think deserves more than 9 viewings! (Obviously I am biased in this matter.) Here it is https://youtu.be/X_X5fmaq5PA

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John Coopey

Sat 13th Jan 2018 13:49

Thanks, fellas. It was the reading of Wendy Cope at well Spoken, Kev, that prompted me to trioletise her villanelle.

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keith jeffries

Sat 13th Jan 2018 13:33

Trevor, this is a gem and so well constructed. Thank you. Keith

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Trevor Alexander

Sat 13th Jan 2018 13:08

Love it! A funny piece, with serious undertones. Forget Clyde - Bonnie's going solo!

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Trevor Alexander

Sat 13th Jan 2018 13:04

I guess we've all endured these rants at some point - some open-mic nights are full of them! I suppose reasoned argument is beyond them.

This is a nicely observed and well written (dare I say it?) rant about rants - love it! ?

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 13th Jan 2018 11:46

I recently started wearing red socks! Bring on the revolution.

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Laura Taylor

Sat 13th Jan 2018 11:37

Hahaa Stu - way too academic for me that review ?

Thanks Hannah!

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kJ Walker

Sat 13th Jan 2018 08:18

Tempted to look at your phone eh... I bet it was you who switched to radio 4 during Well Spoken.
Another corker.

Cheers Kevin

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Stu Buck

Sat 13th Jan 2018 08:05

allow me to gather my most poetical thoughts in order to review this piece.

ace as fuck.

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Douglas MacGowan

Fri 12th Jan 2018 22:27

This poem spells out a world on the edge very well.

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Douglas MacGowan

Fri 12th Jan 2018 22:22

It is so hard to explain to some people that you sometimes prefer to be alone. This poem is a true snapshot of how that feels.

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keith jeffries

Fri 12th Jan 2018 21:47

Hannah & Desmond,
Thank you for kind comments. As always they are much appreciated. Keith

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raypool

Fri 12th Jan 2018 21:14

Suki, you're right - it can never be otherwise. Thanks.

David, you have detailed so many aspects of this and thanks for doing so. I suppose the first weapon would have been our bodies, limbs being extensions of harm. Interestingly an argument is often used for gun ownership in the US based on self defence, providing justification. The argument on nuclear defence still hangs over countries. If nonchalance is the viewing disposition , that seems a pointless exercise to me; I did find the programme confusing though and giving so many strands to draw together, really to no avail. I take your point however; in comparison with active soldiering, the mere watching of programmes must seem fairly impotent.

Thanks Beno, your point is a serious one and deserves its voice. May I say in defence that my poem was meant to align the masculine thrusting (of bullets) or penetration with the idea of domination, which is traditionally a male preserve. However, women can be aggressive in positions of power. which you rightly point out. I was using a poetic metaphor rather than making a political point. Thank you for troubling; I appreciate it.

I appreciate your likes, Laura and Rich, cheers!

Ray

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Fri 12th Jan 2018 18:34

Supermarkets beware.
I love this witty, great, defiant poem.

Hannah

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Fri 12th Jan 2018 18:25

This is a stunning poem, sad and brave.
I should imagine many would feel this but would be unable to express in such an eloquent way.

Hannah

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raypool

Fri 12th Jan 2018 17:14

Thanks Martin. A plot line - I like the idea . I'll keep that in my mind maybe !

Thanks for liking , 220 August.

Ray

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Laura Taylor

Fri 12th Jan 2018 16:21

Cheers m'dears ?

Ray - seriously, this actually started out as a plan I'd had for years, about how to survive my dotage whilst living in abject poverty. I have no actual pension plan, no savings, no back up. I'll never pay my mortgage off. So - how to get drunk, eat well, and have a laugh in the meantime? This way ? And if I DO end up in the clink, it won't matter a jot. I won't be trying to get a job anymore, won't matter! Trick is to target a different supermarket each week - I won't end up on a Wanted poster that way.

Normality never liked me much tbh Leon, we were never bedmates to begin with ?


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carol falaki

Fri 12th Jan 2018 16:20

Thank you John for all your hard work, friendly comments and enthusiasm. You will be missed. I don't live close to Wigan but hope that, although you won't be hosting there in future, we will still hear plenty from you here on the writeoutloud website xxx

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220August

Fri 12th Jan 2018 15:17

"chuffed to little mint balls." I had to look that up. That's funny. Thanks!

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Fri 12th Jan 2018 15:09

ahh! but you have done something 220 that does matter as far as I'm concerned you have written this excellent piece of work for which your mint-balls ? should be chuffed to bits!

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220August

Fri 12th Jan 2018 14:55

It's a great fear
Having lived so much,
Feared so much,
Loved so much
Said so much
It's a great fear
That I have done nothing that mattered at all

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Fri 12th Jan 2018 14:27

having read this I somehow get the impression that you don't like normality, Laura.

My advice? don't ever let those bastards of the establishment ever stop you from getting your rock's off !

What am I saying? I'd like to see try!

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raypool

Fri 12th Jan 2018 11:58

Blimey, you gawn and dun it now gal! Deliciously seedy and with a measure of protestation to boot. (That's something we men are supposed to get late in life). Like a breath of fresh air on WOL Laura, no punches pulled FFS.

Ray (mired under bleeding cloud dahn ere).

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Laura Taylor

Fri 12th Jan 2018 11:09

Cheers David ?

Hahaa - aye, like that's the worst you can think of, Jenny?!

It used to be a regular in my set but I dropped it for new stuff. Might bring it back in again. Without FAIL, after performing it, there would be someone shouting out or standing up...dressed in purple ?

Aye - that seriously chuffed me did that, about the course. Couldn't believe it. But then...of all the poems I've written...THAT one?! Be churlish to complain I suppose ?

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Laura Taylor

Fri 12th Jan 2018 10:15

This is an old one of mine, shamelessly resurrected upon the death of Jenny Joseph. It's also being taught on a degree course in a Liverpool uni - the lecturer turned up at a gig to tell me last year!! Something to do with intertextuality!

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Martin Elder

Fri 12th Jan 2018 09:03

Yep I have to agree with everybody else that certainly is a killer of a no opening line which draws the reader along through the rest of the piece. Excellent poem Ray

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Martin Elder

Fri 12th Jan 2018 09:00

This is certainly a very thought provoking piece and I guess for some who press a lot of buttons. can't help feeling this would make and interesting short story or maybe a T.V. drama

nice one
Martin

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Patricio LG

Fri 12th Jan 2018 08:55

Thank you Douglas.

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Wendy

Fri 12th Jan 2018 07:31

Thankyou for all your kind words love Wendy X

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Douglas MacGowan

Thu 11th Jan 2018 22:31

Captures the sadness of a relationship that readers can undoubtedly relate to.

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Douglas MacGowan

Thu 11th Jan 2018 22:25

Vivid mental images. The descriptions of the corpse and magpies especially.

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Douglas MacGowan

Thu 11th Jan 2018 22:22

Thank you, Hannah. I like your poems as well. Good structure.

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keith jeffries

Thu 11th Jan 2018 21:50

Hello Jon, Thank you for your comments on the two poems Enraged and Loneliness. They are much appreciated. Keith

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Patricio LG

Thu 11th Jan 2018 21:40

Such a sad, story yet no rest, marvellous, incomplete?

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Jon

Thu 11th Jan 2018 21:08

Hi Keith
Shocking to read and heartbreaking..So many atrocities committed for land, power, religion without a thought for the vulnerable.

Very powerfully put.
Jon

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Jon

Thu 11th Jan 2018 20:55

Hi Keith
Some interesting ideas in this, as ever very well put across and plenty food for thought here. Well done mate.
Jon

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Martin Elder

Thu 11th Jan 2018 19:41

Thanks Ray much appreciated. I have tried to capture just a snippet of peoples attitudes to witnessing the aftermath of what goes on after an accident or fatality.
Cheers mate
Martin

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Thu 11th Jan 2018 18:02

I think the masculine references do an injustice to the increasing role of women in front line politics and foreign policy. I don't think Condoleezza Rice has been too shy at distributing her phallic symbols.

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<Deleted User> (18118)

Thu 11th Jan 2018 17:39

Your poems are very powerful. I enjoy reading you.

Hannah

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Thu 11th Jan 2018 17:35

Powerful and poignant.


Thank you for your comment on my poem.

Hannah

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Sidra Shahid

Thu 11th Jan 2018 11:06

Oh Woww!!! I am totally freaking out right now. Thank you soooooo much David for reviewing my poem and I hope that you actually liked it and that I'm not just hallucinating! I hope to become better and much more approachable in the future. I hope you'll like the other things I write as well.
Huge thanks
Sidra

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keith jeffries

Thu 11th Jan 2018 10:09

Hello Desmond, Thank you for this. It is deep and thought provoking. The last two lines speak out. Keith

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Sidra Shahid

Thu 11th Jan 2018 10:06

Oh my God! Thank you so so so much for your comments Collin and Stu! It was really a very personal poem and to think that other people especially MEN thought of it as a good written idea, it is just an awfully huge deal for me.
Best regards
Sidra

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keith jeffries

Thu 11th Jan 2018 10:05

Nick, Thank you for your comment on my poem Loneliness. I really appreciate that. Keith

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suki spangles

Thu 11th Jan 2018 00:48

Hi there Ray,

Perpetual war - well, it never ends - it's good business..

Suki

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keith jeffries

Wed 10th Jan 2018 22:42

Nick, keep writing. You are good. I look forward to more. Thanks. Keith

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raypool

Wed 10th Jan 2018 22:05

Hi Hannah. It's good to have your voice here, opening up more avenues of thought. It seems life can take many twists and turns, upending received wisdom. I especially like to get younger readers' opinions such as yourself, as they give fresh views and make me feel I've done something useful.

Ray

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Wed 10th Jan 2018 21:14

How little do our parents really know us. We grow up with their ideology without question for a while, it's just like another story they read to us, then suddenly it changes.
Brilliant piece.

Hannah

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